读后续写 陌生人的友爱 课件-2025届高三英语一轮复习

读 后 续 写 生日派对 ---陌生人的善良友爱 1 As the afternoon sun bathed the local beach with its warm, golden rays, four-year-old William sat on the beach with a mix of expectation and confusion. His dad, Steven, sat by his side. They were waiting for William's friends to arrive and celebrate his long-awaited birthday party. William's wide eyes, filled with hope and happiness, stared at the shoreline, looking for familiar faces. He kept asking his dad where everyone was, and Steven just told him "they're coming soon, "trying to ease his son's growing impatience. But the longer they waited, the more hopeless William became. He was extremely disappointed when the two invited families called and said they couldn't make it to the celebration because of unexpected situations. Steven watched his son, who had been eagerly expecting his special day for what seemed like ages. This year, William had been more aware than ever of his upcoming birthday, asking throughout the month when his birthday was, eagerly expecting a good time. Feeling a sense of guilt for his son's disappointment, Steven decided to turn to social media for help. He posted a lovely picture of him and William on the beach. Their faces were filled with a mix of hope and disappointment. The sincere words with the picture read, "William would love some friends to play with on the beach. To celebrate his fourth birthday, he has Hot Wheels, sand toys, dinosaurs, and we have some snacks and drinks. Any and all welcome. " William's wish for companionship produced a strong response from the local people. They flooded the post with messages of support, birthday wishes, and offers to join the celebration. They were determined to make William's day special. "Going there. See you soon, "one warm-hearted local commented on the post, promising to bring her family along. The message aroused the same feeling from many others, who were quick to follow suit. Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. 更多模板亮亮图文旗舰店：https://liangliangtuwen.tmall.com 2 Read for main characters Steven (Dad) four-year-old William (son) Supportive intelligent As the afternoon sun bathed the local beach with its warm, golden rays, four-year-old William sat on the beach with a mix of expectation and confusion. His dad, Steven, sat by his side. They were waiting for William's friends to arrive and celebrate his long-awaited birthday party. William's wide eyes, filled with hope and happiness, stared at the shoreline, looking for familiar faces. He kept asking his dad where everyone was, and Steven just told him "they're coming soon, "trying to ease his son's growing impatience. But the longer they waited, the more hopeless William became. He was extremely disappointed when the two invited families called and said they couldn't make it to the celebration because of unexpected situations. Steven watched his son, who had been eagerly expecting his special day for what seemed like ages. This year, William had been more aware than ever of his upcoming birthday, asking throughout the month when his birthday was, eagerly expecting a good time. Feeling a sense of guilt for his son's disappointment, Steven decided to turn to social media for help. He posted a lovely picture of him and William on the beach. Their faces were filled with a mix of hope and disappointment. The sincere words with the picture read, "William would love some friends to play with on the beach. To celebrate his fourth birthday, he has Hot Wheels, sand toys, dinosaurs, and we have some snacks and drinks. Any and all welcome. " William's wish for companionship produced a strong response from the local people. They flooded the post with messages of support, birthday wishes, and offers to join the celebration. They were determined to make William's day special. "Going there. See you soon, "one warm-hearted local commented on the post, promising to bring her family along. The message aroused the same feeling from many others, who were quick to follow suit. Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. 如何快速梳理故事情节线与情感线？ Tip 1:找时间线索,时间的变化带来情节的发展 Tip 2:找地点线索，地点的变化带来情节的发展 Tip 3:通过逻辑连词来推动情节的发展 更多模板亮亮图文旗舰店：https://liangliangtuwen.tmall.com 4 Background Rising action Climax Falling action Ending ??? Analyze the Plot and Emotion Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. William eagerly waited for his friends to arrive and celebrate his long-awaited birthday party on the beach. William was extremely disappointed when leaning his friends couldn't make it to the celebration. Steven turned to social media for help and some locals promised to attend the birthday party. expectant hopeful happy disappointed excited 5 As the afternoon sun bathed the local beach with its warm, golden rays, four-year-old William sat on the beach with a mix of expectation and confusion. His dad, Steven, sat by his side. They were waiting for William's friends to arrive and celebrate his long-awaited birthday party. William's wide eyes, filled with hope and happiness, stared at the shoreline, looking for familiar faces. He kept asking his dad where everyone was, and Steven just told him "they're coming soon, "trying to ease his son's growing impatience. But the longer they waited, the more hopeless William became. He was extremely disappointed when the two invited families called and said they couldn't make it to the celebration because of unexpected situations. Steven watched his son, who had been eagerly expecting his special day for what seemed like ages. This year, William had been more aware than ever of his upcoming birthday, asking throughout the month when his birthday was, eagerly expecting a good time. Feeling a sense of guilt for his son's disappointment, Steven decided to turn to social media for help. He posted a lovely picture of him and William on the beach. Their faces were filled with a mix of hope and disappointment. The sincere words with the picture read, "William would love some friends to play with on the beach. To celebrate his fourth birthday, he has Hot Wheels, sand toys, dinosaurs, and we have some snacks and drinks. Any and all welcome. " William's wish for companionship produced a strong response from the local people. They flooded the post with messages of support, birthday wishes, and offers to join the celebration. They were determined to make William's day special. "Going there. See you soon, "one warm-hearted local commented on the post, promising to bring her family along. The message aroused the same feeling from many others, who were quick to follow suit. Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. Read for conflicts William was disappointed that his friends were unable to attend his birthday party. 更多模板亮亮图文旗舰店：https://liangliangtuwen.tmall.com 6 Read for conflict William was disappointed that his friends were unable to attend his birthday party. Read for the theme [人与社会] help others in need Love and kindness from strangers Strangers offer to join the birthday celebration. Solution As the afternoon sun bathed the local beach with its warm, golden rays, four-year-old William sat on the beach with a mix of expectation and confusion. His dad, Steven, sat by his side. They were waiting for William's friends to arrive and celebrate his long-awaited birthday party. William's wide eyes, filled with hope and happiness, stared at the shoreline, looking for familiar faces. He kept asking his dad where everyone was, and Steven just told him "they're coming soon, "trying to ease his son's growing impatience. But the longer they waited, the more hopeless William became. He was extremely disappointed when the two invited families called and said they couldn't make it to the celebration because of unexpected situations. Steven watched his son, who had been eagerly expecting his special day for what seemed like ages. This year, William had been more aware than ever of his upcoming birthday, asking throughout the month when his birthday was, eagerly expecting a good time. Feeling a sense of guilt for his son's disappointment, Steven decided to turn to social media for help. He posted a lovely picture of him and William on the beach. Their faces were filled with a mix of hope and disappointment. The sincere words with the picture read, "William would love some friends to play with on the beach. To celebrate his fourth birthday, he has Hot Wheels, sand toys, dinosaurs, and we have some snacks and drinks. Any and all welcome. " William's wish for companionship produced a strong response from the local people. They flooded the post with messages of support, birthday wishes, and offers to join the celebration. They were determined to make William's day special. "Going there. See you soon, "one warm-hearted local commented on the post, promising to bring her family along. The message aroused the same feeling from many others, who were quick to follow suit. Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. Analyze language 丰富的动作描写 根据语篇协同性原则： 续写部分可以运用丰富的心理描写和动作描写 丰富的心理描写 更多模板亮亮图文旗舰店：https://liangliangtuwen.tmall.com 8 Determine a plot: 1. 