Week 15 应用文写作(观点类)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

155 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）&读后续写 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）& 读后续写 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） How to Write an Opinion Essay Opinion essays are not just about stating your viewpoint, and they are about convincing others to see things from your perspective. Here are some tips for you to write an essay. Step 1. Plan Your Essay Make an outline with an introduction, a few body sentences, and a conclusion. Your thesis statement should be included in the introduction, which should also catch the reader’s interest and include details on the subject. Your arguments should be presented in the body paragraphs along with evidence to back them up, and your thesis statement should be restated in the conclusion. Step 2. Write the Introduction and Body Paragraphs Use an attention-grabbing opening line to draw the reader into your essay. Give a few facts on the subject before restating your thesis. Your essay’s body should contain numerous sections containing the points you made and the proof you used to support them. Your point should be clearly stated in the topic phrase of each paragraph, which should be followed by examples and supporting data. Make sure the sources of your proof are reliable and credible. Step 3. Write the Conclusion Stress your thesis argument and summarize your points in your conclusion. Finish by posing a challenging question or a call to action. Sample Essay: Advantages and Disadvantages of Artificial Intelligence With the development of technology, artificial intelligence has gradually entered our life. It has brought great convenience to our life. Therefore, some people want to develop it more vigorously and make our life fully intelligent. They think that in the future, all things will be handed over to intelligent robots, which will make our life easier. But some people worry about the development of artificial intelligence. They think that it will surpass human intelligence. Then, it will replace human beings. At that time, human beings will suffer for its control. Although the debate on AI is often centered around the question of whether it will replace humans or not, I believe that the focus should instead be on how humans and AI can cooperate in order to benefit each other. With appropriate safeguards and regulations in place, AI can help us to become more productive and efficient, and contribute to a better future. 美文撷英 ① ChatGPT is a revolutionary technology that enables users to interact with natural language processing (NLP) systems in a conversational manner. ② It is a powerful tool for developers, businesses, and customers alike, as it can automate conversations with customers and provide instant feedback. ③ However, the optimistic view is also accepted by many people, who fully believe that... ④ To conclude, when used responsibly, AI can have positive effects on society and the economy, ... 新高中英语写作满分素材 156 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2021 年上海卷 ) 假设你是中华中学学 生姚平，最近参加了一项 研究性学习调研，课题为 “父母是否以子女为荣”。 通过调研你校学生及其父 母，结果发现双方对此问题 的看法有差异 ( 数据如图所 示) 。根据图表写一份报告， 在报告中，你必须： 1. 描述调研数据； 2. 分析可能导致这一 结果的原因。 父母：我以孩子为荣 孩子：父母以我为荣 0% 20% 40% 60% 60% 80% 80% 100% ( 通过介绍数据图引出话题 ) Recently, we made a survey about whether the parents agree that they are proud of their children. The result shows that 80% of parents are proud of their children while only 60% of children hold the same opinion. According to the survey, we can conclude that the number of parents who approved of the idea is 20% more than that of children. 定语从句发现数据差异 ( 分析研究结果和原因 ) There seem to be two causes as we tried to figure out what led to this subtle difference. First, conservative Chinese parents are never accustomed to conveying directly how much they are proud of their children. This tendency to conceal feelings hardly helps children develop a strong sense of self- confidence. Second, the current education system excessively emphasizes the value of academic performance, thus forcing children to extensively believe that only by achieving excellent scores can they make their parents proud. 