11.必修第一册Unit 6 At one with nature(概要写作)-【同步写作课】2024-2025学年高一英语单元写作深度指导(外研版2019)

Unit 6 At one with nature 单元写作深度指导 概要写作 单元话题 语篇展示 概要写作 The 'SmartFit' bracelet, a new wearable device, is set to revolutionize health and fitness monitoring. Developed by a team of engineers and scientists, it accurately tracks various biometric data such as heart rate, blood pressure, and sleep patterns. It also provides real-time feedback on activity levels and calorie expenditure. With GPS capabilities, users can track workouts and routes. The bracelet is designed to be comfortable, lightweight, and sleek, making it suitable for daily wear. Its innovative features have garnered attention from fitness enthusiasts and tech experts, and the developers are confident it will appeal to a wide audience and impact the wearable technology market.‌ 英语概要写作要求考生在理解原文的基础上，‌用较为简短的篇幅‌准确、‌完整地再现原文的主要信息。‌这要求考生具备良好的阅读理解、‌信息筛选和语言表达能力：（1）‌阅读理解‌：‌考生需要准确理解原文的主旨、‌细节以及作者的态度和观点。‌(2)‌信息筛选‌：‌从原文中提炼出关键信息，‌包括主要观点、‌重要事实、‌数据等。‌(3)‌语言表达‌：‌使用简洁、‌准确的语言对原文进行概括，‌避免使用原文中的具体细节和例子。‌(4)‌逻辑结构‌：‌保持原文的逻辑结构，‌确保概要的条理清晰。 考向分析与应对策略 英语概要写作的技巧主要包括以下几点：‌ ‌理解原文‌：‌首先需要仔细阅读原文，‌确保完全理解文章的主旨和要点。‌ ‌删除细节‌：‌概要写作要求简洁明了，‌因此需要删除原文中的具体细节和例子，‌只保留主要观点和信息。‌ ‌简化描述‌：‌使用概括性的词语和短语来替代原文中的具体描述，‌使概要更加精炼。‌ ‌句式变换‌：‌通过改变句式结构，‌如将复合句变为简单句，‌或使用不同的表达方式，‌来避免直接引用原文句子。‌ ‌逻辑连贯‌：‌在概要中保持信息的逻辑连贯性，‌使用适当的连接词和过渡句来组织内容。‌ ‌检查修改‌：‌完成初稿后，‌仔细检查并修改概要，‌确保没有遗漏重要信息，‌且语言表达准确流畅。‌ 　　概要写作是要求学生对一篇文章进行归纳概括, 用简洁的语言总结文章要点。所表达的信息要忠实于原文, 但不可原句照搬。 I.话题词汇 (1)目前: currently=nowadays=presently (2)常见的现象: a common phenomenon =It’s common for sb. to do. . . (3)与……有联系; 与……有关: be associated with, connect with (4)导致: contribute to, lead to, result in (5)解释: account for II. 话题句式 1．常用开头语 (1)议论文 The passage/author argues that ... 本文/作者主张…… The passage/author highlights the importance of ... 本文/作者强调了……的重要性。 The passage/author discusses the impact of ... 本文/作者讨论了……的影响。 The passage/author compares ... with ... 本文/作者比较了……与…… (2)说明文 According to the passage, we can know ... 根据文章我们可知…… This passage/article is mainly about ... 这篇文章主要是关于…… In the passage, the writer/author mainly tells us ... 在这篇文章中作者主要告诉我们…… A new study found ... 一个新的研究发现…… The purpose of the report is to show ... 这一报告的目的是表明…… (3)记叙文 The passage/story is mainly about ... 本文/这个故事主要是关于…… The author tells us a story about ... 作者告诉我们一个关于……的故事 The passage is a story about ... 本文是一个关于……的故事 2．要点连接词 (1)顺序 firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally首先，第二，第三，最后；to begin with, then, furthermore, finally首先，然后，其次，最后；to start with, next, in addition, finally首先，然后，其次，最后。 (2)并列 as well as也；not only ... but (also) ... 不仅……还……；including/included包括。 (3)对比 on the one hand ... on the other hand ... 一方面……另一方面……；for one thing ... for another ... 一方面……另一方面……；on the contrary与此相反；nevertheless然而；compared to与……相比；in contrast with与……形成对比；though/in spite of尽管。 (4)递进 even甚至；besides除了……之外(还)；what's more还有；moreover而且；furthermore此外；in addition另外；worse still＝what's worse＝to make matters worse更糟糕的是。 (5)例证 as a matter of fact/in fact 事实上；for example/for instance例如。 (6)强调 especially特别；indeed确实；at least至少；at most最多；not at all根本不；or rather更确切地说；particularly特别地。 (7)因果 thanks to多亏；as a result结果；because of/as a result of/on account of/due to因为；owing to多亏；for this reason由于这个原因。 (8)总结 in short总之；generally speaking一般来说；briefly/in brief简言之；to sum up＝to summarize＝in summary/to conclude总之。 III.模版框架 1．进行概要写作时要注意以下四点： (1)一般使用第三人称。 (2)不可加入自己的观点。 (3)一定不可对原文内容加以评论。 (4)一定不要引入与原文内容无关的信息。 2．概要写作步骤 在写概要时，要按照“六步法”的程序进行，具体操作方法如下： (1)Scan the passage—览全文，定体裁 (2)Underline the main points—划要点 (3)Miss the details—省细节 (4)Analyse the structure—析结构 (5)Restate the points—换表达 (6)Organize the main points into a passage—连全文 阅读下面短文, 根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。 　　