2025届高三英语一轮复习读后续写课件

Continuation writing 1 CONTENTS 高考阅卷老师分享 01. 读后续写再解读 中低层次学生方法指导 02. 03. 高考阅卷老师分享 PART 01 6月1日网上申请认证 6月2日加入英语评卷组 6月9日到昆明云大宾馆报到 6月10日早上，评卷培训，下午和晚上试改。 2+1+1——分差小于等于4 2023年云南高考英语阅卷老师分享 改卷时间： 8:00——12:00 14:00——18:00 19:00——21:00 1.阅读能力 2.创造内容，与原文融洽度 3.语言风格一致 4.连接： 与原文连接，两段之间的衔接 5.语言，篇章结构 6.大致方向要一致，如：要获奖 7.细节可不一致， 如：he/ she 8.字数：两段不要求平均分配，总字数达标即可。 150字上下浮动30字， 120---180字 第二段不可以空着。 9. 避免生僻字堆砌，读起来awkward。需情节合理， 内容连贯，语言简单。 读后续写阅卷具体标准 第一段：获奖感受，领奖过程，颁奖感言 第二段：与老师见面，表达感谢 衔接合理，原文中心思想：不放弃，一直努力，坚韧，毅力 充实，完整，合理，关联，融洽 语言有错，但是看得懂。 上下文，全文，两段间连贯，看整体。 读后续写情节要求 0—5 没有完成任务 6—10 未恰当完成，不完整，提到部分内容，试图尝试句子，理解信息传递 11—15 基本完成，涵盖大多数内容，有错误但读得懂，不影响理解 首段内容混乱，内容信息错误，逻辑不对 13分 changed very enthusiastic and have some neverous ----15分 读后续写评分标准 16—20 完成任务，涵盖主要内容，简单，较为复杂词汇，句型有错误，可理解 16---20分 内容完整度 获奖消息，段落承接 20—25 高质量，完整链接，词汇，句型较高内容，段与段的链接，连贯性，逻辑，连贯，错误率低 抄原文，全无关 0分 读后续写评分标准 内容很重要 段与段的衔接很重要 段首，段尾很重要 字迹清晰，不宜淡，不宜小 读后续写阅卷启示 学生的答题卡 1.对原文的理解出现偏差，偏离主题 2.忽视段首提示语，续写时没有合理衔接，有的甚至随意想象，另起炉灶 3. 结尾主旨模糊或欠缺 13 4.character 人物：人物只能是故事当中涉及的人物，添加新人物。 14 5.tense 时态：时态混乱导致失分，在读后续写中，一般以一般过去式为主。 15 plot 故事构建：抓不住主题，续写负能量。 16 01 6.学生不知道如何下笔。 17 存在的主要问题： 内容构思 语言表达 篇章结构 18 问题根源： (1)不知如何读：读后续写中的阅读是关键。 (2)不知如何写。不知如何构思情节和描写。 读后续写再解读 PART 02 读后续写：提供一段350 词以内的语言材料，要求考生根据所提供的 和 __________进行续写；词数要求： ，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节合理和结构完整的短文。 材料内容 两段开头语 150 词左右 《考试说明》对读后续写的要求： 材料内容特点 真 善 美 Narration (记叙文) 2022新高考卷 Stories to Inspire and Uplift the Hearts of Canadians 激励和振奋人心的故事 23年新II卷原文出处 《号角》 主题 基本续写走向 常考主题和故事基本走向 亲情类 为亲人付出甚至作出牺牲 助人类、救助类 给他人（或动物）提供无私帮助 师生类 老师对学生鼓励或者关爱 趣事类 经历尴尬和有趣的事 和解类 双方发生矛盾最后和解 脱险类 诚信类 励志类/成长类 教诲类 正义类 陷入危险最后脱险 欺骗他人但认错或者恪守承诺 克服困难达成目标或者梦想 通过一件事传授他人人生哲理 好人得到好报或者坏人得到恶报 历年高考读后续写 Happy ending 正能量结局 读后续写正能量原则 读后续写：故事内容一定要正能量，故事的结局是美满的。如: 迷路了，但最终一定回到家; 失败或遇到困难, 但最终一定能成功；吵架了，一定和好等。 针对中低层次学生 的方法指导 PART 03 1 2 针对中低层次学生的方法指导 2 3 4 5 解读文本要素 情节框架设计 情绪动作描写 高分句型表达 主题升华增分 （一）解读文本要素 ----以2023年全国新高考II卷读后续写为例 who 人物 when 时间 where 地点 what 事件 why 原因 how 方式 theme 主题 ending 结局 平时写作时，以此表格梳理思路（考试时在原文中划） 如何审题: Try to find 5W+1H (when,where,who,what,why, how) When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did. So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. 如何读/审题: 读原文 -------5Ws+1H，读两段提示语， 定主题和故事走向 My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice. What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them. When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care. 如何读/审题: 读原文 -------5Ws+1H，读两段提示语， 定主题和故事走向 ·人物 : ○ ·关键动词：双横线 关键句子:单横线 ·主人公形容词() ·时间、地点、副词〖〗 1 读原文 划要素 填表格 Who When Where what why How Theme Ending 如何读/审题: 读原文 -------5Ws+1H，读两段提示语， 定主题和故事走向 My social studies teacher and I. When I was in middle school. In the school, in my teacher's office My teacher encouraged me to enter a writing contest. I did not love wrting but he loved my telling stories I prepared the essay,handed in,wrote again,enjoyed writing 2 读两段提示语 定主题和故事走向 P1.A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. Main idea:I won the prize and attended the award presentation P2.I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. Main idea:I express my gratitude to my teacher for his encouragement . 