非谓语动词和倒 装 句 This bias unfairly undermines the significance of talents for art and sports, which easily frustrates children and renders them more likely to underestimate themselves. ( 作总结 ) Without the genuine encouragement from parents and the reversal of exam-oriented educational methods, a kid would never end up with a positive grown-up. 虚拟语气 你班最近举行了一次 题为 “海洋探索”的班会。 请根据下表内容给学校英 语报写一篇报道，介绍讨 论情况并发表你的观点。 赞同 理由 1. 帮助我们更好了 解海洋生态系统； 2. 找到新资源。 反对 理由 1. 已造成海洋污染； 2. 过度探索将带来 持续的不良后果。 你的 观点 …… 注意：1.词数 80左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 参考词汇：生态系统 ecosystem Recently, we have had a class meeting ① ( 关于海洋 探险 ). Students have ② ( 不同观点 ) about it. Some think it important to explore the sea because we ③ ( 能 更 好 了 解 ) the marine ecosystem. Secondly, they believe sea exploration ④ ( 使发现新资源成为可能 ). However, others view that it has caused serious pollution. Besides, they believe the over-exploration of the sea will lead to ⑤ ( 接连不断的坏结果 ). In my opinion, it’s necessary to carry on sea exploration and we must ⑥ ( 保持平衡 ) between sea exploration and sea conservation. 观点类 一般现在时 第一人称、第三人称 正反对比花开两朵 各表一枝加己观点 论点论据逻辑性强 论据之间有层次性 Para. 1 引出要议论的话题 Para. 2 列举正反方观点及其理由 Para. 3 表明自己的观点 时态 人称 特点 结构 观点类 157 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）&读后续写 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① believe/think 认为 ② belief/view/perspective 信念 / 观点 ③ personally 就我个人而言 短语： ① in my opinion/view 在我看来 ② about/on/concerning the topic... 关于……这 个话题 ③ from my point of view 从我的角度来看 ④ in conclusion/in a word... 总而言之 吸睛开头句 ① Students have taken/adopted different attitudes towards... 学生们对……采取了不 同的态度…… ② A heated/lively/intense debate has been held/ taken place. 进行了激烈的辩论。 ③ There are different opinions among students concerning this topic. 学生们对这个话题有 不同的看法。 ④ Opinions vary on this topic/issue/matter./ Opinions fall mainly into two groups. 对 这 个话题 / 事项 / 问题的意见各不相同。/ 意 见主要分为两类。 ⑤ Different people, however, have different opinions/think quite differently on this matter. 然而，不同的人对这件事有不同的 看法 / 想法。 高光篇中句 ① ... percent of the students think it necessary to .../... students are in favor of... ……% 的 学 生认为有必要……/……学生们赞成…… ② Students who are for... account for... percent of all the students in our class. 赞成……的学生 占所有学生的……%。 ③ ... percent of the students support the idea of ..., arguing that ... ……%的学生支持……， 认为…… ④ However, other students don’t agree with them/raise questions about it. 然而，其他学 生不同意他们的观点 / 对此提出疑问。 ⑤ On the contrary, the rest think..., saying/ claiming that... 相反，其他人认为 ……， 说 / 声称 …… ⑥ Others argue that... In their opinion, ... 其他 人则认为……在他们看来…… 精彩结尾句 ① As far as I am concerned, I am for/in favor of the first view. 就我而言，我赞成第一种观点。 ② From my point of view, it would be wise to... 在我看来，明智的做法是…… ③ A f t e r w e i g h i n g t h e a d v a n t a g e s a n d disadvantages of..., I... 在权衡了……的优缺 点之后，我…… ④ When it comes to me, ... 说到我…… 新高中英语写作满分素材 158 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 15：主题升华 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一个完整的故事。 Every early morning Gleen would run to school to start the fire and warm the room before his teacher and classmates arrived. Their little schoolhouse was heated by an old-fashioned coal stove in winter. One chilly morning, the teacher and students arrived, only to find the schoolhouse in flames. Gleen was dragged out of the flaming building, unconscious. The lower half of his body was badly burned and he was immediately sent to a nearby hospital. From his bed, Gleen faintly heard the doctor talking to his parents. “He could hardly survive,” the doctor said in a low voice, “for the terrible fire had destroyed the lower half of his body.” “I don’t want to die, Mum.” Gleen told his mother. He was determined to survive. To