Week 5 应用文写作(倡议书)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

45 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）&读后续写 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）& 读后续写 The goal of a proposal is to gain support for your plan by informing the appropriate people. You can follow the same basic guidelines. ▷ Start with a firm introduction. Ideally, you should make your proposal as purposeful and useful as possible. Use some background information to attract your readers. Then state the purpose of your proposal. ▷ State the problem. What’s the issue? What’s causing the issue? What effects does this issue have? Emphasize why your problem needs to be solved now. How will it affect your audience if left alone? Make sure to answer all questions and cover them with research and facts. ▷ Propose solutions. The solutions section is where you get into how you will address the problem, why you will do it in this way, and what the outcomes will be. Discuss the larger impact of your ideas. Ideas that seem of limited applicability are less likely to spark enthusiasm in readers. ▷ Include a schedule and budget. In order to convince your readers that you’re a good investment, provide as much detailed, concrete information about your timeline and budget as possible. ▷ Wrap up with a conclusion. This should mirror your introduction, briefly wrapping up your general message. 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） How to Write a Proposal 美文撷英 ① Since China has been one of the most important/influential countries in the world today, I advocate that all of us do our part to... ② With the acceleration of globalization, making Chinese culture better known to the world has become increasingly important. ③ It can not only deepen foreigners’ understanding of Chinese culture, which helps change their rigid idea of China, but also strengthen cultural bonds around the globe. ④ Spreading Chinese culture via English can not only enable foreigners to have a better understanding of Chinese culture, but also stimulate us Chinese to take pride in our profound culture. ⑤ Considering all the above, I appeal to everyone to take an active part in it! 新高中英语写作满分素材 46 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2022 年天津卷 ) 假设你是晨光中学英 语口语社的成员李津。为招 募新成员，口语社请你用 英语为社团纳新活动录制 一段短视频。请按照以下 提示，撰写视频的文字稿： 1. 向同学们发出入社 倡议； 2. 介绍口语社的主要 活动 ( 如英语演讲比赛、观 看英语电影等活动 )； 3. 分享本人入社以来 的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节， 以使行文连贯。 My fellow students, ( 明 确 倡 议 目 的 ) Hello, everyone! I’m Li Jin, a member of the Spoken English Club of our school. I’m here to invite you to join our club, which will offer a good chance to all English lovers. 非限制性定语从句 ( 解释倡议活动 ) The club offers various interesting activities where we can participate in English speech contests, watch classic English movies, sing English songs and attend inspiring lectures. 抽象名词为先行词的定语从句 All of them help to stimulate our interest in learning English and make our school life much more enjoyable. 含宾语补足语的句式 ( 现身说法拉近距离 ) The club activities have benefited me a lot. I have not only improved my spoken English, but also made a lot of friends. 递进表达 ( 再次呼吁 ) Now, it’s your turn to join us. We are looking forward to having you in the club! Li Jin (2023年山西省际名校联考) 假如你是李华，在“爱 眼日”来临之际，请你在 校英文报上写一封保护视 力的倡议书，内容包括： 1. 爱眼的重要性； 2. 护眼的建议。 注意：1. 词数80左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 My fellow students, Shortsightedness among Chinese students ① ( 变 得更严峻 ). ② (“爱眼日”来临之际 ) , it reminds us of the serious situation we are faced with. We ③ (再 怎么重视也不为过 ) the protection of our eyes. ④ ( 情 况 得 到 提 高 ) if we get regular breaks throughout our busy study and take part in more outdoor activities in the sun instead of ⑤ ( 盯着 ) electronic devices. I firmly believe that as long as we ⑥ ( 增强意识 ) to improve eye health, all of us will have a brighter vision. Li Hua 倡议书 一般现在时，一般将来时 第三人称为主，第一人称为辅 开头简单明了，结尾简洁有力 措辞贴切真挚，语言有号召性 称呼：要依据倡议的对象而选用适当的称呼 正文：说明倡议背景、原因，申明倡议目的 结尾：表明倡议者的决心和希望或提出建议 落款：右下方署名发倡议集体或倡议者姓名 时态 人称 特点 结构 倡议书 47 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）&读后续写 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① frustrating/annoying 令人焦头烂额的 / 令人恼 火的 ② strongly/urgently 强烈地 / 迫切地 ③ limited/sustainable 有限的 / 可持续性的 ④ initiative/advocate 倡议 / 倡导者 短语： ① on behalf of/stand for 代表 ② call on/appeal to sb. to do sth. 