四句定框架 Para.1: Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. ①________________ ②_________________ Para.2 :After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. ③_________________ ④_________________ 按照“主述位推进”确定段落主角 按照“主述位推进”确定段落主角并解决问题 （过渡句）上下情节的衔接 （结尾句）与主题保持一致 Para.1: Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. ①______________________________________ ②_____________________________________ Paragraph 2: After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. “主述位推进”确定段落主角 （过渡句）上下情节的衔接 More and more community members arrived to make William’s birthday special The delicious scent of the cake filled the air as everyone gathered to sing “Happy Birthday” and share in the sweet moment. Determine a plot: 1. 四句定框架 Para.2 :After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. ③_______________ ④_____________________ “主述位推进”确定段落主角并解决问题 （结尾句）与主题保持一致 The little boy’s heart was filled with happiness, and he couldn’t stop smiling as he looked back on the day’s events. They had witnessed the beauty of human connection and the power of reaching out to others in times of need. And most importantly, William learned the valuable lesson that even in the face of disappointment, there is always kindness and love waiting to be discovered. Determine a plot: 1. 四句定框架 Paragraph Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. Action—Response原则 Conflict—Solution原则 Determine a plot: 2. 补充每段内容 衔接句 What was the joyful scene like? (who came and what did they do?) 过渡句 What did the two previously-invited families do? 过渡句 How did William feel? 衔接句 How did they celebrate the birthday? Paragraph 2: After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. Determine a plot: 2. 补充每段内容 衔接句 What did the guests do? 过渡句 How did Steven feel? Theme What lesson did Steven learn from this experience? Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 衔接句 What was the joyful scene like? (who came?) 情节构建---回扣原文 Para.5 William's wish for companionship produced a strong response from the local people. They flooded the post with messages of support, birthday wishes, and offers to join the celebration. They were determined to make William's day special. Para.6 "Going there. See you soon, "one warm-hearted local commented on the post, promising to bring her family along. The message aroused the same feeling from many others, who were quick to follow suit. 续写部分应该呼应前文，提到这个承诺到场的当地人家庭，及其他当地人。 14 Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 衔接句 What was the joyful scene like? (what did they do?) 情节构建---回扣原文 Para.4 Feeling a sense of guilt for his son's disappointment, Steven decided to turn to social media for help. He posted a lovely picture of him and William on the beach. Their faces were filled with a mix of hope and disappointment. The sincere words with the picture read, "William would love some friends to play with on the beach. To celebrate his fourth birthday, he has Hot Wheels, sand toys, dinosaurs, and we have some snacks and drinks. Any and all welcome. " 孩子们在沙滩玩玩Hot Wheels, sand toys, dinosaurs，吃零食喝饮料 15 Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 过渡句 What did the two previously-invited families do? 情节构建---回扣原文 Para.2 He kept asking his dad where everyone was, and Steven just told him "they're coming soon, "trying to ease his son's growing impatience. But the longer they waited, the more hopeless William became. He was extremely disappointed when the two invited families called and said they couldn't make it to the celebration because of unexpected situations. Para.5 William's wish for companionship produced a strong response from the local people. They flooded the post with messages of support, birthday wishes, and offers to join the celebration. They were determined to make William's day special. Possible solution 1:没到场，但是发来祝福短信或者视频。 Possible solution 2:看到帖子，被感动，推掉其他事务，来到现场。 16 Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 衔接句 What was the joyful scene like? (Who came and what did they do?) 热情的当地人如约而至，带来了她的孩子和自制的蛋糕给威廉。(非谓语动词)接下来的几个小时里，其他家人陆续抵达，为威廉的生日带来了礼物和祝福。孩子们一起玩风火轮汽车、堆沙堡、探索海滩，现场充满了欢声笑语，气氛十分热烈。 (动作链) As promised, the warm-hearted local showed up, bringing her children and home-made cakes for William. The following hours saw families arriving one by one, bringing gifts and well wishes for William's birthday. The atmosphere was filled with laughter and excitement as kids played with Hot Wheels cars, built sand castles, and explored the beach together. 微场景—孩子玩闹 17 Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 衔接句过渡句 What did the two previously-invited families do? 