Week 14 应用文写作(日记类)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

新高中英语写作满分素材 144 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 14 应用文写作（日记类）& 读后续写 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） 19th Jan., 2023 Thursday 9 p.m. Dear Diary, Today I went to Bangalore railway station to receive my uncle and aunt who were coming from Mumbai. It was a bright sunny day. The sun was shining like a star. While my father and I were crossing the Orion Mall, we saw three elephants that reminded me of my Kerala trip. Last year I went on a Kerala trip, where we visited 5 cities: Cochin, Wayanad, Munnar, Kovalam, and Alappuzha. All the places were really awesome and beautiful. Then we went to Elephant junction Thekkady, Kumily, where people go for elephant rides. I rode sitting above the elephant for 2 and a half hours. Then we have also done elephant bath and feeding. We took a lot of pictures with elephants. It was a nice trip and I still can’t get it over. Vikram 19th Jan., 2023 Thursday 9 p.m. Dear Diary, Today while I was cleaning my cupboard, I wanted some old pictures of me and my sisters. We all were laughing a lot in this picture. I believe that it should be some really funny moment. Another moment was captured when I was hiding and eating chocolate from my father’s pocket so that I didn’t have to share with anyone. A picture of us where we are wearing lehengas ( 衬 裙 ) was also there. It was one of our cousins’ marriage and we decided to wear lehengas as our dress code. Some pictures made me laugh and some made me cry. Of course, it’s the memories that are all left, later. Madhu 美文撷英 ① Today witnessed an unforgettable experience. ② In the morning, I... ; then...; after that, ... By the time I had a good time. ③ Finally, ... I’ll never forget the memorable day! ④ Although we didn’t ..., we were very happy to help others. ⑤ This experience makes me realize the happiness of labor and the importance of serving the community. Sample Examples of Diaries 145 Week 14 应用文写作（日记类）&读后续写 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2020 年全国新高考Ⅱ卷 ) 上周末，你和同学参 加了一次采摘活动。请你 为班级英语角写一篇短文， 介绍这次活动，内容包括： 1. 农场情况； 2. 采摘过程； 3. 个人感受。 注意:1. 词数100左右； 2. 题目已为你写好。 My Weekend ( 介 绍 活 动 主 题 ) Organized by the student union, a group of volunteers went to Hope Farm to help the farmers pick peaches last weekend. 非谓语动词 作状语表示方式 The farm is situated at the foot of a mountain, the sky is blue and the air is fresh. We were attracted by the beautiful scenery. There are different kinds of fruit trees as well as a variety of animals. ( 具体内容 ) On arriving, we saw red ripe peaches hanging on the tree. Using baskets and ladders, we first picked the ones that were most beautiful in color, then those that were ripe and soft. 使用现在分词作状语表示方式 I couldn’t wait to take a bite, and the sweet juice went down my throat. ( 个 人 感 受 ) I was grateful for this opportunity to get close to nature. Not only would I be able to experience fruit picking, but I could also feast on the sweetness! 倒装句 假设你是红星中学高 三学生李华。你们班上周组 织了一次以“劳动最光荣” 为主题的社会实践活动。 请根据以下四幅图的先后 顺序，写一篇英文周记， 记述整个过程。 注意：1. 词数60左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 参 考 词 汇： 西 瓜 watermelon Last week I ① ( 参加 ) a farmwork programme in the suburbs. At the class meeting, our teacher told us about the programme ② ( 主题为 )“Working is most beautiful”. And he ③ ( 强调重要性 ) of working with our own hands. When I got home, I ④ ( 收拾行李 ) for the trip. On the farm, we helped pick watermelons. ⑤ ( 在工作的时候 ), I realised how hard it was to work in the fields under a hot sun. When I came back home, I ⑥ ( 与……分享我的经历 ) my parents. And they were very proud of me. 