Week 13 应用文写作(询问信)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

133 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）&读后续写 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）& 读后续写 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） Letter of Inquiry Dear Mr. Waters, I’m Li Hua, who will provide voluntary services and teach kids in your school next month. I’m writing to ask you some relevant details. To begin with, I’m eager to know the course arrangements, like how many class hours there are per week. What’s more, I wonder if you could tell me some basic information about the students. Finally, nothing could be better if you could tell me about the accommodation and the food. Your prompt attention to the letter would be highly appreciated. Yours, Li Hua Letter of Inquiry for Employment Dear [Recipient’s Name], I have heard about a couple of vacancies in your company for operations managers and would like to know if it’s right. I have been working in the operations department for 14 years now and would like to apply for this position if it is available. Please do respond to my letter in case the domain is available. Thank you. Sincerely, [Sender’s Name] Letter of Asking for Personal Advice About a Job as a Manager Dear [Recipient’s Name], I don’t want to burden you with this, but I think you’re one of the few people who can understand what I’m undergoing. I was recently offered a managerial staff position in a huge company. It’s amazing because I didn’t even apply for it but was contacted because my former boss recommended me. I want to accept the offer, but Bill and I have already agreed that I should take a break from work for one year to be a full-time mom. I want to be there for Martha during her first year, but she is already six months old, and I don’t wish to lose this opportunity. What do you think I should do? I would appreciate your thoughts on this. Sincerely, [Sender’s Name] 美文撷英 ① Quite interested in..., I am writing to enquire about further details regarding/concerning... ② As the... triggers my great interest, I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding/concerning... ③ Would/Could you be so kind as to tell me when and where the course to be held will begin? ④ I wonder if/whether it is convenient for you to inform me of the specific schedule, including the date and the address. ⑤ What deserves my special attention is the learning content and whether literature is included in it. ⑥ Your prompt attention to the letter would be highly appreciated. 新高中英语写作满分素材 134 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2024 届广东省四校联考 ) 假定你是李华，你的 英国朋友 Tim 邀请你参加 他们学校暑假组织的“科 技夏令营”。你想参加， 现在就此事写一封信向他 咨询夏令营的相关事宜， 要点包括： 1. 具体日程安排； 2. 住宿和费用等。 注意： 1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节， 使行文连贯。 Dear Tim, ( 明 确 咨 询 目 标 ) Thank you very much for inviting me to attend the “Technology Summer Camp” organized by your school during the summer vacation. 非谓语动词作后置定语 I can’t wait to participate and would like to know more information about the event. ( 相 关 事 宜 ) Please tell me the specific activities involved in the program and the schedule so that I can plan my summer vacation accordingly and book my flights in advance. 非谓语动词和目的状语从句 My another concern is how I will be accommodated, 表语从句 in the school dormitory or with a host family? Personally, I would like to stay in your house if it is convenient to you, to taste a touch of British culture. By the way, how much is the total expense? ( 表达愿望 ) Thanks again for your invitation. Anticipating meeting you and enjoying the “Technology Summer Camp” soon. Yours, Li Hua 假定你是李华，正在 伦敦学习，请给你经济学 课程的教授 Hanes 写一封询 问信，咨询这门课的作业 要求和格式 (format)。 注意：1. 