Week 16 现象评论&优秀品行类读后续写（教师用书）-【启航英语】2025版高考英语应用文写作＋读后续写

Week 16 现象评论&优秀品行类读后续写 Monday 如何写好现象评论 现象评论类文章属于议论文范畴，要求就某一话题或热点问题阐 现 ·首段：点明自己的观点 述自己的观点和看法。在写作过程中，可以先明确自己的观点，态度要 鲜明，不能模棱两可。围绕论点多角度论证，论据要确切、充分，最后进 行总结，重申自己的观点和立场。 象评论类 ·中段：多角度论证自己 的观点 ·尾段：重申自己的观点 和立场 典题示例 随着手机的普及程度不断提高，很多青少年喜欢戴着耳机听音乐。请你针对上述现象写一篇短文发表自己的看 法，内容包括：1.耳机给我们带来的好处：2.长时间使用耳机可能造成的伤害：3.你的建议。 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇耳机headphone 思路点拨 Step One 审题谋篇 体裁 议论文 时态 一股现在时 主题 现象评论 人称 以第一人称为主 结构 第一段：引出话题 第二段：论证自己的观点 第三段：重申观点 O Step Two 词汇运用 1.手机mobile phone 6.听力hearing 2.青少年，十几岁的孩子teenager 7.伤害damage 3.快乐和乐趣pleasure and fun 8.建议，意见：提议suggestion 4.方便的，便利的convenient 9.保护protect 5.使满意，使满足satisfy Step Three句式表达 1.完成句子 (1)手机正在被广泛使用。 Mobile phones are being used widely. (2)越来越多的人，尤其是青少年喜欢戴着耳机听音乐。 More and more people enjoy listening to music with headphones,especially teenagers. (3)我们可以看到他们戴着耳机从一个地方走到另一个地方。 We can see them moving from place to place with headphones in their ears. (4)当然，耳机给我们带来了很多快乐和乐趣。 Of course,headphones bring us much pleasure and fun. (5)由于它们的体积小，使用也很方便。 To use them is also convenient because of their small size. (6)耳机会产生高质量的声音效果 Headphones will produce high quality sound effects. 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 (7)这可以满足很多人 This can satisfy many people. (8)然而，长时间戴着耳机听音乐会逐渐损害我们的听力。 However,listening to music for too long with headphones can damage our hearing gradually. (9)因此，我建议我们青少年不要每天戴耳机太久 Therefore.I suggest that we teenagers should not wear headphones for too long every day. (10)我们可以一次使用耳机15分钟。 We can use headphones for 15 minutes once. (11)我们可以更好地保护我们的耳朵。 We can better protect our ears. 2.句式升级 (1)用wh的复合结构合并上题中的句子(1)和句子(2)。 With mobile phones being used widely,more and more people enjoy listening to music with headphones, especially teenagers. (2)用t构成的形式主语升级上题中的句子(5)。 It is also convenient for us to use them because of their small size. (3)用which引导的非限制性定语从句合并上题中的句子(6)和句子(7)。 Besides,headphones will produce high quality sound effects,which can satisfy many people. (4)用that引导的表语从句升级上题中的句子(9)。 Therefore,my suggestion is that we teenagers should not wear headphones too long each day. (5)用s0tht引导的目的状语从句合并上题中的句子(10)和句子(11)。 We can use headphones for 15 minutes once so that we can better protect our ears. Step Four连句成篇 [范文] With mobile phones being used widely,more and more people enjoy listening to music with headphones, especially teenagers.We can see them moving from place to place with headphones in their ears. Of course,headphones bring us much pleasure and fun.It is also convenient for us to use them because of their small size.Besides,headphones will produce high quality sound effects,which can satisfy many people. However,listening to music for too long with headphones can damage our hearing gradually. Therefore,my suggestion is that we teenagers should not wear headphones for too long every day.We can use headphones for 15 minutes once so that we can better protect our ears. Tuesday 满分词汇句式&模板晨诵 晨诵1◆常用词汇及话题句式 常用词汇 convey表达，传递 phenomenon现象 from my perspective在我看来 in conclusion总之 drowning溺水 alone独自，单独 companion同伴 permission同意，许可 precious宝贵的，珍贵的 nevertheless然而，不过 opinion意见，看法 make full use of充分利用 benefit好处，益处 essential必不可少的，非常重要的 attach more importance to更加重视 take sth.into consideration考虑… Week16现象评论&优秀品行类读后续写 9.So I think we all should learn to protect ourselves when in 话题句式 or around water.所以我认为我们都应该学会在水里或 1.A recent survey shows that most students are barely 水城周围保护自已。 