日记类 一般过去时 通常以第一人称为主 记事型：记述发生在自己身上的事情 议论型：对某一事情或现象发表自己的看法 描写型：详述人物、事物的特征 抒情型：针对某事物抒发自己的感情 Para. 1：自己遇到的事情或是所参加的活动 Para. 2：事情或活动发生的过程、结局 Para. 3：发表自己的感想、感受、体会 时态 人称 类别 结构 日记类 新高中英语写作满分素材 146 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① experience 经历 ② unforgettable/memorable 难忘的 ③ personally 就个人而言 ④ satisfaction/pleasure 满意 / 快乐 短语： ① fall on ( 节日等 ) 适逢 ( 某日 )；正当 ( 某日 ) ② be of great significance 非常重要 ③ sign up for/register for 报名参加 ④ turn out to be 结果证明 ⑤ contribute... to.../make a contribution to 对……做贡献 吸睛开头句 ① ... was memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. ……是个 难以忘怀的日子，因为那天我们班举行了 一次有意义的活动。 ② Today, we took part in a meaningful activity by... to... 今天，我们参加了由……组织 / 举办的一项有意义的活动，以…… ③ Las t month , I had a meaningful and unforgettable experience, which left me a deep impression. 上个月我有一次有意义和 难忘的经历，这使我印象深刻。 ④ Today is the World AIDS Day, so our school organized an activity called “...”. 今 天 是 世 界艾滋病日，因此我校组织了一个名为 “……”的活动。 高光篇中句 ① In the morning, we went to.. . by bus, chatting and laughing all the way with great enthusiasm. 早上，我们坐公共汽车去……， 一路上有说有笑，热情高涨。 ② As scheduled, we gathered at 7:00 a.m. in front of the school, then set out and returned at about 4:00 p.m. by bus/on foot. 我们早上 七点在学校门口集合，然后出发。下午四 点乘公交车 / 步行返回。 ③ Upon arrival, we got down to working in no time, busy but well-organized. 一到这里， 我们很快就开始工作起来，忙碌但组织有 序 / 忙而不乱。 ④ On arriving there, we were divided into three groups. 一到那里，我们被分成了三个小组。 ⑤ At the end of the activity, it is apparent that everyone was very... but we felt more than... to do something about... 活动结束时，很明 显，每个人都非常……，但我们感到非 常……，想为……做点什么。 精彩结尾句 ① It is such a meaningful activity that we are all looking forward to the next visit. 这是一 项非常有意义的活动，我们都期待着下次 访问。 ② Only through this experience did I realize that it’s our responsibility to inherit our cultural treasures. 正是通过这次活动我才 认识到我们有责任继承文化瑰宝。 ③ The after class activities broadened our horizons, enriched the school life and made us relaxed. 课外活动让我们开阔眼界，充 实学校生活，还使我们得到放松。 ④ As far as I’m concerned, if everyone could contribute a little, ... would definitely have a brighter future. 就我个人而言，如果人人奉 献一点，……就会有一个更美好的未来。 ⑤ Not only can this activity improve my sense of responsibility, but it also educates me to cherish today’s happy life. 这次活动不仅提 高了我的责任感，而且教育我要珍惜今天 的幸福生活。 147 Week 14 应用文写作（日记类）&读后续写 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 14：语言的丰富性 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一个完整的故事。 When I was young, there was an apple orchard( 果园 ) near my home. The man owning the orchard employed some migrant families to gather apples and care for the trees. They worked hard but got paid and fed little. Once my grandmother s t ruck up a conversation with one of the young women. Her name was Maria. She and her husband, Tony, were expecting a baby. “We’re going to stay with my parents,” Maria said. “We work here to earn money for the bus ticket.” “They’re going to need a lot of things when the baby comes,” Grandmother told me when we got home. “Let’s ask God to send angels to help that young couple.” “Angels?” I was surprised. “If we do our part, angels will do the rest.” she said. Grandmother went to the closet and brought out a box filled with S & H trading stamps, which can be used to buy things. She spilled the pile of stamps on to the kitchen table. “You can see I’ve been saving up the stamps for just the right purchase.” We sat down at the table and looked through the baby section of the S & H content. My eyes fell on a bassinet( 摇 篮 ) with a silk canopy( 罩 篷 ) over it. “That’s what a young mother will need,” Grandmother said. “Let’s see if we save 20 books of stamps, we can get a bassinet.” In the coming weeks, we tried hard to collect the stamps, but before