Herbal medicine (草药), which has been used for medicinal purposes, is the use of plants to treat diseases. Many herbalists use the entire plant, from the flowers, stems, leaves, and roots, in the form of everything from teas to pills. These plants contain natural, chemical things that can treat the body for a variety of diseases—such as allergies, asthma, rheumatoid arthritis, migraine, chronic fatigue, and cancer, among others. 　　Nowadays an increasing number of people prefer to adopt these plants to treat their diseases because compared with chemical medicine, herbal medicine has its own advantages. Herbal medicine and remedies (治疗) are more effective than chemical medicine for certain diseases. The chemical medicine given by a chemist could have certain negative side effects. However, many of the herbal medicine and remedies do not have negative side effects. If any, they are softer than chemical medicine. Obesity is the cause of many of the health problems. Herbal medicine can help weight-loss more effectively and improve overall health. 　　However, the cure using herbal medicine and supplements (营养品) would take some time, and therefore people are supposed to possess enough patience. Worse still, herbal medicine contains a variety of ingredients (成分) and people have to be sure that their body agrees with the ingredients and that it is not allergic (过敏的). 　　When used correctly and directed by doctors, herbs can help treat a variety of diseases. But keep in mind that the herbal medicine industry is not regulated, so herbal products are often misleading and may contain additives (添加剂) and that are not listed on the label (标签). Some herbs may cause allergic reactions or interact with other drugs, and some are poisonous if used improperly or at high doses (剂量). Taking herbs on your own increases your risk. 【写作分析】 [结构梳理] Introduction→Paragraph 1. Definition Conclusion→ Paragraph 4. Advice [要点提炼] Paragraph 1. Herbal medicine is the use of the entire plants to treat a variety of diseases. Paragraph 2. Unlike chemical medicine, herbal medicine is more effective and has no or fewer negative side effects. Paragraph 3. However, herbal medicine also has disadvantages, such as time-consuming and possible allergy. Paragraph 4. People should use herbal medicine cautiously. [要点改写] Paragraph 1. Herbal medicine is a way of treating some diseases _____________________ containing powerful things in various forms.   Paragraph 2. _____________________ chemical medicine, herbal medicine is better in several ways such as its more effectiveness and fewer negative side effects.   Paragraph 3. Herbal medicine requires _____________________ for recovery and tends to _____________________ as well.   Paragraph 4. People should use herb medicine _____________________.   [衔接成篇] ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、短语翻译 1. This case will _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ (对……有积极影响)judicial practice. 2. If I were you, I would _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ (花更多时间在)English. 3. There is _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ (没什么比……更好)to see smiling face of you. 4. When _____________________ _____________________(有疑问), call the doctor. 5. Enough money _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ _____________________(允许她旅行) around the world. 6. The teacher _____________________ _____________________ _____________________(和, 还有) his students visited the famous museum. 7. He fell asleep _____________________ _____________________ _____________________ _____________________(蜡烛点着) . 8. You should _____________________ _____________________(反省) your mistakes every day. 二、语篇翻译 （24-25高二上·全国·课后作业）短文汉译英 当你饿了的时候你喜欢去哪家餐馆？这条街上有各种各样（饮食风格）的餐馆，不同的餐馆满足几乎所有的口味。有些餐馆以美味中餐而闻名，有些以西餐而闻名，也有些以其当地特色而闻名。不管你喜欢哪一个，不管你喜欢什么，总会有一家很棒的，能够吸引你的餐馆。