the doctor’s amazement, he did survive. When the serious danger was past, he again heard the doctor and his parents speaking quietly. “He was bound to be disabled for life,” the doctor whispered, “since the fire had destroyed so much flesh in the lower part of his body. He can’t walk like a normal person.” “I will walk, Dad.” Gleen told his father. Once more, the brave boy made up his mind. He would not be disabled. But unfortunately, he has no feeling from the waist down. His thin legs just hung there, lifeless. Ultimately, he was discharged from the hospital. Back home, Gleen’s mother would squeeze and rub his little legs every day, hoping to help them recover, but it made little difference. He was either in bed or attached to a wheelchair. Yet his determination that he would walk never faded. Instead, he kept thinking about how to make himself stand up and walk again. On a lovely summer day, as usual, Gleen was wheeled out into the yard for some fresh air, where his father had just built a fence by driving the stakes( 木 桩 ) into the grassland. Sitting in the wheelchair, Gleen was staring at the fence around the yard. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已 为你写好。 Paragraph 1: It occurred to him that he could make the most of the fence. Paragraph 2: After that, Gleen began to do this every day until he made a flat path beside the fence. 好题探究 最佳素材 升华主题是为了扩大作品所叙事件的意义、提高主题的容量 , 使文章的意旨能够进入 一个更加开阔、更加高远的境界的手段和过程。读后续写主题的升华一般有以下几种方法： “感恩戴德”法 在续写收尾时，通过对文章中“正向的部分”( 好的经历、对自己有帮助的人等 ) 表达感谢， 领悟出人生哲理，从而拔高主旨。 “核心事件”法 抓住续写叙述的核心事件，并对其剖析，提炼出文章主旨。 “借物喻人”法 通过化用文章中重要的意象来指代主人公，从而深化主题。 “感慨变化”法 读后续写中经常会以主人公的变化 ( 性格、对于他人的评价等 ) 为载体，对于这种变化的感 慨有助于学生深化文章的主旨。 “时空延展”法 事件发生一段时间后回顾事件，刻画此次事件对自己产生的影响，从而对整个事件的意义有 所升华。 “遗憾释怀”法 一般针对那些以主人公的遗憾开篇的文章，通过续写的结尾帮助主人公将遗憾化解来升华 主旨。 159 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）&读后续写 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 男孩 Gleen 因在大火中身受重伤 , 一度被医生断定无法存活。他凭借着自己坚定的意志 力存活了下来，但失去了行走的能力。尽管如此，他依然坚信自己能再度站起来并一直在想 办法实现目标。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1) Gleen would run to school to make a fire to warm the room as before. P Plot (Para. 5—6) Back home Gleen’s mom tried to help him practise to recover. On a lovely summer day... T Theme (Para. 2) The schoolhouse caught fire, making Gleen in dangerous situation. E Emotion (Para. 3—4) Gleen was determined to live on despite his severe health state. 三个基础（SUM） ★语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第三人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与自我”—— 挑战自我 ★主角：Gleen, his mother, his father ★Gleen survived from a fire but he may die from the damage. ★He was a determined boy and his parents tried to help him recover. ★Figure out how would Gleen stand up. Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 首尾呼应水到渠成 尝试利用篱笆行走 但是还是倒在地上 (要点�) 竭尽全力独自站起 (要点�) 沿篱笆走父母泪目 (要点�) 一直练走妈妈也帮忙 (要点�) 持之以恒终于能站起 (要点�) 由死到生再由走到跑 他诠释一切皆有可能 (要点�) make the most of the fence made a flat path do this every day 新高中英语写作满分素材 160 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① 与段首句衔接紧 密，说明他想到 了 利 用 篱 笆， 使 用 了“ 介 词 +which”的方式 引导非限制性定 语从句。 ② 使用现在分词作 状语表示方式。 ③ 使用现在分词作 状语表示方式， 生动描述锻炼的 场景。 ④ 描述孩子对父母 的承诺，使用独 立主格结构表达 决心。 ⑤ 使 用 while 连 接 的两个并列分句 介绍了孩子和母 亲 共 同 付 出 的 努力。 ⑥ 这是一个主从复 合句，as 引导时 间状语从句，主 句中有四个不定 式作后置定语， 表明他循序渐进 恢复的过程。 ⑦ 使用定语从句解 释这个男孩所经 历的一切，主句 表述升华主题。 Paragraph 1: It occurred to him that he could make the most of the fence. aHe had his mother wheeled him to the fence, beside which he threw himself onto the grass from the chair. bThen, using all his strength, he struggled to raise himself up by holding on to the fence. cThen, stake by stake, he began moving himself forward along the fence, dragging his legs behind. d“Mum, Dad, I will make it. ” Gleen smiled at his parents, his eyes full of determination. Paragraph 2: After that, Gleen began to do this every day until he made a flat path beside the fence. eHe kept practicing standing up and walking with the help of the fence while his mother kept