2023届湖北省黄冈市高三读后续写说课3 课件

Continuation Writing ——以2022年9月黄冈市调研考试为例 Contents 1.Teaching background 2.Teaching goals 3.Analysis of examination 4.Teaching procedures 5.Teaching strategies 6.Teaching reflections Understanding of Curriculum Criterion 《普通高中英语课程标准（2017年版）》中规定故事续写： 考生阅读故事性短文，根据其中情节，续写故事，使之完整。 Teaching background asus (a) - Requirements of continuation writing 该题型旨在培养学生的综合语言能力（尤其是阅读和写作能力）和思维品质（尤其是逻辑性思维和创造性思维），发展跨文化交流能力，从而达成英语学科核心素养，实现立德树人的育人目标。 Teaching background Grading standard 根据本次考试的评分原则，读后续写阅卷时按七个档次给分。参考最高档次第七档（22-25分）的描述并考虑写作部分评分的其他因素，一篇优秀的读后续写应具备以下特征： 创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高；使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解；自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯；拼写准确，标点合理；卷面整洁美观词数充分，150词左右。 Teaching background Teaching goals 1.指导学生准确理解文本大意及六要素（when, where, who, what, how, why）。 2.指导学生谋篇布局，注重叙事过程中思维的逻辑性和创造性，故事情节衔接与过渡自然，叙事完整。 3.指导学生遣词造句，续写出丰富美文。 考试名称 高分率 低分率 0分人数 平均分 最高分 2022年春季期末 0 95% 29 1.5 16 2022年9月调考 0 89% 21 2.2 16 春季期末及9月调考我班读后续写成绩分析 Analysis of examination 高分比例低， 低分人数多， 高考续写任重道远！ Analysis of examination 真题再现 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 John and Bobby joined a wholesale company together just after graduation from college the same year. Both they worked very hard. After several years, however, the boss promoted Bobby to the position of manager but John remained an ordinary employee. John could not take it anymore, submitted his resignation to the boss and complained the boss did not know how to delegate and did not value hard working staff, but only promoted those who flattered him. The boss knew that John worked very hard for the years. He thought a moment and said,“Thank you for your criticism,but I have a request .I hope you will do one more thing for our company before you leave. Perhaps you wil1 change your decision and take back your resignation.” John agreed. The boss asked him to go and find out anyone selling watermelons in the market. John went and returned soon. He said he had found out a man selling watermelons. The boss asked how much per kg? John shook his head and went back to the market to ask and returned to inform the boss of the price-$1.2 per kg. The boss told John to wait a second, and he called Bobby to come to his office. He asked Bobby to go and find anyone selling watermelons in the market. Bobby went, returned and said,“Boss, only one person sells watermelons. $1. 2 per kg, $ 10 for 10kg, he has a supply of 340 melons. On the table 58 melons, every melon weights about 2 kg and bought from the South two days ago, they are fresh and red, good quality.” After the careful report,Bobby waited for the reply of the boss. At that moment, the boss started at John without any words. 注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 John realized the difference from Bobby. John and Bobby were good partners for the company. Step Ⅰ. Reading Read for the main idea and the basic information of the given story. When: After several years of working Where: In a wholesale company Who: John, Bobby, the boss What: The boss promoted Bobby to be the manager. John wanted to resign. How: By doing a research on the watermelon market. Why: Bobby was more considerate than John. Teaching procedures Read and clarify the main events: Beginning: John and Bobby worked in the same wholesale company from the same year. Turning point 1: Bobby was promoted to be the manager but John wasn’t. John wanted to resign. Turning point 2: The boss asked John and Bobby to do some research on the watermelon selling market. Climax: John’s research was simple while Bobby’s was more careful. Para.1: Para.2: Person: Third person Tense: Simple past tense Teaching procedures StepⅡ. Thinking 1.先阅读给出的两段段首文字，确定续写方向，再构思要写的两段大意（可参考中文构思模式）。 2.由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定第二段的框架。 