内容正文:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When a tornado(龙卷风) touched down in a small town nearby,many families were left completed ruined. Afterward all the local newspapers carried many human-interest stories featuring some of the families who suffered the hardest.
One Sunday, a particular picture especially touched me. A young woman stood in front of an entirely shattered(破碎的) mobile home, a depressed expression on her face. A young boy, seven or eight years old, stood at her side, eyes downward. Clutching(紧握) at her skirt was a tiny girl who stared into the camera, eyes wide with confusion and fear.
The article that went with the picture gave the clothing sizes of each family member. With growing interest, I noticed that their sizes closely matched ours. This would be a good opportunity to teach my children to help those less fortunate than themselves. I stuck the picture of the young family on our refrigerator, explaining their difficulty to my seven-year-old twins, Brad and Brett, and to three-year-old Meghan.
“These poor people now have nothing,” I said. “We’ll share what we have with them. I brought three large boxes down from the room upstairs and placed them on the living room floor. Meghan watched seriously, as the boys and I filled one of the boxes with canned goods and foods.
While I sorted through our clothes, I encouraged the boys to go through their toys and donate some of their less favorite things. Meghan watched quietly as the boys piled up old toys and games.
Meghan walked up with Lucy, her worn, much-loved rag doll hugged tightly to her chest. She came to the box that held the toys, pressed her round little face into Lucy's flat, painted-on-face, gave her a final kiss, then laid her gently on top of the other toys.
“Oh, Honey,” I said.” You don’t have to give Lucy. You love her so much.”
Meghan nodded seriously, eyes filled with held-back tears. "Lucy makes me happy, Mommy. Maybe she’ll make that other little girl happy,too.”
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The boys had watched,open-mouthed,as their baby sister placed her favorite doll in the box.
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I looked my children for a long moment.
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文章大意
龙卷风过后,一个小镇许多家庭受灾严重,报纸上一张受灾家庭的照片触动了作者。照片中年轻女子和两个孩子神情沮丧,作者看到他们的衣物尺码与自家相近,决定借此机会教育孩子帮助他人。作者一家准备了食物、衣服和玩具等物品捐赠,三岁的 Meghan 把自己心爱的破布娃娃 Lucy 也放进了捐赠箱,尽管她很不舍,但她希望 Lucy 能给受灾的小女孩带去快乐。
伏笔及回应
· 伏笔 1:作者鼓励孩子们捐赠不太喜欢的玩具,而 Meghan 静静地看着。这为后文 Meghan 捐出最心爱的 Lucy 做了铺垫,突出她的善良和无私。在续写中可以回应 Meghan 这种与年龄不符的大爱行为对哥哥们的影响。
· 伏笔 2:Meghan 紧紧抱着 Lucy,以及她眼中充满不舍的泪水。这暗示了 Lucy 对她的重要性,也为她最终决定捐出 Lucy 形成鲜明对比,更能体现她的善良和牺牲精神。在续写中可以进一步描述 Meghan 内心的挣扎和坚定的选择。
· 伏笔 3:作者说 “这些可怜的人现在一无所有”,为孩子们的捐赠行为提供了背景和动机。在续写中可以体现孩子们通过捐赠真正理解了帮助他人的意义,以及这种行为对他们自身价值观的影响。
续写要点
第一段
· 感情线:哥哥们感到惊讶和敬佩,可能会对自己的捐赠行为有新的认识,也可能会为妹妹的举动而感动。Meghan 则是坚定又带着一丝不舍,她明白自己在做正确的事,但对 Lucy 的感情让她心情复杂。
· 故事线:描述哥哥们的反应,比如他们可能会说些什么或者有什么表情动作。然后可以写 Meghan 对哥哥们的解释,为什么她要捐出 Lucy,以及她对受灾小女孩的同情和希望能帮助她的心情。
第二段
· 感情线:作者感到骄傲和欣慰,同时也可能会有一些思考,关于孩子们的善良和成长。孩子们可能会因为这次经历而有所成长,对帮助他人有更深刻的理解和感受。
· 故事线:作者对孩子们表达自己的感受和赞扬,然后可以提到这次经历对家庭的影响,比如以后会更积极地参与帮助他人的活动等。也可以简单描述一下孩子们接下来的行动或决定,以体现他们的成长和变化。
主旨升华句
1. In that moment, I witnessed the purest form of kindness and selflessness in my children, and realized that the true essence of giving lies not in the value of the gift, but in the love and compassion behind it.