Maria and Tony left, we were three books short. And there were no angels helping us with the stamps either. “Open the content,” Grandmother said. “Let’s pick a bassinet we can afford.” We chose one without a canopy. The next day we went to the Green Stamp store to get it. “Maria will love this one just as much.” Grandmother assured me as she pushed the door open. I couldn’t help but feel disappointed. Grandmother gave the clerk the information and handed over the 17 books of stamps we saved. The clerk walked to the backroom and returned empty-handed. “I’m sorry,” she said. “We don’t have such a bassinet for the 17 books of stamps.” 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已 为你写好。 Paragraph 1: I couldn’t believe it. No bassinet for the 17 books of stamps. Paragraph 2: “That’s a lovely replacement with a canopy,” Grandmother said. 好题探究 最佳素材 实现读后续写语言的丰富性应该从词汇、句法和修辞三个方面着手。 1. 词汇丰富性是语言丰富性的基石 用词上的创新度是续文丰富性的重要表现。 2. 句法多样性是语言丰富性的载体 句法多样性即句型的变化幅度，是对各类句式灵活、恰当的使用。要尽量多使用否定句、感叹句、并列句、复 合句以及虚拟语气、强调句、倒装等特殊句型来丰富续文。 3. 修辞多元性是语言丰富性的灵魂 新高中英语写作满分素材 148 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 作者小时候，家附近的苹果园会雇佣一些移民家庭来采摘苹果和照料果树。他们努力工 作，但获取的报酬却很低。祖母认识的 Maria 怀孕后，祖母请求上帝派天使来帮助她，并告 诉作者“如果我们做好了自己的部分，天使会完成剩下的部分”。两人计划通过积攒邮票兑 换一个摇篮。虽然两人很努力，但在孩子出生前，还差三本邮票。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1) When young, I knew an orchard owner hired some migrants who got paid and fed little. P Plot (Para. 8—9) Time approaching, we collected 17 books and were told they weren’t enough. T Theme (Para. 2—4) Having talked to Maria, Grandma said she’d ask God to send angels. E Emotion (Para. 5—7) Grandma and I had to collected 20 books of stamps for a bassinet. 三个基础（SUM） ★ 语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第一人称、 第三人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与社会”—— 社会服务与人际沟通 ★主角：Grandmother, I ★Grandma decided to help Maria and told me we could do something in advance. ★We only collected 17 books of stamps before Maria gave birth. ★Figure out what would happen after we knew we hadn’t enough stamps! Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 首尾呼应水到渠成 看着邮票心里质疑 (要点�) 天使只存在于贺卡上？ 见我失望店员提议 (要点�) 首见摇篮恰好��册 (要点�) 祖母激动表达感激 (要点�) 逐渐理解祖母的话 (要点�) 决心做好天使自来 送去摇篮等待宝贝 (要点�) lovely replacement No bassinet for the �� couldn’t believe 149 Week 14 应用文写作（日记类）&读后续写 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① “eye”在句中是 名词被用作动词， 是熟词新义，显 得更加生动，且 count on 比 wish for 显 得 更 有 难度。 ② 使用现在分词作 状 语， 且 句 中 的“option” 比 “choice”显得更 高级。 ③ 直接引语中使用 到较复杂的句子， 由 but 连接两个 并列分句，第二 个 分 句 中 含 有 since 引导的原因 状语从句。 ④ 句 中 的“to see”是不定式， 表示出乎意料的 结果，且句中含 有定语从句。 ⑤ 本句话先描述祖 母的反应，与段 首句吻合，且句 中含有定语从句， “gratitude” 属 于高级表达。 ⑥ 引号中的内容呼 应原文，也与当 前事件发展吻合。 ⑦ 本 句 与 上 一 句 话 中 的“get to know”吻合，作 者真正理解了祖 母的话。 ⑧ 事 情 得 到 完 美 解 决， 使 用 了 “ a r r a n g e for sth. to be done”。 Paragraph 1: I couldn’t believe it. No bassinet for the 17 books of stamps. aI eyed the piles of Green Stamps I’d counted on. Maybe angels really do exist only on Christmas cards. bSeeing our disappointment, the clerk said, “If you’re interested, we do have another option.” cShe opened the content. “It costs 20 books, but since the one you wanted isn’t available, I can give you the bassinet as a replacement.” dI looked over the counter to see that she was pointing at the very bassinet we had originally chosen! Paragraph 2: “That’s a lovely replacement with a canopy,” Grandmother said. eShe was excited about the bassinet we had been longing for and expressed gratitude for the clerk’s kind offer again and again. fI got to know my grandmother’s words “If we do our part, the angels will do the rest.” gIf we were determined to do something, the real angel would lend us a hand. hWe arranged for the bassinet to be sent straight to Maria’s mother so it would be waiting when she and Tony arrived. (154 words) 新高中英语写作满分素材 150 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 日记类 Writing 1 (2023 届江苏镇江 ) 假如你是某国际学校学生李华，今天你参加了所在社区的社区服务活动，现将你的感想 向校英文报投稿，内容包括： 1. 