Week 2 应用文写作(投稿)&读后续写-新高中英语写作满分素材

新高中英语写作满分素材 12 Monday 晨读晚练 Week 2 应用文写作（投稿）& 读后续写 A submitted essay focuses on developing a central argument or a specific theme. It can be on Love, Romance, Bravery, or anything else. Here is a comprehensive guide for you. ▷ The Introduction: A good start is important. So, introduce the theme with a hook statement, which will grab readers’ attention from the first line. Also, provide a statement that you are willing to discuss and prove by the end of the essay. ▷ The Body: The body section is the one where you share the story and talk about the experiences you had. You must use proper examples and evidence to prove your points. Also, include points to justify how the experience changed your perspective and made you a better version of yourself. ▷ The Conclusion: You should aim for logical closure by stressing the thesis statement. This section summarizes the entire essay, revisits the main points of the essay and restates your thesis statement. It is also where you connect the dots and state the key takeaways for readers. Sample Essay: Learning English Beyond the Classroom 学生英语学习活动调查结果（人数百分比） 18% 读英语书籍 听英语歌曲 看英语电影 浏览英语学习网站 65% 50% 12% Nowadays, with the growing popularity of smartphones and computers, an increasing number of students are choosing to learn English beyond the classroom in various ways. It can easily be seen that the percentage of students who choose listening to English songs and watching English movies is respectively 65% and 50%. However, those choosing reading English books and visiting English learning websites only account for 18% and 12%. As far as I’m concerned, it is a disturbing trend. For students, what benefits most to their study is reading English books. Because of their lack of self-discipline, they’re more easily addicted to chatting online or playing games. It’s urgent for students themselves to improve their self-discipline, and it’s also urgent for parents and teachers to strengthen the guidance. 美文晨读 一周之计 ▷（成大原创） How to Submit a Writing for the Publication 美文撷英 ① To discuss my future, I decided to write about my expectations in life in this essay:... ② I expect to experience a lot in college, whether it may be meeting new people while living in the dorms or joining a club to volunteer and get involved on campus. ③ I anticipate growing as a person both... and..., by trying new things like... 13 Week 2 应用文写作（投稿）&读后续写 仿写借鉴 范文晚练 满分范文 亮点解析 (2023 年全国甲卷 ) 你们学校正举办主题 为 “用英文讲中国故事” 的征文活动。请你以一位 中国历史人物为题写一篇 短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 人物简介及事迹； 2. 意义或启示。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 题目已为你写好。 The Historical Figure in China ( 确定中心人物 ) Confucius is a well-known figure in Chinese history. ( 简 要 介 绍 ) His teachings emphasized the importance of moral values, respect for elders, and social harmony. Confucius traveled throughout the country, imparting his wisdom to countless disciples and leaving a profound impact on Chinese society. 非谓语动词作状语 ( 介 绍 人 物 事 迹 ) The significance of Confucius cannot be overstated. His teachings shaped the moral and ethical foundation of Chinese culture, fostering respect for authority, harmonious relationships, and the pursuit of knowledge. 非 谓 语 动 词 作 状 语 Even today, his ideas continue to guide individuals and communities in China and beyond. ( 人物影响和启示 ) Confucius’s life offers valuable lessons. He stressed the self-cultivation, respect for elders, and the pursuit of knowledge, which serves as a guiding light in our fast-paced and interconnected world. 