02.选择性必修第一册Unit 4 Meeting the muse(读后续写之情感描写)-同步写作课】2024-2025学年高二英语单元写作深度指导(外研版2019)

Unit 4 Meeting the muse 单元写作深度指导 读后续写（情感描写） 三年考情（2022-2024） 命题趋势 2024：新高考I卷&II卷：人与社会（打车费）        浙江1月：人与自我（校园话题） 2023  新高考I卷&II卷：人与自我（老师帮助作者培养写作兴趣） 浙江1月：人与自然（我与蜂鸟的故事）  2022 新高考I卷&II卷；人与自我（鼓励残疾学生参加越野赛跑）       浙江1月：人与自我（与队友互助完成任务） 浙江6月：人与社会（参加社区服务） 新高考读后续写语篇类型以记叙文为主，叙议结合为辅。语篇材料通常具有正能量且通俗易懂，故事线索逻辑性较强。新高考主题均选自人与自我、人与社会、人与自然。内容包括个人成长类、逆境脱困类；善举助人类、社会亲情友爱类、人与动物类、趣事回忆类等等。主要考查动作描写，环境描写，语言描写和情感描写。读后续写是高中英语一个重要的组成部分,其中情绪描写是所有描写手法中占比例最大的一项。 考查要点与应对策略 ‌高考英语读后续写是一种综合性较强的题型，‌既考查了考生的语言基础知识，‌又考查了其综合运用语言的能力、‌创造力和想象力。‌因此，‌考生需要在备考过程中注重多方面能力的提升和训练。‌高考英语读后续写作为一种新题型，‌其考查特点主要体现在以下几个方面：‌ 1.综合语言运用能力：‌读后续写要求考生在阅读理解的基础上，‌将所获取的信息进行整合，‌并通过写作表达出来。‌这既考查了考生的阅读理解能力，‌也考查了其语言表达能力，‌包括词汇、‌语法和句式的运用。‌ 2.创造性与想象力：‌读后续写通常提供一篇不完整的故事，‌要求考生根据已有情节进行合理想象，‌续写故事的高潮或结局。‌这要求考生具备一定的创造性和想象力，‌能够构思出既符合逻辑又新颖有趣的故事情节。‌ 3.逻辑性与连贯性：‌续写的内容需要与原文情境融洽，‌保持人物性格、‌故事情节的一致性，‌同时上下文之间要衔接自然、‌连贯。‌这要求考生具备较强的逻辑思维能力，‌能够准确把握原文的脉络和走向。‌ 4.文化意识与价值观：‌读后续写所提供的语篇材料一般是具有正能量且故事性较强的文章，‌主题往往涉及人与自我、‌人与社会、‌人与自然等。‌考生在续写过程中需要体现积极的世界观和价值观取向，‌这有助于培养其文化意识和正确的价值取向。‌ 5.评分标准与要求：‌读后续写的评分标准通常从内容、‌词汇、‌语法和语篇结构三个方面进行考虑，‌具体包括续写内容的质量、‌完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度；‌所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、‌恰当性和多样性；‌上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性等。‌同时，‌还会关注词数、‌拼写和标点符号等细节问题。‌ ‌为了做好读后续写题，‌考生需要在平时注重积累语料库，‌增强语篇分析能力，‌加强思维训练和自主创造能力的培养。‌同时，‌还需要多读范文，‌积累有效的语言素材，‌提升语言表达的质量。 读后续写三原则： 1. 原文一致原则 内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。 2.曲折性原则 故事情节应跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。 3.正能量原则 故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好,和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法等等。‌ 读后续写情感描写常用的表达 情感描写常见词汇 写作积累 与“神态描写”相关的表达 1.脸上激动的表情:an expression of excitement on one's face 2.坚定的眼神:a determined look 3.满足 的 微 笑/神情:asmile/look of satisfaction 4.灿烂的微笑:a brilliant smile 5.拉着长脸:pull a long face 6.怒视某人:glare at sb. 7.极度愤怒的一眼:a look of burning anger 8.因愤怒而颤抖:tremble with anger 9.一丝微笑浮上她的脸庞。Asmile floated on her face. 10.她眼含泪水。Her eyes were filled with tears. 话题句式： Happiness &Joy幸福和快乐 He sat beside her, with her hand in his. He was triumphantly happy. 他坐在她身旁,握着她的手,充满胜利的喜悦。 Her heart was glowing with a special happiness. 她的心中洋溢着一种特殊的快乐。 She thought of him with pleasure. She had happy memories of their childhood. 她开心地想起他。对于他们的童年,她有着愉快的记忆。 Excitement 激动 The boy stopped short, his heart thumping with excitement and anticipation. 男孩停住了脚步，他的心怦怦直跳，充满了兴奋和期待。 Her face was glowing with excitement.她因兴奋而显得容光焕发。 His face was lit up with excitement. 他的脸由于激动而放出光彩。 Her heart was beating like a freed bird's as she leaned down and gathered the gifts to her breast. 当她俯下身子将礼物抱在胸前时，她的心就像获得自由的小鸟一样跳动着。 Shame羞愧 She felt so ashamed that she could feel her face burning. 她感到非常羞愧，脸上滚烫。 So ashamed did she feel that she was close to tears.她羞愧得都快哭了。 So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face. 她感到非常羞愧，都能觉得血液涌上脸颊。 An expression of shame crossed his face.他脸上掠过一阵羞赧的神情。 Shyness羞怯 A blush spread from his face to his neck.他从脸到脖子全红了。 A red glow came to her cheek.一片红晕飞上了她的脸颊。 Cathy looked up at him and gave him a shy smile. Cathy抬头看着他，羞涩地朝他微笑了一.下。 Chris was a bit of an introvert and didn't have many friends. Chris性格有点内向，朋友不多。 He was painfully shy in public, but completely different at home with his family. 他在公共场合非常腼腆，但是他在家与家人在一起时却判若两人。 Nervousness紧张 There was a touch of nervousness in his manner.他的举止有点紧张。出淅没林 His heart skipped a beat.他的心跳陡然停了一下。 Her heart pounded, and she tried to seem smaller behind her desk.她的心怦怦地跳，她恨不得变得小点儿，躲在桌子后。 Her heart throbbed; her cheeks burned.她的心怦怦直跳，满脸通红。 His heart almost leaped into his mouth.他的心几乎要跳出来了。 His heart was beating So hard it seemed to shake him.d before. His knees felt shaky; he felt they would bend and he would collapse to the floor他的膝盖发抖，他觉得双膝弯曲，就要瘫倒在地上了。 Uneasiness不安 Her peace of mind was destroyed.她平静的心情被破坏了。 Some actors never have butterflies before going on stage.