读后续写游泳小将的幸运符Mike's Lucky Charm（带奥运游泳视频解说）课件-2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

游泳小将的幸运符 Practice makes perfect! 读后续写优质模拟 Continuation Writing Mike’s lucky charm Take notes of some useful expressions We can barely see him breathe… He’s so smooth... There is no splash水花 on his hand entry… His body position is great… His massive powerful quads（肱四头肌） generate a massive kick back him.形成巨大的推动力 Two laps to decide it.一圈定胜负 Pan is chasing them down… …first at the 50m. The crowd is getting behind him.. Pan is desperately trying to nail him… Pan is holding him off…（领先于他，压制着他） Take your marks..各就各位 Goes out…. Has a great start…get into that first 50, Underneath the chop…在惊涛骇浪之下（稳住了） Got the most speed…front and back half 前后半程速度最快 In form状态良好 take the lead at the turn转完后领先 Pan is swimming tough in lane 4(第四泳道） Second from the bottom倒数第二 Get on the podium上领奖台 Hold off the field 保持领先优势 语料积累 续写原文 Mike licked the last of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and headed off to the Olympic-sized pool for the big swim meet. When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group. "Congratulations, son," his father said. His mom gave him a hug, even though he was soaking wet. A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor. Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe he'd win again. He’s taken first place again in his race. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have some mint chocolate chip Ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets. He began to think of it as his lucky charm. After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. And he wouldn’t admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmer's build. 6 6 续写原文 It didn’t take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place-and then third-and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic. On the day of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. “Mike, we all love ice cream, but it's not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Maybe it's time to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go swimming. Mike unwillingly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didn’t perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices. It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasn’t sure what to expect. He felt healthy again, but he didn’t know if he still had any speed in the pool. 7 7 Mike在一次游泳比赛前吃了他最喜欢的克力冰淇淋，然后在比赛中赢得了第一名，成为他年龄组最快的男孩。他认为冰淇淋是他的幸运符，所以在接下来的几场比赛前都会吃这种冰淇淋。然而，随着时间的推移，因为吃太多冰淇淋，Mike开始体重增加，导致他在比赛中的表现逐渐下滑，甚至最后一场比赛中排名最后。 在母亲建议下，Mike减少了冰淇淋的摄入，并和父亲一起跑步锻炼。通过锻炼，他减轻了体重，游泳时呼吸也变得更轻松。到了赛季的最后一场比赛，Mike虽然不确定自己的表现，但他已经恢复了健康。 （一）故事概括 续写第一段： As he drove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. 续写第二段： His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time ,and everyone else too. 结局： 游泳比赛获得佳绩； 明白了冰淇淋不是幸运符 人与自我：自我成长 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 思路引导：①大体情节设计+ ②具体3个衔接句+1个结尾升华句 续写第一段： As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. 续写第二段： His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time ,and everyone else too. 游泳比赛表现 反应+感想 所给段落开头语描写了迈克跳入水中后，竭尽所能向前游去。这部分内容暗示迈克想要赢得此次比赛的决心。范文接下来的内容围绕迈克在水中的表现展开。同时，续写第二段给出句提到他打破了最佳纪录，因此续写第一段末尾部分应重点刻画比赛结束的内容。 所给段落开头暗示接下来要说明比赛结果。接下来需要写明周围人对Mike成绩的反应。同时，最后需要点明主题词ice cream，使文章有头有尾，做到有机衔接。 10 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 写作重难点 描写游泳的方法 As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. 第一段第二句； 第一段最后一句； His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time ,and everyone else too. 第二段第二句 动作变化：flap/kick/push/like a fish/shark; smooth; hand entry; chase…down/ leave… behind…/take a lead; hold off the field…go through the wall…breathing techniques.. 心理变化：was sure but healthy(原文最后一段）-strong and surprised-determined to win-good/confident/unbeatable 人物反应：其他游泳的人；场内所有观众；父母； 下一个动作描述/心理变化 到达终点；比赛结束；显示用时 他的心情+做了什么动作；观众反应 11 描写游泳比赛过程中的句子： ①All his muscles burst with super strength, pushing him to swim ahead. ②Because the extra weight disappeared, he felt his body as light as feather ③He adjusted his breath in order to swim easier. ④With butterflies in his stomach, he only heard the voice from his heart, “Hurry up!” ⑤All the audience in the stadium fixed their eyes on Mike, and Mike’s parents were biting their lips. ⑥At last, he touched the wall and popped out of water. ⑦Finally, he had a body length lead over others and won the first place again. 学生美句欣赏 写好三个过渡句： Para 1: As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. ①He found it easy to swim in the pool and he could swim faster than before. ②Breathing easily, Mike found himself having endless power to swim forward. 学生美句欣赏 写好三个过渡句： ①So surprised was he that he found he was the first to touch the edge and just at that time, the swimming time was shown on the electronic board. ② And then, the result of the meet was announced. Para 2: His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time ,and everyone else too. 学生美句欣赏 写好三个过渡句： Para 2: His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time ,and everyone else too. ①Looking around, Mike couldn’t believe it. ②His parents rushed to him, hugged him and yelled: “You did it!” ③His parents and teammates hugged him with excitement and said: “ You made it!” 学生美句欣赏 As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. He made the turn at the end of the lane perfectly, and was feeling strong. In an attempt to pick up his previous glory, Mike found the power in his muscles he needed to surge ahead, and as his hand touched the edge of the pool, the race was over.  