非限制性定语从 句 His teachings remind us of the importance of integrity, compassion, and social responsibility. (2023 年全国乙卷改编 ) 请以向学校英文报投 稿的方式，用英语描述学 习一项新技能的经历，及 从中获得的体验和感受。 注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相 应位置作答。 Learning a New Skill ① ( 当我上小学的时候，我有机会参加 ) a musical contest held in my school. ② ( 那是 第一次 ) I watched a live musical performance. ③ ( 这些 出色的演奏者深深打动了我。) . ④ ( 我请求我的父母允许我去 ) take up a piano lesson for beginners. ⑤ ( 开始的时候很困难 ) read the notes on the stave. However, it did not demoralize me. ⑥ ( 我花了我 大部分的闲暇时间 ) practicing the piano. Although my fingers were painful after a few hours’ practice, I felt satisfied if I could play a music piece completely. ⑦ ( 尽管该技能未必是我终身之选，我会 ) still continue learning and playing the piano as my hobby. ⑧ ( 原因 很简单，音乐是我灵魂的良药 ) . 投稿 一般现在时 第一、二、三人称复数兼有 话题唯一 真实客观 Para. 1 开门见山说明投稿主题 Para. 2 按要求具体陈述主题所包含的内容 Para. 3 根据征文的不同类型结尾（必要时介绍自己的观点及理由） 时态 人称 特点 结构 投稿 新高中英语写作满分素材 14 Tuesday 满分素材 满分语料 重在积累 满分词汇 单词： ① gradually/steadily/increasingly 逐 渐 地 / 稳 步地 / 不断增加地 ② obvious/apparent/significant 明 显 的 / 显 然 的 / 显著的 ③ different/various/diverse 不同的 / 多种多样的 ④ improve/strengthen/establish/found 提高 / 加 强 / 建立 短语： ① as far as I’m concerned/from my perspective 就 我而言 ② broaden horizon/foster insight 拓 宽 视 野 / 培 养洞悉力 ③ place importance on/attach importance to 重视 ④ have an opportunity/a chance/the potential to do... 有机会 / 可能做某事 ⑤ play/perform an important part/role in... 起 重 要作用 / 扮演重要角色 吸睛开头句 ① Our school’s English newspaper is seeking proposals for a “...” program for all students. 我校英文报正面向全校学生征集……活动 方案。 ② N o s o o n e r h a d c a u g h t s i g h t o f t h e advertisement you posted on the Internet than I wanted to submit a proposal about.... 一看 到您在网上发布的广告，我就想要提交一 份关于题为 “……”的新活动的提案。 ③ The graph/chart/picture/table above shows that.../It can be seen from the graph that.../ From the graph/chart above, we can see.../As is shown by the graph/in the chart,... 如图所 示，…… ④ According to the survey results, the majority of students..., I thought... can provide a chance for students to exercise regularly and enhance physical and mental health. 据调查 结果显示，大部分学生每周……，我以 为……可以为学生提供一个定期锻炼的机 会，增强身心健康。 高光篇中句 ① Obviously, as is revealed from the statistics, students pose a positive attitude and interest towards..., which not only enable them to..., but also... 显然，从统计数据中显示，学生 对……表现出积极的态度和兴趣，这不仅 使他们能够……，同时也能…… ② What also can be seen clearly is that compared with..., students prefer..., such as..., which seems to be more enjoyable and relaxing. 我们还可以清楚地看到，与…… 相比，学生们更喜欢……，比如……，这 似乎更令人愉快和放松。 ③ What’s more, we can also organize a..., through which we can better... 更重要的是， 我们还可以组织一次……，通过……，我 们可以更好地…… ④ Moreover, outdoor activities can bring students closer to nature, which is essential for maintaining... 此外，户外活动可以拉近 学生与大自然的距离，这对保持……至关 重要。 精彩结尾句 ① All in all, it is high time that we should take measures/steps/ action to... 总而言之，现在 是我们采取措施 / 步骤 / 行动做……的时 候了。 ② I hope that all the efforts will make a difference/pay off in the future. 我 希 望 所 有的努力在不久的将来会产生影响 / 有所 回报。 ③ It is believed that more and more people will realize the essence/ importance of... 我 们 相 信会有越来越多的人意识到……的意义 / 重要性。 15 Week 2 应用文写作（投稿）&读后续写 Wednesday 考场作文 读后续写微技能 2：确定续写方向 (2023 年 1 月浙江卷 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使 之构成一个完整的故事。 I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird( 蜂鸟 ), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs( 蛛 网 ) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up. With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me. When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired? Or too thirsty? As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering( 悬 停 ), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight. During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say goodbye.” 