词数80左右： 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 Dear Professor Hanes, Hope this email ① ( 一切都好 ). My name is Li Hua and I am a student of your Economic course. I am writing to ② ( 询问要求 ) of the assignment you gave us last Friday. I am still ③ ( 不确定格式 ) . Could you tell me if there is one fixed referencing style for this course or I can use the one ④ ( 我所熟悉的 )? Also, are there any requirements for the file format? ⑤ ( 期待您的回复 )! Best wishes, Li Hua 询问信 一般现在时 通常以第一人称为主 请求别人回答问题 用词礼貌且恳切 无论对方是否帮助 都应事先表感谢 Para. 1：自我介绍、写作背景和目的 Para. 2：相关事宜咨询，强调所需信息重要性 Para. 3：表达期待和感谢 时态 人称 特点 结构 询问信 135 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）&读后续写 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① advertisement/website/program 广告 / 网站 / 节目 ② advisor/adviser/consultant 顾问 ③ requirement/demand 要求 ④ concerning/regarding 关于 短语： ① inquire/enquire/consult sb. about sth. 就…… 向……咨询 ② provide sb. with sth. 提供……给…… ③ with the purpose of 带着……的目的 ④ raise the awareness of 提升……的意识 吸睛开头句 ① Having read your advertisement in the newspaper, I feel interested in voluntary work and want to do whatever I can to help anyone in need. 读到你在报纸上的广告后， 我对志愿者的工作很感兴趣并且想尽我所 能帮助需要帮助的人。 ② I’m writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with some specific information concerning your advertisement. 我写信想知 道你是否能向我提供与你广告相关的一些 具体信息。 ③ Word came that our school will hold a class meeting whose topic is related to Chinese traditional customs. 有消息称，我们学校要 召开一次班会，主题与中国传统习俗有关。 ④ Since this activity will be presented on the English website, I’d like to know whether you can tell me something about it. 因为这 个活动将会在英文网站上展示，我想知道 你是否能告诉我一些关于它的信息。 高光篇中句 ① I have no idea which traditional Chinese food is more popular among students like you. 我 不知道哪种中国传统食物更受你们这样的 学生欢迎。 ② At present, I have been considering a wide range of choices including Sichuan food, Guangdong dishes and all kinds of snacks, but I haven’t decided yet. 目前我一直在考 虑包括川菜、粤菜、各种小吃等多种选择， 但还没决定。 ③ I’d be more than happy if you have any other suggestions. 如果你有任何其他建议，我将 非常高兴。 ④ Would you be willing to tell me which part is more appealing to foreign friends? 你是否 愿意告诉我哪一部分对外国朋友更具吸 引力？ ⑤ Concerning this activity, which aspects do you also want to know about? 关于这次活动 你还想了解哪些方面？ 精彩结尾句 ① Since you are keen on Chinese culture, I do believe your advice would be extremely valuable. 既然你对中国文化感兴趣，我相 信你的建议会非常有价值。 ② I’m more than grateful if you could share your favorite with me. 如果你能和我分享你 的最爱，我将不胜感激。 ③ If possible, you can reply to me as soon as possible. I will take your advice into consideration. I really appreciate your help. 如果可能的话，你可尽快回复我。我会考 虑你的建议。非常感谢你的帮助。 新高中英语写作满分素材 136 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 13：完美衔接过渡 (2023 届湖南长沙雅礼中学三模 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一个完整的故事。 Billy was 15 years old then. He grew up in a very poor neighborhood. No one in his family had gone to college before. Actually, few people around him had received higher education. They all struggled to live a good life. Therefore, Billy knew nothing about colleges or scholarships and he never thought he would go to college one day. Although he was a smart boy, he didn’t study hard at school and often got into trouble with other teenagers in his neighborhood. One day, while Billy was walking on the playground, a boy of his age started making fun of him. Then that boy pushed him hard and Billy fell onto the ground. Billy became so angry that he stood up and beat that boy. So a fight began. It happened that Billy’s English teacher Mr. Smith was walking nearby. He immediately ran to the boys to stop the fight. Billy was a bit worried because he knew his teacher was very strict with students. He was afraid his teacher would punish him. However, to his astonishment, his teacher didn’t do that. “Billy, let’s have a talk,” said his teacher. Billy, not knowing what his teacher wanted to do, was very worried. But he nodded. So they went to a bench nearby and sat down. After they sat down, Mr. Smith began, “Billy, I know you’re a smart boy, but you’re wasting your life now. Why don’t you study hard to go to college so that you can change your life and have a bright future?” Hearing that, Billy didn’t know what to say. He had never thought about it. Billy was in silence. Mr. Smith continued, “I know you may have never thought about going to college. But everything is possible. When I was at your age, I was a troublemaker just like you and never thought I’d be able to go to college, either. It was all because of the support and encouragement of Mr. Howard, my math teacher in high school.” 