squeezing and rubbing his legs every day. fAs time went by, with his mother’s daily massages and his persistence, he did regain the ability to first stand up by himself, then to walk unsteadily, then to walk by himself, and finally to run. gGleen, the boy who was never expected to survive, walk or run, proved that nothing is impossible to a willing heart. (151 words) 161 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）&读后续写 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 观点类 Writing 1 假定你是李华，你们班同学了解到最新的人工智能技术 ChatGPT 拥有强大的即时生成答 案能力，因此展开了一场题为“人工智能 (artificial intelligence) 是否能替代教师”的辩论。请 你为班级 English Corner 写一篇文章，表达你的看法，要点如下： 1. 辩论主题； 2. 你的观点； 3. 你的理由。 注意：1. 词数 120 左右； 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Will Artificial Intelligence Replace Teachers? （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 假定你是李华，最近你们班进行了一次主题为 “保护文化遗产是否很重要”的激烈讨论。 请你向你校英文报投稿，向大家介绍讨论结果和情况，并谈谈你自己的看法，内容包括： 1. 学生观点：80% 认为很重要，20% 认为不重要； 2. 你的看法和理由。 注意： 1. 词数 100 左右； 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） 新高中英语写作满分素材 162 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 (2023 届山东青岛一模 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Dora is a seven-year-old girl. One day, when she visited Alice’s house she saw a beautiful bird in a cage on the balcony of the house. Alice told her it was her new pet. “How beautiful it is!” said Dora. “I also want to have such a bird as my pet.” That day when Dora returned home, she told her mother about Alice’s bird. Then she asked, “Mom, can I also get a bird?” “Of course, you can,” said her mother. “But you need to wait because I’ve no time to visit a pet store these days.” Dora agreed. One day, when Dora was back home from school, she saw a cage in the living room. In the cage was a beautiful blue bird. Her mother was standing next to the cage, smiling. “Oh, a bird!” Dora shouted happily. She ran to it and looked at it happily. “It’s a birthday gift for you,” said her mother. “Thank you, Mom. I love it so much!” said Dora excitedly. The following day, Dora invited her friends to come over to see her bird. All of her friends said it was a really beautiful bird and Dora was very glad to hear that. She and her friends played with the bird for a long time that day. Her friends all wished they could have such a bird as their pet. Sadly, a few weeks later Dora became sick. The doctor told her parents that she got the flu and had to stay at home. In order not to make her friends sick, her parents asked her friends not to come to play with her. Dora felt very sad. How she wished her friends would come and visit her! But she knew her parents were right. She’d better stay alone. Since Dora had no one to play with, she could only play with her bird. However, she felt that her bird didn’t seem to be happy either. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Dora watched her bird in silence. Paragraph 2: She decided to let go of the bird. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 163 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）&读后续写 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 (2023 届江苏省苏锡常镇四市高三下学期 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 On a mid-September afternoon, Sista and Rafi were racing each other on the mountainside. The girls laughed wildly and stopped for a rest in the shade of a tree. “Now, I’m hungry,” Sista said. “Yeah. I could really go for a jobo( 黄酸枣 ). I love the sweet- and-sour taste!” Rafi said, licking her lips. “I know where there’s a great jobo tree,” Sista said. “It belongs to that lady who lives in the little house by the hill. I heard she’s severe, but sometimes she gives fruit in return for an errand( 差事 ).” They decided to give it a shot. Rafi’s heart pounded as Sista knocked on the door. An elderly woman answered. “Yes?” the lady asked, squinting( 眯 着 眼 看 ) at the girls. Rafi gasped, unable to speak. “We heard...” said Sista, her voice shaky, “that you give jobos in payment