读后续写--关于收养受伤赛狗 Ray 的故事 讲义-豫西北教研联盟（许洛平）2024-2025学年高三第一次质量检测

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Experience of training retired racing dogs led my husband, Steve and me to believe we could handle anything. But we were wrong. When we adopted Ray, a dog with a hurt that made him stop racing, things got tough. He retired due to the injury and quickly went to the adoption agency. Ray had no other place to go. Behind his sweet face hid a dark and damaged soul and an aggressive (好斗的) nature. Desperate to find him a home and not deliver him to the farm, the adoption agency rushed him to our door when we offered to adopt. Our experience with dogs and a home without other animals made us perfect candidates, and we were his best shot. Ray jumped around our house. He tried to understand the enormous world he now lived in, a strange one compared to the quarters he had known for so long. Adjustment would take time, but his inexperience, and apparently ours as well, made coexistence interesting. Patience and training with any new pet are important, but with Ray, they were vital. He didn’t listen to us, no matter how nice we were. He didn’t understand he was a pet with a name. He did not respond to commands, love, encouragement, or food. He had no idea what we expected of him. Like a creature from another planet, he had no concept of life in our world. Ray got really scared and would get angry when we left. In a madness he scratched (抓, 挠) at windows and doors whenever we left the house. Concerned for his safety and the condition of our home, we locked him in a big wooden box. But he resisted and tried to escape. The stress we encountered flooded us. 注意： (1) 续写词数应为150个左右； (2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Eight weeks after adopting Ray, we were ready to give up and send him back. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ But the next morning, Ray suddenly seemed to understand us. —————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————— 一、文章大意 作者和丈夫收养了因伤退役的赛狗 Ray，它有着甜美的外表，但内心黑暗且具攻击性。它不适应新环境，不听从指令，对 “宠物” 身份和作者的期望毫无概念。作者耐心训练却收效甚微，Ray 在他们离开时会抓狂挠门窗，无奈之下他们将其锁在木箱，压力让作者夫妇准备放弃送回 Ray。 二、伏笔及续写呼应 （一）伏笔 1. Ray 的黑暗受损灵魂和攻击性：为后续它难以适应新环境和不听从指令等行为埋下伏笔，在续写中可呼应其性格转变的艰难过程及可能的突破。 2. 作者夫妇的经验与自信：认为自己能处理好任何事，与面对 Ray 时的困境形成反差，续写可体现他们在坚持或放弃间的挣扎以及最终如何凭借经验找到解决办法。 3. Ray 对新环境的不适应：如在房子里乱跳，不知如何在新环境生活，为后续它逐渐理解和适应做铺垫，续写可描写它具体的适应表现。 （二）续写呼应 1. 性格转变：在续写中可描述 Ray 如何从最初的攻击性和不理解逐渐变得温顺或开始理解作者夫妇，例如通过一些细微的行为变化来体现。 2. 作者夫妇的决策：续写可以围绕他们准备放弃又最终坚持或找到新方法的过程展开，呼应开头他们认为自己能处理好的自信以及面对现实的纠结。 3. 适应过程：具体展现 Ray 对新环境的适应，比如与作者夫妇的互动更加和谐，对指令有一定反应等，呼应之前它的不适应行为。 三、续写要点 （一）第一段 1. 描述作者夫妇准备放弃送回 Ray 时的内心感受，如极度的沮丧、无奈和自我怀疑等。 2. 可以提及他们对 Ray 未来的担忧以及对自己收养决定的反思。 3. 或许周围环境或某些因素进一步加重他们这种负面情绪，如 Ray 又在木箱里挣扎或者家里被破坏的场景让他们更加绝望。 （二）第二段 1. 详细叙述 Ray 突然理解他们的具体表现，比如主动靠近、听从简单指令或者用眼神交流等。 2. 作者夫妇对此的反应，可能是惊讶、欣喜然后重新燃起希望和信心。 3. 可以写他们接下来采取的新的训练方法或互动方式，以及对未来与 Ray 相处的展望，体现他们重新建立起的积极态度和对 Ray 改变的期待。 四、感情线 1. 从最初的热情和信心（收养 Ray 时认为自己可以应对）到逐渐的沮丧和失望（面对 Ray 的种种问题无法解决）。 2. 在准备放弃时达到低谷（内心充满纠结和痛苦），然后因为 Ray 的突然转变而出现转折，重新燃起希望和爱意。 3. 最终可能走向积极的方向，体现人与动物之间通过努力和理解建立起深厚情感的过程。 五、故事线 1. 收养 Ray - Ray 适应困难表现出攻击性和不理解 - 作者夫妇训练无果准备放弃 - Ray 突然似乎理解 - 作者夫妇调整方法继续与 Ray 相处并期待它的进一步改变。 2. 以 Ray 的行为变化和作者夫妇的情感态度转变为线索，推动故事发展，展示在困难中人与动物关系的建立和成长。 六、主旨升华句 1. Love and patience can truly work wonders, even in the toughest of situations.（爱和耐心即使在最艰难的情况下也能创造奇迹。） 2. Every challenge is an opportunity for growth, both for us and the ones we care about.（每一个挑战都是成长的机会，对我们和我们所关心的人来说都是如此。） 3. Understanding and perseverance are the keys to unlocking the hearts of even the most damaged souls.（理解和坚持是打开即使是最受伤灵魂心灵的钥匙。） 4. In the journey of building a relationship, setbacks are just stepping stones to a stronger bond.（在建立关系的旅程中，挫折只是通向更牢固纽带的垫脚石。） 5. The power of hope can transform a seemingly hopeless situation into a beautiful beginning.（希望的力量可以将一个看似无望的情况转变为一个美好的开始。） 