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已 为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Then, Mr. Smith began to tell Billy his story. Paragraph 2: Billy was greatly touched by Mr. Smith’s story. 好题探究 最佳素材 读后续写评分标准中提出“自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰， 前后呼应，意义连贯。”这不仅提及了句与句间的衔接，也对文章整体的连贯性做出了要求。 把握衔接 把握过渡 与段首语进行衔接首先要学会提取段首语的关键信 息。要做好情节与行文，特别是续写第一段第一句话， 第一段最后一句话及第二段第一句话的衔接，阅读时 要提取以下几个方面的信息： 1. 提取段首语中的名词 ( 包括代词 ) 2. 提取段首语中的关键时刻： 通 常 有 just then，suddenly，at the very moment， finally，this time 等时间状语。 3. 提取段首语中的地点位置 1. 表 示 并 列 关 系 的 过 渡 词：and，as well as，or，not only... but also... 2. 表 示 转 折 关 系 的 过 渡 词：but，yet，however， although，though... 3. 表 示 时 间 关 系 的 过 渡 词：first，second，third，and then，finally，after，before，after a few days，at last，at that time，later，in the past，immediately，in the meanwhile，when，while，then，after that... 137 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）&读后续写 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 比利出身贫穷，从未想过自己以后可以上大学。比利虽然聪明却不好好学习。一次，比 利和一个男孩打架时被史密斯先生看到了，史密斯先生和比利分享了自己曾经的经历。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1) Born in a poor community, Billy knew nothing about college and his future. P Plot (Para. 6) Mr. Smith encouraged Billy and mentioned his teacher Mr. Howard. T Theme (Para. 2—4) One day Billy was fighting against a boy when Mr. Smith turned up. E Emotion (Para. 5) Billy was puzzled and worried about how Mr. Smith would punish him. 三个基础（SUM） ★语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第三人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与自我”—— 校园生活 ★主角：Billy，Mr. Smith ★Billy was smart but naughty and he didn’t study hard. ★Mr. Smith was determined to help the potential boy. ★Figure out how would Mr. Howard help Mr. Smith? Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 首尾呼应水到渠成 回忆少时史密斯也总惹事 (要点�) 霍华德似警察总能逮住他 终于史密斯向他屈服认错 (要点�) 被鼓励被引导最后上大学 (要点�) 很幸运史密斯乐意帮他 痛改前非决定改变人生 (要点�) 不耻下问师生共同努力 (要点�) 考上大学成功感悟师恩 (要点�) greatly touched tell Billy his story 新高中英语写作满分素材 138 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① 史密斯先生说到 自 己“skipped class”说明也曾 与现在的比利一 样淘气，对未来 没有规划。 ② 将自己的老师比 作警察，突出了 霍华德老师的火 眼金睛。 ③ 使 用“It was the first time that”句式且在 句中含有定语从 句， 且“to be admitted into a college”说明他 终于树立了目标。 ④ 句子虽短但是总 结了史密斯先生 最终在老师鼓励 下成功。 ⑤ 与段首句衔接紧 密，痛定思痛后 的比利完全洗心 革面。 ⑥ 生动描述了史密 斯先生和其他老 师是如何帮助比 利的。 ⑦ 功夫不负有心人 比利终于获得成 功，考上大学功 成名就。 ⑧ 使用倒装句凸显 文章的主题，既 感 师 恩 又 弘 扬 主题。 Paragraph 1: Then, Mr. Smith began to tell Billy his story. a“At that time, I usually skipped classes and every teacher was seemingly used to that except Mr. Howard. bHe seemed to be a policeman and arrested me again and again, so finally I yielded in case of meeting his disappointed eyes. And he noticed my change and talked with me about the future patiently. cIt was the first time that I had heard somebody who advised me to further my education and I began to study hard to be admitted into a college with the help of a scholarship. dAnd finally I made it.” Paragraph 2: Billy was greatly touched by Mr. Smith’s story. eSo he began to listen to the teachers carefully in every class and finish his homework by himself. fFortunately, Mr. Smith was willing to help him make up for what he missed before and other teachers were all glad to see his change and answer his questions with patience. gEventually, with Billy ’s efforts and his teachers’ support, he was admitted into a famous college and became a doctor. hOnly then did Billy realize how great was Mr. Smith as a teacher. (175 words) 139 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）&读后续写 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 询问信 Writing 1 假定你是李华，了解到你校国际部正在招募儒家思想宣传志愿者，在暑期面向外国友人 宣传中国传统文化。