之前因突发状况而取消的两个家庭来到了生日现场。 (定从)他们看到社交媒体上的帖子后，意识到自己造成的失望，决定重新安排计划，赶来参加威廉的生日派对。 (定从+非谓语) The two families who had previously canceled due to unexpected situations arrived at the celebration. They had seen the post on social media and, realizing the disappointment they had caused, decided to rearrange their plans and make it to William's birthday party. 逐句写作 18 Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 过渡句 How did William feel? 1.威廉的脸上洋溢着幸福，周围都是来让他的一天特别起来的新朋友。 （非谓语) William's face lit up with happiness, surrounded by new friends who had come to make his day special. 2.威廉睁大的眼睛里曾经充满困惑和失望，现在却闪烁着纯粹的快乐，并对陌生人的善意产生了新的信念。 （非谓语) William's wide eyes, once filled with confusion and disappointment, now sparkled with pure happiness and a newfound belief in the kindness of strangers. 情绪描写---高兴 19 Para.1 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. 衔接句 How did they celebrate the birthday? Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. 当威廉吹灭生日蛋糕上的蜡烛时，所有人都围在他身边，高唱 “生日快乐”。（非谓语)音乐响起，五颜六色的气球在空中飘荡，周围充满了孩子们的欢声笑语，海滩变成了一个生机勃勃的派对现场。 (with复合结构) Everyone gathered around William, singing "Happy Birthday" as he blew out the candles on his birthday cake. The beach was transformed into a vibrant party scene, with music playing, colorful balloons floating in the air, and the sound of children's laughter filling the surroundings. 微场景-庆祝生日 20 Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. 衔接句 What did the guests do? 美丽的橙色光芒洒满了整个海滩。告别前，他们互相交换了联系方式，承诺保持联系，并为孩子们安排未来的游玩活动。 A beautiful orange glow was cast across the beach. Before bidding farewell to each other, they exchanged contact information, promising to keep in touch and arrange future playdates for the children. 环境描写+告别的场景 21 Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. 过渡句 How did William feel? 1.他的眼中闪烁着泪花，心中涌动着难以言表的感激之情，感谢这些陌生人的爱心、友情和意外的善意。(独立主格) Tears glistening in his eyes, his heart swelled with indescribable gratitude for the strangers’ love, friendship, and unexpected kindness. 2.他的内心充满感激，当地社区的善意和慷慨让他不知所措。(独立主格) His heart filled with gratitude, he was overwhelmed by the kindness and generosity of the local community. 情绪描写+感动 22 Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. Theme What lesson did Steven learn from this experience? 当史蒂文收拾好行李，告别海滩时，他知道这段难忘的记忆将永远铭刻在威廉的心中。他们见证了人与人之间联系的美好，以及在他人需要帮助时伸出援手的力量。最重要的是，威廉学到了宝贵的一课：即使面对失望，也总有善良和爱等待着我们去发现。 As Steven packed up his belongings and bid farewell to the beach, he knew that this unforgettable memory would forever be etched in William hearts. They had witnessed the beauty of human connection and the power of reaching out to others in times of need. And most importantly, William learned the valuable lesson that even in the face of disappointment, there is always kindness and love waiting to be discovered. 结尾1 自然结尾+主题升华 23 Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. Theme What lesson did Steven learn from this experience? 当星光在头顶闪烁时，史蒂文意识到这次意外的转折给他上了宝贵的一课。这与到场的人数或庆祝活动的隆重程度无关，而是与他们从社区获得的关爱和支持有关。 As the stars twinkled above, Steven realized that this unexpected turn of events had taught him a valuable lesson. It wasn't about the number of people who showed up or the grandness of the celebration; it was about the love and support they received from the community. 结尾2 主题升华 24 Para.2 After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. Theme What lesson did Steven learn from this experience? 这一天在失望中开始，却在爱心和善意的涌动中结束。这提醒我们，即使面对失望，人类同情心的力量也能扭转局面。 The day had started with disappointment but ended with an outpouring of love and kindness. It was a reminder that even in the face of disappointment, the power of human compassion could turn things around. 结尾2 主题升华 25 范文 Soon, the beach was filled with scenes of joy. More and more community members arrived to make William’s birthday special, eager to share the excitement of a young boy’s milestone. Children played together, building sandcastles and sharing their favorite toys. Parents chatted and connected, forming new friendships on the sun-kissed shoreline. The two invited families also sent their birthday wishes through video. Laughter and cheer surrounded William as he blew out the candles on his birthday cake, a radiant smile lighting up his face. The delicious scent of the cake filled the air as everyone gathered to sing “Happy Birthday” and share in the sweet moment. After hours of laughter and games, the sun began to set. The little boy’s heart was filled with happiness, and he couldn’t stop smiling as he looked back on the day’s events. As the sun dipped below the horizon, it