读后续写之如何提升人物对话描写课件-2025届高三上学期英语作文复习专项

Continuation writing How to improve the description of dialogues 对话(dialogue)是故事角色在整个故事中对彼此或对自己说的话。它可以用来揭示人物的性格和个性，它也可以用来推动情节向前发展，并展示情节发展的过程。 What’s the function of dialogues in a story？ 对话描写的原则： 1)对话描写必须为推动故事情节服务。是情节发展的一个 环节，每段出现一两句即可； 2)对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，刻画人物的性格； 3)对话描写不宜过长，侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇； 4)对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，具有画面感； 5)对话描写中学会使用感叹词，表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、 乐等情绪。 What’s the function of dialogue in a story？ Read the two essays. Find out how many dialogues they have and the verbs used to start the dialogues. 对话描写常见“四大错误” 1. 废话连篇，对情节发展和刻画人物没有帮助。 “Hey, how are you?” “I’m fine, how are you?” “How is the weather?” “Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isn’t it?” With a blanket on his hands, Abe asked mum where she had been. Mum told him she had been to the town. “Where did you go? It’s too late and you seem frozen. ” Abe asked with a blanket on his hands. “Well, I went to the town…”Mum answered. 把对话转为间接宾语，删除多余对话 Using 1: How can we change a dialogue into useful information. Use indirect speech. 运用间接引语推动故事的发展。 9 “That is fantastic news,” he said happily. “That is fantastic news！” he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让读者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。 2.追求花哨，随意使用修饰成分 "I can't believe it," Emma gasped. (gasp意思为“喘气”) "That's funny," Henry chuckled. (chuckled.意思为“轻笑”) 3 用词不当，错误使用对话标签 "I can't believe it," Emma sighed. "That's funny," Henry said with a smile. “I told you already,” I said, glaring. 4. 多此一举：对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签 I glared at him. “I told you already.” Part II Know ways to express “say” more vividly 对话描写的 三种表现形式： 对话提示语在前 “…” 对话提示语在后 对话提示语在中间 1. At the sight of the meal, the mother asked: “Where did you get this breakfast?” (21新高考1) 2. “This is the best gift I have ever received! Thank you” said the mother excitedly with tear sparkling in her eyes.(21新高考1) 3. I can’t believe you got yourselves a puppy.“We didn’t”, replied Mom, “This puppy is for poppy.”(20浙江高考) Tip 1 表达“说”的那些词 how to say nod(点头) ; whisper(轻声细语); sigh(叹息); repeat(重复地说)；rant (咆哮); yell(大叫) ; shout（高声喊道); scream（尖叫） fume(气得冒烟); growl (低吼); warn（警告）; howl（怒吼）mumble (咕哝); murmur （低声说); mutter(低声嘀咕)；sniff (嗤之以鼻); grin (咧嘴笑); beam (眉开眼笑)；smiled（微笑）; laugh(笑); cheer (欢呼)； stammer (结巴); continue（继续说）; emphasize(强调); remembere(记得); conclude(结论); swear(发誓); persuade(劝说); praise（赞扬） Tip 1 表达“说”的那些词 why to say promise（承诺); apologise/apologize(道歉); beg(乞求) ; agree(同意); reply(回复), add(补充道) decide(决定) ; demand(强烈要求 ) ; declare (宣称 ) announce(郑重地说 ) 1. “I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone. 2.“I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice. 3. Charles raced to me and cried in excitement, “You did great! I am so proud of you!” 4“How can you do this！” she said angrily. 5.“David, running is your favorite sports, right?” I said to him with a smile. 6.“Absolutely!” replied John, excitement shining in his eyes. 加语气 加嗓音 加情感名词 加副词 加独立主格结构 加介词短语 Tip 2: 在对话中加入语气，嗓音，情感，副词，神态等，让对话描写更生动传神。 in a/an+形容词+tone in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的 tone in a tone of +名词 in a tone of surprise用一种惊讶的语气 in a tone of curiosity用一种好奇的语气 in a tone of impatience用一种不耐烦的语气 in a tone of command用一种命令的语气 第一种：加语气 “I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone.  “我很乐意这样做，”艾米丽用一种愉快的语气说。 in a/an+形容词+voice in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft/weak voice 用一个高/低/甜/响亮/软/弱的声音 第二种：加嗓音 “I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice.  “我不是故意的，”她低声说。 介词短语 in/with excitement/ease/surprise/astonishement... with a ...smile/sigh/look/expression 第三种：加介词短语 “I...I.. don’t think I’m right for the part,”I replied with embarrassment. “我...我..认为我不适合这个角色，”我尴尬地回答。 