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第2课时——强化表达功·写作短板的专项补弱
目 录
出彩句式 句子高级·表达脱俗
亮点写法 语段优美·彰显功底
课时作业评价
主题写作 命题热点·追根教材
句子高级·表达脱俗
出彩句式
1.状语从句的省略
(1)当when, while, before, after, unless, once, as if, if等引导的状语从句中的主语与主句主语一致或从句的主语为it,且从句谓语中含有be动词时,可以省略从句中的主语和be动词。省略后从句的形式:连词+形容词/副词/现在分词/过去分词。
(2)状语从句的省略句中的过去分词通常应视为被动语态的省略,而不能视为完成时态的省略。
①Unless he is invited, he will not come back to the company.
→_____________, he will not come back to the company.
②If you are accepted for this post, you will be informed within a week.
→_______________________, you will be informed within a week.
先学通
(通过句子变换把握句式特点)
Unless invited
If accepted for this post
③When you are crossing the street, you should be careful.
→________________________, you should be careful.
When crossing the street
④爬山时,我们感受到了温暖的阳光,欣赏到了美丽的风景。
__________________________, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and the beautiful view.
再写美
(通过句子仿写做到运用自如)
While climbing the mountain
⑤如果被接受,我可以向游客介绍中国画的技巧,这可以帮助他们更多地了解中国文化。
___________, I can introduce Chinese painting skills to visitors, which can help them know more about Chinese culture.
If accepted
2.作表语的不定式省略to
不定式作表语时,在下列几种情况下,不定式符号 to可以省略。
(1)当句子主语是被动词 do作谓语的定语从句修饰的all, all that, anything, the only thing (way), 或thing 前面有序数词(first, second) 或last 等修饰,或者由“形容词+最高级”修饰时,to都可以省略。
All you have to do is put it in the toaster and wait till it pops up.
(2)当主语是带有动词 do的由 what引导的主语从句时,其表语的不定式符号 to可以省略。
What the plan does is ensure a fair pension for all.
(完成句子)
①All I did was_________________, and it broke all of a sudden.
我只不过碰了一下花瓶,它突然就破了。
②The only thing to do now is__________.
前进是现在唯一的出路。
③What I'll do is____________________.
我要做的就是告诉她真相。
先学通
(通过题点训练把握用法规则)
(to) touch the vase
(to) go on
(to) tell her the truth
④我们所能做的就是尽我们所能珍惜这一趟不凡的旅程。
All we can do is_________________________________________.
⑤你在信中告诉我说,你最想做的事情就是去游览长城。
You told me in your letter __________________________________
__________________.
再写美
(通过句子仿写做到运用自如)
(to) do our best to cherish this remarkable ride
what you wanted to do best was (to)
visit the Great Wall
语段优美•彰显功底
亮点写法
1.赏修辞之美
Could machines really develop human-like intelligence? And what would happen if they did? Would thinking machines work alongside humans or threaten the existence of humans? How would they be punished if they committed crimes or even murdered humans?
写法领悟:本段连续使用了四个疑问句,层层发问,引人深思,既突出了文章的主题,又增强了文章的气势,用在演讲稿中可以调动听众的热情,引起共鸣。
2.赏用词与结构之美
It really boils down to three things — time, cost and technical limitations.We will need time to develop and fine-tune the hardware and software.The initial cost will discourage most people in the beginning but that should be fixed over time.
写法领悟:第一句是本段的中心句,起到提纲挈领的作用。boil down to意为“归结为,基本问题是”,不用于进行时,常用于主题句的写作中。第三句为but连接的并列分句,后面的分句中使用了被动语态,突出强调了动作的承受者(that,指代第一分句的主语)。被动语态的使用使得上下文衔接更顺畅,语意表达更流畅。
①What do you mean? ______________________________________
___________________?(疑问句)
你是什么意思?你打算退出吗?你想违背自己的诺言吗?
针对练笔
(根据提示完成句子)
Are you going to drop out? Do you want to
break your promise
②__________________________________________— to people's health and the safety of our society.