服务经历； 2. 你的感受。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 19th Jan., 2023 Thursday （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 (2023 届 4 月湖北新高考联考 ) 上周六，你们班组织了一次社会实践活动。请你据此写一篇英语周记，交给你们学英语 小组，内容包括： 1. 活动的内容； 2. 收获与感想。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） 151 Week 14 应用文写作（日记类）&读后续写 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 (2023 届江苏名校第三次模拟 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Last summer, my college’s charity started a campaign “Big Brothers Big Sisters”. It called on college students to care for local extremely poor kids by leading them to our cafeteria and helping them enjoy a good lunch every Sunday for four months. The charity would pay for the kids’ meals. My schoolmate Molly and I signed up as volunteers. Then, the charity helped us contact a local poor family. The family had a kindergarten girl Melissa. That Sunday morning, Molly and I took the school bus and reached the family. When seeing a shabby house, we were touched. We nervously knocked on the door. Melissa opened it and looked up at us, seemingly wondering, “Could these girls be trusted?” Still, she welcomed us in. After communicating with her parents for a while, Melissa gave us a tour of their home. “Here is the TV. Here is the picture I drew,” she said. Her parents, quiet in chairs, watched her and smiled. “Here is my brother, who died,” Melissa added. Molly and I just broke inside. Just then, Melissa’s mother called her. Melissa walked over to her, who secretly told her something. Then Melissa came to us, smiling, “Mama said my brother lived inside our heart forever.” After a short silence, Molly and I chatted a lot with Melissa’s parents. Then, waving goodbye to her parents, Melissa held my hand and Molly’s and happily got on our bus. All the way, Melissa appeared excited. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Finally, we reached the cafeteria. Paragraph 2: Melissa stood up, saying, “Can I bring some grapes home for my family?” （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 152 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 (2023 届浙江杭州二模 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 We were in our late 20s with a child when my husband, Ralph, finally graduated from college. “OK, now I deserve a piano,” I blurted out when he sat down for lunch just before the graduation ceremony. A look of surprise crossed his face. “We could never afford a piano. After so many years of hard work, we got you through school. Now I deserve a piano,” I repeated. Several months later, Ralph, with help, moved the upright piano we bought for $100 into our cottage’s tiny arched dining room. It smelled a little musty, but had a great tone. Ralph started graduate school, leaving no money for private piano lessons. The first thing that came to my mind was Santa Monica City College—maybe it offered piano lessons. Skimming the catalog, I danced around the room when I found a class at the same time the boys were at preschool. Practicing, however, was not so easy. Four-year-old redheaded Denny crawled out of bed in the evening on a regular basis. That was my time to practice. He’d pad out of the bedroom in his sleeper and climb up on the bench with me. Soon he began plinking( 发出叮铃声 ) on the high keys. I tried to ignore him. He listened to the echoes of the keys and plinked some more. Doing all I could do