你对这个活动很感兴趣，准备报名参加。由于活动信息不太明确，你准 备写一封咨询信，询问相关信息。 内容包括： 1. 活动的时间、地点； 2. 参选的要求； 3. 期待回复并表示感谢。 注意： 1. 词数 100 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：儒家思想 Confucianism Dear Sir/Madam, Yours, Li Hua （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 (2023 年湖北荆门期末 ) 假定你是李华，荆门市第三中学高一的学生。你从网上得知某机构要在暑假期间举行到 英国参观的游学活动，请你根据以下要点给该机构写一封咨询信。内容包括： 1. 活动安排； 2. 相关费用等。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：游学 educational travel Dear Sir/Madam, Sincerely yours, Li Hua （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） 新高中英语写作满分素材 140 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 (2023 届 4 月浙江宁波模拟 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 When I adopted him, he had been rescued from death inside a tightly tied black trash bag abandoned right beside a garbage truck on the road. An alert garbage man noticed the bag moving and used a metal rake( 耙子 ) to tear open the bag to look inside. There was my shaking puppy dog. The rake damaged the nerves in his back so he limped a little, but he could run as fast as lightning. For my dog’s first birthday, I entered him in a fun run sponsored by our local Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Animals (SPCA). I’m not much of a runner, but the run was only 3 kilometers, so I thought it would be fun for both of us. We practiced for weeks. On our practice runs, he was always eager to go and usually dragged me along behind him. I worked on his leash( 拴狗链 ) manners so that he wouldn’t trip me on the big day. I felt we were ready for anything. The fun run was downtown among the big buildings, so the noise of barking dogs all around us rose to a deafening pitch at the start of the race. My dog was frightened when the starting tone went off. He had trouble running in the right direction with all the confusion around us. Soon the runners began to thin out, and my dog was running straight and fast. We were passing people and making great time. I was dreaming of a gold-medal finish. However, when we were six blocks from the finish, my dog suddenly stopped and dropped to the ground like a sack of potatoes. I almost dislocated my shoulder from the sudden stop as I was pulled backward by the leash. He was lying flat on his belly with his head down in the middle of the crossroads. At first I thought something bad had happened to him. He was shaking and sobbing. I did a quick check and couldn’t see anything wrong. I tried to get him up, but he refused. The police officer doing traffic control impatiently signed me to move away so he could release the cars. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: But I couldn’t get my seventy-five-pound dog to get up. Paragraph 2: Another half-block of carrying him brought the answer—a moving garbage truck. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 141 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）&读后续写 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 (2023 届浙江台州 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 My best friend Carla Hernandez called me on Thursday afternoon. “Daniel, meet me in the park near the playground in five minutes. I have a great idea!” This worried me because Carla’s great ideas almost always meant big trouble for me! I dashed outside and jogged to the park. When I saw Carla, my heart sank because her large dog Perro was with her. I liked everything about Carla except Perro. I had never had a pet in my house, and I felt uncomfortable and nervous around animals. But I was embarrassed to say I was afraid of Carla’s dog. Upon my arrival, Carla smiled in a joyful