Unit 3 Section 读后续写微讲堂(课件PPT)-【状元桥·优质课堂】2024-2025学年高中英语必修第二册（人教版2019）

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The envelope was so worn that I could read only the return address on it.I opened the letter, hoping to find some clues.I found the letter was written almost 60 years ago.It was written in a beautiful handwriting with a little flower in the left-hand corner.It was to a man named Michael Goldstein, saying that the writer couldn't see him any more because her mother didn't allow it.Even so, she wrote that she would always love him. It was signed, Hannah.I felt sad because I couldn't get useful information.After searching for the return address on the envelope, I finally found that Hannah was now in a nursing home. I drove over to the nursing home.A nurse and a guard greeted me at the door.Knowing my purpose, the nurse led me to the third floor.In the day room, she introduced me to Hannah. She was a sweet, silver-haired old lady.I told her about the wallet and showed her the letter.The second she saw the envelope with that little flower, she took a deep breath and said, “Young man, this letter was the last contact I had with Michael.He was so handsome.He looked like Sean Connery, the actor.I loved him very much.But I was only 16 then.My mother felt I was too young.If you can find him, tell him I think of him often.And…I still love him.” I said goodbye to her and took the elevator to the first floor.As I stood by the door, the guard asked me if I got any clue from Hannah.I told him she gave me a story. 注意：续写词数应为150左右。 Paragraph 1： I took out the wallet, which was a simple brown leather case with red lacing on the side._______________________ __________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： On the eighth floor, I saw a man reading a book in the day room, who happened to be Michael Goldstein. _________ __________________________________________________ [语篇解读] 该短文主要讲述了“我”意外捡到一个看起来很古老但是保存完好的钱包，在钱包里面还发现了一封60年前的信，是一位叫Hannah的女子写给她的恋人Michael的一封情书。在这封信里Hannah伤心无奈地告诉Michael 虽然她一直爱着他，可是她的母亲反对他们的交往。出于对这个未知的久远爱情故事的好奇，“我”尝试各种方法找到了女主人公Hannah。Hannah 向“我”讲述了他们的爱情故事，并告诉“我”自己至今还深爱着Michael。如果“我”有机会见到Michael，请转达她一直 深藏于心的爱。而“我”带着女主人公提供的线索去找Michael。根据所给续写内容的段首句，“我”在一楼和保安展开对话及“我”在休息室里见到了钱包的主人(Michael Goldstein)。所以故事的内容应该是“我”如何找到Michael(Para.1)，并将钱包和Hannah 的心意转给Michael (Para.2)。而结尾可以停止于Michael 听到Hannah心意后的反应，也可停于二人相见后的情景。通过这件事，这篇文章旨在传达不随时光磨灭的爱情。接下来将举例展示这篇文章的多种结尾方式。 一、哲理式结尾 哲理式结尾往往总结出文章的中心思想，并用客观语言表述，它能使作文具有一定的思想含量，能给读者送去一份宝贵的精神财富。它可以通过以小见大、从物到人、由事及理、从点到面、由一及众等方式升华文章主题。 学生案例1 请阅读下面这篇学生作文，思考下文的结尾是否恰当，并说明理由。 Para.1：I took out the wallet, which was a simple brown leather case with red lacing on the side.The instant he saw the wallet, the guard yelled out, “I'd seen it before！” Hearing this, I jerked my head to him, mouth open.Excitement and rejoicing took my mind.He told me that there was no other man owning a red lacing wallet and that he, Michael, happened to live on the eighth floor.Shocked and thrilled, I gave a short gasp and dashed back to the elevator, heart racing widely. Para.2：On the eighth floor, I saw a man reading a book in the day room, who happened to be Michael Goldstein.When I showed him the wallet, his gloomy eyes turned bright.