Week 9 应用文写作(求助信)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

89 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）&读后续写 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）& 读后续写 ▷ Start with an introduction. S i n c e y o u ’ r e w r i t i n g t o someone not so familiar, your introduction should include your name, pos i t ion , and organization. Also, describe your organization’s project and your requested help. ▷ Describe your organization. Give a brief background of your organization. If it’s non- profit, state so. You can include an overview of your programs, projects, and workforce. State how your organization has carried out previous projects successfully through the help of other donors. ▷ State the need for the project. A need statement that describes the purpose for which your organization is requesting funds should be stated. For example, your organization is a non-profit one that wants to embark on a project to enroll 100 children in school for free. You could provide evidence that your need is a pressing issue that you want to address. ▷ List other funders you’re approaching. It’s helpful to include a brief l i s t of other ent i t ies ( 实 体 ) your organization has approached. If you’ve received funding from any organization, state how much you require to reach your goal. ▷ Conclude. Close you r l e t t e r w i th a summary, in which you can restate all the critical points of your letter. Remember to thank the recipient for their consideration and include your contact information. Sample Letter of Asking for Help Dear Mr. Haverto, I’m writing on behalf of Help for Humanity. As you may know, we help local residents who need clothing, personal items, or household items. I’m writing to ask you to consider donating to Help for Humanity. Your assistance will help your neighbors in need by offering them basic necessities. Often these neighbors do not have the items required to maintain a household or the clothing needed to seek and maintain employment. You can help by donating your unused clothing or household items to our organization. Our drop- off point is located at 3098 West 93rd in Boonesville. Thank you so much for taking the time to read this letter and consider my request. Your assistance is greatly appreciated. Respectfully yours, Alicia Jennings 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） Steps to Writing a Formal Letter of Asking for Help 美文撷英 ① I’m writing to ask you for a recommendation letter for a scholarship. Your assistance can greatly improve my chances of receiving the scholarship I need to continue my education. ② You can help by sending your donation..., or by calling... with your payment information. ③ You can help by sending a letter of recommendation to... by... ④ Thank you so much for taking the time to read this letter and consider my request. Your assistance is greatly appreciated. 新高中英语写作满分素材 90 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2021 年全国甲卷 ) 假定你是李华。你校 计划举办介绍中国传统文 化的主题班会，并在英文 网站展示。请你写一封邮 件给外国朋友 Chris，向他 请教哪些中国传统文化更 吸引外国友人。邮件内容 包括： 1. 阐明写信事由； 2. 征求意见； 3. 表示感谢。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节， 以使行文连贯。 Dear Chris, ( 介 绍 原 因 ) Word came that our school is going to hold a class meeting whose topic is related to Chinese traditional culture. 同位语从句 +whose 引导定 语从句 Because this activity will be presented on the English website, I sincerely want you to offer me some advice. ( 解释事由 ) As far as we know, there is a huge cultural difference between China and the western countries. In order to get more clicks, you could tell me which Chinese culture you westerners prefer. 不定式作目的状语 What’s more, if I want to decorate my website with some Chinese elements, what should I do? Knowing you are interested in China, I do believe you can help me solve these puzzles. 