读后续写 小熊卡门的全国之旅：梦想与勇气的传递 讲义-江苏省苏州市2024-2025学年高三上学期初考试英语试题

读后续写原材料如下： After seeing a program on television about a reporter who had hitchhiked (搭顺风车)across America. My ten-year-old daughter, Ashley said,“I wish I could do that!” Ashley was diagnosed with cancer three years earlier. Although she is cancer-free now after a surgery, numerous tests and the scary procedure of treatments had made her unwilling to risk outside her known world. So I wanted to encourage that spirit of adventure in her.  I began trying to think of a way for her to “hitchhike” across the country without leaving home. That’s how Carmen was born. Carmen is a teddy bear Ashley had received while she was in the hospital. We decided to send Carmen in Ashley’s place. So we purchased a notebook as a travel journal and a bag for Carmen to travel in, together with a letter written by Ashley: My name is Ashley and I am ten years old. This is my bear, Carmen. I got her when I was in the hospital. She wants to go to all fifty states just like the reporter guy on TV who hitchhiked across America. But she can’t walk, so will you please help her? Could you let her ride with you and keep her safe, as well as tell her about yourself so she won’t be lonely? Please write a little about yourself in the journal and then introduce her to someone new. She wants to meet as many new people as she can. I think by about September she will be ready to come home. In her coin purse is $5.00. Please put her in a box with her journal and send her to Sac City State Bank. Attention: Caretaker of Carmen Bear. If you would like to hear from Carmen after she gets home, please leave your address in her notebook and we will send you a note and let you know when she gets home safely. Thank you for taking care of Carmen, and thank you for taking the time to write in her notebook. Your new friends, Carmen and Ashley 续写第一段第一句：We then took Carmen to our family friend Phil, a highway patrol officer(巡警). 续写第二段第一句：Then one day in September the long-expected package with Carmen inside finally arrived.  概括下原材料： Ashley癌症康复后，由于治疗过程，她不愿冒险探索外界的世界。不过有一次阿什莉看到记者搭顺风车穿越美国的电视节目，也希望做同样的事。 她的母亲为了鼓励她，就想了一个注意：让阿什莉的玩具熊 “Carmen”代替她旅行。 她们准备了一本旅行日记和一个背包，把卡门寄出去，跟随好心人一起“搭车”去不同的地方。阿什莉还写了封信，请接收卡门的人照顾它，并在日记中写下自己的故事，最后再把卡门寄回给她。 先把Carmen给了邻居警察，， 本篇的要点： 1.矛盾、问题： （1）Asheley不愿意冒险探索外界世界 （2）让Carmen 完成旅行 2.Phil 不可能带这个Carmen去全国旅行，因为她是巡警 3.Phil 必须带Carmen 在这个城镇里旅行 4.Phil 必须要把Carmen给去下一个城市的陌生人，不然无法完成 “让Carmen全国旅行”的任务 5.第一段从Phil把Carmen传递出去开始，写作视角就不是“we”第一人称了，而是上帝视角来看传递Carmen的人是怎么带着Carmen去旅行的 6.需要构想：Phil 是怎么把Carmen给去下一个城市的陌生人的？ 7.需要构想：下一个陌生人了解这个stoyr后又是什么反应？ 8.需要构想：如何在第一段结尾，呼应第二段开头的“long-expected package”，这说明第一段结尾一定要去描写Ashley期盼、急切的心情 9.需要构想：Carmen和notebook 回来之后，Ashley发现notebook里有什么？ 10.需要构想：结尾怎么呼应主要矛盾，升华主题？ 背景知识积累对英语写作有很大影响 因为Notebook寄回来之后，Ashley迫不及待地打开，一定会看到 “美国全国旅行中，各个陌生人拍的各种景观和城市的照片”，如果考生不知道美国的地理特征，就不能把第二段写得十分生动 下水文： 第一段：We then took Carmen to our family friend Phil, a highway patrol officer(巡警). 听到我们的计划，Phil觉得很有创意，激动地表示愿意成为开启这个伟大计划的人。（从这里开始切换到上帝视角）接下来的两天里，她随后带着Carmen去巡逻，两天之后逛完了整个城镇大街小巷。第三天，她觉得应该把Carmen送去下一个地方了，于是她在高速公路检查站执行任务时，向一个又一个挂着其它州车牌的汽车车主询问对方是否愿意带Carmen去旅行，然后把她传递给下一个人。终于，有人接受了这个任务。对于Ashley来说，整个夏天都充满着喜悦和期待，她不知道这个计划是否会成功。 （需要注意巡警的职责，巡警拦人这里要写的合理，不能说巡警去高速公路收费站去拦人，可以说去检查站） Hearing our plan, Phil though it very creative and eagerly expressed her willingness to be the one who starts this project. Over the next two days, she took Carmen on patrol, travelling every place in the town. On the third day, she felt it was time to send Carmen to the next city or town. When working at the highway checkpoint, she asked one driver after another, whose cars had license plates from other states, whether they were willing to take Carmen on a journey and pass her to the next person. Finally, a man accepted the task. For Ashley, the entire summer was filled with joy and expectation. She didn’t know if this plan would succeed. 第二段：Then one day in September the long-expected package with Carmen inside finally arrived.  （第二段视角又切回主人公）我和Ashley迫不及待打开盒子，拿出Carmen和notbook，发现Carmen经过长途旅行之后依旧保持完好，显然得到了很好照顾。打开notebook，一张又一张各地景色的照片呈现在眼前：从中央大平原，到大峡谷；从尼加拉瓜大瀑布，到田纳西河；从西部农庄，到亚特兰大的NBA比赛现场。Carmen的经历真是精彩。几乎每一张照片下方，都有地址，看来我们接下来有的忙了。Ashley很兴奋，她说她她要去出去旅行，走Carmen走过的路。看着阿什莉兴奋的样子，我心中充满了欣慰，心想我的计划终于成功了，这个小女孩在经历了那么多的痛苦后，终于重新找回了对生活的期待和对世界的好奇。（生化，呼应开头的矛盾） Ashley and I opened the box, took out Carmen and the notebook, and foundout that despite the long journey, Carmen was still in a good condition. This indicated that he was taken care of. When we opened the notebook, picture after picture was shown before us, recording different landscapes we had been longing to go: from the Central Plain to the Grand Canyon; from Niagara Falls to the Tennessee River; from western farms to the NBA game in Atlanta. Carmen’s experiences were really amazing. Almost every photo had an address below it, which meant we would be busy soon. Ashley was excited and said she wanted to travel and follow Carmen’s path. Seeing Ashley’s excitement, my heart was filled with relief. I was gld that my plan finally worked. After everything she had been through, this little girl had finally regained her enthusiasm for life and curiosity about the world. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$