“Hannah still loves you.” I took a deep breath and said, word by word.His voice abandoned him.He seemed to grope for words but failed.He took out the envelope, stared at the familiar handwriting, stroked the wrinkles of it and murmured, “I love her, too.” He paced out with a waddle and lost in my sight.Love may be late, but never absent. [习作品析] 该篇文章的结尾处理得很好，通过哲理性的语言结尾点明中心，升华主题。这个续写段落在构思情节时，步步推进，环环相扣。特别是首句The instant he saw the wallet, the guard yelled out, “I'd seen it before！”。作者在充分阅读完原文之后，注意到原文最后一段给续写内容设定了写作的场景，即在nursing home的一楼楼梯出口保安询问“我”是否有任何收获。所以，“我”拿出钱包是为了给保安看，作者很巧妙的让保安接话，然后从保安口 中得知很凑巧的在这个养老院里，有一个叫作Michael Goldstein 的老人家，他也有个镶着红色蕾丝边的钱包。由此，“我”带着希望和惊讶，冲到了八楼，希望能见到这个让Hannah爱了60年的男子并能把这份深藏的爱传递给他。 到了八楼，当他看见钱包时，作者对他进行了深刻的肖像描写及一系列的动作描写，如His gloomy eyes turned bright.His voice abandoned him，特别是当他颤抖地拿起信时的四个动作took out, stared at, stroked和murmured。这一 系列动作将男主人公的爱展露无遗。特别是stroke(抚平、抚摸)，这个动作透露出了太多的隐藏信息，不仅是抚平信，也是抚平内心的焦虑，更是抚平过往。正如作者所言，爱，会迟到，但永远不会缺席。 上述续写段落使用由事及理的方法，先讲述一件具体的事件，在结尾处揭示这件事蕴含着的深刻哲理——爱，会迟到，但永远不会缺席。事件是哲理的基石和依托，哲理则是事件内核的深化和升华。结尾的哲理虽然占的篇幅极小，但它常常会使一件平凡小事变得耐人寻味，熠熠生辉，起到画龙点睛的效果。 二、以景结情 以景结情是诗歌绝句的一种技巧，也是借景抒情的方式之一。它是指诗歌在议论或抒情的过程中，戛然而止，转为写景，以景代情，结束诗句，使得诗歌“此时无情胜有情”。在记叙文读后续写中，使用以景结情，同样能寓情于景，达到不言情而情无限、言有尽而意无穷的效果。 学生案例2 请阅读下面这篇学生作文，思考下文的结尾是否恰当，并说明理由。 Para.1：I took out the wallet, which was a simple brown leather case with red lacing on the side.Gazing at the wallet, uncertainly the guard told me that it might belong to Michael Goldstein.Surprise descending on me, I gaped at him, nervously asking where he was.At the moment he pointed at a room on the eighth floor, I dragged myself ahead with my heart beating wildly, even without leaving a “Thank you” . Para.2：On the eighth floor, I saw a man reading a book in the day room, who happened to be Michael Goldstein. Cautiously, I slipped approaching him, slowly passing the wallet, breaking the message from Hannah.For a long time, he just stared at the blank before him, merrily, sinking in sweet memories in the past.Then, something like a smile wrinkled the corners of his eyes.Old as he was, he stood up and stepped downstairs swiftly, followed by me.In Hannah's room, they hugged, tightly.Balmy breeze wiping my face, a sudden warmth just hit me. [习作品析] 该篇文章的结尾以景结情，情境交融，营造了和谐温暖的画面，令人回味。该续写片段衔接设计得当，从保安那里得知他想找的人可能在八楼，所以作者甚至来不及道声谢就急匆匆跑向八楼。在八楼，他如愿见到了Michael并且把这个催人泪下的消息告诉了他。作者用了一个倒装句Old as he was, he stood up and stepped downstairs swiftly, followed by me.来表现Michael迫不及待的心情。当他们相拥的那一刻，微风拂面，温暖袭人是再自然不过的事了。这个结尾给人一种水到渠成的感觉，也让人明白——爱，温暖人心。 该续写结尾将人物感动的心情与微风拂面的环境相结合，同时与主题(爱)相称，融情于景，加深读者感受。但以景结情时一定要注意所写环境与人物心情相照应，避免空泛的景物描写。 三、自然结尾 自然结尾是顺着文中所叙之事的自然发展，以它的必然结果作结尾，没有套话，没有空话，简单、自然，可使文章的结构显得十分完整。作为读后续写的文章，常常不一定含有某种深刻的道理，这时只要将故事补充完整就足够，因此自然结尾法是续写故事中最常见的结尾方式。 学生案例3 请阅读下面这篇学生作文，思考下文的结尾是否恰当，并说明理由。 Para.1：I took out the wallet, which was a simple brown leather case with red lacing on the side.The guard burst into excitement, declaring it belonged to Michael, who lived on the eighth floor.I thanked him genuinely and dashed to the elevator.I couldn't help thinking of their dust-laden but deep love.Unfolded before me was a breathtaking scene when they met again.A warm glow spreading over my body, a smile lifted the corner of my mouth. Para.2：On the eighth floor, I saw a man reading a book in the day room, who happened to be Michael Goldstein.After telling the story and showing him the wallet, I was thrilled to see that his eyes became as wide as the sea, his throat shivered and his face twitched with complex emotions.He was deep in thought and took a deep breath.Then he asked me to hide the truth to Hannah.Frozen on the ground, I saw him lifting himself up slowly, turning around, sighing deeply.Then he signed to me with his hand, stiffly. [习作品析] 该篇文章的结尾恰当，顺其自然。