voice. “Isn’t this the perfect location for a pet show?” I was surprised at her words. Carla explained to me that all the kids in the neighborhood could show off their pets’ talents and demonstrate the things they did well. Besides, there were plenty of comfortable benches for our parents and friends to sit on as audience. Carla added that I could be the announcer since I didn’t have a pet for the show. What she said directly affected my mood because crowds always made me nervous and unsure. Looking into her eyes, I apologized, “I’m sorry, but that’s impossible! Besides, I don’t like animals, remember?” “That’s nonsense,” said Carla. “There’s nothing to be concerned about because you’ll be great!” Just at that time, Perro leaped up, slobbered all over me, and almost knocked me down. “Yuck. Down, Perro! Stay!” I shouted. Perro sat as still as a statue. “Wow, you’re good at that,” Carla raised her voice excitedly. “Now let’s get started because we have a lot to do.” With her encouragement, I decided to have a try. After going back home, I couldn’t wait to practise announcing each pet’s act. By Saturday morning I had practiced hundreds of times. However, my stomach was doing flip flops by the time the audience arrived at the park. The size of the crowd made me feel even more anxious. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: When the show began, I took a deep breath and announced the first pet. Paragraph 2: Then it was Carla and Perro’s turn. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 142 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 被动语态 看到主语为物，且动词为及物动词时，使用被动语态可以显示扎实的语法基础。被动语态 由“be+ 过去分词”构成，be 动词有人称、数和时态的变化。被动语态的构成形式还有“get/ become+ 过去分词”。 各种时态的被动语态形式如下表 (以动词 give 为例 )： 现在时 过去时 将来时 过去将来时 一般式 am given is given are given was given were given shall be given will be given should be given would be given 进行式 am being given is being given are being given was being given were being given 无 无 完成式 has been given have been given had been given shall have been given will have been given should have been given would have been given 假设你是红星中学高一学生李华。你所在年级将于五月份组织一次赴西安的游学活动 (go on cultural tour to Xi’an)。你对此很感兴趣。请给活动负责人写一封邮件，咨询更多信息，内 容包括： 1. 北京到西安的交通方式； 2. 西安游学的主要内容； 3. 其他想要咨询的信息。 注意：1. 词数 100 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to ask for information about the cultural tour to Xi’an. I ① (感 兴趣 ) it but I would like to ask for some more details so that adequate preparations ② ( 能做 ) in advance. Firstly, I wonder whether your relevant information ③ ( 能发给我 ) about the mode of transportation from Beijing to Xi’an. Secondly, I know that various kinds of activities ④ ( 将举行 ) . Would it be possible to tell me more about them? In addition, I ⑤ ( 有点担心 ) the expenses. I would be grateful if you could send me a price list introducing expenses for items like travel and accommodation. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours, Li Hua 提分臻题 妙法巧用 143 Week 13 应用文写作（询问信）&读后续写 环境描写（3）：细节环境 细节环境描写是更为高级的描述，而且心理暗示更佳。在续写的时候仔细、深度展开 对一些细节环境的描写，会让读者在感觉上更加真实，如身临其境，更容易带入到情节发 展中来，也能对故事发展起到一定的促进作用。 第一组：我沐浴在阳光下，琥珀色的阳光亲吻着全身的每寸肌肤。 ☆概括描写： I was bathed in the sunlight. The amber like sunshine was kissing every inch of my skin. ▷细节描述： ① When I the sunlight, the amber like sunshine was kissing every inch of my skin. ( 谓语动词 ) ② in the sunlight, I felt the amber like sunshine was kissing every inch of my skin. (非 谓语动词 ) ③ myself in the sunlight, I felt like the amber like sunshine was kissing every inch of my skin. ( 非谓语动词 ) 第二组： 黄昏时分，在深蓝色的天空下，我们和其他露营者聚一起，在火的陪伴下互相交换 美味的小吃。 ☆概括描写： At dusk, under the deep blue sky, we gathered with other campers. We exchanged delicious snacks around the fire. ▷细节描述： ① At dusk, under the deep blue sky, we gathered with other campers delicious snacks around the fire. ( 非谓语动词 ) ② At dusk, against the deep blue sky, we together with other campers gathered around, yummy snacks with each other in the company of fire. ( 非谓语动词 ) ③ At dusk, against the deep blue sky, we together with other campers gathered around, yummy snacks with each other in the company of fire. ( 独立主格结构 ) 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 知晓询问信的本 质是从别人处获 得 自 己 想 要 的 信息，有求助的 意味。 ▪ 提问的问题 2 到 3 项最佳，问题尽 量简短。 ▪ 文章通常以第一 人称和第二人称 为主。 ▪ 时态以一般现在 时和一般将来时 为主。 Dear Sir/Madam, I’m Li Hua. Thank you for reading my letter. I am very interested in the exchange program ( 你 所 提 供 的 ). I am writing to obtain ( 更多的详细信息 ) about it. Firstly, I am just a graduate from an ordinary high school and I wonder what qualifications ( 对申请人的要求 ). Secondly, ( 如 果 被 录 取 ), what courses am I going to take, and do I need to buy any books ahead of time? In addition, would you be so kind to introduce to me the conditions of board and accommodations? ( 顺便说一句 ), if I need to make any other preparations, let me know, will you? ( 再次感谢 ) for your time, and I’m looking forward to your early reply. Yours sincerely, Li Hua 新高中英语写作满分素材 36 叙事线索 想放弃→奶奶劝说→决定不放弃→继续前进 →找到冰激凌车→心情变化 构思 第一段 只得猜测哪里找 孩子虽累仍然唱 天热让信念动摇 安慰鼓励继续找 第二段 仿佛等待发奖励 感谢耐心和决心 喜极而泣终成功 齐唱永远不放弃 高分范文 Paragraph 1: They walked block after block. Not knowing which direction the truck had taken, they had to make their best guess about where to search. The kids’ tiny legs were tired, but they went on, continuing the chant, “Never give up! Never give up!” After about twenty minutes of walking, Max’s faith started to get shaken in the burning sun. Mimi bent over and patted him gently on the shoulder. Smiling, she comforted the boy, “Max, remember: Winners never quit, and quitters never win”. “Yeah! Never give up!” Charley agreed. Max looked up, thought for a while and jumped to his feet. “You are right. Let’s hurry!” And so they marched on. Paragraph 2: Another two blocks later, they finally found the ice-cream truck! The ice-cream truck was parked just around the corner, shining brilliantly in the sunlight, as if waiting to reward the three adventurers with a most generous treat for their patience and determination. “Finally!” Max cried at this sight, throwing a fist in the air, while Charley screamed with excitement. They laughed, cheered, and chanted in chorus, “Never give up!” (165 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① continue 继续说 ② comfort 安慰说 ③ agree 同意说 ④ cry 哭着说 满分句式 ① The ice-cream truck was parked just around the corner, shining brilliantly in the sunlight, as if waiting to reward the three adventurers with a most generous treat for their patience and determination. ( 运用了现在分词短语作状语和 as if 引导的方式 状语从句的省略 ) ② Max cried at this sight, throwing a fist in the air, while Charley screamed with excitement. ( 运用了 现在分词短语作状语 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① to extend a warm welcome ② to give you a brief introduction ③ Founded last year ④ coming from different countries ⑤ to participate in various activities ⑥ to practice English together 模板背诵 Dear teachers and fellow students, Welcome to take part in the activity called/ themed/titled “Bring Cultural Relics to Life”. In order to enrich students’ school life and make us know more about our cultural relics, our school holds the activity. The activity is made up of/consists of two parts. At the beginning, the headmaster will deliver a speech at the opening ceremony, making/giving a short introduction to cultural relics. After that, some cultural relics such as artifacts, paintings and so on will be displayed, from which we can have a better understanding of our history. Hopefully, you can enjoy yourselves! 