involved in doing housework at home.最近的一项周查 I0.Some people support studying in WeChat groups.一些人 显示，大多数学生在家几乎不做家务。 支持在微信群中学习。 2.Here,I'm writing to convey my opinions about this I1.Here is my advice.以下是我的建议。 phenomenon.在这里，我写这封信是为了表达我对这一 l2.In addition,it cannot protect people's privacy.此s外，它 现象的看法。 不能保护人们的隐私。 3.Nowadays,WeChat study groups are more and more 13.In my opinion,taking everything into consideration,I popular among people,.如今，微信学习小组越来越受人 oppose studying in WeChat groups,which isn't always 们的欢迎。 of benefit to us..在我看来，考虑到所有的因素，我反对 4.Nevertheless,different people hold different opinions. 在微信群中学习，这并不总是对我们有益 而，不同的人持有不同的观点。 14.We should focus on learning knowledge rather than 5.With fewer and fewer people using cash,non-cash WeChat study groups.我们应该专注于学习知识，而不 payments are becoming increasingly popular,especially 是微信学习小组。 in China.随着使用现金的人越来越少，非现金支付变I5.Life is precious..We must value our lives and keep away 得越来越受欢迎，尤其是在中国。 from drowning.生命是宝贵的。我们必须珍惜生命，避 6.Recently,there have been many reports about drowning. 免溺水 最近，有很多关于溺水的报道。 16.As for me,I prefer non-cash payment.I think it is an 7.Non-cash payment has many advantages..非现金支付有 indispensable part of modern life.就我而言，我更喜欢 很多优点。 非现金支付。我认为它是现代生活不可缺少的一 8.It happened not only to children but also to adults,which 部分。 is really heartbreaking.这种事不仅发生在孩子身上，也I7.In conclusion,doing housework should be attached more 发生在成年人身上，真是令人心碎。 importance to.总之，做家务应该更受重视。 晨诵2◆背满分模板 A recent survey shows that most students are barely involved in doing housework at home.Here,I'm writing to convey my opinions about this phenomenon. 模板中黑体字部分是写现象评论 From my perspective.being busy with study largely accounts for 时可以通用的部分，其他部分可以根据 students'absence from housework.However,while it's essential that we 写作要求灵活处理。 students should be devoted to our academic progress,we should also undertake 第一段往往用一般现在时，第 some chores.Doing housework can equip us with necessary living skills. 二，三段可以多用一般将来时。 Besides,some hard housework can be regarded as a kind of physical exercise 文章人称以第三人称为主，有时 that strengthens our physical qualities. 也可以用第一人称。 In conclusion,doing housework should be attached more importance to.Let's embrace the joy of doing chores. Wednesday 应用文写作跟踪训练 跟踪训练1◆现象评论 假定你是李华，最近有很多关于溺水事件的报道，请你针对这一现象用英语写一篇短文发表自己的看法，呼吁同 学们珍爱生命，远离溺水。内容包括：1.陈述现象：2.提出建议：3.发出呼吁。 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 73 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 [范文] Recently,there are many reports about drowning.It happened not only to children but also to adults, which is really heartbreaking.So I think we all should learn to protect ourselves when in or around water. Here is my advice:First of all,don't swim in unfamilar rivers or lakes.Besides,we shouldn't go swimming alone.We must find an adult companion.At the same time,we can't swim without parents'permission.What's more,if we can't swim,we mustn't get into the water to save a person.Cry out for help immediately if there is someone drowning. Life is precious.We must value our lives and keep away from drowning. 高分亮点 高分词汇：①drowning n.溺水②alone ad.独自，单独③companion m.同伴④permission m.同意，许可 ⑤precious adj.宝贵的，珍贵的 高分句型：（句型I)It happened not only to children but also to adults,which is really heartbreaking.(运用了which引 导的非限制性定语从句) (句型2)What's more,if we can't swim,we mustn't get into the water【o save a person.(运用了if引导的条件状语 从句) 跟踪训练2◆现象评论 代表着新技术的微信学习群越来越受人们的欢迎。对此，不同的人持有不同的观点。请你根据以下提示，用英 语给某英语报刊写一篇短文，并谈谈你的看法。 赞成的理由：1.获得新知识：2.利用闲暇时间学习。 反对的理由：1.学习群管理不善：2.