有些演员上台前从不紧张。 Ted's angry outbursts unsettled the whole family. Ted的突然发怒使得全家人都诚惶诚恐。 The dogs are jumpy tonight- I wonder if there's something outside. 今天晚上，狗很不安一我怀疑外面是不是有什 么东西。 Surprise 惊讶 He was thrown into astonishment.他大吃一惊。 I was completely taken aback by his aggressive and unreasonable attitude. 他那挑衅、不讲理的态度让我大为吃惊。 I'm rally surprised that he remembered my birthday 我真的很吃惊，他竟然记得我的生日。 It amazes me that no one has thought of the idea sooner. 居然没有人早点想到这个办法，这令我吃惊。 It gave me a shock when I realized how close I had come to being killed. 我意识到自己刚才差点儿没命，吓了一大跳。 Anger 愤怒 Brian's remark left his boss speechless with anger. Brian的那番话气得老板哑口无言。 Filled with fury, Jim was unable to utter a single word. Jim满腔愤怒，一句话也说不出来。 Gina was furious with him for leaving the baby alone in the house. Gina对他大发雷建，因为他把宝宝独自留在家里。 He collapsed on a chair, his cheeks turning now white with anger, now red with shame. 他倒在一张椅子上， 两颊一时气得煞白，一时羞恼得通红。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body. Some of her organs, bones and muscles were out of shape. No one expected her to survive. She did make it but with her strange body figure, everyone could recognize her, even from a distance. In Emily White’s hometown, there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the town's people. Many people tried out each year for it but so many were turned away.It could only include the most excellent people in the field. Emily had a beautiful singing voice.Last year she went to Mrs. Owens--her music teacher to ask to join in the performance. Without letting her sing,Mrs.Owens took a look at Emily's body and said, “Child, you just don't fit. Everyone would stare at you and that would make you uncomfortable. It would make them uncomfortable , too." Without singing a single note,Emily was sent back through the door of the choral(合唱队的)room. Hurt and upset, she decided never to try out again. But Mrs. Owens then retired. This year, there came a new music teacher, Mr. Butler. He heard about Emily and suggested that she have a try. Emily didn't want to be rejected again, so she hesitated a little about it. As Emily struggled, the door was pushed open and Mr. Butler called, “Emily, you're next.”Although kind of nervous, Emily did as Mr. Butler told her to do. Mr. Butler sat by the piano to accompany Emily. When Emily finished her testing performance, she thanked Mr. Butler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day. Emily couldn't sleep that night. She was suffering from the feelings that she didn't fit and the great need to be accepted. By the next morning, her stomach was even in pain because of stress. 注意:续写词数应为150左右。 Paragraph 1: The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Finally, the day of the performance came. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文本分析 初识文本 重点词汇 1.out of shape 变形的;不健康,身体不好 2.make it 幸免于难,渡过难关 3.recognize v.认出 4.performance n.表演 5.try out for...参加…选拔(或试演) 6.turn away 把……拒之门外 7.reject vt.拒绝接受,不予考虑 8.hesitate vi.犹豫,迟疑不决 9.struggle vi.挣扎 10. suffer from... 因...受苦 11. in pain 感到疼痛 12. accompany 为...伴奏，陪伴 预测情节发展 第一段：第二天，Emily焦虑地看合唱室门上的名单（首句信息）-----Emily被选上——Emily心情复杂，兴奋之余流露出不自信-----Mr. Butler对Emily说了一番话，引导Emily接下来坚定信心，刻苦训练 第二段:终于到了演出那天(首句信息)→Emily 走上表演舞台后观众因她的外表而产生不好的反应→Emily不受影响,全身心投人表演→Emily演出成功,观众的态度发生转变→Emily战胜自己,完成蜕变。 遣词造句 1.在横线上填入适当的单词 ( 1 )to one's_____________让某人惊讶的是 (2)_____________adj.神秘的 (3)remain_____________保持冷静 (4) with all one's_____________全心全意地 (5)come____遇到 (6)be used______sth.习惯于某事 (7)____one's breath屏息 (8)break_突然开始 答案(1)surprise(2)mysterious(3)calm (4) heart(5)across(6) to(7) hold(8) into 2.完成句子 (9)她喜出望外,但又心存疑虑。 She was_____________ but_____________. (10)她使劲拍了一下自己的手,却发现自己并不是在做梦。 She hit her hand hard _____________she wasn't dreaming. (11)然后Mr.Butler带着笑容从房间里走了出来。 Then Mr. Butler walked out of the room_____________. (12)Emily 深受鼓舞,坚定地点点头,保证为演出努力练习。 Emily was_____________, and she_____________and promised to practice hard for the performance. (13) 她一出现在舞台上,迎接她的是轻蔑的目光。 _____________appearing on the stage, she was_____________ scornful eyes. (14)观众爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。 The audience _____________thunderous applause. (15) Mr.Butler被感动了，他给了Emily一个大大的拥抱。 Mr. Butler was moved, and he gave Emily _____________. (16)那时,他知道Emily已经战胜了她自己。 Then he knew that Emily had _____________. 答案(9)overjoyed;doubtful(10) only to find(11) with a smile (12)greatly encouraged;nodded determinedly(13) Upon/On;greeted with(14) broke into(15)a big hug ( 16)overcome herself 3.句式升级 (17)用形容词作状语合并句(9)和句(10) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (18) 用倒装句改写句(11) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (19) 用过去分词作状语改写句(12) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (20)用so...that...结构改写句(15) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (20) 用it强调句强调时间状语改写句(16) ____________________________________________________________________________________ 答案(17)Overjoyed but doubtful, she hit her hand hard only to find she wasn't dreaming (18) Then out of the room walked Mr.Butler with a smile (19) Greatly encouraged,Emily nodded determinedly and promised to practice hard for the performance (20) Mr. Butler was so moved that he gave Emily a big hug (21) It was then that he knew that Emily had overcome herself 连句成篇 Paragraph 1: The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Finally, the day of the performance came. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考范文 Paragraph 1: The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. To her surprise, on top of the list was her name! Overjoyed but doubtful, she hit her hand hard only to find she wasn't dreaming. Then out of the room walked Mr. Butler with a smile.“Emily, we had another good news for you,"he said in a mysterious voice. “We choose you to be the lead singer. Do you believe in yourself?” Greatly encouraged,Emily nodded determinedly and promised to practice hard for the performance. Paragraph 2: Finally, the day of the performance came. Upon appearing on the stage,she was greeted with scornful eyes. But remaining calm, she began to sing with all her heart. Who knew how many such situations she had come across? She was really used to it. When she finished her song, there was a moment of silence, as if the world was holding its breath. Suddenly,the audience broke into thunderous applause.Mr. Butler was so moved that he gave her a big hug. It was then that he knew that Emily had overcome herself. 一、单句翻译（情感描写） 1.他回到家里，又累又饿，不想说一句话。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.极度惊讶和困惑，我一篇接一篇地看着日记，每一篇表现的主题都很相似。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 电话里，听见他的话，我羞愧得低下头, 一阵愧疚向我袭来, 脸上发烫。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 回想起那一幕，简非常后悔，忍不住哭了起来，泪水夺眶而出。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5.跟老师讲出真相后，她不安地坐在座位上，手指交叉着，心跳得像打鼓一样。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6.听到这话，Bob感到很尴尬，扭动并使劲揉搓他的手，似乎是想在这刺骨的冬日里取暖。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1.Tired and hungry, he went home, not saying a word. 2.Greatly surprised and confused, I read diary after diary, each expressing a similar theme. 3.Hearing his words on the phone, I hung my head shamefully, a wave of guilt sweeping over me with my face burning. Recalling the scene, so regretful was Jane that she couldn’t stop crying, tears sparking out her eyes. Having told the teacher the truth, she sat restlessly in her seat with her fingers crossed and her heart pounding like a drum. On hearing this, Bob became embarrassed, twisting and rubbing his hands () over and over again seemingly to get warm in this freezing winter. 