技能小练 第一组： ① so ② Locating ③ Located ④ located 第二组： ① wanting ② Surrounded Week 13 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Dear Professor Hanes, Hope this email afinds you well. My name is Li Hua and I am a student of your Economic course. I am 答案全解全析 37 writing to benquire about the requirement of the assignment you gave us last Friday. I am still cnot sure about the format. Could you tell me if there is one fixed referencing style for this course or I can use the one dI am familiar with? Also, are there any requirements for the file format? eLooking forward to your answer! Best wishes, Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Dear Sir/Madam, aLearning you’re recruiting volunteers to promote Confucianism, I’m wondering if i t’s convenient for you to inform me of relevant information. bTo get myself fully prepared and highly functional, I’d appreciate it if you could inform me of the specific time and the place of the activity. cConsidering we’ll serve as the promoter of Confucianism, another point is the requirements for each volunteer, namely our knowledge of the main principles of Confucianism or the language competence to communicate with foreigners. dI’d be extremely grateful if you could provide me with the information above and I’m eagerly waiting for your favorable reply at your earliest convenience. Yours, Li Hua ① 使用现在分词作状语，使用“I’m wondering if it’s convenient for you to...”句式呈现目的。 ② 使用不定式作目的状语，也是在解释咨询话题 的原因，使用“I’d appreciate it if...”句式表达目的。 ③ considering 是现在分词作状语表示原因，本句 使用了较多的高难词汇，如 namely、principles 和 competence 等。 ④ 结尾措辞礼貌委婉，让对方感到非常舒适。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 询问信 人称 第一人称、第二人称 时态 一般将来时、一般现在时 三段式结构 ①首段：开门见山，说明写信意图 ②主体段落：想要咨询的具体问题 ③尾段：表达感谢和希望 语料亮点 Dear Sir/Madam, I’m Li Hua, a Senior 1 student of Jingmen No. 3 High School. aI’m interested in your program of the educational travel posted on the Internet and I’m writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with information regarding it. First of all, I’m eager to know bwhich cities and universities we will pay a visit to during the period. In addition, could you be so kind as to tell me cwhat activities we will participate in apart from visits? Furthermore, dwhat deserves my special attention is the whole cost of this educational travel, including the airplane tickets and accommodation. eThank you for your kindness, and your early reply to this letter will be highly appreciated. Sincerely yours, Li Hua ① 介绍自己的身份之后表达咨询的意向，本句 中使用了过去分词作后置定语，使用了“ it is possible for you to...”句式让对方感受到礼貌和 考虑周到。 ② 这是一个省略引导词的定语从句，句中的短语 “pay a visit to”运用恰当，展示扎实的基本功。 ③ 使用了“participate in”和“apart from”两个高 级短语。 ④ 使用 what 引导主语从句且句中的 deserve、 educational 和 accommodation 都属于较难词汇。 新高中英语写作满分素材 38 ⑤ 表达感谢很真诚，表达期望使用了被动语态， 使句子显得更高级。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 保护动物 原文大意 作者收养了一只被抛弃的小狗，在狗一岁时 报名参加了“快乐奔跑”比赛。比赛期间垃 圾车的声音让狗狗回忆起被抛弃时的场景造 成心理恐惧而不敢前行。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写作者听到 警察的驱赶后用尽方法敦促狗狗继续跑但都 不成功。作者只能扛起狗狗跑向终点。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写作者明白 了狗狗弃赛的原因后非常心疼。在安慰和鼓 励下，狗狗放松下来。最后作者和狗狗一起 跑到了终点，虽然没有获得任何奖项，但作 者获得了狗狗的信任。 叙事线索 帮狗狗站起来→失败→扛狗狗→知晓原因→ 安慰→获得信任 高分范文 Paragraph 1: But I couldn’t get my seventy-five-pound dog to get up. The harder I tried to scoop him up from the pavement, the more he fought me. The officer yelling and cars honking, I pulled him with all my might, but in vain. Finally, I got my arm under him and lifted him up in a fireman’s carry, throwing him over my shoulder. As I walked slowly to the roadside, people around were taking my dog’s side, laughing I was running him too hard. I was angry. My dog would run all day long and he wasn’t the least bit tired. Paragraph 2: Another half-block of carrying him brought the answer—a moving garbage truck. Its sound must have hit my dog’s sensitive ears, so he cried louder and clawed at my back as we drew closer to it. I held on tighter and ran as fast as I could to get my sweet baby dog away from that scary garbage truck. I ran with him on my shoulder until I felt him relaxed, and then I set him down. He wagged his tail in gratitude for saving him from the garbage truck. Surely, we didn’t win any medals, but I won his trust forever. (180 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① get up/stand up/rise 站立起来 ② but in vain/but failed 但是失败了 ③ finally/at last/ultimately 最后 ④ surely/certainly 当然了 满分句式 ① The harder I tried to scoop him up from the pavement, the more he fought me.