现在分词作状语表示原因 ( 补充说明并表示感谢 ) If possible, you can reply to me as soon as possible. 省略句 I will take your advice into consideration. I really appreciate your help. Yours, Li Hua 假定你是李华，下周 将参加英语模联(MUN)活动, 请你用英语给外教 Henry 写 一封邮件 , 内容如下 : 1. 借 用《 英 语 时 事 新 闻 字 典》(Dictionary of English Media）； 2. 请教英文演讲技巧 ; 3. 请求当面指导。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右 ; 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 Dear Henry, How is everything going these days? ① ( 我写信向你 求助 ). While preparing to attend MUN next week, I have some difficulty with concepts and expressions of the current affairs and speech skills. I’m wondering if I could borrow your Dictionary of English Media. ② ( 此外 ), I’m at a loss how to make my speech convincing and persuasive. Could you be so kind as to offer me some advice? ③ ( 如果你抽时间面对面指导我，我将不胜感激 ). Yours, Li Hua 求助信 一般现在时，一般将来时 通常以第一人称为主，第二人称为辅 知己知彼介绍自己 委婉真诚但不自卑 解释原因不卑不亢 表达感谢期待回复 Para. 1：表明写信目的，请求帮助 Para. 2：说明缘由，陈述求助的具体内容 Para. 3：表达感谢，希望得到帮助 时态 人称 特点 结构 求助信 91 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）&读后续写 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① help/assist/aid/support 帮助 ② concerning/regarding 关于 ③ challenge/puzzle/confusion/headache 挑 战 / 疑惑 / 混乱 / 令人头疼的事 ④ reply/response/feedback 回复 短语： ① have trouble/difficulty (in) doing sth. 做某事 有麻烦 ② meet with/come across some problems 遇到 一些问题 ③ be faced with difficulties 面临困难 ④ be busy doing sth./be occupied in doing sth. 忙于做某事 ⑤ concentrate on/focus on 集中精力 ⑥ be anxious to do sth./long to do sth. 渴望做 某事 ⑦ do sb. a favor/give sb. a hand/give sb. a helping hand 帮某人一个忙 ⑧ turn to sb. for help 寻求帮助 吸睛开头句 ① I’m writing to ask for your help. 我写信的目 的是希望得到您的帮助。 ② I’m writing to you to ask whether you could do me a favor.我写信是想问您能否帮助我。 ③ Sorry to bother you, but I have some difficulties here and I’m in desperate need of your help. 很抱歉打扰您，但我有些困难 迫切需要您的帮助。 ④ I have some difficulties in doing... which bothers me a lot. I am wondering whether you could do me a favor. 我在做……方面有 些困难，这很困扰我。我想知道您能否帮 助我。 高光篇中句 ① Recently, I’ve been having many difficulties in..., and I have no choice but to turn to you for help. 最近，我在……上遇到了一些困 难，我别无选择，只能向您求助。 ② We will be grateful if you can give us some advice on... 如果您能在……上给我们提供 建议，我们将不胜感激。 ③ Faced with/Facing the above problems, I am anxious to get your help. Would you please offer me some advice on...? 面对以上的问 题，我渴望得到您的帮助。您能给予我一 些关于……的建议吗？ ④ I’m dying for your effective advice to address these problems. 我渴望得到您的有效建议 来解决这些问题。 ⑤ What bothers me most is that it’s difficult for me to... 最困扰我的是，我很难…… 精彩结尾句 ① I would appreciate it if you could do me a favor and spare some time for... 如果您能花 点时间帮助我……，我将不胜感激。 ② Thanks for your kind consideration and I look forward to receiving your earliest reply. 谢谢您的关注，期待收到您的尽早回复。 ③ I’m eager to get your timely help./I’m eager for your timely help. 我渴望得到您的及时 帮助。 ④ I would appreciate it very much if you can offer me some timely help. 如果您能向我提 供一些及时的帮助，我将不胜感激。 ⑤ I would appreciate it very much if you can give/lend me some practical advice. 如 果 您 能给我一些切实可行的建议，我将不胜 感激。 新高中英语写作满分素材 92 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 9：把握故事节奏 (2020 年全国新高考Ⅰ & Ⅱ卷） 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一个完整的故事。 The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges. Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy — his name was Bernard — had interested her very much. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.” After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money.” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.” “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.” For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish( 完成 ).” The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn( 爆米 花 ), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.” 