(造成的)损害实际上可以归结为两件事——对人们的健康和对我们的社会安全。
The damage really boils down to two things
命题热点•追根教材
主题写作
本单元主题是“科技发展”,属于“人与社会”的主题语境。针对此类主题,高考在设题时有时会以活动报道、演讲稿、产品介绍等作为载体介绍新型科技产品或前沿科技的新动态等,旨在帮助学生了解科技发展的最新成果和趋势,感受科技改变世界的深远影响,学会更好地融入当下和未来的高科技生活。
命题导向
(一)前沿科技
1.have the capacity to analyse massive amounts of data
拥有分析海量信息的能力
2.imitate the complex networks of the human brain
模拟的是人脑的复杂网络结构
3.a major breakthrough 一个重大突破
构建语义场
4.a significant advance 一个显著进步
5.develop human-like intelligence发展出像人类一样的智能
6.the forefront of developments in virtual reality
虚拟现实的开发前沿
7.Facial recognition technology with its capacity to analyse a huge amount of data, has come into widespread use.
面部识别技术有着分析大量数据的能力,现在已经得到广泛应用。
(二)科技对生活的影响
1.be applied in many fields 应用于许多领域
2.have a lot of constructive applications
拥有许多建设性的应用
3.give some examples of the practical applications
举几个应用的实例
4.engage students' interest and enhance learning efficiency
吸引学生的兴趣并且提高学习效率
5.allow autonomous machines to do all the work for us
让自动化机器为我们完成所有工作
6.As we become more and more dependent on computers, some scientists are urging us to think about the dangers posed by the advances in AI.
随着我们对电脑的依赖越来越深,一些科学家正敦促我们思考AI的进步所带来的危险。
写作任务——基础写作的建模训练
[题目] 假定你是李华,下个月是你们学校的“科技月”,为此学校将举办一场主题为“科技与生活”的英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇短文参赛,内容包括:
1.科技在生活中的应用; 2.你的感想。
注意:1.写作词数应为80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
平时勤练笔
[构思与要点表达]
第一部分 描述现象,导入主题
[从教材中学] In short, this technology is transforming the way we live.
[到写作中用] 在过去的几十年里,新型科技不断出现,极大地改变了我们的生活方式。
Over the last few decades, new technologies have been constantly appearing,_________________________________________.
which has greatly transformed the way we live
第二部分 举例说明科技在生活中的应用
要点1:新型科技之面部识别技术
[从教材中学] For example, 5G technology, with its potential to serve up more stable mobile connectivity at faster speed, will make it possible for people to enjoy a more immersive VR experience wherever they are.
[到写作中用] 例如,面部识别技术让我们更容易进入车站、机场和其他地方。
For example, facial recognition technology ___________________
__________stations, airports and other places.
makes it easier for us
to get into
要点2:新型科技之高铁
[从教材中学] This could not only save time, but also greatly decrease road traffic.
[到写作中用] 高铁让我们可以方便地去更多的地方,这不仅节省了时间,而且大大减少了道路车流。
The high-speed railway allows us to visit more places conveniently, which___________________________________________________.
not only saves time, but also greatly decreases road traffic
要点3:新型科技之移动支付
[从教材中学]
1....it also enables experts to test new techniques safely before trying them on human subjects.
2.Whatever happens, we'll all be interacting with drones on a daily basis.
[到写作中用] 移动支付使我们能够在任何有二维码的地方支付一切费用。
Mobile payment ___________________________________________a QR code.
enables us to pay for everything wherever there is
第三部分 个人感想
[从教材中学] There can be no denying that the technology will have a huge impact on everyday life.
[到写作中用] 不可否认,科技对我们的日常生活产生了巨大影响,使我们的生活更加高效多彩。
________________________________________________________
___________________and made our life more efficient and colorful.
There can be no denying that technologies have had a huge impact
on our everyday life
[衔接与逻辑成篇]
运用补加、过渡与衔接,将上述语句连接成篇
Technology and Life
Hello, everyone!
Over the last few decades, new technologies have been constantly appearing, which has greatly transformed the way we live.