for running an errand.” The lady raised one eyebrow. “Ah, yes. Payment.” She clicked her tongue. “Nothing is free, eh?” The lady led the girls into kitchen, where the smell of warm bread filled the air. She grabbed two baskets, one large and one small, “Go fill these with jobos. Come right back.” The girls raced up the hill to the tree and picked the ripest jobos. The moment they returned to the house, the lady handed them a bag filled with warm bread. “Take this bag and the large basket of jobos to the Gomez family. Do you know them?” The girls nodded. “Good. And ask them for the payment. Mrs. Gomez will place it in a large envelope,” the lady added, warning that if they returned without the envelope of payment, they wouldn’t get the jobos. Wrestling with the heavy bag and basket along the way, the girls finally arrived at the Gomez’s home, sweating. Mrs. Gomez answered the door. Walking inside, Rafi saw colorful drawings lying everywhere. The three little Gomez kids were still busy with more pictures, pure smiles on their cute faces. “This is from the lady with the jobo tree,” Sista held up the food. Mrs. Gomez cried, “Thank you. My husband is still sick in bed. Times are hard.” 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: “But she said to ask you for the payment too,” Rafi said with her eyes dropped. Paragraph 2: Back at the farmhouse, the girls handed the lady the large sealed envelope. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 164 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 并列句 并列句是用连词把两个或两个以上的简单句连接起来，在这一句型中需要注意连接并列主 语时，有些句型采取“就近原则”。 一、常见并列句的类型及并列连词 类型 连词 并列关系 ( 递进关系 ) and，both... and...，not only... but also...，neither... nor... 转折关系 but，yet，whereas 选择关系 or，or else，either... or...，not... but... 因果关系 for，so 对比关系 while 二、并列句的常用句型 1．both... and... 既……又…… 2．either... or... 或者……或者……；不是……就是…… 3．neither... nor... 既不……也不…… 4．not only... but (also)... 不仅……而且…… 5．not... but... 不是……而是…… 6．... while/whereas ……而；……却 7．祈使句 / 名词词组＋ and/or＋陈述句 8．... when... ……这时…… 假定你是李华，最近某英文网站正在讨论日益流行的社交媒体所存在的利弊，你们班同 学对此也进行了讨论。请你用英语写一篇短文，反映讨论结果，并表明你的观点，然后发表 在该网站上。 利 1. 有更多机会与别人交流和分享，更容易结交新的朋友； 2. 能够更快捷地了解世界各地的最新信息。 弊 1. 个人隐私难以得到保障； 2. 社交媒体会占据大量的时间，影响我们的现实生活。 你的观点 …… Recently, a heated discussion about whether social media are good or bad ① (实 施 ) in our class. Opinions ② ( 对此话题看法不同 ). Some students who supported social media believed that they could create more chances for people to communicate and share their experiences, which ③ ( 使 得 更 轻 松 ) to make more friends. ④ ( 而且 ) social media built a bridge between people and the latest information. ⑤ ( 但是 ), students who were against them believed that people’s privacy couldn’t be guaranteed and social media took up a lot of time, which led to less chance to embrace real life. As far as I’m concerned, as long as we use social media moderately, they will ⑥ ( 对……很有帮助 ) us. 提分臻题 妙法巧用 165 Week 15 应用文写作（观点类）&读后续写 无灵主语 “无灵主语”是用无生命的事物作主语，用人或行为名词作主语，这类句子常常自带 拟人化的修辞色彩和生动形象的效果，把没有生命的东西，赋予生命力，从而增加了主语 的多样性，使语言更加言简意赅，精准传神。 第一组：这位伟大的科学家在战后获得了许多荣誉。 ☆概括描写：The great scientist got many honors after the war years. ▷使用“无灵主语”描述：( 时间作主语 ) saw/witnessed honors heaped upon the great scientist. 第二组：北京人民近年来经历了巨大变化。 ☆概括描写：People in Beijing have seen great changes in recent years. ▷使用“无灵主语”描述：( 地点作主语 ) great changes in recent years. 第三组： 地震到来，犹如夜贼，不做预告。 ☆概括描写：People find earthquakes come without warning like a thief. ▷使用“无灵主语”描述：( 灾难作主语 ) like a thief in the night, without warning. 第四组： 一想到考试的失败，他就万念俱灰。 ☆概括描写：He felt despaired at the thought of his failure in the exam. ▷使用“无灵主语”描述：( 情感作主语 ) him at the thought of his failure in the exam. 第五组：我给她礼物时，她的脸上焕发出了光彩。 ☆概括描写：She was so happy when I gave her the present. ▷使用“无灵主语”描述： ( 身体部位作主语 ) when I gave her the present. 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 知晓观点类文的 本质是通过一种 现象发现更多反 应，找到不同的 观点。 ▪ 主题段落论据客 观真实，不掺杂 个人感情。 ▪ 最后一段是自己 的观点，既是自 己的判断，也是 对全文的总结。 ▪ 以第三人称为主， 尾 段 使 用 第 一 人称。 ▪ 时态以一般过去 时和一般现在时 为主。 