Teaching procedures List the outline. Para.1. Act 1: John realized his insufficient and decided to stay Time transition: After that Act 2: John worked harder and learned from Bobby. Para.2. Act 1: They made development through their cooperation and John was promoted to be the manager, too. Time transition: Now Act 2: John realized details determined success or failure. : Now Act2: John realized details determined success or failure. Teaching procedures 三个原则 1. 原文一致原则：内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达 风格一致。 2. 正能量原则： 故事内容要正能量，传递积极的情感态度， 弘扬社会主义核心价值观。 3. 曲折性原则： 故事应有跌宕起伏，人物会遇到困难或 问题，但最终能解决。 Teaching procedures Step Ⅲ. Writing 根据确定的大意进行续写，添加细节，初写成文。 细节描写: 所见：环境描写 所闻所说：语言描写 I am bound to make it. 所做：动作描写 take back the resignation ,work harder, learn from Bobby. 所思：心理活动描写 shocked， determined， affected Teaching procedures 丰富的句子结构和句型： with的复合结构，非谓语动词，独立主格结构 三大从句，倒装句，强调句，省略句…… 续写两段的词数大体平衡，一般应避免一段过长，一段过短的情况。 Teaching procedures 范文有如下亮点之处： 1.使用高级结构做状语：shocked by...,unable to do, affected by... 2.高级短语：be lost in thought, be bound to do, thanks to 3.高级句式：倒装句：（1）After that, not only did John work harder than before, but he also learned from Bobby with an open mind. （2）Only with a humble heart to learn from others, can we constantly surpass ourselves and finally achieve success. Teaching procedures 主语从句：Now it occurs to John that details determine success or failure. 比喻句：Instead of leaving the company like a drowned mouse， he decided to stay and prove his ability. 4.名言警句：No gold is red, no man is perfect. Teaching procedures Step Ⅳ. Polishing 1. 用精彩词汇代替一般词汇。 2. 用高级句式代替一般句式。 3. 用适当的衔接词连接句子。 4. 用常见的修辞手法给文章润色。 Teaching procedures Step Ⅴ. Checking 1. 续写部分与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接。 2. 文理是否连贯。 3. 内容的丰富性和高级句式的使用。 4. 语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。 5. 拼写和标点符号是否正确。 三美：形式美，内容美，结构美。 六不：不增加人物，不增加旁支情节，不用过多对话， 不偏离原文主题，不违背逻辑常理，不用负能量结局。 Teaching procedures StepⅥ .Copying Paragraph1: John realized the difference from Bobby. Shocked by Bobby's perfect performance, John was lost in thought, unable to utter a single word .It was quite a while before John made his final decision. Instead of leaving the company like a drowned mouse, he decided to stay and prove his ability. "I am bound to make it！" John said to the boss with a determined look, taking back the resignation. After that, not only did John work harder than before, but he also learned from Bobby with an open mind. Thus, John made steady progress in his work. Paragraph2: John and Bobby were good partners for the company. Thanks to their cooperation and hard work, the company made a rapid development. Fortunately, affected by John's efforts, the boss promoted him to the position of manager, too. Now it occurs to John that details determine success or failure. As an old saying goes, "No gold is red, no man is perfect." Only with a humble heart to learn from others, can we constantly surpass ourselves and finally achieve success. Teaching procedures 1. 注重语言素材的积累和运用。多记多背高级词汇，经典句式，名言警句和美文。 Teaching strategies 2. 注重训练。每周一篇读后续写限时训练。 Teaching strategies 3. 采用读-说-写-自评-互评-批改-分享的训练模式。 学生的习作先自评，再在同学间互评，然后老师评价，优秀作文分享给全班。同时教师写下水作文，让学生点评。在生生互动和师生互动中使学生的语言能力和思维品质得以逐步提升，做到教学相长。 Teaching strategies My students’ works Teaching strategies My works 4.改进书写和卷面。 Teaching strategies Present situation of the students: 作为农村普通高中的学生，我班学生在读后续写题型中主要存在这些问题： 1. 做题速度慢。前面的题型花费了过多时间，导致作文续写时间不够，仓促应付。 2. 词汇量有限，读不懂给出的语言材料。 3. 不知如何构思。写出的文章条理不清晰，逻辑不严密，细节描写不足。 4. 错误较多。主要有单词拼写错误，人称错误，时态错误，语法错误，中式英文表达等。 5. 书写和标点符号不规范，卷面不整洁。 Teaching reflection Improvement measures: 读后续写是阅读和写作结合的命题方式，其目的是提升学生的综合语言能力。提高写作能力的措施主要有两个： 1.多读 不仅在平时的阅读教学中倡导深度阅读，把控文本的语篇结构，理清故事的发展脉络，而且要积累语言知识，读背优美单词、短语、经典句式、名言警句、美文等。 2.多写 多写多练，培养学生正确的英语语言思维。消除学生对写作的恐惧心理，使学生保持良好的学习情绪，树立学好英语的自信心。 对语言知识的积累是基础，对写作方法的积累是关键。 练习选材要符合课程标准的要求和学生的能力水平。 Teaching reflection 循序渐进！ 熟能生巧！ 坚持就会进步！ Summary Thank you！ $$