二、读后续写 （2023·广东阳江·统考一模） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 One morning, Ann’s neighbor Tracy found a lost dog wandering around the local elementary school. She asked Ann if she could keep an eye on the dog and she planned to find its owner. Ann agreed, but she said that she could watch it only for the day because she needed to take care of her son. At the time, her son Thomas was 10 years old, who was recovering from a heart operation. Later, Tracy took photos of the dog, printed off 400 FOUND fliers, put them in mailboxes and began to find the dog’s owner. Meanwhile, Ann bought some pet supplies, warning her son not to fall in love with the dog. However, her son was filled with excitement as he knew that his mother got a dog back home. He planned to provide the dog with some food everyday. Four days later, Ann and her son were still looking after the dog, whom they had started to call Riley. During the four days, they took care of the dog carefully, provided some food, took a shower and played with it, and they had already become the best friends. The evening of the fifth day, when Ann arrived home from work, the dog threw itself against the door and barked madly at her. As soon as she opened the door, Riley dashed into the boys’ room where Ann found Thomas suffering from a heart attack. Riley ran over to Thomas, but as soon as Ann bent over to help him, the dog went silent. The doctor said if it hadn’t come to get his mother in time, Thomas would have died. Luckily, with the doctor’s help, Thomas could go home tomorrow morning. “Mum, can we keep it if we can’t find its owner? Even we can ask for permission if we find the owner,” Thomas asked his mother when they came back home. “Well, since no one has called to claim it, we decide to keep it,” his mother replied. Hearing that, Thomas was excited. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 However, the next day, Ann was told a man named Peter recognized his lost dog. ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ Peter’s car came and Thomas stood silently beside his car. ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ A possible version However, the next day, Ann was told a man named Peter recognized his lost dog. Tracy said Peter called the number on the flier. Ann told Tracy what had happened during these days and even started crying. At the same time, Ann showed great gratitude to the dog. And Tracy told Ann that Peter would drive to her house to pick up his dog this afternoon. Later, Ann told Thomas the owner had called to claim Riley, they needed to return it to the owner. Hearing that news, Thomas put his hands over his mouth. His eyes were wide open for he couldn’t believe what had happened. However, he had to face the truth. Peter’s car came and Thomas stood silently beside his car. Ann took Riley from her home. Seeing that, Thomas’ tears were rolling down his cheeks. Riley sat beside Thomas, sometimes ran around him and shouted: wom wom, which clearly showed that Riley didn’t want to leave his friend, Thomas. At last, Thomas asked Peter, “Can we keep Riley?” Knowing this point, Peter thought about it for a moment, and then said, “Maybe my dog was supposed to find you, maybe you should keep it.” Hearing that, Thomas ran around after Riley, obviously, they were full of joy. 【写作提示】 本文以狗为线索，讲述了一只迷路的小狗被Ann收留并救了Ann儿子一命的故事。 【要点分析】 1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“然而，第二天，安被告知一个名叫彼得的人认出了他丢失的狗。”可知，第一段可描述Peter看到传单上的狗并打电话询问。Ann对这只狗表达了感谢，Peter开车去接狗回家。Thomas知道这个消息后很难过，但也得面对现实。②由第二段首句内容“彼得的车来了，托马斯静静地站在他的车旁边。”可知，第二段可描述Thomas的难过，最后Peter看到狗也不愿意离开。最终让Thomas留下了狗。 2.续写线索：认出狗——接狗回家——难过，不舍——留下狗——开心 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①流下：roll down/stream down ②归还：return/give back ③充满：be full of/be filled with/be overwhelmed with 情绪类 ①感激：show great gratitude to/express appreciation ②乐趣：joy/pleasure 【高分句型1】 Hearing that news, Thomas put his hands over his mouth.（运用了现在分词作状语） 【高分句型2】 Riley sat beside Thomas, sometimes ran around him and shouted: wom wom, which clearly showed that Riley didn’t want to leave his friend, Thomas.(运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句） 【2024·新课标Ⅰ卷·高考真题】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry." 