该续写片段的线索也是从保安处得知。但作者没有对保安多作描写，而是围绕自己的心理活动展开写作。作者期待着Hannah 和Michael见面时的场景，一想到这份dust-laden but deep love (尘封已久但却深沉的爱)作者的心就被温暖包围着(A warm glow spreading over my body, a smile lifted the corner of my mouth.)。到了八楼，作者满心欢喜地告知Michael一切，谁料到Michael在经历一阵内心纠结之后，深叹了一口气，对“我”挥一挥手。故事在这里停止，因为主要人物Michael对本次事件的反应已完成。 此外，作者还引用了都德的《最后一课》的结尾——he signed to me with his hand，老师在最后一节法语课上，和学生挥一挥手，心中纵使有再多的无奈，也已经来不及了，更是别有心意地加了一个副词stiffly，即僵硬地朝我挥了挥手，这一挥手，表现了Michael的无奈，更告诉我们往事已成追忆，剩余任由读者自己去想象，把自然结尾的作用发挥得淋漓尽致。 四、佳句欣赏 (一)哲理式结尾 1．Shy and silent as Abe was, he gave his mum a big hug and whispered, “I love you！” Love may be silent, but it was always there. 2．I believe God is glad to help someone who wants to help himself. 3．Life is full of dilemmas and conflicts, but we should smile and never give up, just like Kelly. 4．Many years has gone, but when I looked back to that day, I was grateful for the lesson in forgiveness that she taught me. 5．The thankful words I heard from the boy and the girl after they recovered from the hospital made one thing strike my 19-year-old mind—rose given, fragrance in hand! 6．We're supposed to take charge of lives, not only ours, but also others', no matter where and when. (二)以景结情 1．The wind murmured in the trees and the sunlight flooded in through the window, warming the whole room, as if the freezing ice was all melted. 2．In the heavy snow, passion and love burnt as they hugged and smiled. 3．No matter how cold the winter was, all that they could feel now was the surpassing warmth. 4．Everything went smoothly and quietly, so in the dark night, a boy was reading while his mother was eating.Though it was snowing heavily outside, it just couldn't stop the warmth filling up the whole room. 5．I believe in full blossom, Grandma's sitting peacefully in the sun, every flower carrying her previous hope, with Grandpa beside her, giggling like a child. 6．A pair of slim hands giving him a hug, he rested in his father's warm embrace.Outside, the crow flew away, and the rays of the setting sun shone slantwise through the trees onto the window. (三)自然结尾 1．Emma's eyes began to fill with excitement, like the light in the breaking dawn, with strange radiations of joy.She hugged and kissed her mum again and again, whispering to her, “I love you.” 2．Satisfied, Mum nodded at Emma, with a joy bubbling from her heart. 3．The smile bubbled from heart showed Mum's satisfaction. 4．Satisfied, Emma ate the cake, not only because of the surprise, but also for the pride bubbling from the bottom of her heart. 5．At that moment, with tears, I hugged her tightly, saying “thank you” for her forgiveness. 6．Tears of gratitude pouring down Steven's cheeks, he did nothing but bowed to Mr Rowe and addressed him, “Thank you, my life guide.” $$