读后续写 人狗情未了 课件-2025届高三英语一轮复习

--人狗情未了 (2024.2重庆一中寒假返校考) 读后续写 Step one: Lead in 1. Are you familiar with this screencap? Do you know the story of them? The screencap is taken from a soul-touching movie Togo, which is about a dog leading its sled dog team to deliver medicine to its destination at extremely freezing temperature and finally successfully completed their mission, saving the children's lives. 2. What can you learn from this movie? Dogs devote everything and are loyal to you.(狗子奉献全部，忠诚于你！) Let's begin the story! Step two: Read for structure “Keep a sharp lookout," Miller told him, glancing toward the back seat. In the weak light, Miller could just make out the shield(徽章) shining smartly from his partner's collar: Badge No. 85. The greenhand was a police dog named Olden. Suddenly the car's headlights lit up a figure breaking the lock on a building. Miller shouted the order “Go!” In a flash Olden jumped out, Seconds later Olden bit the suspect on the bottoms. Over the next few months, Miller kept his relationship with Olden strictly professional. The dog was fed no table leftovers. He was kept out of the bedroom, spending his nights outside, regardless of the weather. Sometimes during storms, Olden would push his nose out of his doghouse and bark at the back of the door. Miller pretended not to hear. Day after day, Miller raced the dog around the backyard to build up his strength. To test Olden's discipline, he’d give him the order to “STAY” and then he'd leave. Once Miller took a half-hour walk. When he returned, Olden was still glued to the spot where he had left him. Miller wanted to give Olden a hug, but instead quietly said, “Good boy.” One afternoon, an urgent call came over the radio. “Shots fired, 720 North Park Avenue." Miller turned on the alarm. As he arrived at the house, a suspect was running away. Miller chased him into an alley. Turning a corner, he found a pistol (手枪) pointing right at his chest. Before Miller could react, Olden burst around the corner, tearing straight for the gunman. He fired and fled. The bullet caught Olden in the face. Para 1: Background information (mainly brief “who and what”) Para 2: How did Miller treat/ train the dog Olden? (main tell “how and why”) Para 3: what happened (an event to change their relationship) 背景铺垫 情节铺垫 故事开始 Step three: Read for details(1) “Keep a sharp lookout," Miller told him, glancing toward the back seat. In the weak light, Miller could just make out the shield(徽章) shining smartly from his partner's collar: Badge No. 85. The greenhand was a police dog named Olden. Suddenly the car's headlights lit up a figure breaking the lock on a building. Miller shouted the order “Go!” In a flash Olden jumped out, Seconds later Olden bit the suspect on the bottoms. 1. What scene did the author describe in this paragraph? The polce officer Miller led his dog partner Olden on their first patrole in the polce car. 2. How can you describe this special partner? inexperienced imposing swift/ obedient intelligent Inexperienced as Olden is, the dog was a smart and swift partner. Over the next few months, Miller kept his relationship with Olden strictly professional. The dog was fed no table leftovers. He was kept out of the bedroom, spending his nights outside, regardless of the weather. Sometimes during storms, Olden would push his nose out of his doghouse and bark at the back of the door. Miller pretended not to hear. Day after day, Miller raced the dog around the backyard to build up his strength. To test Olden's discipline, he’d give him the order to “STAY” and then he'd leave. Once Miller took a half-hour walk. When he returned, Olden was still glued to the spot where he had left him. Miller wanted to give Olden a hug, but instead quietly said, “Good boy.” 3. What's the function of the first sentence? It serves as a topic sentence: a strictly profesional relationship. 4. What can we infer from the above? nutrition toughness/ bravery strength discipline Miller trained Olden strictly and Olden turned out to be an excellent learner. 5. Why didn't Miller give Olden a hug? suspense Step three: Read for details(2) discussion: During the training, Olden performed really excellent. Why didn't Miller give Olden a hug? How can you comment on Olden? From Olden's side, he is not an ordinary dog, but instead, he is a police dog, which means that he needs more disciplines, strictness and orders. From Miller's side, his role is Olden's partner as well as trainer. Too much intimacy may do harm to their tasks. One afternoon, an urgent call came over the radio. “Shots fired, 720 North Park Avenue." Miller turned on the alarm. As he arrived at the house, a suspect was running away. Miller chased him into an alley. Turning a corner, he found a pistol (手枪) pointing right at his chest. Before Miller could react, Olden burst around the corner, tearing straight for the gunman. He fired and fled. The bullet caught Olden in the face. 6. What happened to Miller one afternoon? dangerous involved at risk(穷寇莫追) armed He was informed of a gun fire. While he was chasing, the criminal pointed a pistol at his chest. 