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案： Para 1 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He looked at me in disbelief, asking me what to do. Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. “If I miss this last bus to Prague, I’ll be late for the conference which is so important that I can’t afford to miss it!” I explained. “May I have your phone number? I will call you and return the money I owe you. I promise I will keep my word or you keep my watch!” I added, handing him my watch as well as my business card. Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch. He wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, Sir.” A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure. Para 2 Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Beaming a warm smile at him, I gave him a big hug the moment I saw him. We chatted happily on the way to the airport. I told him that thanks to his generosity and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down. I also gave him an attractive souvenir I had bought at Prague, which he accepted with delight. We became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly. I felt blessed to have such a warm-hearted friend like Gunter. 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在一次因风暴延误的旅途中，匆忙搭乘出租车前往车站赶最后一班去布拉格的公共汽车。司机冈特不熟悉车站位置，通过电话求助后顺利抵达。到达时作者却发现自己没带现金，尝试用葡萄牙银行卡支付没有成功，而车站的取款机也故障了。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“我跑回到冈特那里，告诉他这个坏消息。”可知，第一段可描写作者留下冈特的电话，承诺会还钱给对方，冈特同意，最终作者及时登上了公共汽车。 ②由第二段首句内容“四天后，当我回到维也纳时，我按照承诺给冈特打了电话。”可知，第二段可描写作者付费给冈特，并向对方表示感激，两人成为了好朋友。 2.续写线索：作者给出解决办法——承诺还钱——冈特同意——作者登上公共汽车——履行承诺还钱——两人成为朋友 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①拒绝：reject/refuse ②给某人拥抱：give sb. a hug/embrace sb. ③记下，写下：write down/set down 情绪类 ①难以置信地：in disbelief/incredibly/unbelievably ②开心地：happily/joyfully 【点睛】【高分句型1】He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before.（运用了where引导的限制性定语从句） 【高分句型2】When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down.（运用了when引导的时间状语从句，that引导的限制性定语从句） ( 1 )原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ Unit 4 Meeting the muse 单元写作深度指导 读后续写（情感描写） 三年考情（2022-2024） 命题趋势 2024：新高考I卷&II卷：人与社会（打车费）        浙江1月：人与自我（校园话题） 2023  新高考I卷&II卷：人与自我（老师帮助作者培养写作兴趣） 浙江1月：人与自然（我与蜂鸟的故事）  2022 新高考I卷&II卷；人与自我（鼓励残疾学生参加越野赛跑）       浙江1月：人与自我（与队友互助完成任务） 浙江6月：人与社会（参加社区服务） 新高考读后续写语篇类型以记叙文为主，叙议结合为辅。语篇材料通常具有正能量且通俗易懂，故事线索逻辑性较强。新高考主题均选自人与自我、人与社会、人与自然。内容包括个人成长类、逆境脱困类；善举助人类、社会亲情友爱类、人与动物类、趣事回忆类等等。主要考查动作描写，环境描写，语言描写和情感描写。读后续写是高中英语一个重要的组成部分,其中情绪描写是所有描写手法中占比例最大的一项。 考查要点与应对策略 ‌高考英语读后续写是一种综合性较强的题型，‌既考查了考生的语言基础知识，‌又考查了其综合运用语言的能力、‌创造力和想象力。‌因此，‌考生需要在备考过程中注重多方面能力的提升和训练。‌高考英语读后续写作为一种新题型，‌其考查特点主要体现在以下几个方面：‌ 1.综合语言运用能力：‌读后续写要求考生在阅读理解的基础上，‌将所获取的信息进行整合，‌并通过写作表达出来。‌这既考查了考生的阅读理解能力，‌也考查了其语言表达能力，‌包括词汇、‌语法和句式的运用。‌ 2.创造性与想象力：‌读后续写通常提供一篇不完整的故事，‌要求考生根据已有情节进行合理想象，‌续写故事的高潮或结局。‌这要求考生具备一定的创造性和想象力，‌能够构思出既符合逻辑又新颖有趣的故事情节。‌ 3.逻辑性与连贯性：‌续写的内容需要与原文情境融洽，‌保持人物性格、‌故事情节的一致性，‌同时上下文之间要衔接自然、‌连贯。‌这要求考生具备较强的逻辑思维能力，‌能够准确把握原文的脉络和走向。‌ 4.文化意识与价值观：‌读后续写所提供的语篇材料一般是具有正能量且故事性较强的文章，‌主题往往涉及人与自我、‌人与社会、‌人与自然等。‌考生在续写过程中需要体现积极的世界观和价值观取向，‌这有助于培养其文化意识和正确的价值取向。‌ 5.评分标准与要求：‌读后续写的评分标准通常从内容、‌词汇、‌语法和语篇结构三个方面进行考虑，‌具体包括续写内容的质量、‌完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度；‌所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、‌恰当性和多样性；‌上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性等。‌同时，‌还会关注词数、‌拼写和标点符号等细节问题。‌ ‌为了做好读后续写题，‌考生需要在平时注重积累语料库，‌增强语篇分析能力，‌加强思维训练和自主创造能力的培养。‌同时，‌还需要多读范文，‌积累有效的语言素材，‌提升语言表达的质量。 读后续写三原则： 1. 原文一致原则 内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。 2.曲折性原则 故事情节应跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。 3.正能量原则 故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好,和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法等等。‌ 读后续写情感描写常用的表达 情感描写常见词汇 写作积累 与“神态描写”相关的表达 1.脸上激动的表情:an expression of excitement on one's face 2.坚定的眼神:a determined look 3.满足 的 微 笑/神情:asmile/look of satisfaction 4.