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已 为你写好。 Paragraph 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Paragraph 2: With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 好题探究 最佳素材 故事可能出现张弛、松紧、高低、跳跃、平稳、强弱等各种状态。控制叙事节奏的方法有： 1. 选择恰当词汇，把控叙事节奏 选用不同的词汇以改变故事节奏，如动词的恰当使用对故事的发展至关 重要。 2. 控制句子长短，调节叙事节奏 正常句子的平均长度为 15 到 25 个词左右。叙事时要尽量避免使用短句， 多使用长句；长句结构复杂，可能涵盖从句、各类修饰词或非谓语结构。 3. 利用各种写作手法，丰富叙事节奏 注意使用描述性语句，合理使用无灵主语、修辞手法，减少人物对话。 4. 制造故事冲突，增强节奏张力 矛盾冲突要指向人们的价值取向，比如是与非、成与败、诚与伪、善与恶、 得与失、乐与苦、爱与恨、小我与大我、主观与客观，这需要我们在写 作之前考虑好。 93 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）&读后续写 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 Meredith 家住在一个小社区。经济衰退导致每家的日子都不好过，但是 Meredith 太太还 是会经常帮助他人。她在家里说到一个因为家里经济拮据而想赚钱帮助妈妈的叫 Bernard 的 男孩。她的孩子深受触动，决定帮助 Bernard。方法就是把家里的一些玉米做成爆米花，以 用来售卖并赚钱。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1) The Meredith family lived in a community suffering from declined economy. P Plot (Para. 8) John reminded them of the corn which can be made into popcorn. T Theme (Para. 2—4) Mrs. Meredith mentioned a boy called Bernard who wanted to make money to support his family. E Emotion (Para. 5—7) John was excited because he had thought out of a solution to help Bernard. 三个基础（SUM） ★语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第三人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与社会”—— 人际关系 ★主角：the Merediths (Mom and children), Bernard ★Mrs. Meredith often helped others, which had a deep influence on her kids. ★A boy called Bernard was in urgent need of money to help his family. ★Figure out what would happen after they decided to make popcorn! Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 首尾呼应水到渠成 妈妈建议了解Bernard (要点�) 带着孩子认识Bernard 邀请他到家，告诉他计划 (要点�) Bernard兴奋感动，烤爆米花成功 (要点�) everything ready Bernard started business 准备就绪，Bernard开始营业 (要点�) 爆米花广受欢迎很快卖完 为能帮家里减负高兴，感激他人帮助 Mrs. Meredith自豪欣慰 a good one John’s idea 新高中英语写作满分素材 94 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① 与段首句衔接紧 密，妈妈赞同孩 子们的想法，同 时给出了合理建 议，让他们先了 解 Bernard。 ② 展开合理想象， 如何让孩子们与 Bernard 相 识。 本句使用现在分 词作伴随状语。 ③ 合 理 想 象 需 要 帮 助 的 Bernard 在 听 到孩子们的计划 之 后 的 反 应， “too... to...” 的运用使画面感 更强。 ④ 与原文中孩子们 的名字吻合，三 个孩子各司其职， 为 帮 助 Bernard 付出一份努力。 ⑤ 使用现在分词作 状语表示方式， 描述首次做生意 的 Bernard 首 战 告捷的状况。 ⑥ 使用倒装句强调 Bernard 获 得 的 成功简直让他自 己想不到。 ⑦ 使 用“this was the first time that...” 句 式 强 调这是他首次能 在金钱上帮助家 里渡过难关。 ⑧ 本 句 使 用 while 连接的两个并列 分句分别强调了 Bernard 和 Mrs. Meredith的感受。 Paragraph 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. a“Great! But first you should get to know Bernard,” she said delightedly. Then she took them to visit the family and the kids hit it off right away. They invited Bernard to their home, btelling him about their plan on the way. Bernard was ctoo excited to say anything. They set to work immediately they arrived home. dClara went out to buy some paper bags, while John, Harry, and Bernard were busy popping the corn. Just as popcorn came out of the oven, Clara returned with paper bags. Paragraph 2: With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. eCarrying a basket filled with bags of popcorn, Bernard was welcomed by the people around. And before long, he returned with an empty basket, much sooner than expected. fNever before has he earned so much money in his life. gAnd this was the first time that he had helped his family financially. hFeeling excited and grateful for the kids’ help, he burst into tears and hugged them tightly, while Mrs. Meredith felt relieved and proud of these kids and encouraged them to keep it up. (173 words) 95 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）&读后续写 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 求助信 Writing 1 (2023 届福建龙岩二模 ) 根据下面两幅图片，请你以北极熊的身份向人类写一封求助信。