1) said Mr. Wilson ______________________一脸严肃地 2) he said______________________ 用一种坚定地语调 3) He said __________ 他慌慌张张地说 4) she said______________________ 用一种坚定地表情 5) Jenny laughed________________ 兴奋地笑了起来 in a flurry with a serious look on his face in a determined/firm voice with a determined look with excitement Give it a try! 21 Firmly，I answered，“I will never do that again.” 第四种：加副词 “我再也不会那样做了，”我回答。 “I will never do that again,” I answered firmly. loudly/proudly/gently/softly/abruptly/unexpectedly/angrily/bitterly/seriously/firmly/cheerfully 大声/自豪/温柔地/柔和地/突然地/意想不到地/生气地/悲痛地/严肃地/坚定地/高兴地说…… 1) _____________ 激动地说 2) said _______ 轻柔地说 3) ____________ 冷静地说 4) said_______________________不冷不热地说 5) said ________ 胆怯地说 timidly said excitedly said calmly half coldly, half kindly softly Give it a try! 23 第五种：独立主格结构 “Thank you for helping me,” she said and her eyes brimmed with tears. “Thank you for helping me,” she said with emotion, her eyes brimmed with tears. 独立主格是一个名词或代词（作为逻辑主语), 加上一个形容词、副词、介词短语、分词、不定式等在句中作状语。它有以下三个特点： 1. 独立主格结构的逻辑主语与句子的主语不同，它独立存在。 2. 名词或代词与后面的形容词、副词、介词短语、分词、不定式等存 在逻辑上的主谓关系。 3. 独立主格结构一般用逗号与主句分开，但与主句之间不能使用任何 连接词。 1)she begged him,_____________________眼睛充满恐惧 2) she said, _____________________眼睛在跳跃着/闪闪 her eyes dancing/shining her eyes filled with fear 花式句型，为人物对话添“色彩” 1) She nodded with a smile, encouraged the children (and said)“Let’s get started!” 1 Sb. did,+did+said (增加与 “说”的并列谓语，有效增强画面感) 2) The father picked up the dog, knelt down and said in a soft voice, “It's yours now.” 1) Pointing to some skillful skiers, Lindsay said: “Look, they are skiing so easily,Come on, I believe we can make it, too” 2)“I want that one,” the boy said, pointing to the little dog. 2 Doing..., sb. said, “......” “...” sb. said, Doing...(现在分词做状语) 1) “Mom, I don’t want to be out there.” Meimei whispered, as if begging her mother not to let her face the awkward situation. 3 “...” Sb. said +as if/ when/ as(状语从句) 2)“Well, let me think,” said the farmer, as he rubbed the sweat of the back of his neck. 用“说”的表达和其他细节描写补全下面句子。 1.“I have to quit” ________________. (我失望地说“我不得不放弃。”) 2.“ Surely, I will!” _____________________ (John用坚定的声音回答). 3. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” ______________________ (爸爸有些担心地问道). “We've tried everything.” 4. “I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” __________ (妈妈笑着说道). “Let's get a little dog for Poppy.” I said, hopelessly smiled Mom John replied in a firm voice. asked Dad a bit anxiously 5. _____________________(James耐心地 安慰她说道), “Don't worry about your son.” 6. “You performed so well, my son!” Mr Smith _______________________.(大声表扬儿子). 7.“I have cheated my grandmother.”_______, _________________________________. (“我欺骗了我的祖母。” 她说，眼泪顺着脸颊流下来。) James comforted patiently praised his son in a loud voice tears streaming/flowing down her cheeks She said 8. “Tom must have called for those heli-copters,” Jane reminded herself constantly, _______________________________________________ ______________________. (心想着Tom会很努力找到她的). 9. “I don't have to be lonely any more!” thought Poppy to herself with satisfaction, _______________________________________________ ________________________________________________ (当她意识到那小东西很喜欢与她在一起). thinking that Tom would do everything he could to find her. when she realized that the little thing was extremely pleased to be with her continued said with a gentle voice replied in a low voice praised him Try to make sme improvements. Try to make sme improvements. that he was a good boy. “ You are worthy, you are loved.” I said with told him determination. 请根据所给内容写一段话： 描写我用自己赚来的钱为妈妈买生日礼物，回到家后妈妈看到时吃惊和欣喜的情景，要求至少有两句对话描写。 请根据所给内容写一段话：描写我用自己赚来的钱为妈妈买生日礼物，回到家后妈妈看到时吃惊和欣喜的情景，要求至少有两句对话描写。 With great excitement and tears, I knocked on the door. Mum opened the door. “Surprise!” I yelled, waving the presents in my hands,“Happy Birthday!” Mum stiffed (僵硬) for seconds, and then her face lit up with pleasure. “But, how did you get the money?” Mum asked me, with a confused look on her face. After she knew the truth, she embraced me tightly. In the small but comfortable house, we talked merrily, sharing our stories. It dawned on me that nothing is more blissful than being accompanied by our beloved ones. (我突然意识到没有什么比被心爱的人陪伴更幸福的了) Thank you! $$