注意 :1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为 你写好。 Paragraph 1: A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. Paragraph 2: I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. 好题探究 最佳素材 近年来高考英语读后续写的体裁以记叙文为主，所选题材多是“人与自我”主题语境 下的“优秀品行”“正确的人生态度”等。选材旨在引导学生发扬助人为乐的精神，提升 自身品德修养，通过友善行为促进社会文明和谐，体现语篇的德育价值。平时在确定续写 方面要根据不同类别的选材确定续写方向： 家庭文化 体现在孩子的独立，父母对孩子的尊重，兄弟姐妹之间的相处，父母对孩子的关爱等等。 交友文化 体现在危难时刻救助朋友，不离不弃。 聚会文化 尤其是毕业舞会和庆生会；聚会内容：譬如检验朋友，晚会创意，聚会礼物的选择。 节日文化 体现在家人团聚、新的开始、各种节日还与慈善和帮助有关。 体育文化 体现在各种比赛活动的竞技精神，也会有如何从自卑不自信走向自信，还有团队、坚持、参 与精神等等。 冒险 / 奋斗文化 体现在冒险脱险、战胜疾病、战胜困难等。 宠物文化 宠物帮助家人度过困难，抚慰心灵等。 新高中英语写作满分素材 16 完美续写 天衣无缝 第一步：读懂原文明确大意 总结三个基础 原文大意 本文以人与动物为线索展开，讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，发现一个房子里有只 蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了。作者把蜂鸟救了，把蜂鸟带出去的时候它迟迟不肯走。当作者走到一 条布满黑莓的小路时，它开始动了，但是却不肯飞走，徘徊着，后来终于飞走了。当作者准 备离开时，蜂鸟又飞到作者面前，好像是在和作者告别。 STEP S Setting (Para. 1) On a farm I saved a hummingbird trapped in spider-webs of a milking house. P Plot (Para. 6) When I was leaving, the hummingbird appeared seeming to saying goodbye. T Theme (Para. 2—3) I planned to let it out but it stayed still with me wondering the reasons. E Emotion (Para. 4—5) The hummingbird looked into my eyes before it flew away. 三个基础（SUM） ★语篇类型：记叙文 ★人称：第一人称、第三人称 ★时态：一般过去时 ★主题：“人与自然”—— 人与动物 ★主角：a hummingbird, I ★ I accidentally saved a trapped hummingbird. ★It seemed to hope to make friends with me. ★Figure out what would happen after I left the farm! Structure Underline Mission 第二步：根据续写段提示句 确定续写方向 构思 第一段 第二段 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 确定提示句关键词 情节发展有理有据 a few weeks later 再回农场心情复杂 (要点�) 心有牵挂回牛奶屋 窗户修好令我欣慰 (要点�) 无缘相见略感惆怅 (要点�) about to leave hummingbird appeared 激动难抑泪眼模糊 (要点�) 蜂鸟靠近落在掌心 目视恩人欲语还休 (要点�) 今后会更关爱动物 (要点�) went to the farm again 17 Week 2 应用文写作（投稿）&读后续写 第三步：结合框架添加细节 完美表达浑然一体 ① as 引导的时间状 语从句拉近与读 者距离。 ② when 引导的定语 从句让读者也想 起作者与蜂鸟的 初遇。 ③ 使 用“It was a great comfort that”句式回应 原文。 ④ 使用现在分词作 状语凸显作者没 见到蜂鸟的惆怅。 ⑤ 使用不定式作状 语表示出于意料 的结果。 ⑥ 使用“It seemed that”句式强调 作者的猜测，但 又合情合理。 ⑦ 使用独立主格结 构彰显扎实的基 本功；本句中使 用 了 as if 引 导 省略主语和系动 词的状语从句。 ⑧ 使用了定语从句 和状语从句。 Paragraph 1: A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. aAs my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment bwhen I rescued the hummingbird from the spider’s web. I rushed back to the deserted house. c It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. dLeaving the house, I couldn’t help wondering how it was getting on now. Had it managed to find its way back home, or was it still out there somewhere struggling to survive? Paragraph 2: I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. A flash of movement caught my attention. I turned around eto see the same hummingbird hovering in the air. fIt seemed that the bird was waiting for me, gits beady eyes locked on mine as if trying to convey some deep, unspoken gratitude. I felt a surge of relief and awe at the sight of this sound and grateful creature, and I knew that I would always cherish the memories hwe shared as I climbed into my car and drove away. (158 words) 新高中英语写作满分素材 18 Thursday 实战演练（Ⅰ） 应用文写作 投稿 Writing 1 (2020 年新高考Ⅰ卷 ) 你校正在组织英语作文比赛。请以身边值得尊敬和爱戴的人为题，写一篇短文参赛，内 容包括 : 1. 人物简介； 2. 尊敬和爱戴的原因。 注意：1. 词数 100 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 The Person I Respect （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） Writing 2 (2023 届四川成都二模 ) 你校英文报正在开展以 “Discovering Good Books”为题的讨论，请使用图表中的调查结 果写一篇短文投稿，内容包括： 1. 描述发现好书的方式； 2. 