Dear Mr. Zhang, We have held a discussion about whether it is good or not for a top student to ( 与……同桌 ) a slower student. Some are for the idea. As they know, everyone ( 既有优点 又有缺点 ) . Although they are not good at lessons, they might ( 在 其 他 领 域 做 得 好 ) like sports or arts. Therefore, they can ( 相 互 学 习 ), and they may develop friendship. In addition, top students can help slower ones gain self-confidence by helping them with their lessons, ( 这让他们受益 ) all. However, others don’t ( 持有相同观点 ). They think some slower students are always making trouble, such as keeping ( 课 上说话 ), breaking school rules. Besides, slower students often ask top students questions, which distracts them from their studies. In my opinion, I’d like to choose to share a desk with a slower student so that we can learn from each other and ( 共同进步 ). Yours, Li Hua 新高中英语写作满分素材 42 ⑤ “thunderous applause”比“cheer”更让人身临 其境 满分句式 ① I was so absorbed in my performance that I forgot Denny was off the stage. ( 句中使用“so... that...” 引导的结果状语从句 ) ② My hanging heart calmed down and I focused more on my playing. ( 该句是并列句，且使用现在分 词作前置定语 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① We were listening to the teacher in the math class ② surrounded by smoke ③ as taught ④ It is the skill to escape from a fire that ⑤ What an unforgettable day 模板背诵 This afternoon, I surprisingly found there are four clubs of our school recruiting new members, which include Science Club, English Club, Eco Club, and Sports Club. Among them, I was most attracted by the Sports Club. For one thing, I have been a crazy sports fan since the first year of school life. For another, joining the Sports Club may help me make some friends sharing the same hobbies, which is the best thing I could imagine. The most important thing is that I believe I could bring something different to the club. Firstly, I am fond of sports and can also do all sorts of items well. So I can play the role of trainer when it comes to my advantages. Secondly, owing to my gift of communicating, so confident am I that I can attract more people to be one of us. All in all, as long as I successfully become a new member of the Sports Club, I will try my best to make contribution to it. 技能小练 第一组： ① a high-speed train ② like an arrow ③ Running as fast as 第二组： ① danced in the wind ② swayed in the wind ③ with the slim waist twisting Week 15 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Recently, we have had a class meeting aon sea exploration. Students have bdivided opinions about it. Some think it important to explore the sea because we ccan have a better understanding of the marine ecosystem. Secondly, they believe sea exploration dmakes it possible to find new resources. However, others view that it has caused serious pollution. Besides, they believe the over-exploration of the sea will lead to econtinuously bad results. In my opinion, it’s necessary to carry on sea exploration and we must fkeep a balance between sea exploration and sea conservation. Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Will Artificial Intelligence Replace Teachers? Recently, aour class are having a heated debate on whether artificial intelligence (AI) can replace teachers after learning that AI-powered systems like ChatGPT are so powerful. bIn my opinion, while AI can enhance teaching to some extent, by no means can it substitute teachers. Firstly, cAI can never fulfill teachers’ roles in nourishing students’ minds and spirits. dTeachers not only explain concepts but also inspire and encourage students to learn and grow with love and concern, 答案全解全析 43 which is only genuine and meaningful in actual human connection and interaction. Secondly, AI can hardly teach according to students’ individual gifts. eGood education should involve humans, who are more flexible in adjusting their teaching plans and strategies to suit students’ various abilities and preferences. fIn conclusion, no matter how advanced AI is, it will never take the place of teachers. Education without human teachers is like a tree without roots. ① 介绍引发话题的现象。 ② 呈现自己的观点和看法，且句中使用了倒装句。 ③ 明确第一个论据，句中的 nourish 是高级词汇。 ④ 使用“not only... but also...”介绍老师们的重要性， 还使用了非限制性定语从句。 ⑤ 换一个角度介绍优质教育的本质离不开人类。 ⑥ 总结自己的观点，使用 never 来加强语气。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 观点类文 人称 第一人称、第三人称 时态 一般现在时 三段式结构 ①首段：明确论点 ②主体段落：双方观点和理由 ③尾段：表达自己的观点 语料亮点 aRecently our class had a heated discussion about whether it is important to protect cultural heritage. 80% of the students consider it important to protect cultural heritage. bThey think that cultural heritage is a symbol of great ancient civilization. cMost cultural heritage is related to great people, so protecting it shows respect for them. dBesides, cultural heritage is of great value and protecting it can make us feel proud of our nation. eHowever, the rest hold the opinion that it doesn’t matter whether cultural heritage is protected. fThey think it won’t promote the development of society, so it is a waste of time and money to protect it. gAs far as I’m concerned, our country’s cultural heritage protection has made great progress, but many problems still exist and need to be solved. hTherefore, we should keep our mind clear and take more effective steps to better protect cultural heritage. ① 直接明确该现象形成的观点迥异。 ② 先介绍为数较多的人的看法且先给出第一个 理由。 ③ 使用并列句给出第二个原因。 ④ 使用“besides” 介绍第三个原因。 ⑤ 使用“however”呈现对立方的看法。 ⑥ 使用并列句给出这样选择的原因。 ⑦ 介绍自己的观点；使用并列句且第一个并列分 句是由主从复合句构成。 ⑧ 对自己的观点进行总结。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 保护动物 原文大意 七岁女孩 Dora 收到了一只鸟作为生日礼物， 不幸的是，几周后 Dora 病了。医生告诉她的 父母，她必须待在家里。为了不让她的朋友生 病，她的父母要求她的朋友不要来和她一起玩 了。Dora感到很难过，幸亏小鸟一直陪伴着她。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写 Dora 看到 鸟玩耍的场景以及心理活动。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写 Dora 决定 给鸟儿自由以及之后的感悟。 叙事线索 看鸟玩耍→感悟鸟需要自由→决定放鸟→告 诉母亲决定→感悟 高分范文 Paragraph 1: Dora watched her bird in silence. She found her bird kept looking out of the window. In the trees outside, many birds were playing gladly. She thought that perhaps her bird didn’t like being kept in the cage at all. Just as she missed staying with her friends, it also wanted to go out to play like other birds. But before she got sick, she didn’t think a lot about her bird. Now Dora realized she shouldn’t selfishly take away its freedom for her own enjoyment. Paragraph 2: She decided to let go of the bird. When her mother came inside, Dora told her mother about her decision. She said, “Mom, can you set my bird free?” 新高中英语写作满分素材 44 Her mother was surprised and asked why. “I’m sure it also wants friends,” said Dora. Her mother agreed. She opened the cage and the bird cheerfully flew out of the window and disappeared soon. A few days later, Dora could play with her friends again. How excited she was! And when she looked out at the birds in the trees, she knew her bird must be very happy at that moment. (172 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① realize/come to understand 逐渐意识到 ② selfish/selfless 自私的 / 无私的 ③ take away its freedom 剥夺它的自由 满分句式 ① She thought that perhaps her bird didn’t like being kept in the cage at all. (运用了 that引导宾语从句 ) ② But before she got sick, she didn’t think a lot about her bird. ( 运用了 before 引导时间状语从句 ) Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 Sista 和 Rafi 想吃黄酸枣 , 她们就去了种黄酸 枣的女士家里。但女士要求她们去把新烤的 面包和一筐黄酸枣送给 Gomez 一家，并要求 她们向 Gomez 太太要报酬。两个女孩到了 Gomez 太太家，Gomez 太太说她丈夫病着， 日子过得很艰难。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写两人向 Gomez 太太要报酬，Gomez 太太给了她们一 个塞满了东西的信封。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写两人看到 信封里的画明白了那位女士帮助了 Gomez 太 太一家，并且女孩们也得到了黄酸枣。 