For example, facial recognition technology makes it easier for us to get into stations, airports and other places.Also, the high-speed railway allows us to visit more places conveniently, which not only save time, but also greatly decrease road traffic.In addition, mobile payment enables us to pay for everything wherever there is a QR code.
There can be no denying that technologies have had a huge impact on our everyday life and made our life more efficient and colorful.
主题表达升格训练
课时作业评价
Ⅰ.根据要求完成下列句子
1.(完成句子)____________, he has done a good job.(given)
考虑到他的年龄,他做得已经非常不错了。
Given his age
2.(完成句子)Nowadays more and more people have come to realize the fact that we shouldn't develop economy ________________
_______________.
现在越来越多的人意识到我们不应该以牺牲环境作为代价来发展经济这一事实。
at the expense of
the environment
3.(完成句子)____________________ we need to devote more resources to this problem.
不可否认,我们必须投入更多的资源来解决这个问题。
4.(完成句子)Finding himself under fire from all quarters, he ______________________________his scheme for the time being.
在这四面楚歌的情况下,他没有别的办法,只好暂时放弃他的计划。
It can't be denied that
had no alternative but to abandon
5.(完成句子)To be honest, it took me more than a month to__________________________.
老实说,我花了一个多月的时间去适应新的学校生活。
6.When she was asked about what she thought of the movie, she just said it was worth seeing a second time.
→__________________ what she thought of the movie, she just said it was worth seeing a second time.(升级为省略结构)
adjust to the new school life
When asked about
Ⅱ.读后续写
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024·烟台模拟)With the start of new school, freshmen of Hendersonville High School in Nashville were excited to meet new classmates and teachers.Among them, however, 15-year-old Sergio Peralta was feeling very nervous because his right hand had never fully formed since he was born.Going to a new school and being “different” is always scary.Sergio was particularly concerned with what his classmates would think of him.
Sergio's parents had trained him to use his left hand from an early age.As he grew up, he was used to not using his right hand.He could write with his left one and do some things with special tricks or techniques.Despite this, in the first days of new school, Sergio always felt like hiding his underdeveloped right hand in his sleeve as if nobody would ever find out if he did so.
It didn't take long for someone to learn Sergio's secret.Jeff Wilkins, the teacher of Sergio's engineering class, figured out that Sergio was missing part of his hand and decided to do something for the new student.Jeff had been leading a robotics project in the school and expert in 3D printing technology.Besides, he hoped to take advantage of this hands-on chance to help his robotics students learn more about engineering and how building a robotic hand worked.
So in his class, Jeff announced with great enthusiasm, “You're supposed to be engineering, coming up with new ideas and solving issues.Now Sergio needs a new hand, so we'll work together to build Sergio a robotic hand.” His words fueled everyone's curiosity and creativity.
For the next four weeks, Jeff and his class including Sergio worked on the project.After some precise measurements and researches, the class put forward a design draft.Jeff made a few adjustments and gave them some practical suggestions.With access to online models and a 3D printer, they eventually created a robotic hand, which was intended to look good and work well, like catching something.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
Then came the final testing day.
The life-changing gift for Sergio drew huge attention.
参考范文:
Then came the final testing day.The whole class gathered in the science classroom, watching breathlessly as Jeff carefully loaded their self-made robotic hand onto Sergio's right arm.It fitted quite well! So excited was Sergio that his arm trembled slightly.Having put a baseball on the desk, Jeff signed to Sergio to pick it up.Slowly, Sergio extended his right hand and reached for the ball.Successfully he caught hold of it and everyone present broke into cheers! Holding the ball, Sergio couldn't contain his tears.Never in his life did he expect to catch something with his right hand!
The life-changing gift for Sergio drew huge attention.Jeff and his students became an instant hit and various media competed to cover the news.When interviewed about the intention of the project, Jeff said, “I intended Sergio's robotic hand to show our support for him.Meanwhile, I hope to foster students' scientific spirit through this hands-on operation.” His students stated that Jeff challenged them to transform abstract concepts into reality, from which they benefited greatly. Soon voluntary donations poured in, which would go to the school's scientific research and help students develop better.
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