to keep focused on my own practicing, I continued to ignore him. This practice pattern became an evening routine. After a while, I didn’t even hear him anymore. Ralph studied. Denny plinked on the high keys, and I focused on my piece for the end-of-the-term recital( 独奏会 ). That evening came. However, Ralph said he was busy preparing for the midterms and couldn’t watch Denny. Pacing back and forth, I shook my head trying to figure out what to do. Time was running out. I bundled up Denny—with his sleeper on—and drove off to the recital with him. “We’ll sit in the front row, Denny,” I whispered. “You have to be very quiet and listen when I am playing.” He nodded, said “Uh-huh,” and we sat down. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Denny held my hand, but then my turn came. Paragraph 2: A small body climbed onto the piano bench next to me. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 153 Week 14 应用文写作（日记类）&读后续写 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 强调句 1. 陈述句：It is/was... that/who... ( 强调人时可用 that 或 who，强调物时只用 that) 一般疑问句：Is/Was+it+... that/who...? 特殊疑问句：疑问词 +is/was+it+that...? I wonder what it is that makes you so addicted to the mobile phone. 我想知道是什么让你对手机如此着迷。 2. “not... until...”的强调句：It is/was not until... that... ( 注意时态 ) It was not until I came here that I realised this place was famous for not only its beauty but also its weather. 直到我来到这儿，我才知道这个地方出名不仅因为它的美，还因为它的天气。 假设你是光明中学高三 (1) 班的学生李华，今天学校组织了消防演习。请根据以下四幅 图的先后顺序，写一篇英语日记，叙述整个演习过程，并谈谈自己的感想。 注意：1. 词数 100 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 This morning, our school held a fire drill. ① ( 我们正在数学课上听老 师讲课 ) when we heard the fire alarm from the speaker on the wall. The teacher stopped teaching immediately and instructed us to exit the classroom in order. When we got into the passageway, we found us ② ( 被烟雾包围着 ) everywhere. It was choking and our tears ran down. We students bent down, covered our mouth with handkerchiefs, and ran downstairs rapidly into the open on the playground, just ③ ( 依据被教过 ) before. When we came back to our classroom, we students gave a summary of this fire drill. I think fire disasters are often seen on TV and read about in the newspaper. ④ ( 正是从 火中逃生的技巧 ) may help us in the emergency situations. ⑤ ( 多么难忘的一 天 ) I have! 提分臻题 妙法巧用 新高中英语写作满分素材 154 修辞活用 英语修辞有助于提高英语写作语言的感染力，增加英语写作亮点。要想提高英语写作 的整体质量，就得学会恰当地使用修辞手法，才能让英语写作句式结构更加富有变化。 第一组：他跑得真快。 ☆概括描写：He ran so fast. ▷细节描述： ① 他跑步快得就像是高速列车。( 比喻 ) He ran as fast as . ② 他跑得如离弦之箭。( 比喻 ) He ran running away from the string. ③ 他跑得像豹子一样快，让在场的每个人羡慕。 ( 比喻 ) a leopard, he was admired by everyone present. 第二组：树枝在摇晃。 ☆概括描写：The branches of the tree were shaking. ▷细节描述： ① 树枝在风中起舞。 ( 拟人 ) The branches of the tree . ② 树枝在风中翩翩起舞，不断摇摆着。( 拟人 ) The branches danced and . ③ 树枝随着风儿扭动着纤细的腰肢，翩翩起舞。( 拟人 ) The branches danced in the wind. 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 知晓日记类文的 本质是记录自己 的 所 行、 所 思 所想。 ▪ 希 望 通 过 文 字 让 自 己 在 经 历 某 件 事 之 后 在 思 想 上 有 所 提升。 ▪ 日记类文不是记 流水账，而是强 调内心的变化。 ▪ 文章通常以第一 人称为主。 ▪ 时态以一般过去 时和一般现在时 为主。 This afternoon, I surprisingly found there are four clubs of our school ( 招募新成员 ), which include Science Club, English Club, Eco Club, and Sports Club. Among them, I ( 最 被 吸 引 ) the Sports Club. For one thing, I have been a crazy sports fan since the first year of school life. For another, joining the Sports Club may help me make some friends ( 有共同爱好 ), which is the best thing I could imagine. The most important thing is that I believe I could bring something different to the club. Firstly, I am ( 喜欢运动 ) and can also do all sorts of items well. So I can play the role of trainer ( 当 说 到 我 的 优 点 的 时 候 ) . Secondly, owing to my gift of communicating, ( 我如此自信以至 于 ) I can attract more people to be one of us. All in all, as long as I successfully become a new member of the Sports Club, I will try my best to make contribution to it. 