灿烂的微笑:a brilliant smile 5.拉着长脸:pull a long face 6.怒视某人:glare at sb. 7.极度愤怒的一眼:a look of burning anger 8.因愤怒而颤抖:tremble with anger 9.一丝微笑浮上她的脸庞。Asmile floated on her face. 10.她眼含泪水。Her eyes were filled with tears. 话题句式： Happiness &Joy幸福和快乐 He sat beside her, with her hand in his. He was triumphantly happy. 他坐在她身旁,握着她的手,充满胜利的喜悦。 Her heart was glowing with a special happiness. 她的心中洋溢着一种特殊的快乐。 She thought of him with pleasure. She had happy memories of their childhood. 她开心地想起他。对于他们的童年,她有着愉快的记忆。 Excitement 激动 The boy stopped short, his heart thumping with excitement and anticipation. 男孩停住了脚步，他的心怦怦直跳，充满了兴奋和期待。 Her face was glowing with excitement.她因兴奋而显得容光焕发。 His face was lit up with excitement. 他的脸由于激动而放出光彩。 Her heart was beating like a freed bird's as she leaned down and gathered the gifts to her breast. 当她俯下身子将礼物抱在胸前时，她的心就像获得自由的小鸟一样跳动着。 Shame羞愧 She felt so ashamed that she could feel her face burning. 她感到非常羞愧，脸上滚烫。 So ashamed did she feel that she was close to tears.她羞愧得都快哭了。 So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face. 她感到非常羞愧，都能觉得血液涌上脸颊。 An expression of shame crossed his face.他脸上掠过一阵羞赧的神情。 Shyness羞怯 A blush spread from his face to his neck.他从脸到脖子全红了。 A red glow came to her cheek.一片红晕飞上了她的脸颊。 Cathy looked up at him and gave him a shy smile. Cathy抬头看着他，羞涩地朝他微笑了一.下。 Chris was a bit of an introvert and didn't have many friends. Chris性格有点内向，朋友不多。 He was painfully shy in public, but completely different at home with his family. 他在公共场合非常腼腆，但是他在家与家人在一起时却判若两人。 Nervousness紧张 There was a touch of nervousness in his manner.他的举止有点紧张。出淅没林 His heart skipped a beat.他的心跳陡然停了一下。 Her heart pounded, and she tried to seem smaller behind her desk.她的心怦怦地跳，她恨不得变得小点儿，躲在桌子后。 Her heart throbbed; her cheeks burned.她的心怦怦直跳，满脸通红。 His heart almost leaped into his mouth.他的心几乎要跳出来了。 His heart was beating So hard it seemed to shake him.d before. His knees felt shaky; he felt they would bend and he would collapse to the floor他的膝盖发抖，他觉得双膝弯曲，就要瘫倒在地上了。 Uneasiness不安 Her peace of mind was destroyed.她平静的心情被破坏了。 Some actors never have butterflies before going on stage.有些演员上台前从不紧张。 Ted's angry outbursts unsettled the whole family. Ted的突然发怒使得全家人都诚惶诚恐。 The dogs are jumpy tonight- I wonder if there's something outside. 今天晚上，狗很不安一我怀疑外面是不是有什 么东西。 Surprise 惊讶 He was thrown into astonishment.他大吃一惊。 I was completely taken aback by his aggressive and unreasonable attitude. 他那挑衅、不讲理的态度让我大为吃惊。 I'm rally surprised that he remembered my birthday 我真的很吃惊，他竟然记得我的生日。 It amazes me that no one has thought of the idea sooner. 居然没有人早点想到这个办法，这令我吃惊。 It gave me a shock when I realized how close I had come to being killed. 我意识到自己刚才差点儿没命，吓了一大跳。 Anger 愤怒 Brian's remark left his boss speechless with anger. Brian的那番话气得老板哑口无言。 Filled with fury, Jim was unable to utter a single word. Jim满腔愤怒，一句话也说不出来。 Gina was furious with him for leaving the baby alone in the house. Gina对他大发雷建，因为他把宝宝独自留在家里。 He collapsed on a chair, his cheeks turning now white with anger, now red with shame. 他倒在一张椅子上， 两颊一时气得煞白，一时羞恼得通红。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body. Some of her organs, bones and muscles were out of shape. No one expected her to survive. She did make it but with her strange body figure, everyone could recognize her, even from a distance. In Emily White’s hometown, there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the town's people. Many people tried out each year for it but so many were turned away.It could only include the most excellent people in the field. Emily had a beautiful singing voice.Last year she went to Mrs. Owens--her music teacher to ask to join in the performance. Without letting her sing,Mrs.Owens took a look at Emily's body and said, “Child, you just don't fit. Everyone would stare at you and that would make you uncomfortable. It would make them uncomfortable , too." Without singing a single note,Emily was sent back through the door of the choral(合唱队的)room. Hurt and upset, she