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear Humans, Your forever friend, a polar bear （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 (2023 届山东聊城三模 ) 假定你是李华，你报名参加了你校即将举办的关于大自然的英文诗歌朗诵大赛 (poetry recitation contest)。请给外教 Mr. Black 写一封邮件，请他指导你选材和朗诵练习。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear Mr. Black, Yours sincerely, Li Hua （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） 新高中英语写作满分素材 96 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 “BEES ARE DYING!” Doodlebug Pinkley cried, thrusting his latest copy of World of the Weird at his sister Dandelion. His favorite magazine had a lot of strange but important content. This month it was insects in danger. The number of certain bugs, including bees, was falling sharply all over the world. “It’s terrible!” Dandelion replied, after reading the article. They were sitting on the outdoor patio( 露台 ) of Cool Yule’s Ice Cream Shop. “Maybe we could make a bee roof garden, too — like in this article,” Doodlebug suggested. Yule recommended making it on the patio, adding a pollinator( 传粉昆虫 ) garden up there would attract bees — and more customers. “Brilliant!” Everyone else responded in a chorus. Now the problem was how to get the funds. Dandelion proposed raising money by setting up a booth near the shop’s entrance to alert people and ask them to donate. The plan was a go! The next day their friends Bog, Tomiko and Izzy met Doodlebug and Dandelion inside Yule’s. Everyone was excited. They made handouts explaining how the garden would attract pollinators, do something to help prevent flooding, and improve the air. “We should have a bee mascot( 吉 祥 物 ),” Izzy suggested. Doodlebug recalled the old bee costume that his mom wore for Halloween once. Over the enthusiastic uproar, Dandelion shouted, “And you’ll be the bee, Doodlebug!” “WILL NOT!” Doodlebug shot back. “Too big. We need to stuff some grownups into that costume.” But who, then? For ten mad minutes, the kids debated loudly. “Silence, you little noisy kids!” someone suddenly roared. “I’m trying to read about bees in danger!” The whole crew turned in shock. There sat Doodlebug’s serious teacher, Mrs. Noodleknocker. Doodlebug had discovered long ago that she was a World of the Weird fan, but that didn’t make her any nicer. “Bees and butterflies need help!” Mrs. Noodleknocker cried. “But a person can’t even worry about them peacefully!” 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Doodlebug’s eyes went wide as a brilliant idea came to mind. Paragraph 2: The bee campaign was a massive success! （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 97 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）&读后续写 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 (2023 届广东名校联盟大联考 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Most of the fire accidents happen because of our carelessness. Every year there are many fire accidents, resulting in a great loss of property and life. Many of these can be easily avoided if we are more careful and observe certain rules regarding fire-protection. There have been some unforgettable accidents in my life. One has left me a shocking impression. It was 9 a.m. on Sunday. I was busy doing my homework at home and my mother was preparing tea for me in the kitchen when suddenly there were shouts, cries and a lot of confusing noise coming from outside. Immediately, I rushed out to figure out what was all that. I was informed that a supermarket warehouse( 仓库 ) in our neighborhood had caught fire. Wanting to help put out the fire, I ran to the place. A big crowd of neighbors had collected as well. Some were helping throw water and some were trying to beat the fire with sticks. Although all the people struggled to help, before long, the