简单评论； 3. 你的情况。 注意：1. 词数 100 左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Discovering Good Books （请参考 Monday 晨读晚练 & Tuesday 满分素材） How do you usually discover the books you read? 16% 38% 18% 22% 6% Physical stores Word of mouth Social media Online sellers Other 19 Week 2 应用文写作（投稿）&读后续写 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） 读后续写 Writing 1 (2023 届山东日照三模 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Growing up, I was always around my grandma Meredith. She was the one who originally inspired my love for cooking and my dream of becoming a chef. Yet, one day I received a text that would turn my whole life around: “Grandma is seriously ill,” the text read. “We need your help in assisting with her care.” Without a second of hesitation, I agreed to travel back home. Thankfully, my boss at the restaurant let me take unpaid leave for the next several months, so I could come home to help out with grandma. After driving across several states, I finally got back to our family home in West Virginia. Yet, what I saw was really hard for me to bear. The Meredith I saw then was not the lively, joyful Meredith I had seen while I was growing up. “Tony!” she called to me from her bed, “It’s so good to see you!” “Grandma,” I sighed, “I’m not Tony. That’s dad, your son. I’m Hank.” This was the start of a months-long journey of helping out around the house—cooking, cleaning, and, most of all, keeping grandma in good health and good spirits. Every day, I cooked delicious food to keep everyone’s spirits high. But, secretly, I hoped that cooking some dishes that we had made together in my childhood would somehow help get grandma’s memory of me back, if just for a moment. Stews( 炖菜 ), chops( 排骨 ), roasts—I served all of these to grandma and my parents around the clock. When I wasn’t taking grandma out for a walk in her wheelchair or changing her bed sheets, I was cooking. I had cooked for celebrities while at the restaurant in New York City, but never had I poured my heart out into my meals than I did then for grandma. However, it didn’t work at all. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右 ; 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: Then I decided to make something simple. Paragraph 2: After taking a few bites, grandma finally called out my name—my actual name. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 新高中英语写作满分素材 20 Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） 读后续写 Writing 2 (2023 届湖南郴州二模 ) 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 There is one incident in my life that makes me want to say thank you to the person involved. My story happened in June, 1975. It began when my family was finally notified that we had successfully met all the requirements to emigrate( 移民 ) to Canada. We immediately set about selling our household goods to have enough money to start our life in a new country. However, our government only allowed us to use a small portion of the money to pay for the flight tickets. The rest was required to be sent directly to a bank account in Canada. The only cash we were allowed to take along with us was $16. For me and the children, this was our first time out of the country and the first time to be travelling by plane. We were all very amazed by everything new we were experiencing. We did not yet have TV in our home country. So we were excited about watching the in-flight movies. On the flight, the stewardess came around to distribute the headphones to passengers. But since we were flying economy class, we were told that the headphones cost $1. The kids looked at us longingly and asked if they could have a dollar for a set of headphones which they would share. Knowing we had only $16 with us in cash until we reached Canada, I knew that we could not afford to waste the money on headphones—not even one set. When we explained our dilemma to the kids, they accepted it without complaint. But our disappointment must have shown clearly. A gentleman nearby handed his headphones to us, smiling, without saying a word. 