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 三．书面表达 阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。 Bamboo is one of the world's most useful plants. For thousands of years bamboo has been used in many different ways—from food to medicine to clothing and, in small ways, as a building material. However, bamboo is not often used as a building material in the developed world. A professor at the University of Pittsburgh in Pennsylvania is trying to change that. The professor and his students are testing the strength of bamboo. They are testing its radial load, or how much pressure or weight it can take before breaking. Kent Harries is a professor at the University of Pittsburgh. Harries says that testing methods for bamboo need to be the same for all. They need to be standardized. Harries says bamboo is strong in nature. The strength of at least three species of bamboo is similar to steel. Besides its strength, Harries says that bamboo has other features that make it a great building material. He says it is resilient, meaning it keeps its shape and strength even under pressure. Bamboo also grows quickly. Bamboo that is suitable for construction needs much less resources than wood. The harvest cycle of bamboo is about 3 years. Softwoods such as cedar, pine and spruce have a harvest cycle of about 10 years. And hardwoods that come from flowering plants such as oak, maple and walnut need more than 30 years. Bamboo is widely used as food for panda bears. It is also used for flooring and window covers. However, for building, bamboo is not used much outside its native growing area. This is mostly because of its round shape. But there are other reasons too. People think that bamboo is a low­quality building material. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ (2018·浙江11月高考)阅读下面短文, 根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。 It’s a really good idea to visit colleges before you apply because their websites can all start to look and sound the same. Nothing will give you the sense of what it will actually be like to live on a college campus(校园) like visiting and seeing for yourself the dorms, classrooms and athletic equipment and, of course, the students. It seems a little crazy once senior year hits to find the time to visit college campuses, and it can also be pricey if the schools you are applying to happen to be more than a car ride away. But keep in mind that you are making a decision about the next four years of your life, and do all the research you can to make sure you are making the right one. There’s no excuse not to visit the schools in your local area. In fact, a lot of college applications even ask if you have visited campus, and obviously, if you live across the country that won’t be as much of a possibility, but if you live nearby, go check it out! If campus visits aren’t going to happen before you apply, at the very least you should find some time between applying and getting your acceptance letters to visit the schools you’d like to attend. It can save you a lot of heartache if you rule out now the things that you don’t like about certain campuses, things that you wouldn’t know unless you actually visit. Now, if time and money are making it impossible, then check out the online college fairs at College Week Live. It’s a chance to chat online with admissions officers, students, and college counselors(顾问), and it won’t cost you a penny! You can register for its online college fair at collegeweeklive. com. While visiting an online college fair can’t take the place of an actual campus visit, it can be a very useful tool that along with all your other research will help you make an informed decision about which colleges or universities you’d like to attend. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ( 1 )原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ Unit 6 At one with nature 单元写作深度指导 概要写作 单元话题 语篇展示 概要写作 The 'SmartFit' bracelet, a new wearable device, is set to revolutionize health and fitness monitoring. Developed by a team of engineers and scientists, it accurately tracks various biometric data such as heart rate, blood pressure, and sleep patterns. It also provides real-time feedback on activity levels and calorie expenditure. With GPS capabilities, users can track workouts and routes. The bracelet is designed to be comfortable, lightweight, and sleek, making it suitable for daily wear. Its innovative features have garnered attention from fitness enthusiasts and tech experts, and the developers are confident it will appeal to a wide audience and impact the wearable technology market.‌ 英语概要写作要求考生在理解原文的基础上，‌用较为简短的篇幅‌准确、‌完整地再现原文的主要信息。‌这要求考生具备良好的阅读理解、‌信息筛选和语言表达能力：（1）‌阅读理解‌：‌考生需要准确理解原文的主旨、‌细节以及作者的态度和观点。‌(2)‌信息筛选‌：‌从原文中提炼出关键信息，‌包括主要观点、‌重要事实、‌数据等。‌(3)‌语言表达‌：‌使用简洁、‌准确的语言对原文进行概括，‌避免使用原文中的具体细节和例子。‌(4)‌逻辑结构‌：‌保持原文的逻辑结构，‌确保概要的条理清晰。 考向分析与应对策略 英语概要写作的技巧主要包括以下几点：‌ ‌理解原文‌：‌首先需要仔细阅读原文，‌确保完全理解文章的主旨和要点。‌ ‌删除细节‌：‌概要写作要求简洁明了，‌因此需要删除原文中的具体细节和例子，‌只保留主要观点和信息。‌ ‌简化描述‌：‌使用概括性的词语和短语来替代原文中的具体描述，‌使概要更加精炼。‌ ‌句式变换‌：‌通过改变句式结构，‌如将复合句变为简单句，‌或使用不同的表达方式，‌来避免直接引用原文句子。‌ ‌逻辑连贯‌：‌在概要中保持信息的逻辑连贯性，‌使用适当的连接词和过渡句来组织内容。‌ ‌检查修改‌：‌完成初稿后，‌仔细检查并修改概要，‌确保没有遗漏重要信息，‌且语言表达准确流畅。‌ 　　概要写作是要求学生对一篇文章进行归纳概括, 用简洁的语言总结文章要点。所表达的信息要忠实于原文, 但不可原句照搬。 I.话题词汇 (1)目前: currently=nowadays=presently (2)常见的现象: a common phenomenon =It’s common for sb. to do. . . (3)与……有联系; 与……有关: be associated with, connect with (4)导致: contribute to, lead to, result in (5)解释: account for II. 话题句式 1．常用开头语 (1)议论文 The passage/author argues that ... 本文/作者主张…… The passage/author highlights the importance of ... 本文/作者强调了……的重要性。 The passage/author discusses the impact of ... 本文/作者讨论了……的影响。 The passage/author compares ... with ... 本文/作者比较了……与…… (2)说明文 According to the passage, we can know ... 根据文章我们可知…… This passage/article is mainly about ... 这篇文章主要是关于…… In the passage, the writer/author mainly tells us ... 在这篇文章中作者主要告诉我们…… A new study found ... 一个新的研究发现…… The purpose of the report is to show ... 这一报告的目的是表明…… (3)记叙文 The passage/story is mainly about ... 本文/这个故事主要是关于…… The author tells us a story about ... 作者告诉我们一个关于……的故事 The passage is a story about ... 本文是一个关于……的故事 2．要点连接词 (1)顺序 firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally首先，第二，第三，最后；to begin with, then, furthermore, finally首先，然后，其次，最后；to start with, next, in addition, finally首先，然后，其次，最后。 (2)并列 as well as也；not only ... but (also) ... 不仅……还……；including/included包括。 (3)对比 on the one hand ... on the other hand ... 一方面……另一方面……；for one thing ... for another ... 一方面……另一方面……；on the contrary与此相反；nevertheless然而；compared to与……相比；in contrast with与……形成对比；though/in spite of尽管。 (4)递进 even甚至；besides除了……之外(还)；what's more还有；moreover而且；furthermore此外；in addition另外；worse still＝what's worse＝to make matters worse更糟糕的是。 (5)例证 as a matter of fact/in fact 事实上；for example/for instance例如。 (6)强调 especially特别；indeed确实；at least至少；at most最多；not at all根本不；or rather更确切地说；particularly特别地。 (7)因果 thanks to多亏；as a result结果；because of/as a result of/on account of/due to因为；owing to多亏；for this reason由于这个原因。 (8)总结 in short总之；generally speaking一般来说；briefly/in brief简言之；to sum up＝to summarize＝in summary/to conclude总之。 III.模版框架 1．进行概要写作时要注意以下四点： (1)一般使用第三人称。 (2)不可加入自己的观点。 (3)一定不可对原文内容加以评论。 (4)一定不要引入与原文内容无关的信息。 2．概要写作步骤 在写概要时，要按照“六步法”的程序进行，具体操作方法如下： (1)Scan the passage—览全文，定体裁 (2)Underline the main points—划要点 (3)Miss the details—省细节 (4)Analyse the structure—析结构 (5)Restate the points—换表达 (6)Organize the main points into a passage—连全文 阅读下面短文, 根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。 　　