2025届高三英语一轮复习读后续写讲解课件

读后续写 training 1 1 2 3 4 5 三大原则 试题文本 写作过程 得分技巧 评分标准 目录 CONTENTS 2 1 Three Principles 三大原则 ONE 3 Three Principles 1. coherence原文一致原则 内容要前后衔接，上下连贯 3.positivity正能量原则 传达的主题要积极 2.twist曲折性原则 故事的发展要曲折变化 4 2 试题文本 TWO 5 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Pam Bales planned a six-hour hike through New Hampshire’s Mount. On the dashboard (汽车仪表板)was a detailed plan ensuring she could return before the arrival of some forecasted bad weather. Different from former hike, though, this time, she had packed for almost every accident and intended to walk alone. At about 8 a.m., she’d checked the weather forecast. Bales knew from experience that her hike wasrealistic. Besides, she had two emergency plans and extra layers of clothing to better protect her core temperature as conditions changed. Bales felt excited as she walked up into snowy paths. She was wearing a fleece tank top (绒衣) anhiking pants, and no gloves or hat because the air was mild. Thirty minutes later, she climbed into colder airand deeper snows. She now was in a quarter-zip fleece top and gloves. At 10 a.m., the weather was showing its teeth. Bales added more layers to resist cold winds and dense fog. Making her way across the snow-covered ridge, she noticed something: a single set of footprints made by a pair of sneakers. Not givingthem much thought, she walked on. 6 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 By 11 a.m., Bales was getting cold. She decided to return to her car. On her way down, she again spottedthe sneaker tracks, which suddenly made a hard left-hand turn off the trail. Now she felt genuinely alarmed. She was sure the hiker lost his way in the low visibility. If Bales continued to follow the tracks, she’d addrisk and time to her return. But she couldn’t let this go. She turned to the left and called out, “Hello!” Nothing. Bales followed the tracks, rounded a slight corner and saw a man sitting motionless. He wore tennissneakers, shorts, a light jacket and fingerless gloves. His skin was pale and he had a glazed (呆滞的) look onhis face. “Oh, hello,” Bales approached and said, “What’s your name?” The man didn’t react. Obviously, nothing was connecting for him and he was in really big trouble 7 Main idea 本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了帕姆·巴勒斯计划在新罕布什尔州的华盛顿山州立公园徒步六小时，不到一小时后，她已经爬进了更冷的空气和更深的雪中。她穿过白雪覆盖的山脊，向华盛顿山进发。然后她注意到了一件事：她前面的雪上有一组脚印。她一整天都在跟踪微弱的轨迹，并没有给它们太多的思考，因为有太多人爬珠尔小道。但她意识到，这些鞋是由一双运动鞋制成的，不适合在雪地上徒步旅行。后来，她在一个小角落，看见一个人一动不动地坐着。 8 8 3 写作过程 THREE 9 I. 准确理解材料，理清人物事件。 Task 1. 浅层信息理解 首先要审题： ⑴ 文体：_______ ⑵ 人称：_________ ⑶ 时态：____________ ⑷ 5Ws： who _________________ when ______________________________ where ______________ what ________________________ why __________________ narrative third person simple past tense Pam Bales and an unconscious man on the way to hike New Hampshire’s Mount well prepared hiked ,found some strange tracks bad weather,her warm heart Task 2. 深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（How） paragraph（段落） main idea Founction Para 1 before hiking planned a six-hour hike through New Hampshire’s Mount introduce the background Task 2. 深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（How） paragraph（段落） main idea Founction Para 2，3，4 8 a.m. checked the weather forecast,ready to go 10.a.m.weather was showing its teeth,added more layers 11.a.m.getting cold,returned to her car development of her hiking Task 2. 深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（How） paragraph（段落） details founction Para 5 followed the tracks,found a man with pale skin and glazed face push the story into climax (3).