注意：1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Paragraph 1: The kids’ faces lit up with joy. Paragraph 2: This incident definitely had a powerful effect on me and our children. （请参考 Wednesday 考场作文） 21 Week 2 应用文写作（投稿）&读后续写 Sunday 语篇提升 提分技法 妙招锦囊 用对动词 动词是句子的中心，在句中描述一个行为、状态或事件，它帮助我们了解主语在做什么。 ▷留心动词在句子中的作用和意义 动词可以构成不同的语言单位，包括短语、从句和句子，还可以表达句子的主谓关系，指 示发生的时间和描述具体的动作、状态等。同时，动词的不同形式还可以传递说话人自身 的情感和态度，如命令、建议、请求、疑问和语气等。 ▷注意动词的时态和语态在语境中的运用 注意动词运用的特定的场景和用法，包括陈述事实、描述过去的经历、表达现在的状态、 预测未来、强调动作的完成度和强调动作的承受者等。 ▷用对动词的时态和语态 英语动词的常用时态有九种，每种时态都有其对应的用法和特点。同时，动词还可以用不 同的语态表达，包括主动语态和被动语态，涉及被动语态时尤其要注意词形变化。 最近，你参加了一次由学校组织的实地参观野生动物保护区——黔灵山公园的活动，请 你用英语给学校英文报投稿，讲述你参观这个野生动物保护区的经历。内容包括： 1. 保护区的基本情况； 2. 动物的现状； 3. 个人想法。 注意：1. 词数 80 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 参考词汇：保护区 sanctuary My Field Trip to Qianlingshan Park My classmates and I have recently gone on an organized field trip to Qianlingshan Park—a wildlife sanctuary. ① ( 位于 ) a distant mountain, the sanctuary ② ( 占 据 面 积 ) around 2,000 square miles. It ③ ( 是 …… 的 家 园 ) diverse wild plants and animals, among which some are reported to be endangered. What ④ ( 给……留下深刻印象 ) us most was the visit to a research center, ⑤ we were fortunate enough to see quite a few rare animals. The trip, aimed at raising our awareness of wildlife protection, was indeed educational and rewarding. 提分臻题 妙法巧用 新高中英语写作满分素材 22 心理活动描写（2）：感激 读后续写的原文通常讲述故事主角所经历的挫折和困难，而续写部分往往凸显的是感 恩、感激这一情感。故事主角在他人的帮助下走出阴霾，变得更加自信、慷慨和宽容，以 一种积极、开放的态度去面对生活。 第一组：我们对他们的支持一直心存感激。 ☆一般描写： We are thankful to them for their support. ▷高级描述： ① We them for their support. (gratitude/appreciation) ② We their support. (grateful) ③ We their support. (appreciative) 第二组：如果你能考虑我的建议，我将感激不尽。 ☆一般描写： I will really thank you very much if you could consider my suggestion. ▷高级描述： ① you could take my advice into account. (grateful) ② my advice into account. (gratitude) ③ you could take my suggestions into consideration. (appreciate) 技能小练 增色续写 模板背诵 内化所学 ▪ 已知世界海洋日 的时间和本文的 要求。 ▪ 已知海洋的重要 性无与伦比，但 是也要介绍重要 的原因。 ▪ 因为重要，所以 呼吁所有人保护 海洋。 ▪ 尾段再次强调保 护海洋的迫切性。 ▪ 文章通常以第一 人称和第三人称 为主。 ▪ 时态以一般现在 时和一般将来时 为主。 (2022 年全国甲卷 ) Our Ocean, Our Responsibility When it comes to ocean, its pollution is becoming more and more serious. World Ocean Day, ( 时 间 是 6 月 8 日 ), is aimed at ( 增强意识 ) of ocean conservation. Ocean ( 起重要作用 ) our world. Not only does ocean offer us sufficient food, but also it ( 保 持 平 衡 ) of nature. Thus, it is imperative to protect ocean. First of all, what we can do is ( 重视 ) our daily actions. For example, garbage can’t be thrown into ocean. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to ( 号 召更多的人 ) to protect the ocean. The more people are involved, the better the ocean environment is. All in all, ( 是时候 ) we devoted ourselves to protecting ocean. To protect ocean is to protect ourselves. 