Week 6 应用文写作(电子邮件)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

新高中英语写作满分素材 56 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 6 应用文写作（电子邮件）& 读后续写 When emailing a teacher or a professor, you’ll want to use a much more clear tone than you would normally. In this setting, this person is an academic, so formality is required. Dear Professor Smith, Unluckily, due to sickness, I’d like to request an extension to the deadline of our current project. If possible, I’d like an extension until Monday. Please let me know if it works for you. Kind Regards, John Terry When sending a thank you email, thank them for their time and let them know you are available to meet again if needed. “Kindest regards” is a great closing to use as your salutation. Dear Jan, Thanks for giving me the time to speak with you and learn more about the role available. It was a pleasure to connect with you and discuss how I might fill the position of Marketing Associate. Please feel free to contact me if you’d like any more information or if you’d like to arrange another meeting to discuss how we can proceed. I look forward to hearing from you. Kindest Regards, Lorraine Lister 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） How to Write an Email 美文撷英 ① This email is to inform you the school’s annual English Singing Party is to sound off. We cordially invite you to join us and enjoy it. ② The party is scheduled to go from 1:30 p.m. to 4:30 p.m. next Friday in the school theatre. Snacks and fruit will be served at the interval. ③ I’m really excited to hear the news that you’ve got the title “...” in your school. My sincere congratulations to you on your great achievements! ④ There is no doubt that it’s your hard training that leads you to the good result of the race. ⑤ If possible, we’d also like you to do a performance on stage. 57 Week 6 应用文写作（电子邮件）&读后续写 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2023 年北京卷 ) 假设你是红星中学高 三学生李华。你的英国好友 Jim 正在策划一次以“绿色 北京”为主题的社团活动， 他发来邮件询问你的建议。 请你用英文给他回复，内 容包括： 1. 活动形式； 2. 活动内容。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节， 以使行文连贯。 Dear Jim, ( 明确写电子邮件的原因 ) Hearing that you are planning a club activity with the theme of “Green Beijing” and need my help, 现在分词作状语表示原因 I am writing to offer you my suggestions. ( 介绍相关活动 ) I think you can carry out this activity in an interactive and experiential manner, which means students can participate and have a better understanding of “Green Beijing” through getting involved in different activities by themselves. 非限制性定语从句 You can showcase garbage classification on site, plant trees and publicize sharing economy, which will all fit into the theme of “Green Beijing”. 非限制性定语从句 ( 表达愿望 ) Hopefully, you will get some inspiration from my suggestions. Wish you success. Yours, Li Hua (2022 年 1 月浙江卷 ) 假定你是李华，在“中 国—爱尔兰文化节”活动中 结识了爱尔兰朋友 Chris， 现在他已回国，请你给他 写一封邮件，内容包括： 1. 回忆活动经历； 2. 分享个人收获； 3. 希望保持联系。 注意：1. 词数80左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 Dear Chris, How is everything going? I hope ① ( 一切进展顺利 ) back in Ireland. Looking back, I find it has been a year ② ( 自从你 回到爱尔兰 ). I miss you so much. I still remember the very day when we met at China-Ireland Cultural Festival two years ago. ③ ( 恰 恰 就 是在节日上 ) you shared so many interesting things about your country together, ④ ( 通 过 其 学 到 了 很 多 ) about your food, culture and history. We really enjoyed ourselves there. ⑤ ( 更重要的是 ) we became good friends then. Though I felt a little sorry that you left China last year, I am pleased to know you are leading a happy life in your hometown. I hope ⑥ ( 我们能保持联系 ) often. Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua 电子邮件 一般现在时，一般将来时 第一人称为主，第二人称为辅 方便快捷内容简短，身份不同称呼不同 语言简洁意思清楚，重点部分详细介绍 Para. 1 问候 + 引入话题 + 巧妙过渡 Para. 2 完成题目要求，逐一展开要点 Para. 3 再次照应主题，附带客套句 时态 人称 特点 结构 电子 邮件 新高中英语写作满分素材 58 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① aim/purpose/goal/objective/target 目标 ② meaningful/rewarding 有意义的 ③ favorable/profitable 有利的 ④ satisfying/pleasing/content 使人满意的 短语： ① conduct an attractive activity with the theme of ... 