fire, driven by the strong winds, swallowed the whole building. Before the owner, the employers and all the neighbors could do anything more, huge and high columns of smoke and flames spread fast. Seeing things were almost out of control, someone called firefighters at once. With all the belongings inside burning in the fire, the owner could do nothing except crying, helpless and heartbroken. It was a horrible scene which I could never forget. Without powerful equipment, we could just wait for firefighters’ coming. During the waiting for fire rescue, many began talking about how the fire broke out and who was to blame for the accident. Were the members of the supermarket themselves or the others responsible for the accident? When people continued chatting about the possible causes of the fire, the fire-engines soon arrived at the scene. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Without any delay, the firemen hurried for fighting the fire. Paragraph 2: The policemen set about looking into the cause of the fire. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 98 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 特殊句式 ◇强调句：可以轻松地将时间、地点、原因、方式等类型的状语从句转变为强调句。 It was not until I arrived home that I realized I had left the bag on the shop counter. ◇倒装句：只要句中有介词短语或状语从句，便可将其提前，变成倒装句。 Only when I turned right at the crossing did that car crack towards me. Only by this means can he escape from the big fire. ◇ with 引导的伴随结构：可以将状语从句或并列句中的其中一个分句变成 with 结构。 With the sun lighting brightly and the birds singing clearly, I went to school in high spirits. He always likes to sleep with the windows open. ◇独立主格：将主从句去掉连词，前句动词变为分词即可。 The weather being fine, a large number of people went to climb the Western Hills. ( 湖北新高考 2 月质检 ) 假定你是李华，寒假想去当地一家国际旅行社兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历。请你给 外教 Mr. Hall 写封邮件，请他帮忙修改随附的应聘所需材料。内容包括： 1. 来信目的；2. 请求帮助；3. 表达感谢。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 参考词汇：个人简历 resume Dear Mr. Hall, I’m writing to seek your help. ① ( 我在申请 ) a part-time job in an International travel agency. I think it’ll be both an opportunity and a new challenge to me. By doing the part-time job I can get some precious experience ② ( 为了让我能 ) better adapt to my future career. I’ve already written the application and resume. But I’m afraid that ③ ( 可能有 ) some mistakes about the words and format. So could you please correct any mistakes in the material ④ ( 我附在信里的 ) ? ⑤ ( 如果……我将感激不尽 ) you could do me the favor. Yours, Li Hua 提分臻题 妙法巧用 99 Week 9 应用文写作（求助信）&读后续写 动作描写（5）：“想”的动作 英语中的“想”不仅仅只有“think”，还有“希望、想要、打算、料想、推测、估计、 怀念、想念、思念、头脑运转、意识到”等等，续写时我们要沿着情节的发展去“想”， 可能是对情节的联想，也可能是对感情的寄托。 第一组：他显然已经忘记了我的来意。 ☆概括描写： He had clearly forgotten why I came here. ▷细节描述： ① , he had forgotten why I came here. ( 副词 ) ② he had forgotten the reason why I visited him. (it 作形式主语 ) ③ The reason for my visit had obviously . ( 动词短语 ) 第二组：当他知道了问题是什么后，他的头脑开始飞速运转，试图想出一个好的解决方案。 ☆概括描写： When he knew what the problem was, his mind began to work quickly, trying to come up with a good solution. ▷细节描述： ① When he knew what the problem was, his mind began to rapidly, trying to come up with a good solution. ( 同义词 ) ② After he knew what the problem was, his mind began to , trying to think of a good solution. ( 同义词 ) ③ His mind , he tried to find a good solution with the problem in his heart. (独 立主格结构 ) 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 知晓求助信的本 质是得到求助方 的帮助。 ▪ 解释求助的原因， 先从客观角度再 从主观角度；先 陈列困难，给对 方多种帮助方式 进行选择；对方 接受自己的想法。 ▪ 求助要产生更深 的共情影响，让求 助方更乐于帮忙。 ▪ 文章通常以第一 人称和第二人称 为主。 ▪ 时态以一般现在 时和一般将来时 为主。 