读两段提示语，定主题和故事走向 Who My social studies teacher and I. When When I was in middle school. Where In the school, in my teacher’s office what My teacher encouraged me to enter a writing contest. why I did not love wrting but he loved my telling stories How I worked hard,checked,corrected,handed in,wrote again,enjoyed writing Theme Ending 两读之后，定主题和故事走向:积极向上正能量 师生类+成长类 比赛获奖+感谢+感悟 （二）情节框架设计 3 细读P1P2首句 构思情节发展 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. _______________________________________________ I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. _______________________________________________ 提取关键词：代词，名词，时间状语，地点状语 细读P1P2首句 构思情节发展 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.   续写 思路 the award presentation. What was the news? Did I participate the presentation ? Hearing the news,how did I feel? What did I do? Hearing the news,how did my teacher feel? What did my teacher do? the result of the contest(won or lost ) 提取关键词：名词，代词，时间状语，地点状语 Yes 细读P1P2首句 构思情节发展 Asking yourself questions to weave plots based on the given sentences I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. P2大意 P2角色 续写 思路 动作 (v.) 情绪(adj.) What happened in my teacher’s office? my teacher I Seeing me, what did my teacher do? How did my teacher feel? How did I feel? What did I do? What did I learn from this experience? Self confidence, teacher's love, perservance... 细读P1P2首句 构思情节发展 4 5句定框架： 3衔，1句，1升华 Para1:首句衔接句（衔1）， 结尾衔接句（衔2） Para2:首句衔接句（衔3）， 正向结尾句（1句） 文尾升华句（1升华） 逆向情节写作步骤 Step1 Step4 Step3 Step2 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. P2结尾句+主旨升华句：根据正能量原则，回扣原文首尾段，结合常识和逻辑推出结局（情节4） P1结尾衔接句（根据P2首句，结合常识和逻辑反推出第2个情节 P2衔接首句：结合常识和逻辑推出第3个情节） P1衔接首句（结合原文尾段以及常识和逻辑推出第1个情节） 46 高考真题范文赏析 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I won first place! My heart skipped a beat and disbelief washed over me. At the award ceremony hosted in the school hall, the headmaster kindly presented me with a certificate of achievement. My face lit up with joy as I accepted the award. My smile filled with pride. A round of applause rang through the hall. 衔接1：解释说明段落首句提到的news是什么。first place 第一名 过渡1：无灵主语句，生动描写出当时我的震惊。wash over 升腾 衔接2：交代了颁奖典礼的地点及授奖仪式，与文章最后一段有效衔接。 最后三句运用无灵主语句，生动表达出当时的自豪兴奋之情。light up （脸上或眼中）流露出喜悦（兴奋） 47 I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. “Congratulations again! I knew you had it in you,” he said warmly, signaling me to take a seat. “Thank you.” I replied, with a mixture of gratitude and excitement. I reflected on my initial doubts and hesitations. Sometimes, all it takes is someone who believes in us, someone who sees our potential even when we don’t see it ourselves. Leaving his office that day, I felt a renewed sense of purpose and determination. I knew that this was just the beginning. I was inspired to keep writing and exploring my creativity. 衔接3：通过语言和动作描写，形象地表达出老师的反应。 过渡2：通过对老师表达出感激之情，有效衔接。 利用文章给出线索有效衔接，描写了这一路的心理历程，自然过渡到主题。 通过个人感悟，升华主题。 