答案全解全析 39 programs also succeeded and the audience were happy to appreciate the pets’ performance. I felt even prouder as a host. Paragraph 2: Then it was Carla and Perro’s turn. Carla asked Perro to sit, but Perro didn’t sit. Carla was at a loss what to do next. Perro was too interested in watching so many pet friends at the show. Suddenly, Perro broke free from the rope, leaped quickly and knocked over the bird cage. “Sit!” I shouted at Perro. “Stay!” I cried. Suddenly, everyone stopped and stared at me. Hearing my instructions, Perro sat immediately and looked at me. “Wow, amazing!” said Carla. She smiled at me and gave me a thumbs-up. I felt so happy and proud. (161 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① begin/start/launch 开始 ② finish/conclude/end (up) 结束 ③ suddenly/all of a sudden 突然 满分句式 ① When Butter finished, everyone clapped and cheered. ( 由连接词 when 引导的状语从句 ) ② Hearing my instructions, Perro sat immediately and looked at me.( 非谓语动词作状语 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① am interested in ② can be made ③ could be sent to me ④ will be held ⑤ am slightly worried about 模板背诵 Dear Sir/Madam, I’m Li Hua. Thank you for reading my letter. I am very interested in the exchange program you offered. I am writing to obtain some more detailed information about it. Firstly, I am just a graduate from an ordinary high school and I wonder what qualifications are required for an applicant. Secondly, if admitted, what courses am I going to take, and do I need to buy any books ahead of time? In addition, would you be so kind to introduce to me the conditions of board and accommodations? By the way, if I need to make any other preparations, let me know, will you? Thanks again for your time, and I’m looking forward to your early reply. Yours sincerely, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组 ① was bathed in ② Bathed ③ Bathing 第二组 ① to exchange ② exchanging ③ exchanged Week 14 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Last week I a took part in a fa rmwork programme in the suburbs. At the class meeting, our teacher told us about the programme bthemed/with the theme “Working is most beautiful”. And he cstressed the importance of working with our own hands. When I got home, I dpacked up my luggage for the trip. On the farm, we helped pick watermelons. eWhile working, I realised how hard it was to work in the fields under a hot sun. When I came back home, I fshared my experiences with my parents. And they were very proud of me. Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 新高中英语写作满分素材 40 语料亮点 19th Jan., 2023 Thursday Today I took part in a community service project organized by our community, awhich proved to be a truly rewarding experience. bTo help young people develop a better sense of social responsibility and contribute more to our community, a series of activities were conducted. cFor instance, we paid a visit to the nursing home to keep the seniors company. dWe also handed out leaflets to passers-by to raise people’s awareness of environmental protection. By volunteering in those activities, eI clearly understand that everyone can do their part to make a positive impact on the lives of others. ① 明确主题后使用非限制性定语从句概括志愿者 经历对自己产生的影响，吸引读者了解更多 内容。 ② 明确所参与的志愿者活动的目的和宗旨。 ③ 使用具体例子使讲述更为生动，句中的“keep sb. company”也属于高级词汇。 ④ 依旧是具体例子，但句中的“raise people’s awareness of environmental protection”是热词汇。 ⑤ 升华主题，强调了每个人都会产生的巨大作用。