答案全解全析 5 Week 2 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Learning a New Skill aWhen I was in my primary school, I had an opportunity to attend a musical contest held in my school. bThat was the first time I watched a live musical performance. cThe fantastic players touched me deeply. dI asked my parents to allow me to take up a piano lesson for beginners. eIn the beginning, it was quite difficult to read the notes on the stave. However, it did not demoralize me. fI spent most of my leisure hours practicing the piano. Although my fingers were painful after a few hours’ practice, I felt satisfied if I could play a music piece completely. gEven though I will not pursue it as my life career, I will still continue learning and playing the piano as my hobby. hIt is simply because music is the best medication for my soul. Thursday 实战演练 ( Ⅰ ) Writing 1 审题谋篇 语料亮点 The Person I Respect Around us we have a lot of respectable people awho may be our teachers, parents or one of our elders. As for me, bmy father is the person I respect most. My father is a teacher cwho loves his work and his students very much. He works very hard every day, dbut he will also spare some time to accompany me and share many funny things with me about his work. When I come across the problems of learning in my study, emy father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely. He achieved a lot in his work, frespected by his students. So, gin my mind my father is the person I respect most and I love him deeply. ① 使用定语从句凸显主题是介绍“尊敬和爱戴” 的人。 ② 明确自己要介绍的人物是谁，也用到了定语 从句。 ③ 第二段首句先介绍中心人物最明显的特点。 ④ 使用生活中的例子，多角度介绍中心人物被尊 敬或者爱戴的原因。 ⑤ 第二个例子中使用了 patiently 和 bravely 等副词 使人物更生动形象。 ⑥ 使用非谓语动词使句子有层次感。 ⑦ 再次强调主题。 Writing 2 审题谋篇 语篇类型 短文投稿 人称 第三人称、第一人称 时态 一般现在时 三段式结构 ①首段：介绍图表调查结果 ②主体段落：简单评论相关现象 ③尾段：作者的做法和评价 语料亮点 Discovering Good Books According to a recent survey on how people discover books, aword of mouth is the most popular method, with 38% of respondents citing it as their primary source. bThis is followed by online sellers at 22%, social media at 18%, physical stores at 16%, and other methods at 6%. cWhile word of mouth recommendations are seen as the most reliable, social media and online sellers provide a wide variety of options and easy access to reviews. dPhysical stores offer a unique browsing experience. eP e r s o n a l l y, I r e l y o n w o r d o f m o u t h recommendations, but also browse online sellers and visit physical bookstores from time to time fto 新高中英语写作满分素材 6 discover hidden gems. ① 介绍图表或者数据时先找出最醒目的数值以引 起读者的关注。 ② 虽然图表数据众多，但是本句介绍简明扼要。 ③ 对数据涉及的现象进行进一步阐释，表述要 客观；主从复合句和高级词汇 reliable、a wide variety of options 和 access 使表达有高级感。 ④ 对于较小众的现象也不能遗漏。 ⑤ 依据要求介绍自己的情况。 ⑥ 使用非谓语动词表示目的，还使用了 hidden gems 使文章生辉。 Friday 实战演练（Ⅱ） Writing 1 思路点拨 文章主题 家庭生活 原文大意 本文是记叙文。作者在奶奶的影响下成为一 名有名的厨师。一天作者得知奶奶生病后请 假回去照顾她。但是奶奶已经不记得作者。 虽然作者每天换着花样给奶奶做饭，但是奶 奶依旧想不起来。 续写思路 ①根据第一段首句可知，本段描写作者做小 时候奶奶给自己做的三明治的过程。 ②由第二段首句可知，本段描写奶奶认出了 作者，在作者的陪伴下奶奶康复了。 叙事线索 决定做简单的东西 → 想起做三明治 → 做三 明治的过程 → 给奶奶吃→ 奶奶认出作者 → 作者很高兴 → 在作者的陪伴下奶奶康复 高分范文 Paragraph 1: Then I decided to make something simple. What came to my mind was a sandwich. When I was a child, my grandma always made me a sandwich for breakfast. It was the most delicious sandwich in the world. Since then, I have dreamt about being a chef. The sandwich made by my grandma has two layers, the first layer with ham, and the second layer with vegetable salad. So I made a sandwich the way my grandmother did. Then I gave it to my grandma, hoping it could help her remember me. Paragraph 2: After taking a few bites, grandma finally called out my name—my actual name. I was so excited that I hugged her, saying, “Finally, you remember me!” “My dear, you come back. I miss you so much.” My grandma said happily with tears rolling down her face. In the following days, I accompanied my grandma and took care of her. Soon she recovered. It is not only the sandwich but also grandma’s love for me that helps her recover. (150 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ① 激动的：excited/thrilled ② 高兴地：happily/gladly ③ 某人想起来：come to one’s mind/occur to sb. ④ 梦想着：dream about/dream of ⑤ 拥抱某人：hug sb./take sb. in arms 满分句式 ① I was so excited that I hugged her, saying, “Finally, you remember me!”