范文赏析 48 （三）情绪动作描写 情绪 作品特点 作品示范 常用动词 糟糕编剧 优秀编剧 无画面感 强画面感 They felt scared They waited, shivering, hardly daring to move 概况性动词 描述性动词 七个关键情绪 embrace sb.tightly tears well up in one's eyes and flow down one's cheeks moved When Jane realized before her was Tom, tears welled up in her eyes and flowed down her cheek. "Tom!” She rushed to him and embraced him tightly. Tom's lips also quivered. “I promise we won't quarrel again.” one's lips quiver frown a little droop one's head tears well up in one's eyes and flow down one's cheeks sad Susan was not in the mood to play with the other girls at all. Instead, she drooped her head and frowned a little. one's face light up one's eyes twinkle with merriment a broad smile spread across one's face delighted As Bobby unwrapped the package, his eyes suddenly twinkled with merriment: he loved the coat. I turned to my Grandma and a broad smile spread across her face. "See? Everyone can be Santa Claus as long as he is willing to help others.” one's eyes sparkle leap up in excitement exclaim in excitement excited Suddenly something pulled at my line. My eyes sparkled since I was sure a fish was biting the bait. As the line was pulled harder, 1 leaped up and exclaimed in excitement, “Uncle, it must be a big fish !” shiver with fear the color drain from one's face send a chill down one's spine frightened This time the bear pushed the fence more violently and his roar sent a chill down my spine. I shivered with fear. When I turned to Elli, I saw the color drained from her face. rage build up inside sb. one's eyes blaze with fury fierce anger shake one's body angry When the bear approached the fence again, rage seemed to build up inside him and fierce anger shook his body. He began to pushed the fence more violently and his eyes blazed with fury. take a deep breath one's heart beat wildly one's palms get sweaty nervous When Tom stood on the stage, his heart beat wildly and his palms got sweaty. His mind got blank and the boys laughed at him. Suddenly, Granny's words occurred to him. He took a deep breath and began to repeat the poem 六个常用动作 say / ask / reply yell（坚定地）叫喊 whishper窃窃私语 add补充道 shout（生气地）大叫 murmur轻声说 interrupt打断 exclaim（兴奋地）叫喊 sigh叹气道 continue继续说 scream（害怕地）尖叫 beg恳求 blurt out脱口而出 smile eat hit laugh大笑 chew咀嚼 tap轻敲 grin露齿笑 taste品尝 strike敲击 giggle咯咯地笑 bite咬 punch用拳击 chuckle轻声笑 swallow吞咽 pound反复重重敲击 walk / run wonder漫步 stride大步走 flee逃跑 tiptoee垫着脚走 pace来回踱步 chase (after)追逐 limp一瘸一拐地走 sneak偷偷地走 fly飞一样地跑 stagger摇摇晃晃地走 rush / dash猛冲 charge (at) 向…冲去 look at / see stare at盯着 wink at眨眼示意 spot发现 gaze at凝视 glare at怒视 notice注意到 glance at扫视 peek at偷看 witness目击 peer closely at仔细看 Browse浏览 catch sight of瞥见 灵活表达 say/ask/reply Tip1“说”+副词 answered softly explained patiently thanked sincerely Tip2 “说”+ 介词短语 He answered the questions in a soft voice / tone. She promised with a determined look. 灵活表达 say/ask/reply Tip 3“说”+分词(表伴随) "I want that one, " the boy shouted, pointing to the little dog. “Please help me," the little girl begged him, her eyes filled with fear. 灵活表达 say/ask/reply Tip5 “说”+状语从句 “Oh, my god," the woman sreamed as if it was the end of the world. 