提炼信息要点 before hiking Pam Bales planned a six-hour hike through New Hampshire’s Mount. On the dashboard (汽车仪表板)was a detailed plan ensuring she could return before the arrival of some forecasted bad weather. Different from former hike, though, this time, she had packed for almost every accident and intended to walk alone. At about 8 a.m., she’d checked the weather forecast. Bales knew from experience that her hike was realistic. Besides, she had two emergency plans and extra layers of clothing to better protect her core temperature as conditions changed. cautious,bold,adventurous 1.Find some details to describe Bales 14 Bales felt excited as she walked up into snowy paths. She was wearing a fleece tank top (绒衣) anhiking pants, and no gloves or hat because the air was mild. Thirty minutes later, she climbed into colder air and deeper snows. She now was in a quarter-zip fleece top and gloves. At 10 a.m., the weather was showing its teeth. Bales added more layers to resist cold winds and dense fog. (3).提炼信息要点 while hiking 2.Find some expressions to describe the weather terrible weather while hiking Making her way across the snow-covered ridge, she noticed something: a single set of footprints made by a pair of sneakers. Not giving them much thought, she walked on. By 11 a.m., Bales was getting cold. She decided to return to her car. On her way down, she again spottedthe sneaker tracks, which suddenly made a hard left-hand turn off the trail. Now she felt genuinely alarmed. She was sure the hiker lost his way in the low visibility. If Bales continued to follow the tracks, she’d add risk and time to her return. But she couldn’t let this go. She turned to the left and called out, “Hello!” Nothing. change of her attitude 3.What did she find and her response? 16 climax Bales followed the tracks, rounded a slight corner and saw a man sitting motionless. He wore tennis sneakers, shorts, a light jacket and fingerless gloves. His skin was pale and he had a glazed (呆滞的) look onhis face. “Oh, hello,” Bales approached and said, “What’s your name?” The man didn’t react. Obviously, nothing was connecting for him and he was in really big trouble. 1.what happened to him? 2.what would Bales do next? 17 Para 1：When she approached him and said hello, he did not react. 由第一段首句内容“当她走近他打招呼时，他没有反应。”可知，第一段可描写巴勒斯救助这名已经失去意识的男子的过程。 18 写作思路分析 18 Para 2：After waking the man up, Bales recognized that they had to get out of there soon. 由第二段首句内容“在叫醒那个人后，巴勒斯意识到他们必须尽快离开那里。”可知，第二段可描写巴勒斯和那名男子一起下山，脱离险境的过程。 19 写作思路分析 19 续写线索 检查——拿出物品给男子取暖——唤醒男子——扶起那名男子——一起下山——脱离险境——感受 20 写作思路分析 20 可用词汇： 行为类 ①检查：check/ examine ②唤醒：wake up/awaken ③努力：struggle to do/make great efforts to do 情绪类 ①高兴：happiness /joy ②焦急：anxious/worried 21 续写素材 21 可用句型： [高分句型1] Taking a deep breath, Bales got closer, checked his pulse and suddenly realized that the man must have passed out. (运用了现在分词作状语和that引导的宾语从句) [高分句型2] Anxious, Bales struggled to help the man up, supporting his weight and inching along the trail, following the tracks left by her hiking boots. (运用了形容词和现在分词作状语) [高分句型3] Exhausted as she was, Bales felt a wave of happiness welled up inside.(运用了让步状语从句的倒装结构) 22 续写素材 22 When she approached him and said hello, he did not react. Taking a deep breath, Bales got closer, checked his pulse and suddenly realized that the man must have passed out. She knew she had to wake him up immediately or the dreadful weather could put him in greater danger. Out of her bag, Bales took a carpet to wrap the man, gave some hot water to him, called out repeatedly and shook him hard. Fortunately, it didn’t take long before the man came to himself. 23 范文 23 After waking the man up, Bales recognized that they had to get out of there soon. The wind kept howling with the heavy sleet driving fiercely, and even worse, darkness began to fall. Anxious, Bales struggled to help the man up, supporting his weight and inching along the trail, following the tracks left by her hiking boots. After what seemed like ages, they finally made it to the foot of the mountain. The man was rushed to hospital immediately. Exhausted as she was, Bales felt a wave of happiness welled up inside. 24 范文 24 5 评分标准 FIVE 25 读后续写评分标准 1. 评分原则 ①给分公平、公正；宽严并济，不能过严或过松；得分有理，扣分有据。 ②立意积极、情节合理、语言水平及风格（语言风格与前文一致）、书写美观。 ③三个逻辑一致原则：续写部分与所给短文之间的逻辑一致；续写两段内容之间的逻辑一致；续写部分与所给开头语之间的逻辑一致。 2. 评分程序 阅读第1遍：根据续写总体情节及重点内容描写，初步确定所属档次。 阅读第2遍：根据写作语言（修辞、句式，词汇等），确定或调整档次。 阅读第3遍：看词数（少于130个，从总分中扣2分）；看书写（书写及卷面较差的降一档次）。 读后续写评分标准 3. 评分档次本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 THANK YOU 28 $$