举办一个以……为主题的有趣活动 ② inspire the enthusiasm about sth. 激 发 对 某 事的热情 ③ share one’s views on sth. 分享对某事的看法 ④ try one’s best to promote the awareness of sth. 努力提升对某事的意识 吸睛开头句 ① How are you doing?/How are things going on? 近况如何？ ② How are you getting on with your study? 你 学习如何？ ③ As I have not heard from you for long, I feel anxious. 很久没有你的音讯了，我甚是担忧。 ④ I must apologize for not having written to you earlier./I feel very sorry for not being able to reply to your last letter. 没有早点致 信 / 复信，我深表歉意。 ⑤ Please pardon my not replying to your letter earlier. 没能及时回信，还请见谅。 ⑥ I’m eager/excited to inform you of a voluntary activity that you may be interested in. 我迫切地告诉你一个你可能感兴趣的 志愿者活动。 高光篇中句 ① I’m writing to invite you to the art exhibition on Sunday. 我写此信是要邀请你参加周日 的艺术展。 ② I’m writing to inform you that the basketball match is delayed until next week. 我写此信 是要告诉你，篮球赛被推迟到下周了。 ③ I’m writing to tell you something about my recent life. 我写此信是要告诉你我最近的 生活。 ④ I hope the change of the course arrangement will not cause you too much trouble/ inconvenience. 我希望课程安排的变化不会 给你带来太多麻烦 / 不便。 ⑤ In preparation for the coming event, you are supposed to collect some materials regarding traditional Chinese festivals. 为了准备即将到 来的活动，你应该收集一些关于中国传统 节日的资料。 精彩结尾句 ① Looking forward to hearing from you soon. 盼望早日收到你的来信。 ② Please give my regards to your family. 请代 我向你的家人问好。 ③ I’d appreciate it if you could give me a reply at your convenience. 如能尽早回复，我将 不胜感激。 59 Week 6 应用文写作（电子邮件）&读后续写 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 6：沿用原文语言风格 (2021 年全国新高考Ⅰ & Ⅱ卷 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一个完整的故事。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为 你写好。 Paragraph 1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Paragraph 2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 好题探究 最佳素材 读后续写的实质是根据所提供的原文内容，写出与原文主旨、逻辑、语言风格一致的 故事结尾。因此，续写时，除了考虑故事的主题思想，关注逻辑之外，我们也要高度关注 续写部分和原文的语言风格，确保我们写出的结尾在语言风格上和原文保持一致。那么， 我们如何才能写出和原文语言风格一致的文章呢？ 1. 精读原文，理解文章要表达的主旨和思想 文字是为思想服务的，表达特定的思想需要相对应的 有情感特色的文字。如果作者要褒扬特定的人或事， 那么他就会用积极的文字。如果要贬低一个人或一件 事，那么他就会使用消极的文字。理解文章的主旨， 对我们在续写中使用合适的语言有很大的指导意义。 2. 细品原文，分析原文的用词风格 要想准确理解原文文字的特点，就要在文章主旨的指 导下，对原文的文字进行仔细的分析。对原文文字特 点的分析包括： ①对原文人物的动作和心理描写的分析； ②对原文对话的话语特点的分析； ③对原文场景的描写的分析。 3. 有机地组织自己的语言，保持和原文风格的一致 通过对原文主旨的理解和对语言的准确分析，我们就 会对原文的语言特点有比较准确的把握，然后就可以 使用和原文特点一致的文字来进行续写。 新高中英语写作满分素材 60 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 本文是一篇记叙文。文章讲述的是 Jenna 和 Jeff 这对双胞胎兄妹为了在母亲节早上给母 亲惊喜而精心策划并制作早餐的故事；他们克服困难，决不放弃，行文折射出孩子们对母亲 的拳拳之爱。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1) The twins planned to bring their Mom breakfast on Mother’s day. P Plot (Para. 3) Jeff’s hand got burnt by the stove and the bread turned black. T Theme (Para. 2) They started early and everything went on well before Jeff fried the bread. E Emotion (Para. 3) Porridge boiled over; Jenna panicked but Jeff turned off the gas calmly. 三个基础（SUM） ★语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第三人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与自我”—— 家庭生活 ★主角：Jeff, Jenna, Mom, Dad ★The twins dec ided to do s o m e t h i n g f o r M o m o n Mother’s Day. ★Their work went on well at first but soon it turned out to be a mess. ★Figure out what would happen after the situation got worse? Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 首尾呼应水到渠成 知道他们的目的，父亲惊讶感动 (要点�) 父亲参与活动，教他们怎么做 (要点�) 煮粥看好时间，一起重烤面包 香味弥漫厨房，完美早餐准备好 (要点�) carried breakfast upstairs woke Mom up 妈妈听到问候，看见早餐惊喜 (要点�) 丈夫孩子微笑，爸爸讲述过程 (要点�) 妈妈感动落泪，感恩美好生活 (要点�) father appeared twins in disappointment 61 Week 6 应用文写作（电子邮件）&读后续写 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① 使用现在分词作 状语表示原因， 本句中的 he 也与 段首句吻合，父 亲的出现改变了 事态。 ② 父亲的主动要求 参加让爱心早餐 的完成成为现实。 ③ 现在分词作状语 表示伴随，也解 释父亲是如何安 排孩子们完成任 务的。 ④ 使用 with 的复合 结构介绍他们的活 动进展得很顺利。 ⑤ 本句话是对本段 的总结，也与第 二 段 段 首 句 衔 接紧密。 ⑥ 使用独立主格结 构描述妈妈的动 作和状态，句中 使用了高级词汇 harmonious。 ⑦ 本句再次强调了 父亲在续写中穿 针引线的作用。 ⑧ 使 用 动 词 短 语 gaze at 和 with 的复合结构使得 描述更生动形象。 Paragraph 1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. aKnowing what they were preparing for, he was greatly surprised. So immediately, bhe offered to get involved in the kids’ job. Firstly, he put the pot of porridge on a gentle heat, casking Jeff to watch out for it going for fifteen minutes. And then, he asked Jenna to break another two eggs and mix them with milk. dWith all preparations done, they started to fry bread together. In a flash, sweet smell filled the air in the kitchen. eTo their delight, the breakfast was a success in the end. Paragraph 2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. fEyes opened, the woman heard a harmonious “Happy Mother’s Day” from her twin kids with hot, sweet breakfast before her. Behind the children stood their father. gTo shed light on the game of the gift, he told the mother the whole story. hAfter learning about what happened, she rose quickly to gaze at the boy’s hand with moved tears rolling down her cheeks. “Thank you, my honey!” said the mother. (160 words) 新高中英语写作满分素材 62 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 电子邮件 Writing 1 (2023 届贵州遵义三模 ) 假定你是李华，你的美国朋友 Joey 发邮件向你询问有关高考后的暑假安排。请你回复 邮件，内容包括： 1. 分享你的暑假安排； 2. 询问对方的假期计划。 注意：1. 词数 100 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear Joey, Yours, Li Hua （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 (2023 届广东梅州一模 ) 假定你是李华，你的外国朋友 Peter 给你发邮件说最近经过多次尝试终于学会了做中国 传统美食——饺子，开心不已。询问你在日常的学习和生活中，是否有过类似经历。请回复 邮件，分享你的经历。内容包括： 1. 一件曾尝试的新事物； 2. 学习的过程； 3. 你的感受。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear Peter, I’m glad to receive your email. Yours, Li Hua （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） 63 Week 6 应用文写作（电子邮件）&读后续写 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 When Dylan was just seven years old, he moved to the United States with his mother, Khadine, and his twin younger brothers. The family hoped that their new home would allow them to start over and find success. However, their dream didn’t work out exactly as they imagined it would. Life as a single mother supporting three kids was incredibly difficult, but Khadine had a particularly difficult time after her twin sons had been diagnosed with serious heart conditions. As a result, the boys suffered from dangerous symptoms and required 24-hour care. As Khadine had to work three jobs to support her family financially, it became Dylan’s responsibility to look after his young brothers. To relieve Mom’s stress, Dylan also found a part-time job at a recreation center. While Dylan never considered his family to be a burden to him, seeing his mother and brothers become vulnerable( 脆 弱 的 ) made him determined to plan his future out correctly. He believed education was the only way out of their struggle, so he made a promise to his mother that he would be the first one in the family to go to college. For that promise, Dylan made use of each and every minute to study while taking care of his brothers. He soon became an honor student at Henry High School and took several advanced classes to keep his grades up. The College of New Jersey was his top choice. He was determined to put that admission letter in his mother’s hands. However, weeks before Dylan’s college entrance exam, both his family and his determination were tested again when Khadine fell ill and was unable to work for a while. Soon, the bills became unmanageable and the landlord evicted( 驱逐 ) Dylan’s family after Khadine couldn’t pay the rent. The family had no choice but to live in the shelter. The place wasn’t an ideal place to study. It was often noisy and crowded, and the lights would go out at a certain time after 11 p.m. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: But Dylan continued to follow his dream. Paragraph 2: Weeks after his application, an envelope carrying good news arrived. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 64 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 (2023 届辽宁名校联盟 3 月适应性测试 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A Perfect Match This story is a miracle. A dog, separated from her owner for many years, finally returned to her side. As an only child, Nicole Renae often felt lonely in her youth. But that all changed when she turned ten. For her birthday, Renae’s grandmother surprised her with an adorable gray puppy named Chloe. From the very start, the two were inseparable. “She was my best friend,” Renae says. Every ounce of love Renae gave, the little dog returned more. “She was such a sweet dog,” Renae says. “She’d lick your face forever if you didn’t stop her.” But when Renae was 14, her father got a new job that came with a piece of bad news: He’d be working from home, and the house needed to be free of audible( 听得见的 ) distractions. “Chloe was very yappy( 喜 欢 叫 嚷 的 ),” Renae says. “I was just a kid, so I didn’t have any choice in the matter. I didn’t want to get rid of my dog. I just felt so sick and sad about it.” With no easier option, the family surrendered Chloe to a humane society( 动 物 保 护 协 会 ). Though they were optimistic that the dog would find a new home with people who loved her, they couldn’t know for sure. “I called the humane society to try to find out what happened to her,” Renae says, “but they couldn’t tell me anything. So I never knew.” In time, Renae grew up, got married, and had a child of her own. But her family didn’t feel quite complete. Remembering the joy that having a dog had brought her as a kid, Renae wanted her daughter to experience the same. She had it in her mind that she would adopt a puppy, but then one day she saw a post on Facebook about a senior dog that needed a new home. The dog in the photograph looked a lot like Chloe—she was even named Chloe. In an instant it was decided: She would adopt this older dog. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: When she met Chloe, Renae was struck with an amazing feeling. Paragraph 2: But her mom realized there was a way to test the theory: Their Chloe had been microchipped (植 入芯片 ) as a puppy. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 65 Week 6 应用文写作（电子邮件）&读后续写 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 时空顺序法 ▷时间顺序法 (time order organization) 讲述故事或叙述事件时，最简单最清楚的方法就是按照时间顺序来描述事情的发展过程： 先发生的先写，后发生的后写。详细步骤： 1. 写下你要记录的事件或步骤，然后按照时间顺序排列。 2. 确定你的写作目的，然后写出带有中心思想的主题句。 3. 从你列举的事件或步骤中删除与中心思想无关的细节。 4. 使用“first，then，the next step”等列举符号把细节连接起来。 组织用这种方法的扩展段落时，应注意选用时序信号词，如 first，second，third，at first， then，finally 等。 ▷空间顺序法 (space order organization) 在描述某空间时，不管此空间大小如何，都得按照一定的空间顺序来描述不同的部位或细 节，例如，从左到右，或从背景到前景，或按顺时针方向。常用的一些方位词或表方位的 词 组 有：above，across from，also，around，up，under，below，beyond，down，here， in the distance，nearby，next to，close to，on the left，on the right，opposite to，on top of， beneath，over，vertical，horizontal，parallel to 等，这类表示上下左右，前后四方的词或 词组常用来在表示空间段落的扩展中充当连接纽带。 (2023 届江苏扬州模拟预测 ) 假定你是李华，你校将举办中国传统服装展。请你给交换生朋友 Joe 写一封电子邮件， 邀请他一起观看。内容包括： 1. 活动目的；2. 时间地点；3. 活动内容。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Dear Joe, To enrich our campus life and keep traditional Chinese culture alive, the Traditional Chinese Costume Show will be held in the gym of our school ① ( 下周五下午 ) . I am writing to invite you to enjoy it with us. ② ( 首先 ) , there will be an exhibition of traditional Chinese costumes of different dynasties, bringing about a visual feast. ③ ( 接下来的 ) a variety of costumes ready for students to try on, the activity will ④ ( 以 …… 结 束 ) a fashion show where students will display some of the classic clothing. I would be more than delighted if you could accept my invitation. Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua 提分臻题 妙法巧用 新高中英语写作满分素材 66 动作描写（2）：“看”的动作 眼睛是心灵的窗户。写作者首先要有一双慧眼，留心并捕捉现实生活中那些令人怦然 心动的瞬间，才能写出动人的文章。续写时对于人物的眼睛“看”的动作描写也要细致入 微，也能为读者传递重要信息。故事中人物是集中精力的凝视，是若有所思的端详，还是 情绪失控的怒视，都在为读者理解文章助力。 第一组：那女人急切地盯着那个女孩，试图和她交谈。 ☆概括描写： The woman looked at the girl. She tried to make a conversation. ▷细节描述： ① The woman looked at the girl , trying to make a conversation. (介词短语 ) ② The woman the girl, trying to make a conversation. ( 过去进行时；副词 ) ③ Her eager eyes the girl, the woman tried to make a conversation. ( 独立主 格结构 ) 第二组：看到她所做的事，他惊恐地睁大了眼睛。 ☆概括描写： He saw what she did. His eyes grew wide because he was horrified. ▷细节描述： ① His eyes at what she had done. ( 动词和介词短语 ) ② , he was very horrified. ( 非谓语动词 ) ③ After he saw what she did, he was horrified . (with 复合结构 ) 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 知晓电子邮件的 本质是以现代科 学技术告知对方 信息。 ▪ 电子邮件与传统 信件一样可表达 邀请、感谢、慰 问等，不一而足。 ▪ 第二段是主题段 落，但是也要表 述简洁。 ▪ 文章通常以第一 人称和第二人称 为主。 ▪ 时态以一般现在 时和一般将来时 为主。 Dear Peter, ( 抱 歉 听 到 ) you have gone back home ( 休病假 ) . How ( 你的感觉 ) now? I hope my good news for you will ( 扫除 ) the shadow of disease. Last month, an English festival ( 举行 ) in our school, and our class ( 唱一首歌 ) which you taught us at the festival. As soon as we finished the song, all the audience ( 给我们热烈鼓掌 ). ( 要是……就好了 ) you had been there. We all ( 非常怀念你 ) and wish you ( 迅速彻底的恢复 ). Yours, Li Hua 新高中英语写作满分素材 16 满分句式 ① Ignoring my mother’s reminder, I slid into the forbidden world. ( 现在分词作状语 ) ② Wiping tears from my muddy face, she repeated the reminders, which weren’t boring any more, but wise and affectionate, and were implanted in my life forever. ( 现在分词作状语；非限制性定语 从句 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① for ② It is high time that ③ definitely ④ As a matter of fact/Indeed ⑤ In brief/summary 模板背诵 Dear fellow students, Aiming to enhance awareness of keeping healthy, on behalf of the Students’ Union, I am writing to call on everyone to take part in an activity named National Fitness Program. In the activity, we will work out for an hour a day. First of all, what we can do is that mastering a sports skill that will benefit us for life, so that we will vigorously take challenges and enjoy life in the future. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to call on more people to join a sports club. The more people are involved, the healthier they are. Finally, I propose that we all take action to participate in the activity and contribute our own strength to educate people around us and raise their awareness of keeping healthy. Only with joint efforts can the activity go smoothly. Let’s start now and spare no effort to do our part. We are convinced that with our joint efforts, we can make a difference. Yours sincerely, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组： ① whispered ② in a low voice ③ Whispering 第二组： ① announcing ② with an announcement ③ officially Week 6 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Dear Chris, How is everything going? I hope aeverything is going well back in Ireland. Looking back, I find it has been a year bsince you came back to Ireland. I miss you so much. I still remember the very day when we met at China- Ireland Cultural Festival two years ago. cIt was at that festival that you shared so many interesting things about your country together, dthrough which I learned a lot about your food, culture and history. We really enjoyed ourselves there. eWhat is far more important is that we became good friends then. Though I felt a little sorry that you left China last year, I am pleased to know you are leading a happy life in your hometown. I hope fwe can keep in touch often. Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Dear Joey, How are you doing? I am more than delighted to 答案全解全析 17 receive your letter ① asking for my arrangements for the coming summer vacation after Gaokao. Here is my plan. ② First of all, in order to gain knowledge and broaden my horizons, I will catch the golden opportunity to travel. Besides, I would like to do some housework, ③ which makes me more independent and responsible. Last but not least, I intend to work out regularly ④ to build up my body, because health is the most important wealth. As planned, ⑤ not only will I spend one hour running every day, but also I will stick to a balanced diet. As long as I persist, I believe I will be stronger and healthier. ⑥ How about your plan? Please let me know at your earliest convenience. Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua ① 问候之后给出写电子邮件的原因，使用现在分 词作后置定语解释名词 letter。 ② 依次解释自己这样安排的原因，使用不定式作 目的状语置于句首使目的更明显。 ③ 使用非限制性定语从句解释第二个活动的目的。 ④ 使用不定式和原因状语从句解释第三项活动。 ⑤ 使用“not only... but also...”补充说明自己的计 划和打算。 ⑥ 询问对方的假期计划，完成题目中的第二项 要求。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 电子邮件 人称 第一人称 时态 一般现在时 结构 ①首段：已知 Peter 的经历，现分享自己的 经历 ②主体段落：讲述自己尝试新事物的经历 ③尾段：感悟万事开头难，但要勇于尝试 语料亮点 Dear Peter, I’m glad to receive your email. aI know that you learned how to make dumplings. You’re so great. Now let me share my experience with you. bSince I watched the Winter Olympic Games in Beijing, I have been in love with skating. From then on, I began to make up my mind to learn it. cBut as soon as I stepped on the ice, I stumbled over myself. I found it difficult to learn skating. Although I practiced again and again, and fell again and again, dwhen I thought of the athletes on the field, I didn’t give up. eSoon I could skate quite well. I’m proud of myself. From learning skating, fI know while doing anything, we often meet many kinds of difficulties, but we shouldn’t lose heart. Instead, we should try our best to overcome them. Yours, Li Hua ① 对题目要求中的内容做了简单介绍后明确写作 任务，明确主题是分享自己的经历。 ② 解释自己喜欢上滑冰的原因，使用现在完成时表 明自己的爱好会持续很久。 ③ 使用 but 表示转折，说明自己的这项爱好经历了 很多波折。 ④ 虽然经历了很多波折，但是我并没有放弃。 ⑤ 现在我已经滑得很好，所以为自己感到骄傲。 ⑥ 得出结论：我们都会经历困难，但是不应轻言 放弃。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 迪伦和母亲及双胞胎弟弟一起搬到美国，而 弟弟们有严重的心脏病。母亲打工赚钱，迪 伦负责照顾弟弟们。迪伦相信教育是摆脱困 境的唯一出路，所以他向母亲承诺考上大学。 他学习刻苦但在高考前几天母亲因付不起房 租而不得不住在收容所，但那不是一个学习 的好场所。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写迪伦如何 在艰苦条件下刻苦学习。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写迪伦考上 大学后母亲的反应和全家展望。 叙事线索 迪伦白天工作→迪伦晚上专心学习→完成入 学考试→收到录取通知书→母亲喜看通知书 →感悟努力有回报 新高中英语写作满分素材 18 高分范文 Paragraph 1: But Dylan continued to follow his dream. During his time at the shelter, Dylan had to go to work at the recreation center after school. He then hurried back to the shelter at 9 p.m. so that he could do his homework for two hours before the lights were off. The noise didn’t bother him as he was focused on his study and the determined promise that he had made to his mother. All of these had continued until he finally finished the entrance exam and submitted the hopeful application to his dream college. Paragraph 2: Weeks after his application, an envelope carrying good news arrived. It was the admission letter from the College of New Jersey! All of Dylan’s hard and persistent work proved to be worthwhile. In great excitement, he rushed back to the shelter and handed the letter over to his mother, who cried out of joy. Going through homelessness let the family know that there will always be obstacles, but now with Dylan’s great news, the future looks much brighter for the courageous and optimistic boy than before. (163 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① focused/concentrated 注意力集中的 ② determined/resolved/strong-minded 意志坚定的 / 有决心的 / 意志坚强的 ③ persistent/consistent/tireless 坚持不懈的 / 始终如 一的 / 不知疲倦的 ④ courageous/brave/fearless/bold/daring 有勇气的 / 勇敢的 / 大无畏的 ⑤ optimistic/hopeful/positive/enthusiastic 乐观的 / 充 满希望的 / 积极的 / 热情的 满分句式 ① He then hurried back to the shelter at 9 p.m. so that he could do his homework for two hours before the lights were off. (so that 引导结果状语从句 ) ② The noise didn’t bother him as he was focused on his study and the determined promise that he had made to his mother. (as 引导原因状语从句；that 引导定语从句 ) ③ In great excitement, he rushed back to the shelter and handed the letter over to his mother, who cried out of joy. (who 引导非限制性定语从句 ) Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 蕾妮小时候养了小狗克洛伊，但 14 岁时父亲 在家工作需要安静，克洛伊只得被送出去了。 