Dear Miss Evans, How is everything going? I’m writing in sincerity to (请 你帮忙 ) regarding a play we adapted according to the textbook. We’d like to combine your culture with ours ( 通过改编 ) the classic novel The Steamboat for a short English play. The play (以……为背景 ) a big storm after midnight, on the raft down the river navigation, we see a steamboat that is going to sink. We saved a scared boy. However, the adaption is ( 相当大的挑战 ). Having written the English script, we don’t want anything inappropriate to spoil the play. So would you please ( 匀出时间 ) to review the draft script attached to this email and make necessary changes? If ( 方便的话 ), may I pay you a visit at your office next Tuesday to ( 给出更多细节 )? Given your busy schedule, I’d be very appreciative if you ( 主动给 ) some professional advice. Looking forward to your early reply. Best regards! Yours truly, Li Hua 答案全解全析 25 ② As I worked my way into other books and plays and films, it became clearer and clearer to me how fortunate I had been. (as 引导时间状语从句；it 作 形式主语，how 引导真正主语从句 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① attach great importance to ② develop/foster your interest in ③ A wide variety of ④ exchange your experiences with others ⑤ get improved ⑥ be of benefit to/be beneficial to 模板背诵 Dear Mike, Knowing that you are interested in Chinese culture, I’m writing to recommend an online course, Festivals in China. Scheduled to take place every Saturday afternoon this term, the course covers various topics of traditional Chinese festivals, ranging from their origins to distinct features. I’m sure that you will find the course more than entertaining. To attend it, you have to register at our school’s website. The teachers will get in touch with you in 24 hours. Wish you good luck! Yours, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组： ① embraced ② held ③ gathered 第二组： ① an awkward hug ② embraced ③ hugging Week 9 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Dear Henry, How is everything going these days? aI’m writing to seek help from you. While preparing to attend MUN next week, I have some difficulty with concepts and expressions of the current affairs and speech skills. I’m wondering if I could borrow your Dictionary of English Media. bFurthermore, I’m at a loss how to make my speech convincing and persuasive. Could you be so kind as to offer me some advice? cI’d appreciate it if you could spare some time to give me face-to-face instructions. Yours, Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语篇类型 求助信 人称 第一人称 时态 一般现在时、一般将来时 结构 首段：表明身份，解释求助原因 主体段落：由个人到现象，给出细节 尾段：感谢人类，表达愿望 语料亮点 Dear Humans, I’m a polar bear, your big and white friend in the north. aFaced with/Facing the challenge of losing precious ice land, I am writing to ask you for some ways out. bWith the development of industry and cities, climate has been worsening. cAs the planet warms, it becomes harder for us to get food. Thus, recent years have witnessed many of my peers’ death. The loss of our species is the loss of yours. dI sincerely beg for your immediate action to protect our common home — the Earth. eOnly if you take strong measures, can wild animals, like me, be preserved and it is not until then that we will make a better home together. Thanks for reading and looking forward to your giving me a hand! Your forever friend, a polar bear ① 使用非谓语动词结构作原因状语解释原因，使 用现在进行时强调正在等待人类的帮助。 新高中英语写作满分素材 26 ② 进一步解释遭遇到危险的相关原因，使用了介 词短语作状语。 ③ 使用主从复合句，主句中使用了“It is/becomes harder for sb. to do sth.”句式。 ④ 使用了 sincerely 和 immediate 亮点词汇使文章熠 熠生辉。 ⑤ 使用“only + 状语从句”引导倒装句强调人类应 该采取行动，还使用了“It is not until that...”强 调句式，使整个句子富于变化。