高考真题应用 say/ask/reply They hugged their mother tightly and yelled excitedly /with excitement, “Happy Mother's Day, dear Mummy !" Hugging their mother tightly, they yelled, “Happy Mother's Day, dear Mummy !" (2021年新高考1卷-读后续写范文) （四）高分句型表达 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 10大语法句式 1、无灵主语：心理、情绪；行为意义名词；无生命事物作主语 2、虚拟语气：情态动词+have done“当初应该”；If only“要是...就好了” 3、独立主格：Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police... 4、拟人比喻：like a xxx； as happy as a king；a sea of sorrow 5、介词短语：with结构/情绪；without结构 6、非谓语：V-ing/V-ed/To do/Having done sth, 主句 7、强调句：It was sb/sth that do sth. 8、倒装句：地点状语/否定词/Only状语/So...that/Not only...but also 9、让步状从： Difficult as it was,... “尽管..仍..”(转折) 10、长短句相间：感叹句/亮点小短句+长句 72 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式1：无灵主语 (用无生命的事物做主语) (1) 心理、情绪： “a wave of+情绪名词+固定动词+sb” Uncontrollably, a wave of sadness washed over me as I heard the bad news. A strong/intense sense of delight took hold of me the moment I heard the news. happiness/joy/delight 开心 anger/rage/fury 狂怒 sadness/sorrow 悲伤 gratitude/appreciation 感激 admiration 钦佩/赞赏 guilt/remorse 愧疚悔恨 fear/terror/fright/panic 害怕 astonishment/shock/surprise 震惊 seize (抓住/控制) catch (caught过去式) strike (struck 过去式) surround (围绕) take hold of (控制) wash over (冲刷) come over (突然感到) envelop (笼罩) +sb 73 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式2：介词短语 With+n.+非谓语 doing/done/to do, sb do sth. (特殊独立主格/伴随状语) With tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police in a trembling voice. With loads of homework to do, I had no option but to deal with it. With everything well prepared, they carried the breakfast upstairs. Without + n., sb would (not) have done sth. 没有...就 (不)... (虚拟) Without father’s help, they would have failed. Without his help, they would not have prepared the breakfast in time. Without the household chores, I would have finished the paper earlier. 74 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式 3 ：非谓语 ① V-ing，主句. | ② 主句，V-ing. (两动作同时发生) Considering the threat of the bear, we stayed far away from it. 考虑到熊的威胁，我们远离它。 Feeling ecstatic, she dashed out of the room like a wind. 她 (感到) 欣喜若狂，像风一样冲出了房间。 She waved at the helicopter, smiling with relief. 她向直升机挥手，如释重负地微笑。 ③ Having done sth, 主句. (两动作先后发生) Having got onboard the helicopter, she thanked everyone million times. 登上直升机后，她向所有人道谢了无数次。 75 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式5：倒装句 (部分倒装) ④句首：So...that; Such...that So+形容词+倒装+that... “如此...以至于...” 原句：Mac was so scared that he stood still, not knowing what to do totally. 倒装：So scared was Mac that he stood still, not knowing what to do totally. Mac非常害怕，他站着不动，不知道该怎么办。 原句：The flowing water was so swift that he failed to get close to the trapped car. 倒装：So swift was the flowing water that he failed to get close to the trapped car. 水流是如此之快，以至于他无法靠近被困的汽车。 76 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式 4 ：非谓语 ④ V-ed, 主句, V-ing. (情绪形容词+2个动作) Relieved and overjoyed, we yelled at the helicopter, trying to catch its attention. 我们松了一口气，欣喜若狂，对直升机大喊大叫，试图引起它的注意。 Regretful and embarrassed, I admitted the lack of consideration in my previous behavior, longing for another chance to make it up. 