多年后蕾妮结婚生子，她想为女儿收养一只 小狗，她在脸书看到一个帖子，有一只狗需 要被收养，那只狗很像克洛伊，她决定收养它。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写克洛伊和 蕾妮见面时的场景。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写蕾妮带克 洛伊去兽医那里验证，结果证明这的确就是 曾经陪伴自己的克洛伊，蕾妮非常开心。 叙事线索 与小狗见面→激动不已→验证芯片→结果被 证实→开心激动 构思 第一段 雷妮感觉似曾相识，小狗亲昵舔她脸 想起克洛伊她难过，认定小狗就是它 第二段 家人找到芯片信息，找到机构去验证 数据证明猜测正确，人狗重逢不分离 高分范文 Paragraph 1: When she met Chloe, Renae was struck with an amazing feeling. The loyal dog seemed so familiar. And caring Chloe appeared to feel the same way about Renae. She ran up to Renae and started licking her face. Chloe reminded Renae so much of her old dog that the emotion overwhelmed her. Renae was crying. She was confident in her heart that it was her dog. Still, eight years had passed since Renae saw Chloe last, so the idea seemed to be little more than wishful thinking. Her whole family thought Renae was crazy. Paragraph 2: But her mom realized there was a way to test the theory: Their Chloe had been microchipped ( 植 入芯片 ) as a puppy. They found the ID number, then 答案全解全析 19 considerate Renae took her new Chloe to the vet to be scanned. Sure enough, she also had a microchip. The numbers were a match. So Renae felt like she’d won the lottery. After years of thinking she would never see her dog again, Renae is overjoyed to have her back and promised to be responsible for her future. She got so excited to come home. As for Chloe, she’s made herself right at home. She knows that she’ll be with Renae forever. (171 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① be loyal/faithful/committed/devoted to 对……忠诚 ② caring/sympathetic/compassionate 有同情心的 ③ be confident in 对……自信 ④ considerate/understanding/thoughtful 考虑周到的 ⑤ be responsible for/take responsibility for 对……负 责任 满分句式 ① She ran up to Renae and started licking her face. (连 续动词 ) ② Chloe reminded Renae so much of her old dog that the emotion overwhelmed her. (so... that... 引导结 果状语从句 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① next Friday afternoon ② To start with ③ Following ④ end with 模板背诵 Dear Peter, I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave. How are you feeling now? I hope my good news for you will sweep away the shadow of disease. Last month, an English festival was held in our school, and our class performed a song which you taught us at the festival. As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause. If only you had been there. We all miss you very much and wish you a quick and complete recovery. Yours, Li Hua 技能小练： 第一组： ① with eager eyes ② was staring eagerly at ③ fixed/concentrated/focused on 第二组： ① widened with horror ② Seeing what she did ③ with eyes widely open Week 7 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Dear Margaux, I heard that you love photography but ahave been struggling to balance your study with pursuing your interests. I’m glad to boffer my advice! First of all, you’d better prioritize your time. cMake a list of all the things that you need to do, assign each task din order of importance. Additionally, schedule blocks of time for study and photography. Lastly, take a good rest. eWith these tips, you can find a balance which will allow you time for your classes, hobbies and rest. I wish my suggestions would fbe of some help to you. Yours, Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Dear Jim, I am glad to ahear that you’re interested in our