( 运用了“the+ 比较级，the+ 比较级”句型 ) ② The officer yelling and cars honking, I pulled him with all my might, but in vain.( 运用了独立主格 结构 ) ③ As I walked slowly to the roadside, people around were taking my dog’s side, laughing I was running him too hard. ( 运用了 as 引导的时间状语从句以 及现在分词作伴随状语 ) Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 文章主题 人际关系 原文大意 作者的朋友卡拉想举办宠物展，邀请作者去当 主持人。作者开始很犹豫，但是朋友鼓励作者， 于是作者努力练习。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写作者当主持 人的过程以及作者的心理。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写佩罗不听卡 拉的话，导致混乱，作者帮助维持了秩序。 叙事线索 宣布宠物名字→宠物表演→作者放松→佩罗 上台→出乱子→作者解决→卡拉感谢作者→ 作者很高兴 构思 第一段 节目开始我深呼吸 宣布第一只宠物 主持顺利堪称完美 平静放松感觉好 第二段 卡拉让佩罗坐遭拒 卡拉不知怎么办 佩罗挣脱撞倒鸟笼 听我指令控场好 高分范文 Paragraph 1: When the show began, I took a deep breath and announced the first pet. It was a bird named Butter whose talent was walking back and forth on a wire. When Butter finished, everyone clapped and cheered. So far, everything was perfect. I was beginning to feel calmer and more relaxed. I realized that being an announcer was not so bad after all. And the following 答案全解全析 39 programs also succeeded and the audience were happy to appreciate the pets’ performance. I felt even prouder as a host. Paragraph 2: Then it was Carla and Perro’s turn. Carla asked Perro to sit, but Perro didn’t sit. Carla was at a loss what to do next. Perro was too interested in watching so many pet friends at the show. Suddenly, Perro broke free from the rope, leaped quickly and knocked over the bird cage. “Sit!” I shouted at Perro. “Stay!” I cried. Suddenly, everyone stopped and stared at me. Hearing my instructions, Perro sat immediately and looked at me. “Wow, amazing!” said Carla. She smiled at me and gave me a thumbs-up. I felt so happy and proud. (161 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① begin/start/launch 开始 ② finish/conclude/end (up) 结束 ③ suddenly/all of a sudden 突然 满分句式 ① When Butter finished, everyone clapped and cheered. ( 由连接词 when 引导的状语从句 ) ② Hearing my instructions, Perro sat immediately and looked at me.( 非谓语动词作状语 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① am interested in ② can be made ③ could be sent to me ④ will be held ⑤ am slightly worried about 模板背诵 Dear Sir/Madam, I’m Li Hua. Thank you for reading my letter. I am very interested in the exchange program you offered. I am writing to obtain some more detailed information about it. Firstly, I am just a graduate from an ordinary high school and I wonder what qualifications are required for an applicant. Secondly, if admitted, what courses am I going to take, and do I need to buy any books ahead of time? In addition, would you be so kind to introduce to me the conditions of board and accommodations? By the way, if I need to make any other preparations, let me know, will you? Thanks again for your time, and I’m looking forward to your early reply. Yours sincerely, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组 ① was bathed in ② Bathed ③ Bathing 第二组 ① to exchange ② exchanging ③ exchanged Week 14 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Last week I a took part in a fa rmwork programme in the suburbs. At the class meeting, our teacher told us about the programme bthemed/with the theme “Working is most beautiful”. And he cstressed the importance of working with our own hands. When I got home, I dpacked up my luggage for the trip. On the farm, we helped pick watermelons. eWhile working, I realised how hard it was to work in the fields under a hot sun. When I came back home, I fshared my experiences with my parents. And they were very proud of me. Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