decided never to try out again. But Mrs. Owens then retired. This year, there came a new music teacher, Mr. Butler. He heard about Emily and suggested that she have a try. Emily didn't want to be rejected again, so she hesitated a little about it. As Emily struggled, the door was pushed open and Mr. Butler called, “Emily, you're next.”Although kind of nervous, Emily did as Mr. Butler told her to do. Mr. Butler sat by the piano to accompany Emily. When Emily finished her testing performance, she thanked Mr. Butler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day. Emily couldn't sleep that night. She was suffering from the feelings that she didn't fit and the great need to be accepted. By the next morning, her stomach was even in pain because of stress. 注意:续写词数应为150左右。 Paragraph 1: The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Finally, the day of the performance came. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文本分析 初识文本 重点词汇 1.out of shape 变形的;不健康,身体不好 2.make it 幸免于难,渡过难关 3.recognize v.认出 4.performance n.表演 5.try out for...参加…选拔(或试演) 6.turn away 把……拒之门外 7.reject vt.拒绝接受,不予考虑 8.hesitate vi.犹豫,迟疑不决 9.struggle vi.挣扎 10. suffer from... 因...受苦 11. in pain 感到疼痛 12. accompany 为...伴奏，陪伴 预测情节发展 第一段：第二天，Emily焦虑地看合唱室门上的名单（首句信息）-----Emily被选上——Emily心情复杂，兴奋之余流露出不自信-----Mr. Butler对Emily说了一番话，引导Emily接下来坚定信心，刻苦训练 第二段:终于到了演出那天(首句信息)→Emily 走上表演舞台后观众因她的外表而产生不好的反应→Emily不受影响,全身心投人表演→Emily演出成功,观众的态度发生转变→Emily战胜自己,完成蜕变。 遣词造句 1.在横线上填入适当的单词 ( 1 )to one's_____________让某人惊讶的是 (2)_____________adj.神秘的 (3)remain_____________保持冷静 (4) with all one's_____________全心全意地 (5)come____遇到 (6)be used______sth.习惯于某事 (7)____one's breath屏息 (8)break_突然开始 2.完成句子 (9)她喜出望外,但又心存疑虑。 She was_____________ but_____________. (10)她使劲拍了一下自己的手,却发现自己并不是在做梦。 She hit her hand hard _____________she wasn't dreaming. (11)然后Mr.Butler带着笑容从房间里走了出来。 Then Mr. Butler walked out of the room_____________. (12)Emily 深受鼓舞,坚定地点点头,保证为演出努力练习。 Emily was_____________, and she_____________and promised to practice hard for the performance. (13) 她一出现在舞台上,迎接她的是轻蔑的目光。 _____________appearing on the stage, she was_____________ scornful eyes. (14)观众爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。 The audience _____________thunderous applause. (15) Mr.Butler被感动了，他给了Emily一个大大的拥抱。 Mr. Butler was moved, and he gave Emily _____________. (16)那时,他知道Emily已经战胜了她自己。 Then he knew that Emily had _____________. 3.句式升级 (17)用形容词作状语合并句(9)和句(10) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (18) 用倒装句改写句(11) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (19) 用过去分词作状语改写句(12) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (20)用so...that...结构改写句(15) ____________________________________________________________________________________ (20) 用it强调句强调时间状语改写句(16) ____________________________________________________________________________________ 连句成篇 Paragraph 1: The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Finally, the day of the performance came. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、单句翻译（情感描写） 1.他回到家里，又累又饿，不想说一句话。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.极度惊讶和困惑，我一篇接一篇地看着日记，每一篇表现的主题都很相似。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3. 电话里，听见他的话，我羞愧得低下头, 一阵愧疚向我袭来, 脸上发烫。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4. 回想起那一幕，简非常后悔，忍不住哭了起来，泪水夺眶而出。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5.跟老师讲出真相后，她不安地坐在座位上，手指交叉着，心跳得像打鼓一样。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6.听到这话，Bob感到很尴尬，扭动并使劲揉搓他的手，似乎是想在这刺骨的冬日里取暖。