2. Through the simple act of a little girl donating her most beloved doll, my children taught me that the greatest wealth is not what we possess, but the ability to touch others' lives with our hearts.
3. The selfless donation of Meghan's Lucy became a beautiful lesson for all of us, showing that even the smallest acts of kindness can have the most profound impact and light up the darkest of times.
4. As I looked at my children, I understood that they had not only given away material things, but had also sown the seeds of empathy and generosity that would grow and bloom throughout their lives.
5. In the act of giving up her precious Lucy, Meghan showed us that true love extends beyond ourselves and that the power of kindness can transform lives, both the giver's and the receiver's.
写作范文一
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The boys had watched, open-mouthed, as their baby sister placed her favorite doll in the box. Brad was the first to speak. "Meghan, are you sure you want to give away Lucy? She's your favorite." Meghan nodded firmly. "Yes, Brad. The little girl in the picture looks so sad. I think Lucy can make her happy like she makes me happy." Brett then chimed in, "But Meghan, you always sleep with Lucy. Won't you miss her?" Meghan's eyes welled up with tears again, but she said, "I'll miss her, but the other girl needs her more. We have to help them." The boys looked at each other and then started rummaging through their toys again. Brad pulled out a robot he had been a bit reluctant to part with before. "If Meghan can give Lucy, I can give this robot too." Brett added a book he really liked. They placed their new donations in the box with a new sense of purpose.
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I looked at my children for a long moment. My heart swelled with pride and a hint of emotion. I said, "You kids are amazing. You've shown true kindness and selflessness today. We're not just giving away things, we're giving hope and love." We sealed the boxes and prepared to send them to the affected families. From that day on, the kids became more aware of others' needs. They started looking for ways to help in the neighborhood, whether it was helping an elderly neighbor carry groceries or sharing their toys with kids who didn't have many. Meghan's act of giving her Lucy had set a beautiful example, and it became a turning point in our family, making us more compassionate and willing to reach out to those in need.
写作范文二
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The boys had watched, open-mouthed, as their baby sister placed her favorite doll in the box. After a moment of silence, they both rushed to their rooms. Brad came back with his favorite baseball cap that he had won in a little league game. "Meghan, if you can give Lucy, I can give this. Maybe the little boy will like it." Brett brought his favorite stuffed animal that he had slept with every night. "Meghan, you're so brave. I want to help too." Meghan smiled through her tears. "Thank you, Brad and Brett. We're going to make that family happy." They all hugged each other, feeling a sense of unity and purpose.
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I looked at my children for a long moment. I was speechless at their innocence and kindness. "You all have such big hearts. This is what it means to care for others. We may not have a lot, but what we have, we can share." We loaded the boxes into the car and drove to the donation center. As we drove away, I knew that this experience had changed my children. They had learned the value of giving, the joy of helping others. And I was sure that this lesson would stay with them forever. It was a small act of kindness, but it had the power to spread love and hope. In a world full of challenges, my children had shown that even the smallest gestures can make a big difference, and that the true spirit of humanity lies in our ability to reach out and help those in need.
官方范文:
The boys had watched, open-mouthed, as their baby sister placed her favorite doll in the box. Without a word, Brad rose and went to his room. He came back carrying one of his favorite action figures. He hesitated briefly, clutching the toy, then looked over at Meghan and placed it in the box next to Lucy. A slow smile spread across Brett’s face. Then he jumped up, eyes twinkling as he ran to fetch some of his prized Matchbox cars. Astonished, I realized that the boys had also recognized what little Meghan’s gesture meant.
I looked at my children for a long moment. Swallowing back tears, I pulled all three of them into my arms. Inspired by my little ones, I removed my old jacket from the box of clothes. I replaced it with the new hunter green jacket that I had found on sale last week. I hoped the young woman in the picture would love it as much as I did. It’s easy to give what we don’t want any more, but harder to let go of things we cherish. However, the true spirit of giving is to give with your heart.
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