Herbal medicine (草药), which has been used for medicinal purposes, is the use of plants to treat diseases. Many herbalists use the entire plant, from the flowers, stems, leaves, and roots, in the form of everything from teas to pills. These plants contain natural, chemical things that can treat the body for a variety of diseases—such as allergies, asthma, rheumatoid arthritis, migraine, chronic fatigue, and cancer, among others. 　　Nowadays an increasing number of people prefer to adopt these plants to treat their diseases because compared with chemical medicine, herbal medicine has its own advantages. Herbal medicine and remedies (治疗) are more effective than chemical medicine for certain diseases. The chemical medicine given by a chemist could have certain negative side effects. However, many of the herbal medicine and remedies do not have negative side effects. If any, they are softer than chemical medicine. Obesity is the cause of many of the health problems. Herbal medicine can help weight-loss more effectively and improve overall health. 　　However, the cure using herbal medicine and supplements (营养品) would take some time, and therefore people are supposed to possess enough patience. Worse still, herbal medicine contains a variety of ingredients (成分) and people have to be sure that their body agrees with the ingredients and that it is not allergic (过敏的). 　　When used correctly and directed by doctors, herbs can help treat a variety of diseases. But keep in mind that the herbal medicine industry is not regulated, so herbal products are often misleading and may contain additives (添加剂) and that are not listed on the label (标签). Some herbs may cause allergic reactions or interact with other drugs, and some are poisonous if used improperly or at high doses (剂量). Taking herbs on your own increases your risk. 【写作分析】 [结构梳理] Introduction→Paragraph 1. Definition Conclusion→ Paragraph 4. Advice [要点提炼] Paragraph 1. Herbal medicine is the use of the entire plants to treat a variety of diseases. Paragraph 2. Unlike chemical medicine, herbal medicine is more effective and has no or fewer negative side effects. Paragraph 3. However, herbal medicine also has disadvantages, such as time-consuming and possible allergy. Paragraph 4. People should use herbal medicine cautiously. [要点改写] Paragraph 1. Herbal medicine is a way of treating some diseases which uses entire plants containing powerful things in various forms.   Paragraph 2. Different from chemical medicine, herbal medicine is better in several ways such as its more effectiveness and fewer negative side effects.   Paragraph 3. Herbal medicine requires more time for recovery and tends to cause allergy as well.   Paragraph 4. People should use herb medicine with caution.   [衔接成篇] ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ [参考范文] 　　Herbal medicine is a way of treating some diseases which uses entire plants containing powerful things in various forms(要点1). Different from chemical medicine, herbal medicine is better in several ways such as its more effectiveness and fewer negative side effects(要点2). However, herbal medicine requires more time for recovery and tends to cause allergy as well(要点3). Therefore, people should use herb medicine with caution(要点4). 一、短语翻译 1. This case will have a positive effect on (对……有积极影响)judicial practice. 2. If I were you, I would spend more time on (花更多时间在)English. 3. There is nothing better than (没什么比……更好)to see smiling face of you. 4. When in doubt(有疑问), call the doctor. 5. Enough money allowed her to travel(允许她旅行) around the world. 6. The teacher as well as(和, 还有) his students visited the famous museum. 7. He fell asleep with the candle burning(蜡烛点着) . 8. You should reflect on(反省) your mistakes every day. 二、语篇翻译 （24-25高二上·全国·课后作业）短文汉译英 当你饿了的时候你喜欢去哪家餐馆？