呼 吁 某 人 做 某事 ③ raise/promote/enhance the awareness 提 高……的意识 ④ make a difference/make an impact on 产生影 响 / 对……产生巨大影响 ⑤ address/solve these problems/issues 解 决 问题 吸睛开头句 ① I’m writing to appeal to/call on you to.../ advocate all of you... 我写信是为了请求 / 呼吁你……/ 提倡大家…… ② In recent years/Recently, human activities are causing increasing harm to animals, therefore, ... 近年来 / 最近，人类活动正在 对动物造成越来越大的伤害，因此，…… ③ To prevent further damage to animals, the most important thing is to increase... 为了防 止对动物的进一步伤害，最重要的是增 加…… ④ In order to ease the present serious situation, all of us had better strengthen/raise/improve people’s awareness of... 为了缓解目前严峻 的形势，我们大家最好加强 / 提高 / 改善 人们对……的认识。 ⑤ For the purpose of offering help to the migrant kids, we think our government should take measures to pour more money into improving the present situation of... 为 了给移民儿童提供帮助，我们认为政府应 该采取措施，投入更多的资金来改善…… 的现状。 高光篇中句 ① It is suggested that... 建议…… ② We are supposed/required/expected to choose a healthy and environmentally-friendly way of traveling, that is, ... 我们应该 / 被要求 / 被期望选择一种健康和环保的旅行方式， 那就是…… ③ It is suggested/advised that we choose a healthy and environmentally-friendly way of traveling, that is, ...建议我们选择一种健康、 环保的旅行方式，即…… ④ It would be better if the... help to collect money or donate books to... 如果……帮助 募集资金或捐赠书籍到……就好了。 ⑤ We must try to do whatever we can to protect animals/do our part to protect wild animals, by reducing our use of ... 我们必须尽我们所 能保护动物 / 尽我们的一份力量来保护野 生动物，通过减少我们对……的使用。 精彩结尾句 ① It is everyone’s responsibility to protect wild animals. If we take action actively, we can make a big difference to them. 保护野生动 物是每个人的责任。如果我们积极采取行 动，我们可以对它们产生很大的影响。 ② Every effort makes a difference/counts/ matters. Let’s work together to make the earth a better place. 每一次努力都有意义。 让我们一起努力，让地球变得更美好。 ③ Let’s take action at once! I’m convinced that our efforts will eventually pay off. 让我们立 即采取行动吧！我相信我们的努力最终会 有回报的。 ④ Hoping to witness your participation in the activity! Take action now, or you will regret it someday. 希望能见证您的参与！现在就 采取行动，否则总有一天你会后悔的。 ⑤ It’s high time that we took measures to change the situation. 该是我们采取措施改 变这种状况的时候了。 新高中英语写作满分素材 48 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 5：解决故事冲突 (2022 年 1 月浙江卷改编 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一篇完整的故事。 When Dr. Henderson was assigning( 指 定 ) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate( 命 运 ) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid. I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren’t there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn’t mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone. Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire team of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse. The project required each team to develop a hypothesis( 假设 ), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students. When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what. After long discussions, we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为 你写好。 Paragraph 1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Paragraph 2: Then one day I got word that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease. 好题探究 最佳素材 故事冲突的解决能推动故事情节的发展，解决故事冲突分预设矛盾与解决矛盾，可以 帮助学生在基于篇章主题意义下更好地发散思维，做到有话可说，有事可写。 读后续写的故事冲突续写内容从命题角度来看都会围绕“Conflict & Solution”展开， 其题材主要有：迷路系列、脱险系列、争吵系列。 故事冲突一般有如下解决方案： 1. encouragement( 某人的鼓励 ) 2. comfort( 某人的安慰 ) 3. inspiration( 突然灵机一动 ) 4. effort( 自己的努力训练 ) 5. calm( 冷静思考 ) 6. kindness( 某人的善良 ) 7. courage( 勇敢地做起来 ) 8. love( 爱心） 9. help( 准确地说是及时帮助 ) 49 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）&读后续写 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 当老师分配项目伙伴时，作者希望自己能与最好的朋友搭档，但是事与愿违，分配的是 一个自己最不希望打交道的人，因为这个人非常严肃，而且显得特立独行。在一起合作后， 作者发现两个人确实有很多地方需要磨合，但是幸运的是，两个人最终一起确定了一项研究 课题。