遗憾和尴尬，我承认在以前的行为中缺乏考虑，渴望再有一次机会来弥补。 ⑤ To do sth, 主句. (不定式表目的) To distract the bear, we threw a piece of bread far away. 为了分散熊的注意力，我们把一块面包扔得很远。 77 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式6： 长短句相间 长短句：小短句+长句（感叹句; 万用小短句） It proved a big success. A perfect breakfast was produced by father like magic. 事实证明，它取得了巨大的成功。完美的早餐是父亲像魔术一样制作的。 Finally, they made it. A perfect set of breakfast was ready and it’s time to surprise mom. 最后，他们成功了。完美的早餐套餐已经准备好了，是时候给妈妈一个惊喜了。 What a fantastic breakfast! The twins could not wait to show it to their mother. 多么美妙的早餐！双胞胎迫不及待地想给母亲看。 78 e7d195523061f1c011414db08df74492ac20befa3fb15586EED641F7DA837B3633596E05B8AE62E50B5E5456BD3C648DCE2D234CC482E88EB223CB95B207F69907A09C8021443F850886F0462B4D95DA40FEEC67EEE4C0008F0A643130BF266E4312290E282E16EEADFA6C3AD458AEB27BCA95FABCD4888E99644CA7D552501BE770A8381F56E4D2 读后续写句式7： 长短句相间 万用小短句 (以下动词为过去式) Sb's efforts / persistence paid off. 某人的努力/坚持取得了成功。 Sth proved successful / a huge success. 某事证明很成功。 Sth turned out extremely successful. 某事结果很成功。 Sth is considered as successful. 某事(被认为)很成功。 Sth benefited sb hugely/greatly/tremendously. 某事使某人受益匪浅。 Sth witnessed sth. 某事见证了某事。 Sb did sth in vain. 某人白费力气做某事。 Unfortunately, he failed. 不幸的是，他失败了。 A few seconds slipped away. 时间悄悄溜走。 79 （五）主题升华增分 微笑拥抱式 首尾呼应式 主题议论式 Paragraph2: “Now Susan,” said Rose,“put on the crown of flowers, for you are to be our queen.” Susan took it off, threw it on the ground and said,“No crown for me. I don't deserve it.” The girls were numb with shock.“I have cheated my grandmother,”said Susan. Tears flowed down her cheeks. Then Susan dashed home. On arrival, Susan came up to her grandmother.“Sorry, Grandma! I cheated you.I moved the mark you put in the stocking.”“Susan,” her grandmother patted Susan on the shoulder and said,“I am so glad that you have admitted your fault and you are still my good little girl." A wide smile spread across the face of her grandmother. 1.拥抱微笑式 文章开头: One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: tophotograph polar bears. We were staying at a researchcamp outside “the polar bear capital of the world” the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. 续写情节4:As we flew a bit higher, it suddenly occurred tome to take some photos of the bear. Though the bear's irritated roar still sent a chill down my spine, excitement was written all over my face as I browsed the precious photos of him in the camera. After all, we achieved our goal, and it was worth the risks. 2.首尾呼应式 3.主题议论式 Paragraph2: So, overcome with my great and bitter disappointment I sat down. After a moment of silence, my uncle came over.He knelt down and patted me gently on the shoulder.“Never brag your fish before you catch him. Try again and be patient." So I refitted my bait, and put the pole again into the water. Finally, I caught a big pickerel. More importantly, I learned a life lesson that day. Now every time I am close to succeeding in doing something and become impatient, I am reminded of what my uncle told me: never brag your fish before you catch him. THANKS 85 $$