这条街上有各种各样（饮食风格）的餐馆，不同的餐馆满足几乎所有的口味。有些餐馆以美味中餐而闻名，有些以西餐而闻名，也有些以其当地特色而闻名。不管你喜欢哪一个，不管你喜欢什么，总会有一家很棒的，能够吸引你的餐馆。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考范文】 Which restaurant would you like to go when you feel hungry? There are various kinds of restaurants on this street, with different ones for almost every appetite. Some restaurants are famous for their tasty Chinese food, some for Western-style food, and others for their local specialities. Whichever and whatever you like, there is an incredible one that will appeal to you! 【试题分析】这是一篇说明文。文章主要介绍了一条美食街上的餐馆。 考查动词时态和固定句型。文段陈述客观事实，使用一般现在时；表示“你喜欢去哪家餐馆”应用which restaurant would you like to go，which引导特殊疑问句；表示“当你饿了的时候”应用when you feel hungry，when引导时间状语从句；表示“在这条街上”应用on this street；表示“有”应用there be，表示“各种各样（饮食风格）的餐馆”应用various kinds of restaurants，主语为复数名词，be动词用are；表示“不同的餐馆满足几乎所有的口味”应用with different ones for almost every appetite，此处为with的复合结构作状语；表示“有些餐馆”应用some restaurants；表示“以……著名”应用be famous for，主语为复数名词，be动词用are；表示“它们美味的中餐”应用their tasty Chinese food；表示“有些以西餐著名”应用some for Western-style food；表示“也有些以其当地特色而闻名”应用and others for their local specialities；表示“不管你喜欢哪一个，不管你喜欢什么”应用Whichever and whatever you like，whichever和whatever引导让步状语从句；表示“总会有一家很棒的，能够吸引你的餐馆”应用there is an incredible one that will appeal to you，that引导定语从句，修饰先行词one，that在从句中作主语，appeal to为固定搭配，意为“吸引”。故翻译成：Which restaurant would you like to go when you feel hungry? There are various kinds of restaurants on this street, with different ones for almost every appetite. Some restaurants are famous for their tasty Chinese food, some for Western-style food, and others for their local specialities. Whichever and whatever you like, there is an incredible one that will appeal to you! 三．书面表达 阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。 Bamboo is one of the world's most useful plants. For thousands of years bamboo has been used in many different ways—from food to medicine to clothing and, in small ways, as a building material. However, bamboo is not often used as a building material in the developed world. A professor at the University of Pittsburgh in Pennsylvania is trying to change that. The professor and his students are testing the strength of bamboo. They are testing its radial load, or how much pressure or weight it can take before breaking. Kent Harries is a professor at the University of Pittsburgh. Harries says that testing methods for bamboo need to be the same for all. They need to be standardized. Harries says bamboo is strong in nature. The strength of at least three species of bamboo is similar to steel. Besides its strength, Harries says that bamboo has other features that make it a great building material. He says it is resilient, meaning it keeps its shape and strength even under pressure. Bamboo also grows quickly. Bamboo that is suitable for construction needs much less resources than wood. The harvest cycle of bamboo is about 3 years. Softwoods such as cedar, pine and spruce have a harvest cycle of about 10 years. And hardwoods that come from flowering plants such as oak, maple and walnut need more than 30 years. Bamboo is widely used as food for panda bears. It is also used for flooring and window covers. However, for building, bamboo is not used much outside its native growing area. This is mostly because of its round shape. But there are other reasons too. People think that bamboo is a low­quality building material. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ [参考范文] Though bamboo has been used widely, it is seldom applied in construction, which a professor and his students want to change by researching bamboo's strength.(要点1) Firstly, bamboo is strong and resilient.(要点2) Besides, it grows fast and is environmentally­friendly.(要点3) However, bamboo is used less in construction, mainly because it is round and is considered of low quality.