He popped up, removed his goggles（泳镜） and anxiously checked the scoreboard, curious about his time. His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too. Mike had won his race, and he had also qualified for the national championships. The audience and his teammates cheered loudly, and his parents were grinning from ear to ear. “Hey champ, let’s go grab some of your favorite ice cream and celebrate!” said his father. “Thanks, Dad, but I’ll pass on the ice cream; it’s not such a lucky charm after all!” （原文稍有改编） possible version 1 当他跳入水中时，他踢着腿，尽可能地伸展双臂。他在车道尽头完美地转弯，感觉自己很强壮。为了重拾之前的辉煌，迈克在他的肌肉中找到了前进所需的力量，当他的手触到池边时，比赛结束了。他跳出水面，摘下护目镜(泳镜)，焦急地查看计分板，对自己的时间感到好奇。 当他意识到他打破了自己的最好成绩，还超越了其他人时，他惊掉下巴。Mike赢得了比赛，也获得了参加全国锦标赛的资格。观众和队友大声欢呼，他的父母笑得合不拢嘴。“嘿，冠军，我们去吃点你最喜欢的冰淇淋庆祝一下吧!”他的父亲说。“谢谢，爸爸，但冰淇淋我不吃了;这根本不是什么幸运符!” version 2 As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. So dynamic was he that he swam swifter than ever. With his arm flapping, he cut through the water smoothly like a flying fish. Overwhelmed by passion and confidence, he swam like a gust of wind and faster than usual. And the last 200 meters witnessed the boy struggling, his teeth clenched and his eyes fixed on the finish line. Eventually, with heart beating wildly, he reached the destination, thunderous applause echoing around the pool. His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else too. Mike was frozen to the spot, too speechless to move an inch, his excitement beyond description. No sooner had he climbed out of the pool than his parents rushed to him with a warm hug. All his teammates congratulated him on his success. Not until then did he realize that the true magic was a person’s devotion and it was his perseverance and diligence rather than the ice cream that enabled him to succeed. 当他跳入水中时，他踢着腿，尽可能地伸展双臂。他精力充沛，游得比以往任何时候都快。他挥舞着手臂，像一条飞鱼一样平稳地划着水面。他被激情和自信冲昏了头脑，游得像一阵风，比平时还快。最后200米见证了男孩的挣扎，他咬紧牙关，眼睛盯着终点线。最后，他的心怦怦直跳，到达了目的地，雷鸣般的掌声在泳池周围回荡。 当他意识到他打破了自己的最好成绩，也打破了其他人的最好成绩时，他的下巴掉了下来。迈克僵在那里，说不出话来，一动也不能动，他的兴奋难以形容。他刚从游泳池里爬出来，他的父母就跑过来给了他一个温暖的拥抱。他所有的队友都祝贺他的成功。直到那时，他才意识到真正的魔力是一个人的奉献精神，是他的毅力和勤奋而不是冰淇淋使他成功。 典型问题—卷面 卷面潦草 空行太多 额外分段 超出界面 两段篇幅 差距太大 21 典型问题—语言 时态错误 中式表达 没有正确的句子（除了背过的） 词汇量少，表达重复 22 典型问题—情节 第一段不知道应该写在泳池比赛表现 升华不当—在很前面；或者反复升华 第一段不知道从哪些方面描写动作 增加了角色（I） 23 本课总结&写作原文 24 Mike licked the last of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and headed off to the Olympic-sized pool at the recreation center for the big swim meet. When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He walked dripping over to his where his parents were sitting, cheering him on. He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group. “Congratulations, son,” his father said. His mom gave him a hug, even though he was soaking wet. With a grin and a wave, he grabbed his towel and headed off to change. A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor before they left home. Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe he’d win again. As Mike climbed out the pool, his teammates patted him on the back. He’s taken first place again in his race, this time for the backstroke. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have some mint chocolate chip ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets that came up. He began to think of it as his lucky charm. His parents didn’t think it was a great idea to eat ice cream every time before swimming, but Mike argued that he needed to eat it to win. After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling invincible. And he wouldn’t admit it, but he was also starting to feel a little uncomfortable. All that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmer’s build. Practices were getting a little harder for Mike to maintain the speeds he was used to getting. It didn’t take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place – and then third – and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic. Mike didn’t know what to think. He had been certain the ice cream ritual was helping him win. 25 On the day of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. “Mike, I think we need to talk about this. We all love ice cream, but it’s got lots of fat and sugar in it, and it’s not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. A little bit now and then is fine, but this isn’t working for you. Maybe it’s time to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go swimming. Mike reluctantly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didn’t perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices. It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasn’t sure what to expect. He’d been training hard with his dad, and staying away from the rich desserts he enjoyed so much. He felt healthy again, but he didn’t know if he still had any speed in the pool. As he dove into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. He made the turn at the end of the lane perfectly, and was feeling strong. This race was a long one with several laps, so Mike tried to keep his energy level up even as he began feeling tired. Whenever he came up for a breath, he could see he was gaining on the boy ahead of him in the next lane. Feeling determined to pass him, Mike found the power in his muscles he needed to surge ahead, and as his hand touched the edge of the pool, the race was over.  He lifted his swim goggles off his head and looked at the times on the electronic board. He knew he wasn’t last, but what was his time? His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too. Mike had won his race, and he had also qualified for the national championships. The audience and his teammates cheered loudly, and his parents were grinning from ear to ear. “Hey champ, let’s go grab some of your favorite ice cream and celebrate!” said his father. “Thanks, Dad, but I’ll pass on the ice cream; it’s not such a lucky charm after all!” $$nullnullnull