7. How did Olden react? The significance of strict training made a difference. He bravely tore straight for the gunman, saving Miller's life. 8. What was the cost that Olden paid? got shot. Step three: Read for details(3) The police officer _____ (who) got his new partner a dog named_____ (who). _________ as the police dog was, he surprisingly gave an __________ (how) first impression. The officer trained the dog very _______________ (how), and the dog also made _________ progress. The officer felt __________ (how) for it but he didn't give the dog ____________ (what). One day, the officer was informed of a _________ (what). He chased the gunman to an alley, but the gunman pointed his ________ (what) at the officer. At that time, the dog ______ him but got ______. Miller Olden Greenhand amazing strictly professional dramatic appreciative a hug gun fire pistol saved shot Step four: Read for main idea Step five: read for emotion changes 1. during their first patrol 2. in the course of training 3. when Olden performed super well 4. when Olden saved his life.... superior/ dominant strict/ professional satisfied/ contained shocked/ anxious Step four: plot development Para 1: Miller lifted Olden up, placed him gently on the back seat and then sped to the animal hospital. Para 2: Miller's joy was reduced, when he was told that Olden would have to pass a test to see if he could stay on the police force. 1. Olden中枪后，Miller急忙送动物医院--->顺承：Olden做手术，Miller心急如焚。 2. 术后Olden的伤口情况描述。-->医生告知：手术很成功，需静养，子弹做纪念。 3. 看着Olden一天天好起来，Miller开心极了。他期待着和Olden一起再合作。 1. 为什么Olden不能归队的原因--->是否患枪伤后遗症：看到枪，听到枪声会不会不听命令，或者吓呆。 2. 伤好出院，开始测试。近距离开枪，Olden完美通过测试。 3. Miller激动拥抱：他与Olden更亲密了。 Let's get down to writing! Step five: Sentence construction Para 1: Miller lifted Olden up, placed him gently on the back seat and then sped to the animal hospital. 1. 一到医院，经过简短解释后，Olden被送进手术室。但是，Miller等在手术室外面，来回不安地踱步，焦虑而紧张。他从来没有像现在这样担心过。 Upon their arrival, after a brief explanation, Olden was rushed into the surgery by doctors. Miller, however, was waiting outside, pacing back and forth restlessly, anxious and nervous. Never before in his lfe had he been so worried like this. 【写作技巧】非谓语/adj做状语/ 倒装句 Step five: Sentence construction Para 1: Miller lifted Olden up, placed him gently on the back seat and then sped to the animal hospital. 2.似乎过了很久，Olden才被送出来，双眼紧闭好像陷入深睡。医生说手术很成功，接下来Olden需要静养恢复，这让Miller大大舒了一口气。医生同时还把子弹交给Miller, “也许对你们而言是个纪念物。” After what seemed an eternity to Miller, Olden was delivered out, his eyes closed firmly as if he were sinking into a deep sleep. The doctor said the surgery was a great success and what Olden needed was only a good care and recovery, which relieved Miller a great deal. The doctor also presented the bullet to Miller, “Maybe it's a memorial to you both!” 【写作技巧】宾从/ 独立主格/主从/定从 Step five: Sentence construction Para 1: Miller lifted Olden up, placed him gently on the back seat and then sped to the animal hospital. 3. 在医护人员的经历照料和Miller的细心照顾下，Olden一天天好起来，这减轻了Miller的担忧让他很开心。他多么希望再次和Olden一起保卫人民啊！ Under the meticulous care of medical staff as well as Miller's cautious attendence, Olden picked up day by day, which eased Miller of his worry and delighted him a lot. How he wished to be with Olden to guard the people once again! 【写作技巧】高级表达/定从/ 感叹句 Step five: Sentence construction Para 2: Miller's joy was reduced, when he was told that Olden would have to pass a test to see if he could stay on the police force. 1. Miller非常清楚地知道枪击会对一条狗造成什么样的伤害，尤其是心理上的。再次一听到枪声，Olden也许会不服从他的命令，又或者会楞在原地傻掉了。 Miller was well aware what harm the gunshot woud cause to a dog, mental health in particular. Olden may disobey his order or be dumbfounded to the spot the moment he heard the shot again. 【写作技巧】高级表达/ 宾从/ 状语从句 Step five: Sentence construction Para 2: Miller's joy was reduced, when he was told that Olden would have to pass a test to see if he could stay on the police force.. 2. Olden测试的日子终于来了。心情忐忑，Miller开始测试，期间Olden服从所有命令做得很棒。随着测试的推进，到了开枪环节。当警官在Olden边上开了两枪，Olden起先愣住了，但Miller大声喊“进攻”时，Olden勇敢地跳起来攻击，完全无视警官手里的枪。 