was time for their newfound friends to bid goodbye and head home. His dad, Steven, took to social media once more to express his gratitude. “Thankyou so much, everyone, for the birthday wishes and support,” he wrote. “I’ll never lose faith in humanity.” The sun may have set on this special day, but the memories created would undoubtedly linger in William’s heart for years to come. I’ll never forget the day Mom made me go to a birthday party. I was in Mrs. Black's third grade class in Wichita Falls, Texas, and I brought home a birthday invitation. “I'm not going, "I said. “She's a new girl named Ruth, and Berniece and Pat aren't going, either. She asked the whole class, all 36 of us.“ As Mom studied the handmade invitation, she looked strangely sad. Then she announced, “Well, you are going! Ill pick up a present tomorrow.“ I couldn't believe it. Mom had never made me go to a party! I was sure that I'd just die if I had to go. However, Mom remained unaffected, regardless of how much I begged. When Saturday arrived, Mom rushed me out of bed and made me wrap the pretty pink mirror brush-and-comb set she'd bought for $2.98.She drove me over in her yellow and white car. Ruth answered the door and signed me to follow her up the steepest(最陡峭的),scariest staircase I'd ever seen. Stepping through the door brought me great relief. The hardwood floors shone in the sunlit room. White snow-like mats (垫子)covered the backs and arms of the well-used furniture. The biggest cake I ever saw sat on one table. It was decorated with nine pink candles, a carelessly printed Happy Birthday Ruth and what I think were supposed to be rosebuds. Thirty six candle-filled paper cups were near the cake, each one with a name on it. This won't be too awful, once everyone gets here, I decided. “Where's your mom?” I asked Ruth. Looking down at the floor, she said, “Well, she's sort of sick.” “Oh. Where's your dad?” “He's gone.” Then there was a silence, except for a few rough coughs from behind a closed door. Para. 1. Some 15 minutes passed…then 10 more. Para. 2. We two started with the cake, enjoying each bite. 类似话题 -2024届重庆市康德11月联考新同学冷清的生日聚会 更多模板亮亮图文旗舰店：https://liangliangtuwen.tmall.com 27 范文 Some 15 minutes passed,… then 10 more. And a mix of anticipation and disappointment filled the air. I couldn’t help but feel frustrated that none of my classmates had shown up for Ruth’s birthday party. I heard soft cries coming from Ruth. When I looked up, I saw tears streaming down her face. All at once my eight-year-old heart was filled with sympathy for her and full of rage at my 35 selfish classmates. Determined to make the best of the situation, I made a silent decision to be there for Ruth and celebrate her special day, even if it meant doing it alone. We two started with the cake, enjoying each bite. It was just the two of us, but we didn’t let that dampen our spirits. We shared stories and laughter. Later, we played games, danced to our favorite songs, and even attempted to make our own paper crowns. Though the room may have been lacking the expected crowd, our bond grew stronger with each passing minute. In a flash it was noon. Mom was honking outside. Ruth hugged me tightly. With tears in her eyes, she whispered, “Thank you! You’ve made my day!” Sure enough, I had made a big difference in Ruth’s ninth birthday, and Mom had made a big difference in my life. 范文默写 Some 15 minutes passed,… then 10 more. And _______________________(空气中充满了期待和失望). I couldn’t help but feel frustrated that none of my classmates had shown up for Ruth’s birthday party. I heard soft cries coming from Ruth. _________________________________________________(当我抬起头来时，我看到眼泪从她的脸上流下来). All at once my eight-year-old _________ _____________________(心里充满了对她的同情和愤怒)at my 35 selfish classmates. _________________________________(为了让情景最好), I made a silent decision to be there for Ruth and celebrate her special day, even if it meant doing it alone. We two started with the cake, enjoying each bite. It was just the two of us, but we didn’t ________________________(让这抑制我们的情绪). We shared stories and laughter. Later, we played games, danced to our favorite songs, and even attempted to make our own paper crowns. ________________________________________ __________________(虽然房间里可能缺少预期的人，但我们的纽带随着时间的流逝而越来越牢)____________(一瞬间)it was noon. Mom was honking outside. Ruth hugged me tightly. __________________(她眼中含着泪水，低声说)“Thank you! You’ve made my day!” Sure enough, I had made a big difference in Ruth’s ninth birthday, and Mom had made a big difference in my life. $$