( 由 so... that... 引 导 的 状 语 从句 ) ② It is not only the sandwich but also grandma’s love for me that helps her recover.( 运用了强调句 ) Saturday 实战演练（Ⅲ） Writing 2 思路点拨 高分范文 Paragraph 1: The kids’ faces lit up with joy. They put the headphones on and settled into their seats for the long flight. I was touched by the kindness of the stranger who had given us his own headphones. It was a small gesture, but one that made a big impact on our family. From that moment on, our family felt a renewed sense of hope and gratitude for the journey we were 答案全解全析 7 embarking on. We felt like we were not alone and that there were good people in the world who cared for others. Paragraph 2: This incident definitely had a powerful effect on me and our children. It taught us the value of kindness and the power of small acts. It’s something that we carry with us to this day, and for that, we will be forever grateful to the stranger on the plane who showed us such generosity. My children are now responsible adults who are always ready to help anyone in need. Their families have grown up with the same sense of generosity and kindness. (156 words) 语料借鉴 微技能词汇 ①感动：touch/move/strike ②感激：gratitude/thanks/gratefulness ③影响：make an impact on/affect/influence ④流露；表露：show/reveal/display ⑤帮助：help/assist/aid/do sb. a favor 满分句式 ① We felt like we were not alone and that there were good people in the world who cared for others. ( 两 个连接词 that 分别引导名词性从句作 felt like 的 宾语且第一个 that 被省略，关系代词 who 引导 定语从句修饰先行词 people) ② It’s something that we carry with us to this day, and for that, we will be forever grateful to the stranger on the plane who showed us such generosity. ( 运用 It is... that 强调句型，关系代词 who 引导定语从 句修饰先行词 stranger) Sunday 语篇提升 提分臻题 ① Located in ② covers an area of ③ is home to ④ impressed ⑤ where 模板背诵 Our Ocean, Our Responsibility When it comes to ocean, its pollution is becoming more and more serious. World Ocean Day, falling on June 8th, is aimed at raising awareness of ocean conservation. Ocean plays a key role in our world. Not only does ocean offer us sufficient food, but also it maintains the balance of nature. Thus, it is imperative to protect ocean. First of all, what we can do is to place importance on our daily actions. For example, garbage can’t be thrown into ocean. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to call on more people to protect the ocean. The more people are involved, the better the ocean environment is. All in all, it is high time that we devoted ourselves to protecting ocean. To protect ocean is to protect ourselves. 技能小练 第一组： ① show/express/display/extend/owe our gratitude/ appreciation to ② are/feel grateful to them for ③ have been very appreciative of 第二组： ① I’d be grateful if ② I’d express my gratitude to you for your taking ③ I’d appreciate it if Week 3 Monday 晨读晚练 仿写借鉴 Last Sunday wi tnessed an ext raordinary cross-country running race, awhich nearly drew the attention of every student and teacher of our school. The students bselected from every class took part in the competition. The route cmeasured five kilometers, from our school gate to the foot of Nanshan Mountain. Every runner tried their best to finish the task, dwith their classmates giving them along the way necessarily help as well as encouragement. At last, all the runners emanaged