102 Week 15 Thursday 读后续写写作技巧15（课件PPT）-【启航英语】2025版高考英语应用文写作＋读后续写

Week 15　 叙事短文&优秀品行类读后续写 启航 英语 Thursday——读后续写写作技巧15 例析解读　“五维立意”写作法 在续写当中，很多同学往往找不到头绪，无从下手，我们可以用“五维立意”写作法来解决这个问题。 第一维：在第一段或前两段找出事件点题的句子，这往往是故事的要素部分；第二维：在接下来的段落中找出描述事件的进程发展句子，这是事件线索；第三维：在文章中找出事件的冲突矛盾点，这是续写可能要体现的高潮营造部分；第四维：找出文章当中有关评论或议论的句子，这是文章的感情、态度；第五维：根据续写段落的提示部分，结合上面的四维写出水到渠成的精彩续写文章。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 (2024·新课标Ⅰ卷)I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September.I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference.Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half.I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague.The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter.I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station.I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused.When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend.After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station.Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus.Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face.“We made it，” he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet.I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along.A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station.There, at the entrance, was a cash machine.I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order.Sorry.” 注意　1．续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news._____________________ _______________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________ Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised._______________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________ 词汇积累 ①_____________ adj.难以忘怀的，令人难忘的　②due ____由于，因为　③get _____下车；下飞机；下船等　④__________ adj.困惑的，糊涂的　⑤______________ adv.感谢地；感激地 长难句 分析 The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. unforgettable to off confused thankfully 长难句 分析 翻译：我一下飞机，就像疯了一样穿过机场大楼，毫不犹豫地跳上了第一辆出租车。 分析：本句是______句。主句为I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought；The moment I got off the plane为___________从句。 复合 时间状语 跟踪练习 1．I am sure this will be a feast of culture and I sincerely hope you could record this ____________ (forgettable) show and share your achievement with me! 2．If slang is used too much in a passage, it may make readers ____________ (confuse), and even cause misunderstanding. 3．_____________________________________________ on the playground, the ceremony began.所有的学生和老师在操场上集合的那一刻，典礼开始了。 unforgettable confused The moment all the students and teachers gathered 本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在一次因风暴延误的旅途中，匆忙搭乘出租车前往车站赶最后一班去布拉格的公共汽车。司机Gunter不熟悉车站位置，通过电话求助后顺利抵达。到达时作者却发现自己没带现金，尝试用葡萄牙银行卡支付没有成功，而车站的取款机也出故障了。 第一步　语篇理解 本文要求是续写短文。这是一篇记叙文，属于“人与自我”中的“优秀品行，正确的人生态度，公民义务与社会责任”，写作要用一般过去时，人称为第三人称为主。 第二步　审题要素 第三步　“五维立意”写作法结构图   维度 原文 文意 阅读 任务 点题 (事件) Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. 1．由于一场大风暴，我乘坐的航班延误了一个半小时。   维度 原文 文意 阅读 任务 进程 (发展) 1．The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. 2．I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. 3．Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. 4．He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. 5．I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order.Sorry.” 1．我一下飞机，就像疯了一样穿过机场大楼，毫不犹豫地跳上了第一辆出租车。 2．我告诉他我要去哪里，但他说他没听说过那个公共汽车站。 3．最后，在只剩下两分钟的时间里，我们开进了汽车站。 4．他试了好几次，但那台刷卡机就是不配合。 5．我跳下车，疯狂地向那台机器跑去，把卡插进去，却看到上面写着：“故障。抱歉。”   维度 原文 文意 阅读 任务 冲突 (矛盾点) I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. 我在最后一班开往布拉格的公共汽车出发前30分钟抵达维也纳。 评议 (议论) A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. 当我看到公共汽车排队的人越来越少时，一种无助的感觉涌上心头。   维度 原文 文意 阅读 任务 结局 (结果) 结局1(第1段)： 作者留下Gunter的电话，承诺会还钱给对方，Gunter同意，最终作者及时登上了公共汽车。 结局2(第2段)： 作者给Gunter出租费，并向对方表示感激，两人成为了好朋友。 写作任务 回应 答案输出成形 作者给出解决办法—承诺还钱—Gunter同意—作者登上公共汽车—履行承诺还钱—两人成为朋友 根据以上提示整理出答案： 高效临摹衡水体　争抢满分作文 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.____________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第四步　续写线索 He looked at me in disbelief, asking me what to do. Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. “If I miss this last bus to Prague, I'll be late for the conference which is so important that I can't afford to miss it！” I explained. “May I have your phone number? I will call you and return the money I owe you. I promise I will keep my word or you keep my watch！” I added, handing him my watch as well as my business card. Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch. He wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, Sir.” A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure. Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. __________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Beaming a warm smile at him, I gave him a big hug the moment I saw him. We chatted happily on the way to the airport. I told him that thanks to his generosity and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride”， back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down. I also gave him an attractive souvenir I had bought at Prague, which he accepted with delight. We became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly. I felt blessed to have such a warm-hearted friend like Gunter. 谢谢观看 Thank you for watching $$