The day when Olden took the test finally came. With his heart thumping wildly, Miller began the test, during which Olden followed all the orders and did a fantastic job. As the test advanced to the particlular section--gunfire, the testing officer gave two close shots before Olden. Olden initially froze, but with Miller's “attack” order, Olden bravely leaped and attacked, ignoring the gun in the officer's hand. 【写作技巧】定从/ withOC/非谓语 Step five: Sentence construction Para 2: Miller's joy was reduced, when he was told that Olden would have to pass a test to see if he could stay on the police force.. With thunderous applause bursting out, Olden ultimately passed the test. Miller couldn't help but crouch down, wrap his arms around Olden and hug him firmly. This hug contained gratitude, respect and admiration. 3. 随着如雷般的掌声响起，Olden最终顺利通过了测试。Miller情不自禁地蹲下，张开双手拥抱了他。这个拥抱，包含着感激、敬意和欣赏。 【写作技巧】withOC/高级句式/ 三连动 Amy的试水作文（适当删减） Miller lifted Olden up, placed him gently on the back seat and then sped to the animal hospital. Upon their arrival, Olden was rushed into the surgery by doctors. Miller, however, was waiting outside, pacing back and forth restlessly. Never before had he been so worried like this. After what seemed an eternity, Olden was delivered out, his eyes closed firmly. The doctor said the surgery was a great success and what Olden needed was only a good care, which relieved Miller a great deal. Under the meticulous care of Miller, Olden picked up day by day, which delighted him a lot. How he wished to be with Olden to guard the people once again! Miller's joy was reduced, when he was told that Olden would have to pass a test to see if he could stay on the police force. Miller was well aware that after the gunshot, Olden may disobey his order or be dumbfounded to the spot the moment he heard the shot again. The day when Olden took the test finally came, during which Olden followed all the orders fantastically. As the test advanced to the gunfire, the officer gave two close shots before Olden. Olden initially froze, but with Miller's “attack” order, Olden bravely leaped and attacked, ignoring the gun in the officer's hand. With thunderous applause bursting out, Olden ultimately passed the test. Miller couldn't help but crouch down, wrap his arms around Olden and hug him firmly. This hug contained gratitude, respect and admiration. 官方参考作文 Miller lifted Olden up, placed him gently on the back seat and then sped to the animal hospital. In the hospital, as Olden was in surgery, Miller feared he'd never see his brave partner again. The next morning, Olden was lying on a table, stitches jutted from the closed wounds. “The bullet missed his jugular vein by fraction of an inch,” the vet said. “He's lucky, but he's not out of danger yet.” Then he dropped a piece of lead into Miller's palm. “You might want this,” he said. Miller looked down at the bullet. This was meant for me, he thought. In the days that followed, Miller dressed the dog's wounds, made sure he ate and carried him outside. Soon it was clear that Olden was going to live. Miller's joy was reduced, when he was told that Olden would have to pass a test to see if he could stay on the police force. Miller knew that gunshot wounds can destroy a police dog's effectiveness. “But he's my partner. He belongs here with me. We're sure to pass that test together!” he said to himself, staring at Olden, still looking weak. Just weeks after the shooting, Miller drove Olden to take that test, during which Olden followed all orders. As he advanced, an officer rushed out and fired twice close to the dog's face. Olden froze. “C'mon, buddy," Miller said. He commanded Olden to attack. A second later, the dog leaped at the gunman, now ignoring the gun in the officer's hand. All officers broke into applause. “Miller,” the trainer said, smiling, “You've got your partner back.” At home, Miller led Olden to his pen. Suddenly, he stopped. There was something he'd been wanting to do ever since he saw Olden over a year ago. And now it's the time. Crouching down, Miller wrapped his arms around Olden and hugged him! Step six: Word Bank 1. be rushed into surgery by doctors 2. pace back and forth restlessly 3. never before had he been so worried like this... 4. after what seemed an eternity,... 5. one's eyes closed firmly--独立主格 6. what sb needed was a good rest.--主语从句 7. relieve sb a great deal 8. under the meticulous care of sb 9. pick up day by day 10. How sb wished to do... Step six: Word Bank 11. be well aware that... 12. be dumbfounded to the spot 13. the moment引导时间状语从句 14. follow the order fantastically 15. as the test advanced to... 16. bravely leap and attack 17. with thunderous applause bursting out, 18. couldn't help but do 19. crouch down and wrap one's arms around... 20. dress one's wound See you! $$