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1—2) Assigned to work with the fiercely competitive fellow in a project, I felt disappointed. P Plot (Para. 6) Finally we decided on the topic of psychological well-being of teenagers. T Theme (Para. 3—4) I hoped the entire team would work well and our project required us to share everything. E Emotion (Para. 4—5) I felt uneasy and even wanted to give up but I was determined to stay. 三个基础（SUM） ★ 语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第一人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与自我”—— 校园生活 ★主角：I, my project fellow ★I had to work with a fellow in a project but I didn’t like him. ★I tried to work with him hoping our team would stand out. ★Figure out what would happen after the topic was set! Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 首尾呼应水到渠成 we meet regularly 不出所料我的想法总是被拒 (要点�) 我努力坚持他见证我的付出 他态度变化开始接受我的想法 (要点�) 我意识到正在形成一个团队 (要点�) admitted to the hospital a serious disease 我赶到医院看见他状态不佳 (要点�) 但他坚持了解项目还要合作 (要点�) 被他感动我们继续完成项目 项目成功被问原因我答“合作” (要点�) draw up our plans 新高中英语写作满分素材 50 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① 使用状语从句的 省略与原文作者 的担心吻合，强 调队友是一个特 立独行的人。 ② 用自己的实际行 动让对方对自己 的态度发生巨大 转变。 ③ 使用副词gradually 生动描述队友的 心逐渐被作者的 奉献融化，melt 一词生动形象。 ④ 使用“It was the first time that” 句式做总结，也 与第二段段首句 吻合。 ⑤ 知道队友生病住 院，作者赶紧前 往医院，与段首 句衔接紧密。 ⑥ 使用主语从句强 调作者的感受， 动 词 inquire 属 于高级词汇。 ⑦ 使用非谓语动词 作状语表示原因。 ⑧ 状语从句的省略； 介词短语without hesitation 属 于 优质修饰成分。 Paragraph 1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. aAs expected, my ideas were completely rejected during our first few meetings. However, I insisted on working hard and bhe witnessed my devotion to observing teenagers around us and interviewing them patiently and logically. cMy dedication gradually melted my teammate’s heart and his attitudes towards me began to change. He listened attentively to my ideas and adopted some now and then. dIt was the first time that I had perceived that we could be called a team. Everything seemed to go on so smoothly. Paragraph 2: Then one day I got word that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease. eThe moment I arrived at his ward, his pale face and tired look told everything. fWhat surprised me even more was that he still inquired about the progress of our project and begged me to finish it together. gMoved by pursuit of academic excellence, I often visited him in the hospital checking the statistics. Finally the moment to present our findings came. Our project was a huge success. hWhen asked about the secret, I answered without hesitation, “Cooperation!” I just couldn’t wait to tell my teammate our shared success! (173 words) 51 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）&读后续写 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 倡议书 Writing 1 (2023 届湖南邵阳三模 ) 假定你是某国际学校体育俱乐部的负责人李华，你们俱乐部最近发起了“每天锻炼 1 小 时”活动。请你结合以下要点写封倡议书，号召全校同学动起来。 1. 活动目的 ; 2. 具体做法 ; 3. 发出倡议。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右 ; 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Exercise 60 Minutes Every Day （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 (2023 届江苏南京二模 ) 假定你是校学生会主席李华，最近发现不少同学沉迷于购买盲盒。请给校英文报写一封 倡议书，号召理性消费，内容包括 : 1. 陈述所观察到的现象； 2. 提出建议并给出理由。 参考词汇：盲盒 blind boxes 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear fellow students, The Students’ Union （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） 新高中英语写作满分素材 52 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一篇完整的故事。 There is a country music song that goes, “She’s a wild one with an angel’s face.” That line perfectly describes my younger sister, Louisa. She is a fearless fighter. To make things worse, my sister and I are very much alike. Both of us are very easy to get angry, though we are also ready to forgive. It is really hard to find proper words to describe my relationship with my little sister. I had my first fight with Louisa when she was about five years old. It was a freezing winter afternoon in New Haven, Connecticut. Mum and Dad were at work and I was asked to take care of her at home. I thought that it would be a perfect time to introduce Louisa to the piano. She was also very excited about working together with her bigger sister. I put her in a chair with two comfortable pillows. I then started to show her how to play a single note with a single finger. Then