读后续写 告别阴霾：与妈妈散步的治愈之旅 讲义-湖南省名校联考2024-2025学年高三上学期10月月考英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Have you ever been so depressed that you can’t sleep? You also can’t eat. You can’t read. You have no friends to call up and nothing is good on TV. So you sigh, press your face down harder into your pillow, and shed a few tears. This was my life two years ago. I had just turned 14 but already found life a struggle. As I lay in my bed one Saturday, Mom peeked (瞄) into my room to make her regular “Is Emily still alive” check. I knew that if I spent more time like this, she would begin dusting me. After suggesting a few things for me to do that I immediately rejected, Mom made her move, “Emily! Get dressed! I’m taking the dog out for a walk, and you’re coming with me!” “Why?” I protested. “Because it’ll make you feel better.” The thought of moving was unbearable. I felt as if all of my body parts were weighed down by tons of bricks I couldn’t remember the last time I had gone outside. Somehow I found the strength to slip on a pair of jeans and a black sweatshirt. Mom was waiting at the door, leash (狗绳) in hand and dog at her side. Then, we stepped outside. It was a warm March day and it had been a long time since the warmth of the sun had touched my cheeks. Mom led the dog and me down some dirt paths, through a big field and reached Halsey Pond. But the signs of spring had yet to appear and the scene was rather colorless throughout the entire journey. “I’m tired! It’s boring, Mom! When can we go home?” “Not yet,” she’d say. Mom stopped to say hi to every jogger, dog walker, runner, and bicyclist who passed us. Sometimes she would get into a conversation. They would talk about weather, dogs, and all small talk topics. She seemed happy, and was literally glowing (容光焕发). After walking for what seemed an age, Mom finally said it was time to go back. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. ____________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意 14 岁的 “我” 曾长期处于抑郁状态，对任何事都提不起兴趣，整日躺在床上。妈妈强行拉 “我” 出门遛狗。尽管 “我” 一开始极不情愿，但在散步过程中，妈妈热情地和遇到的人打招呼、聊天。整个行程对 “我” 来说有些无聊，“我” 多次要求回家。然而回家后，这次散步却在 “我” 心中唤醒了一种新的感觉。 五要素分析 · 人物：“我” 和妈妈。 · 时间：一个温暖的三月周六。 · 地点：从家出发，经过一些土路、大田野，到达哈尔西池塘，然后返回。 · 起因：“我” 因抑郁而萎靡不振，妈妈为了让 “我” 振作起来，拉 “我” 出门遛狗。 · 经过：妈妈带着 “我” 和狗散步，沿途和路人交谈，“我” 觉得旅程无聊，多次想回家。 · 结果：回家后 “我” 有了新的感觉。 几处伏笔及续写回应 · 伏笔：妈妈说散步会让 “我” 感觉好一些。回应：回家后 “我” 有了新感觉，意识到散步有积极作用。 · 伏笔：妈妈在散步过程中容光焕发、很快乐。回应：后来 “我” 主动要求带狗出门，也体会到了快乐。 续写要点 第一段 · 情感线：从最初的抵触到回家后的微妙变化，有一种对新感觉的好奇和隐隐的期待。 · 故事线：描述回家后的 “我” 身心上的变化，比如不再像之前那样消沉，开始有了积极生活的想法。 第二段 · 情感线：主动要求带狗出门体现出 “我” 心态的转变，从消极到积极，对出门散步充满热情。 · 故事线：着重写这次出门 “我” 的不同表现，如主动和路人交流、欣赏周围风景，真正享受散步的过程。 主旨升华句 1. Sometimes, the simplest activities, like a walk with loved ones, can be the key to unlock the door of our imprisoned souls. 2. A small step out of the comfort zone, as reluctant as it may be, can lead us to a new world filled with hope and vitality. 3. In the journey of life, it's often the forced detours, like this walk, that bring us back to the path of happiness. 4. The warmth of the sun outside and the company of family can melt the ice of depression within us, revealing the beautiful self beneath. 5. We may resist change, but as shown by this walk, change can be the catalyst for a new beginning and a new outlook on life. 写作示范 第一篇 Paragraph 1: When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. It was as if a tiny spark had been lit inside me. I no longer felt the heavy gloom that had clouded my days. I looked around my room, and for the first time in ages, I noticed the sunlight streaming through the window, casting beautiful patterns on the floor. I realized that the outside world, which I had shunned, had so much to offer. Maybe Mom was right. Maybe getting out of my self - made prison was the first step towards healing. Paragraph 2: A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. She smiled knowingly and handed me the leash. As I walked along the familiar paths, I felt a sense of freedom. I greeted every passer - by with enthusiasm, and this time, I lingered to admire the scenery. The pond no longer looked dull; it was a beautiful expanse of water reflecting the sky. I understood that life had its simple joys, and I was determined to embrace them. 第二篇 Paragraph 1: When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. There was a newfound energy within me that I couldn't quite explain. I sat on my bed, thinking about the walk. The fresh air, the people we met, and Mom's happy face all flashed through my mind. I felt a connection to the world outside that I hadn't felt in a long time. I got up and decided to clean my room, a task I had neglected for weeks. It was as if the walk had given me a new perspective on life. Paragraph 2: A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. She beamed with pride. This time, as I walked with the dog, I felt a sense of purpose. I stopped to talk to an elderly woman sitting on a bench, sharing a laugh with her. I watched the ducks swimming in the pond with fascination. I realized that this simple act of walking was a gift, a way to break free from the chains of depression and embrace life again. 【答案】Paragraph 1: When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. The heaviness that had weighed me down before seemed to have lifted, if only slightly. The simple act of being outside, feeling the warmth of the sun, and hearing the chirping of birds had sparked something inside me. It was a glimmer of hope, a tiny ray of light in the darkness of my depression. I realized that maybe, just maybe, there was still something worth living for. Paragraph 2: A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. This time, it was me who suggested the walk. As we strolled through the familiar paths, I noticed the subtle changes in the scenery. The trees were starting to bud, flowers were beginning to bloom, and the pond was alive with the sounds of frogs and insects. It was as if nature itself was coming alive, mirroring the newfound sense of life stirring within me. With each step, I felt a little lighter, a little more alive. And as we returned home, I realized that sometimes, the simplest moments can have the most profound impact on our lives. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$