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 求助信 人称 第一人称、第三人称 时态 一般将来时、一般现在时 三段式结构 ①首段：开门见山，询问能否帮忙 ②主体段落：若能帮忙使用何种方式 ③尾段：表达感谢，期望对方的回复 语料亮点 Dear Mr. Black, How are you doing? I’ve signed up for the English poetry recitation contest to be held by our school, and aI’m writing to see whether you could provide me with some help. bThe contest requires that each participant should recite a poem about nature, and I’ve found three poems. cCould you be kind enough to help me choose the most suitable one? Besides, dI hope you could also give me some advice on how to recite it. eI would be very grateful if you could offer help. Looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours sincerely, Li Hua ① 本句中第一个并列分句已经解释事由，第二个 并列分句则委婉提出求助。 ② 从客观角度介绍竞赛要求，实则是在告诉对方 可能采取的施助方式，且本句中使用了虚拟 语气。 ③ 委婉提出自己想得到的帮助。 ④ 附加提出另外的要求，即给一些建议。 ⑤ 真诚表达感谢。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 校园生活 原文大意 两兄妹在了解了蜜蜂数量急剧下降后，决定做 点什么。是打造一个蜜蜂屋顶花园，设立一 个摊位筹集资金，还是增加一个蜜蜂吉祥物， 孩子们争得不亦乐乎。Doodlebug 想起妈妈在 万圣节穿的蜜蜂服。当争辩谁来穿这件衣服 时，Noodleknocker 太太让她们安静一点，她 可是杂志《奇妙世界》的狂热粉丝。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句内容可知，本段描写孩子 们请求 Noodleknocker 太太扮演蜜蜂吉祥物。 ②根据第二段首句内容可知，本段描写 Noodleknocker 太太在筹款当天穿上蜜蜂服装 的表现，后来蜜蜂花园也吸引了很多顾客和 昆虫。 叙事线索 说明计划→拒绝→请求→答应→活动当天的 表现→花朵吸引顾客和昆虫→ Noodleknocker 太太被大家喜欢 高分范文 Paragraph 1: Doodlebug’s eyes went wide as a brilliant idea came to mind. “THE BEE!” he exclaimed and pointed at Mrs. Noodleknocker, only to be greeted with a glare. Dandelion detailed their plan and asked her to be the bee mascot. After digesting the information, Mrs. Noodleknocker still hesitated. “Just forget it,” she said, turning back to her magazine. Doodlebug responded boldly that this whole plan was indeed for real bees. “Please, lady?” Doodlebug said, adding her favor might double the fund. Mrs. Noodleknocker put down the magazine and gave in. Paragraph 2: The bee campaign was a massive success! On the day of fundraising, Mrs. Noodleknocker wore the bee costume. The group decided a friendly bee was the right way to go. The following hours witnessed the bee buzzing around the booth, arms and legs beating and kicking. Whenever her strange insect eyes landed on someone, the victim quickly took out cash — even without being stung. So funny and inspiring! A few weeks later Cool Yule’s bee garden bloomed spectacularly, attracting customers and good insects from all around. And Mrs. Noodleknocker was thought 答案全解全析 27 of as a nice person from then on. (171 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① come to mind/spring to mind 想起 ② digest the information/take sth. into mind 仔细考虑 ③ hesitate/without hesitation 犹豫 / 毫不犹豫 ④ decide/determine 决定 / 下定决心 ⑤ think of... as/look on... as/refer to... as 把……认作 满分句式 ① “Please, lady?” Doodlebug said, adding her favor might double the fund. ( 现在分词作状语表示补 充说明 ) ② Whenever her strange insect eyes landed on someone, the victim quickly took out cash — even without being stung. (whenever 引 导 让 步 状 语 从句 ) Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 作者家附近超市仓库着火，火势蔓延得很快， 大家忙着救火，但很快火势就失控了。所以 人们都无能为力，只能等待消防队员的到来。 在等待的过程中，许多人开始谈论火灾是如 何发生的，谁应该为这场事故负责。终于， 消防车赶到了现场。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写救援过程。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写火灾的原 因和作者的感悟。 叙事线索 消防队员扑灭大火→超市损失惨重→警察调 查原因→员工粗心导致火灾→作者感悟 构思 第一段 消防员拯救所有人 竭尽全力扑灭火 但仓库货物被毁 救援完成警察到 第二段 检查采访看录像 发现原因是员工 吸烟男子被找到 明白粗心危害大 高分范文 Paragraph 1: Without any delay, the firemen hurried for fighting the fire. Determined to save all people, they did their best to control the fire, pumping a lot of water and aiming at the flames. It took them quite a while to finally put out the fire. Fortunately, there was no loss of life. It occurred to them that the goods stored in the warehouse were in danger. However, they were totally in ruins, and the supermarket would suffer huge financial losses. With all rescue work over, two policemen came to the site and talked with the members of the supermarket for a while. Paragraph 2: The policemen set about looking into the cause of the fire. They checked the remains of the burned goods, interviewed some witnesses and viewed the cameras nearby. Soon they made out one of the employees should be to blame for the accident. The fact was uncovered that the accident happened due to the man’s throwing cigarette carelessly. He would face a severe punishment. That day, I learned a significant lesson that one must avoid carelessness since it can harm both others and oneself. (164 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① be determined to do sth./with determination 决心做 某事 / 坚决地 ② It occurred to sb. that/It struck sb. that/ It hit sb. that... 