叙事线索 Gomez 太太给信封→姑娘们带回报酬→打开 发现是画→解开谜团→姑娘们得到报酬→开 心回家 构思 第一段 Gomez 说她付款了 孩子们高兴至鼓掌 Gomez 递给大信封 两人疑惑猜测是钱 第二段 拿出的是孩子的画 明白这些就是报酬 一起把画贴到墙上 女士递给姑娘篮子 高分范文 Paragraph 1: “But she said to ask you for the payment too,” Rafi said with her eyes dropped. “Oh yes, the payment,” Mrs. Gomez said. “The payment!” chanted the children, clapping. Sista and Rafi exchanged glances in confusion, not knowing why they were excited rather than worried. Mrs. Gomez then handed Sista a large sealed envelope which was stuffed full. “The payment,” Mrs. Gomez beamed and thanked the girls for their delivery service. On the way back, Rafi said, “I wonder how they can afford to pay so much for that food.” “I know,” Sista agreed, “It looks like a lot of money.” Paragraph 2: Back at the farmhouse, the girls handed the lady the large sealed envelope. She immediately pulled the contents out. Inside were colorful drawings from the little children! Mystery solved, those lovely drawings turned out to be the Gomez family’s payment. Helping the lady tape the pictures to the wall, Rafi and Sista broke out in smiles. Just then, Rafi’s stomach growled. “Here’s your payment,” the lady smiled, handing the basket of jobos to the girls. “Thank you,” they said. “Anytime,” said the lady. “Come again, girls.” On their way home, Rafi and Sista enjoyed their treat. The juice that ran down their arms was as sweet and warm as the feeling they had inside. (186 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① thank sb. for sth. 因为……感谢某人 ② turn out to be... 结果证明 ③ sweet and warm 甜蜜而温暖 满分句式 ① Sista and Rafi exchanged glances in confusion, not knowing why they were excited rather than worried.( 运用了由连接词 why 引导的宾语从句 作 know 的宾语 ) ② Mrs. Gomez then handed Sista a large sealed envelope which was stuffed full.( 运用了由关系代 词 which 引导的限制性定语从句 ) 答案全解全析 45 Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① was carried out ② varied on this topic ③ made it much easier ④ And ⑤ However ⑥ be of great help to 模板背诵 Dear Mr. Zhang, We have held a discussion about whether it is good or not for a top student to share a desk with a slower student. Some are for the idea. As they know, everyone has strengths as well as weaknesses. Although they are not good at lessons, they might do well in other fields like sports or art. Therefore, they can learn from each other, and they may develop friendship. In addition, top students can help slower ones gain self-confidence by helping them with their lessons, which benefits them all. However, others don’t hold the same view. They think some slower students are always making trouble, such as keeping talking in class, breaking school rules. Besides, slower students often ask top students questions, which distracts them from their studies. In my opinion, I’d like to choose to share a desk with a slower student so that we can learn from each other and make progress together. Yours, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组：The post-war years 第二组：Beijing has witnessed 第三组：Earthquakes come 第四组：Despair seized 第五组：Her face brightened Week 16 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to aapply for a volunteer position for Folk Museum this summer. I bam enthusiastic about various types of Chinese traditional folk customs. It’s my dream to spend a whole summer vacation in a museum, cappreciating the treasure of traditional art, and the history of Chinese folk customs. Besides, I am outgoing, responsible and dhave a good command of communication, which will help me to introduce the beautiful history to the customers. With a willing heart to help, I can surely edo my duty. I would appreciate it if you could consider my application. Looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Dear Sir/Madam, aKnowing that the school English newspaper is looking for an editor responsible for the column “Traditional Chinese Culture”, I’m writing to apply for the position. I think I’m qualified for it. bTo begin with, I have a good command of English, especially written English. cBesides, I have taken the part-time job as an English editor, from which I have gained relevant experience. dMore importantly, I have a rich knowledge of traditional Chinese culture. eI would really appreciate it if I could be given the precious chance. I’m looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Hua ① 使 用 现 在 分 词 作 状 语 表 示 原 因， 句 中 的