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 日记类文 人称 第一人称、第三人称 时态 一般过去时、一般现在时 三段式结构 ①首段：介绍活动主题 ②主体段落：讲述活动经历 ③尾段：表达感受 语料亮点 We took part in a social practice activity last Saturday. aI was initially excited as we would be able to experience the life outside of campus. bI was depressed when I learned that we needed to help the cleaners. However, cit is these admirable cleaners who work tirelessly to keep the entire city clean. What they do means a great deal to our community. We worked all morning clearing the street. dI felt a sense of achievement at that time. eThe practice taught me that respecting the beautiful environment means respecting ourselves. ① 句中的“initially”强调的是最初的感受，暗示 还会发生变化。 ② 句中的“depressed”强调的是“事与愿违”。 ③ 使用强调句式强调自己明白了“谁是最可爱的 人”，使用一般现在时强调的是客观事实。 ④ 强调了当时的感受和收获。 ⑤ 升华主题：“尊重美丽的环境就是尊重我们自己”。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 社会服务与人际沟通 原文大意 学院慈善机构发起了“大哥哥大姐姐”活动， 由学生带领贫困儿童去自助餐厅享用午餐。 作者和同学莫莉成为志愿者，去贫困家庭拜 访梅丽莎，并带着梅丽莎回学院享用午餐。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写吃自助餐 时梅丽莎面对食物时的迫不及待和满足，当 看见别的孩子把一些剩菜带离自助餐厅时， 她暂停吃饭动作，引起了作者的询问。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写作者和莫 莉满足她的请求，梅丽莎回家后和家人分享 自己的经历和葡萄，以及作者和莫莉也决定 继续做志愿者传递爱。 叙事线索 到达餐厅→挑选食物就餐→看见别人带走剩 饭菜→想给家人带葡萄→分享经历和葡萄→ 感悟 高分范文 Paragraph 1: Finally, we reached the cafeteria. It was alive with kids and volunteers. Melissa followed us to the food counter, marveling at the variety of food. “Wow! They must be yummy.” Hearing her words, I began to explain the different options available, while Molly filled her tray with what she selected. As we sat down at a table, Melissa couldn’t wait to take a taste. Her face lit up with satisfaction, reminding us of the importance of our mission. Sensing a kid with some leftovers leaving the cafeteria, Melissa paused, looking at the food counter. “Do you need anything else?” I 答案全解全析 41 smiled. Paragraph 2: Melissa stood up, saying, “Can I bring some grapes home for my family?” She looked at us, adding, “I think nothing is sweeter than grapes here.” Molly and I exchanged glances and nodded, touched by her thoughtfulness. On the bus ride back, Melissa held a bag of grapes gently as if they were treasures. Hardly had she stepped into the house when she shared her experience and the delicious grapes with her family, which melted our hearts. Over the next few months, we witnessed the positive impact of our presence. As summer ended, we reflected on our experience and continued volunteering, knowing that even the smallest acts of kindness could make a big difference. (197 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ①“marveling at”比“surprised at” 更高级 ②“option”比“choice” 更高级 ③“mission”比“task” 更说明作者的任务艰巨性 ④“melt our hearts”比“made us moved” 更生动 满分句式 ① Sensing a kid with some leftovers leaving the cafeteria, Melissa paused, looking at the food counter. ( 现在分词短语 Sensing... 和 looking... 作 状语；现在分词 leaving... 作宾语补足语 ) ② Hardly had she stepped into the house when she shared her experience and the delicious grapes with her family, which melted our hearts.（Hardly 置于 句首引起部分倒装；关系代词 which 引导非限 制性定语从句） Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 作者没有钱上钢琴私教课。偶然发现大学有 钢琴课，而且上课时间不会耽误送孩子上下 学。开始练琴后四岁的丹尼常会跑来“帮倒 忙”。到了期末独奏会，丈夫不能照看孩子 所以作者只能带着丹尼去参加。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写作者上台 前叮嘱丹尼要听话，然后上台后“沉浸式” 演奏。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写作者注意 到丹尼爬上了钢琴凳，并没慌张，而是更出 色地完成了演奏。 