I asked her to do the same. I thought it was a small request. But Louisa refused! Instead, she preferred to hit at many notes at the same time with two hands. When I asked her to stop, she hit harder and faster. When I tried to pull her away from the piano, she began yelling, crying and kicking angrily. Having had enough, I held the fearless fighter tightly in my arms and dragged her to the back door. When I threw it open, my own face hurt from just a few seconds’ exposure to the icy air. But I was so angry that I was determined to teach her a lesson even if the cold could kill her. “You cannot stay in the house if you don’t listen to me,” I said and put her down. “Now, are you ready to be a good girl? Or do you want to go outside?” 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: To my surprise, Louisa refused to give in. Paragraph 2: However, Louisa shook her head with a determined look in her eyes. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 53 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）&读后续写 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一篇完整的故事。 Undoubtedly, Mother Nature is always attractive to kids. In our childhood, how often did we turn a deaf ear to our parents’ advice? Very often! Thus, we landed ourselves in a situation where we greatly regretted our act of not having listened to the advice of the wise. Such an unforgettable experience I had at the age of 7 gave me an invaluable lesson, after which I deeply understood why my gentle mother was repeating the boring suggestions and I would try to take her suggestions seriously. In my childhood, I was so crazy about nature that even playing among the colorful flowers in our garden could make my day. Our house was next to the woods which had always stirred up(激起) great curiosity in me in wanting to find out what was within. Every time I saw fascinating butterflies dancing from the woods, my curiosity grew. But my mother didn’t like me wandering off on my own and always ensured that I was within her sight. Even if she allowed me to explore the surrounding area on my own, it was only to be somewhere near the house. Being as curious as the cat, I always desired to explore the woods. It seemed as if my mother had understood my desire, so she had warned me on lots of occasions never to enter the woods alone. “Mom, can I go out and play in the garden?” I asked. “Sure,” she would reply each time. “Kate, you can play in the garden but you must promise me one thing—only when I’m with you can you go into the woods. There are no cases of animal attacks on humans, but it’s still dangerous for a little kid like you. It’s too easy to get lost in the woods.” “Sure, you’ve said that many times!” I answered without patience at her repeated reminders. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: However, curiosity got the better of me one morning. Paragraph 2: “Kate?” Behind the trees covered by the rays of the setting sun came my mother’s voice. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 54 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 过渡衔接 ( 三 ) ▷表因果关系 (cause and effect expressions) ( 后接表原因的从句 ) 因为：because ( 后接表原因的并列分句 ) 因为：for 因为：because of...，owing to...，on account of...，thanks to，as a result of... 因为这个 / 那个原因：for this/that reason ( 副词 ) 因此；所以：thus，hence，therefore 结果 ( 是 )：as a result；in order that/so that ( 后接表结果的从句 ) ▷表强调 (expressions stressing facts or adding force) 显而易见：obviously，apparently，clearly，certainly，definitely 肯定地；当然：surely，to be sure，of course，no doubt，undoubtedly 事实上；实际上；真正地：actually，as a matter of fact，indeed ▷表总结 (summary expressions) 简而言之：all in all，in brief，in short，in summary，briefly/ in brief，generally speaking 总的说来；总之：in conclusion，to sum up， to conclude，to summarize，on the whole 长话短说；简而言之：to make/cut a long story short，in a word，in one word 最后 ( 要讲的是 ) ：finally，ultimately 从根本上来讲： essentially，as you know，as is known to all，as/so far as I know (2023 届山东济南一模 ) 假定你是校学生会主席李华，时值春暖花开，万物复苏，请你围绕“走进春天，锻炼身 体”这一主题，在校英文报上发一封倡议书，要点如下： 1. 倡议的目的；2. 具体内容。