(要点4) [范文总评]　范文按照文章要点出现的先后顺序进行了很好地整理和写作，恰当运用同义词转换使文章高级感更强。 [亮点呈现] (1)文中首句Though bamboo has been used widely, it is seldom applied in construction, which a professor and his students want to change by researching bamboo's strength.使用了though引导的让步状语从句及which引导的非限制性定语从句，展现了作者高超的语言表达能力和总结能力。 (2)文中使用Firstly, Besides, However引出要点，使文章更有条理性。 (2018·浙江11月高考)阅读下面短文, 根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。 It’s a really good idea to visit colleges before you apply because their websites can all start to look and sound the same. Nothing will give you the sense of what it will actually be like to live on a college campus(校园) like visiting and seeing for yourself the dorms, classrooms and athletic equipment and, of course, the students. It seems a little crazy once senior year hits to find the time to visit college campuses, and it can also be pricey if the schools you are applying to happen to be more than a car ride away. But keep in mind that you are making a decision about the next four years of your life, and do all the research you can to make sure you are making the right one. There’s no excuse not to visit the schools in your local area. In fact, a lot of college applications even ask if you have visited campus, and obviously, if you live across the country that won’t be as much of a possibility, but if you live nearby, go check it out! If campus visits aren’t going to happen before you apply, at the very least you should find some time between applying and getting your acceptance letters to visit the schools you’d like to attend. It can save you a lot of heartache if you rule out now the things that you don’t like about certain campuses, things that you wouldn’t know unless you actually visit. Now, if time and money are making it impossible, then check out the online college fairs at College Week Live. It’s a chance to chat online with admissions officers, students, and college counselors(顾问), and it won’t cost you a penny! You can register for its online college fair at collegeweeklive. com. While visiting an online college fair can’t take the place of an actual campus visit, it can be a very useful tool that along with all your other research will help you make an informed decision about which colleges or universities you’d like to attend. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【写作分析】 Step 1　语篇梳理 1. 通读全文, 确定体裁, 明确主题 体裁: 议论文 主题: 探访心仪大学 2. 定位主题句和关键词, 变换表达方式 ①It’s a really good idea to visit colleges before you apply. (词性转换) It’s really worthwhile to pay a visit to your desired colleges personally before applying.   ②There’s no excuse not to visit the schools in your local area. (正话反说) Undoubtedly, you should visit your local colleges.   ③If campus visits aren’t going to happen before you apply, at the very least you should find some time between applying and getting your acceptance letters to visit the schools you’d like to attend. (同义转换) At least, you should visit the school you want to attend in advance.   ④Now, if time and money are making it impossible, then check out the online college fairs at College Week Live. (句式转换, 动名词作主语) If you are short of money and time, visiting the online college fairs is a good alternative to help you better understand schools.   Step 2　衔接成篇 It’s really worthwhile to pay a visit to your desired colleges personally before applying. Undoubtedly, you should visit your local colleges, which may be included in applications. At least, you should visit the school you want to attend and know its real conditions in advance. If you are short of money and time, visiting the online college fairs is a good alternative to help you better understand schools. ( 1 )原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$