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 二、读后续写 （2023·广东阳江·统考一模） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 One morning, Ann’s neighbor Tracy found a lost dog wandering around the local elementary school. She asked Ann if she could keep an eye on the dog and she planned to find its owner. Ann agreed, but she said that she could watch it only for the day because she needed to take care of her son. At the time, her son Thomas was 10 years old, who was recovering from a heart operation. Later, Tracy took photos of the dog, printed off 400 FOUND fliers, put them in mailboxes and began to find the dog’s owner. Meanwhile, Ann bought some pet supplies, warning her son not to fall in love with the dog. However, her son was filled with excitement as he knew that his mother got a dog back home. He planned to provide the dog with some food everyday. Four days later, Ann and her son were still looking after the dog, whom they had started to call Riley. During the four days, they took care of the dog carefully, provided some food, took a shower and played with it, and they had already become the best friends. The evening of the fifth day, when Ann arrived home from work, the dog threw itself against the door and barked madly at her. As soon as she opened the door, Riley dashed into the boys’ room where Ann found Thomas suffering from a heart attack. Riley ran over to Thomas, but as soon as Ann bent over to help him, the dog went silent. The doctor said if it hadn’t come to get his mother in time, Thomas would have died. Luckily, with the doctor’s help, Thomas could go home tomorrow morning. “Mum, can we keep it if we can’t find its owner? Even we can ask for permission if we find the owner,” Thomas asked his mother when they came back home. “Well, since no one has called to claim it, we decide to keep it,” his mother replied. Hearing that, Thomas was excited. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 However, the next day, Ann was told a man named Peter recognized his lost dog. ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ Peter’s car came and Thomas stood silently beside his car. ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________ 【2024·新课标Ⅰ卷·高考真题】阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry." 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 参考答案： Para 1 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He looked at me in disbelief, asking me what to do. Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. “If I miss this last bus to Prague, I’ll be late for the conference which is so important that I can’t afford to miss it!” I explained. “May I have your phone number? I will call you and return the money I owe you. I promise I will keep my word or you keep my watch!” I added, handing him my watch as well as my business card. Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch. He wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, Sir.” A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure. Para 2 Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Beaming a warm smile at him, I gave him a big hug the moment I saw him. We chatted happily on the way to the airport. I told him that thanks to his generosity and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down. I also gave him an attractive souvenir I had bought at Prague, which he accepted with delight. We became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly. I felt blessed to have such a warm-hearted friend like Gunter. 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在一次因风暴延误的旅途中，匆忙搭乘出租车前往车站赶最后一班去布拉格的公共汽车。司机冈特不熟悉车站位置，通过电话求助后顺利抵达。到达时作者却发现自己没带现金，尝试用葡萄牙银行卡支付没有成功，而车站的取款机也故障了。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“我跑回到冈特那里，告诉他这个坏消息。”可知，第一段可描写作者留下冈特的电话，承诺会还钱给对方，冈特同意，最终作者及时登上了公共汽车。 ②由第二段首句内容“四天后，当我回到维也纳时，我按照承诺给冈特打了电话。”可知，第二段可描写作者付费给冈特，并向对方表示感激，两人成为了好朋友。 2.续写线索：作者给出解决办法——承诺还钱——冈特同意——作者登上公共汽车——履行承诺还钱——两人成为朋友 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①拒绝：reject/refuse ②给某人拥抱：give sb. a hug/embrace sb. ③记下，写下：write down/set down 情绪类 ①难以置信地：in disbelief/incredibly/unbelievably ②开心地：happily/joyfully 【点睛】【高分句型1】He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before.（运用了where引导的限制性定语从句） 【高分句型2】When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down.（运用了when引导的时间状语从句，that引导的限制性定语从句） ( 1 )原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$