某人突然想到…… ③ look into/examine 检查 ④ make out/figure out 理解 ⑤ learn a significant lesson 学到一个重要教训 满分句式 ① Determined to save all people, they did their best to control the fire, pumping a lot of water and aiming at the flames. ( 形容词作状语；现在分词作状语 表示伴随 ) ② The fact was uncovered that the accident happened due to the man’s throwing cigarette carelessly. ( 分 割式同位语从句 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① I’m applying for ② so that I can ③ there may be ④ I attach to the letter 新高中英语写作满分素材 28 ⑤ I’d appreciate it if 模板背诵 Dear Miss Evans, How is everything going? I am writing in sincerity to ask you a favor regarding a play we adapted according to the textbook. We’d like to combine your culture with ours by adapting the classic novel The Steamboat for a short English play. The play is set on a big storm after midnight, on the raft down the river navigation, we see a steamboat that is going to sink. We saved a scared boy. However, the adaption is quite a challenge. Having written the English script, we don’t want anything inappropriate to spoil the play. So would you please spare some time to review the draft script attached to this email and make necessary changes? If it is convenient, may I pay you a visit at your office next Tuesday to give you more details? Given your busy schedule, I’d be very appreciative if you offer to give some professional advice. Looking forward to your early reply. Best regards! Yours truly, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组： ① Obviously ② It was clear that ③ slipped his mind 第二组： ① run ② race ③ running/racing Week 10 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Good morning, my friends. My name is Li Jin. I’d like to take this opportunity to talk about how I learn English on the Internet. I regularly attend online classes agiven by expert teachers, where I can not only learn new knowledge such as new grammar rules but also bcommunicate with my online classmates. Besides, I like to watch movies in English, chelping me a lot in learning about the western culture as well as improving my listening and speaking. In addition, there are rich resources on the Internet, dfrom which I can choose what I think is the most useful for my English learning. In a word, I find online learning is ean effective way of learning English. I believe that you have your ideas about learning English on the Internet and we would like to hear about them. Thank you. Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Ladies and gentlemen, On behalf of the English club, ait’s my great honor to introduce the Chinese and English Poetry Recitation Contest to all of you. bIn order to arouse students’ passion for poetry and enrich our school life, the students cwho take part in the contest will recite an English or a Chinese poem and show their feelings dthey want to convey in the poems. After a hot competition, ethe first ten winners will be chosen and given prizes at different levels. The competition will offer a wonderful chance for us fto have a better understanding of Chinese and English classics, stirring up our further love for Chinese and English culture. Hope you would perform yourself well and get a good result. ① 礼貌表达且呈现了发言稿的主题——介绍一场 比赛。 ② 介绍这场比赛的目的，不定式作目的状语置于 句首能突出强调。