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 Dear friends, Spring has come, a ( 因为 ) flowers are blossoming and everything is coming back to life. b ( 是时候 ) we embraced the bright spring and built up our body. So it is strongly advocated that we go outdoors and take exercise regularly. First, we are supposed to do more sports daily, which is c ( 绝 对 ) beneficial to our immune system. We can play ball games, jog or take a walk after school. d ( 事实上 ), on weekends, it is a good choice to go hiking with our friends or family. e ( 总 之 ), we should act together now to strengthen our physical health and create a better life. The Students’ Union 提分臻题 妙法巧用 55 Week 5 应用文写作（倡议书）&读后续写 动作描写（1）：“说”的动作 优秀的动作描写可以支撑起读后续写中的人物经历，也可以让情节构思与前文衔接紧 密、续写内容更加丰满、语言表达更加生动。 故事中的人物一般通过“听”和“说”进行交际和思想交流，成功的“说”的动作描 写既能推进故事情节的发展，又能鲜明地突出特定环境中人物的心理变化和性格特点，让 读者“如闻其声，如见其人”。 第一组：鲁本低声说了句谢谢，然后一路跑回家。 ☆概括描写： Reuben murmured a thank you and ran home all the way. ▷细节描述： ① Reuben a thank you and ran home all the way. ( 近义词 ) ② Reuben said a thank you and ran home all the way. ( 介词短语 ) ③ a thank you nervously, Reuben ran home all the way. ( 非谓语动词 ) 第二组：他打破了沉寂，宣布：“参加比赛的截止日期是明天。” ☆概括描写： He interrupted the silence and announced: “The deadline to enter for the competition is tomorrow.” ▷细节描述： ① He interrupted the silence : “The deadline to enter for the competition is tomorrow.” ( 非谓语动词 ) ② He interrupted the silence : “The deadline to enter for the competition is tomorrow.” ( 介词短语 ) ③ He interrupted the silence telling them : “The deadline to enter for the competition is tomorrow.” ( 副词 ) 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 知晓倡议书的本 质是呼吁别人参 与一项有影响力 的活动。 ▪ 逐步介绍接受倡 议后可能参与的 活动，并对活动 原因逐一解释。 ▪ 倡议要有说服力， 鼓动性。 ▪ 文章通常以第一 人称为主。 ▪ 时态以一般现在 时和一般将来时 为主。 Dear fellow students, Aiming to enhance awareness of keeping healthy, ( 代表 ) the Students’ Union, I am writing to call on everyone to ( 参加 ) an activity named National Fitness Program. In the activity, we will work out for an hour a day. ( 首 先 ), what we can do is that mastering a sports skill that will benefit us for life, so that we will vigorously ( 接受挑战 ) and enjoy life in the future. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to ( 号 召更多人 ) to join a sports club. The more ( 人们参与 ), the healthier they are. Finally, I propose that we all ( 采 取 行 动 ) participate in the activity and contribute our own strength to educate people around us and raise their awareness of ( 保持健 康 ). Only with joint efforts can the activity go smoothly. Let’s start now and ( 不遗余力 ) to do our part. We are convinced that with our joint efforts, we can ( 产生 影响 ). Yours sincerely, Li Hua 答案全解全析 13 filled with understanding and love because they all realized that everyone played an important role in the house. (159 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① neglected one’s feelings 忽视某人的情感 ② accompany sb. 陪伴某人 ③ relieve one’s pressure 减轻某人的压力 ④ come to realize 逐渐意识到 满分句式 ① So they made a decision that they should treat the two children equally. ( 同位语从句 ) ② When Victor did his homework, his father would accompany him, reading a book quietly, which made him comfortable and warm. (when 引导时间 状语从句；现在分词作状语；which 引导非限制 性定语从句 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① although /though ② Instead of /Rather than ③ For example/For instance ④ Similarly 模板背诵 Dear Allen, I am writing to tell you that a music festival will be held in our school. We can take part in the music festival in the school hall next Friday afternoon. In the music festival, we invite some famous singers and pianists to perform, who will also give some lessons to the students. In addition, some students can have a chance to cooperate with these musicians. As a music fan, you are bound to participate in the festival. If possible, you are welcome to perform in the festival, which will be a great experience. Hopefully, you can take part in it and don’t miss the chance. Yours, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组： ① and words failed her ② streaming down her face ③ streaming down her face 第二组： ① so unfairly that ② Treated so unfairly ③ painfully and angrily Week 5 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 My fellow students, Shortsightedness among Chinese students ais becoming more serious. bWith the National Eye Day approaching, it reminds us of the serious situation we are faced with. We ccan’t attach too much importance to the protection of our eyes. dThe situation can be improved if we get regular breaks throughout our busy study and take part in more outdoor activities in the sun instead of efixing our eyes on electronic devices. I firmly believe that as long as we fstrengthen our awareness to improve eye health, all of us will have a brighter vision. Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Exercise 60 Minutes Every Day aTo encourage us students to get into shape and enrich our school life, our school sports club has launched an activity bthemed “Exercise 60 Minutes 新高中英语写作满分素材 14 Every Day”. cRegular exercise can be highly beneficial to us. We can go jogging or running in the morning. dWe recommend taking full advantage of break time at school to play jump rope, hula hoop and so on. In addition, it’s workable to cycle or swim after school. eOnly with good health can we enjoy a happy life and good academic performance. fSo I appeal to all the students in our school to work out for an hour every day. Yours, Li Hua ① 不定式作状语置于句首可以凸显目的。 ② 过去分词作后置定语解释名词，且 theme 属于 名词用做动词。 ③ 使用高级短语 be highly beneficial to sb.。 ④ 对 recommend 的用法熟悉，且本句话中对锻炼 的类型进行了合理想象。 ⑤ 使用“only + 介词短语”引起的倒装句使文章层 次感更强。 ⑥ 再次突出强调倡议书的目的，与文章标题吻合。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 倡议书 人称 第一人称 时态 一般将来时、一般现在时 三段式结构 ①首段：解释发出倡议原因 ②主体段落：突出正确生活方式 ③尾段：再次呼吁，突出目的 语料亮点 Dear fellow students, Recently, we’re aastonished to find many students are obsessed with blind boxes, spending a large sum of money impulsively. bAs teenagers, we are still reliant on parents economically. cAlso, money wasted on blind boxes can be spent on daily necessities and things contributing to our personal growth. dIt’s advisable that we should develop a rational spending habit and practice the virtue of saving money. So we eappeal to all of you to be smart with money and be wise “investors”! The Students’ Union ① 使用比 surprised 更有难度的形容词 astonished， 目的是强调此次倡议的迫切性。 ② 站在同龄人的角度给出第一个原因，使倡议更 有说服力，且句中的 reliant 与 economically 属 于高难词汇。 ③ 分别使用了过去分词和现在分词作后置定语解 释名词。 ④ 使用“It is + adj. +that”句式。 ⑤ 再次强调倡议主题。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 作者和妹妹两人性格相像，都很容易生气。 妹妹五岁的时候，父母都外出工作，作者被 安排在家照顾妹妹。作者决定教妹妹弹钢琴， 但是妹妹并不听话，反而大喊大叫，作者生 气地把她拖到屋子外面。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写路易莎走 到外面，作者因此充满担心，不得已退让一些。 ②根据第二段首句可知，本段描写路易莎在 寒冷中坚决不妥协，最后作者让步了，换了 一种方式把路易莎带回到家里。 叙事线索 路易莎拒绝让步 → 路易莎走到外面 → 作者 担心 → 路易莎坚持 → 路易莎受冻 → 作者让 步 高分范文 Paragraph 1: To my surprise, Louisa refused to give in. She stopped crying and stepped outside, facing me in a challenging way. But I started to be worried about my little sister because she was only wearing her sweater. To make things worse, it was darkening outside. Mum and Dad could be home at any moment and they may regard me as a sister who failed to take the responsibility to look after a younger sister. “Since you’ve decided to behave,” I pretended to be as calm as possible. “You can come in now.” Paragraph 2: However, Louisa shook her head with a determined look in her eyes. Even though her teeth 答案全解全析 15 were clicking repeatedly together because of the cold, she still refused to give in. I suddenly understood that the little fearless fighter would rather freeze to death than give in. So I decided to try a more diplomatic way to bring her back into the house. It worked very well, as it always did. When Mum and Dad arrived home, they found Louisa enjoying her favorite snacks in my arms. They praised me eagerly but I didn’t dare to tell them what I experienced. (172 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① cry/weep 哭 / 啜泣 ② face/stare 直面 / 盯着 ③ wear/have on 穿着 ④ pretend/appear 假装 / 貌似 ⑤ click/knock 发出咔嗒声 / 碰撞 ⑥ understand/comprehend 明白 ⑦ work/succeed 起作用 满分句式 ① She stopped crying and stepped outside, facing me in a challenging way. ( 现在分词作状语表示伴随 ) ② Even though her teeth were clicking repeatedly together because of the cold, she still refused to give in. (even though 引导让步状语从句，从句中 使用过去进行时 ) ③ When Mum and Dad arrived home, they found Louisa enjoying her favorite snacks in my arms. (使 用 “find + 宾语 + 宾语补足语”) Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 作者对家附近的小森林充满了好奇，但是妈 妈总是提醒作者不能独自进入森林。