七、写作示范 （一） Eight weeks after adopting Ray, we were ready to give up and send him back. The exhaustion and disappointment were written all over our faces. We stared at Ray, who seemed equally lost and confused in his own way. The house that was once filled with hope now felt heavy with despair. We questioned our decision, wondering if we had been too naive to think we could handle a dog with such deep-seated issues. As we sat in the living room, the silence was only broken by Ray's occasional whines from the wooden box, a reminder of the constant struggle we had been facing. It seemed like all our efforts had been in vain, and the future with Ray looked bleak. But the next morning, Ray suddenly seemed to understand us. He walked up to us slowly, his tail wagging gently for the first time. His eyes met ours with a newfound softness. When we called his name, he actually came closer, as if he finally recognized himself as Ray, a part of our family. We were stunned but filled with a glimmer of hope. We realized that maybe, just maybe, he had been trying to understand us all along. We decided to give him one more chance, starting with a new approach to training and interaction. We would be more patient, more observant, and try to see the world from his perspective. With this newfound determination, we hoped to build a real connection with Ray and help him find his place in our home and in our hearts. （二） Eight weeks after adopting Ray, we were ready to give up and send him back. The stress had taken a toll on our relationship too. We would argue about the best way to handle Ray, and the atmosphere in the house was tense. The scratches on the doors and windows were like a constant reminder of Ray's unhappiness and our failure. We felt like we had failed not only Ray but also ourselves. As we packed his things, a sense of sadness and resignation filled the air. We couldn't help but wonder if we had made a wrong choice in adopting him, and if he would be better off somewhere else. But the next morning, Ray suddenly seemed to understand us. He brought us his favorite toy, a tattered chew toy he had been ignoring all this time. He dropped it at our feet and looked up at us with pleading eyes. It was as if he was trying to say sorry or maybe asking for another chance. We were touched by this unexpected gesture. It was a small step, but it was a start. We decided to put aside our plans to send him back and instead focus on building a better relationship with him. We would take it one day at a time, learning his cues and signals, and showing him that he was loved and safe with us. Through this experience, we realized that sometimes, it's in the darkest moments that the faintest glimmer of hope appears, and we should never give up too easily on those we have promised to care for. 参考范文 Eight weeks after adopting Ray, we were ready to give up and send him back. Ray had consumed our attention all along, showing no improvement. We realized we had only one choice: Returning Ray to the adoption agency. I knelt down beside Ray at night, hugging him tight. Tears flowed down my face as I whispered into his ear. “Please, Ray, please try harder.You must be good tomorrow, or we’ll have to send you back. We want you to stay, but you have to want it, too!” He didn’t respond. But the next morning, Ray suddenly seemed to understand us. Calm and mindful, he came when called and responded to commands. He still had a long way to go, but now exhibited a willingness to learn and behave. Steve and I breathed easier each day because he improved better and better. Within a month, Ray no longer tore at doors and windows when we left the house. He was willing to stay at home alone, and we knew no harm would fall upon him or our possessions. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$