叙事线索 上台前→叮嘱→安静→爬上钢琴凳→听话→ 出色完成 构思 第一段 告诉丹尼要听话 妈妈一会就回来 点头承诺会听话 忘我表演忘记他 第二段 正投入时见丹尼 静静坐旁我演奏 悬着的心终放下 完美表演共谢幕 高分范文 Paragraph 1: Denny held my hand, but then my turn came. I told Denny it was my turn to play, be good, and be quiet when I played on the stage, and I’d come back to him when I was done. He nodded and said he would be good, but I looked at Denny hesitantly and walked straight to the stage to get my performance started. I wanted to give the audience my best. I was so absorbed in my performance that I forgot Denny was off the stage. Paragraph 2: A small body climbed onto the piano bench next to me. I was playing to my heart’s content, and I saw Denny climbing onto my piano stool, next to me. He was very quiet there. He didn’t make a sound. He watched me play. My hanging heart calmed down and I focused more on my playing. Far from feeling frightened, the arrival of the baby gave me a great deal of confidence, and I managed to complete my solo without a problem. When I finished, there was thunderous applause and I picked up my little Denny to thank the audience and waved off the stage. (173 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① “hesitantly”比“without hesitation”更高级 ② “be absorbed in ”比“focus on”更传神 ③ “to my heart’s content”比“carefully”更高级 ④ “hanging heart”比“nervous”更夸张 新高中英语写作满分素材 42 ⑤ “thunderous applause”比“cheer”更让人身临 其境 满分句式 ① I was so absorbed in my performance that I forgot Denny was off the stage. ( 句中使用“so... that...” 引导的结果状语从句 ) ② My hanging heart calmed down and I focused more on my playing. ( 该句是并列句，且使用现在分 词作前置定语 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① We were listening to the teacher in the math class ② surrounded by smoke ③ as taught ④ It is the skill to escape from a fire that ⑤ What an unforgettable day 模板背诵 This afternoon, I surprisingly found there are four clubs of our school recruiting new members, which include Science Club, English Club, Eco Club, and Sports Club. Among them, I was most attracted by the Sports Club. For one thing, I have been a crazy sports fan since the first year of school life. For another, joining the Sports Club may help me make some friends sharing the same hobbies, which is the best thing I could imagine. The most important thing is that I believe I could bring something different to the club. Firstly, I am fond of sports and can also do all sorts of items well. So I can play the role of trainer when it comes to my advantages. Secondly, owing to my gift of communicating, so confident am I that I can attract more people to be one of us. All in all, as long as I successfully become a new member of the Sports Club, I will try my best to make contribution to it. 技能小练 第一组： ① a high-speed train ② like an arrow ③ Running as fast as 第二组： ① danced in the wind ② swayed in the wind ③ with the slim waist twisting Week 15 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Recently, we have had a class meeting aon sea exploration. Students have bdivided opinions about it. Some think it important to explore the sea because we ccan have a better understanding of the marine ecosystem. Secondly, they believe sea exploration dmakes it possible to find new resources. However, others view that it has caused serious pollution. Besides, they believe the over-exploration of the sea will lead to econtinuously bad results. In my opinion, it’s necessary to carry on sea exploration and we must fkeep a balance between sea exploration and sea conservation. Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Will Artificial Intelligence Replace Teachers? Recently, aour class are having a heated debate on whether artificial intelligence (AI) can replace teachers after learning that AI-powered systems like ChatGPT are so powerful. bIn my opinion, while AI can enhance teaching to some extent, by no means can it substitute teachers. Firstly, cAI can never fulfill teachers’ roles in nourishing students’ minds and spirits. dTeachers not only explain concepts but also inspire and encourage students to learn and grow with love and concern,