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写作者被森 林里的一切所吸引，越走越远，然后就迷路了。 ②根据第二段首句可知，妈妈找到作者，作 者明白了父母建议的重要性以及其中的智慧。 叙事线索 进入森林深处→迷路→哭泣后悔→妈妈出现 →明白道理 构思 第一段 无视提醒我溜进迷人世界，蝴蝶飞舞 我忘情地追。 蝴蝶消失我意识到已迷路，求救无果 只能不停哭。 第二段 欣喜若狂冲向妈妈发声处，看见妈妈 后紧紧拥抱。 明白错在自己向妈妈道歉，意识到该 听合理建议。 高分范文 Paragraph 1: However, curiosity got the better of me one morning. Ignoring my mother’s reminder, I slid into the forbidden world. How fascinating! Among various colorful flowers danced butterflies. With excitement, I chased after the graceful creatures, running deeper into the woods. Suddenly, they flew over trees and disappeared. What’s worse, I got lost! I rushed around, crying for help, frightened and helpless, but in vain. I repeated the useless efforts until sunset. “If only I followed Mom’s reminder!” I curled up under a tree, in bitter regret and cried again. Paragraph 2: “Kate?” Behind the trees covered by the rays of the setting sun came my mother’s voice. “Mom! I’m here!” Wild with joy, I rushed towards where the voice came from. Behind a tree appeared my mother. She dashed up, hugged me tightly and checked whether I got hurt. “I’m so sorry! I should have appreciated your suggestion!” I burst into tears. Wiping tears from my muddy face, she repeated the reminders, which weren’t boring any more, but wise and affectionate, and were implanted in my life forever. (151 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① slide into/slip into 溜进 ② dance/fly happily 跳舞 / 快乐盘旋 ③ chase after/run after 追逐 ④ rush around/run around 乱冲乱撞 / 乱跑 ⑤ dash up/rush up 冲过来 ⑥ hug me tightly/embrace me tightly 紧紧拥抱 新高中英语写作满分素材 16 满分句式 ① Ignoring my mother’s reminder, I slid into the forbidden world. ( 现在分词作状语 ) ② Wiping tears from my muddy face, she repeated the reminders, which weren’t boring any more, but wise and affectionate, and were implanted in my life forever. ( 现在分词作状语；非限制性定语 从句 ) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① for ② It is high time that ③ definitely ④ As a matter of fact/Indeed ⑤ In brief/summary 模板背诵 Dear fellow students, Aiming to enhance awareness of keeping healthy, on behalf of the Students’ Union, I am writing to call on everyone to take part in an activity named National Fitness Program. In the activity, we will work out for an hour a day. First of all, what we can do is that mastering a sports skill that will benefit us for life, so that we will vigorously take challenges and enjoy life in the future. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to call on more people to join a sports club. The more people are involved, the healthier they are. Finally, I propose that we all take action to participate in the activity and contribute our own strength to educate people around us and raise their awareness of keeping healthy. Only with joint efforts can the activity go smoothly. Let’s start now and spare no effort to do our part. We are convinced that with our joint efforts, we can make a difference. Yours sincerely, Li Hua 技能小练 第一组： ① whispered ② in a low voice ③ Whispering 第二组： ① announcing ② with an announcement ③ officially Week 6 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Dear Chris, How is everything going? I hope aeverything is going well back in Ireland. Looking back, I find it has been a year bsince you came back to Ireland. I miss you so much. I still remember the very day when we met at China- Ireland Cultural Festival two years ago. cIt was at that festival that you shared so many interesting things about your country together, dthrough which I learned a lot about your food, culture and history. We really enjoyed ourselves there. eWhat is far more important is that we became good friends then. Though I felt a little sorry that you left China last year, I am pleased to know you are leading a happy life in your hometown. I hope fwe can keep in touch often. Best wishes! Yours, Li Hua Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 Dear Joey, How are you doing? I am more than delighted to