浪费时间。 你的看法：1.…2.… 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇微信学习群WeChat study group [范文] Nowadays,WeChat study groups are more and more popular among people.Nevertheless,different people hold different opinions. Some people support studying in WeChat groups for the following reasons.Firstly.people can learn new things that they can't get from books.Secondly,learners can make full use of their spare time to study. However,others don't think so.They argue that the groups are poorly managed,which will lead to much false information.Moreover,studying by joining WeChat groups is a waste of time because learners will check the messages freguently. In my opinion,taking everything into consideration,I oppose studying in WeChat groups,which isn't always of benefit to us.We should focus on learning knowledge rather than WeChat study groups. 高分亮点 高分词汇：①nevertheless ad,然而，不过②opinion n.意见，看法③make full use of充分利用④take into consideration考虑⑤benefit n.好处，益处 高分句型：（句型I)Firstly,people can learn new things that they can't get from books.(运用了that引导的限制性定 语从句) (句型2)They argue that the groups are poorly managed,which will lead to much false information.(运用了which引导 的非限制性定语从句) Week16现象评论&优秀品行类读后续写 Thursday 读后续写写作技巧16 例析读后续写题丢分现象诊断 读后续写的丢分现象在以下几个方面比较突出： 1,很多考生为了凑字数胡写一气，驴唇不对马嘴，读起来令人如坠雾里。 2.有的考生过多考虑现实生活中的生活常识，而没有进行正能量描述，体现不出主旨的升华。 3.逻辑不符合文章的前后线素，时间线索颜倒。 4.故事中随意加减人物数量，增加多余的故事情节。 5,对于提供的第二段续写的开头和第一段的主要内容没有进行有效衔接。 6.写作基本功底不扎实，各种语法错误出现比较多，甚至出现中文表达等。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 (2023·浙江1月卷) Yoghurt It was a rough week.The price of oil skyrocketed (as the temperature dropped sharply in Maine.We were looking at a high of eight degrees that week,and I had missed three days of work so my paycheck was going to be lower than normal..I was stressed,to say the least..I shopped strategically(有策略地)，looking for every possible way to cut pennies so I could buy groceries and keep the house warm. My eight-year-old son didn't understand when I told him we were struggling that week.He wanted a special kind of yoghurt.but I didn't have the extra three dollars to buy it for him.It was the kind of yoghurt with a cartoon kid riding a skateboard on the front of the box,and a mere two spoonfuls in each cup.It was the kind of product that wastes a parent's money and makes me hate advertising. I felt guilty as a parent when those big eyes looked at me with confusion.as if to say,"It's just yoghurt.What's the big deal?"So I found a way.I put something back,as single mothers often do.He got his yoghurt. On the way driving back from the grocery store,I noticed a homeless man holding a sign by the side of the road.My heart hurt,and I tried not to look at him.I watched people stay away from him on the street and walk by without even meeting his eyes.My son didn't seem to care much.either.I looked at the man closely then-bare hands grasping a piece of cardboard,snot (frozen to his face,a worn-out jacket.And there I was struggling because I had to buy oil and groceries.But I decided to help him.I pulled over to the man and handed him a five-dollar bill. 注意1.续写词数应为150个左右：2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 Seeing this,my son became confused and surprised. On that day,my son performed an act that most adults wouldn't have done. 亮点再练 词汇积累 ①sharply ady.尖锐地：急剧地②guilty adj.内疚的，羞愧的③confusion m.困惑，不 明确④homeless_ad.无家可归的⑤frozen adj.结冰的，冻硬的 I felt guilty as a parent when those big eyes looked at me with confusion,as if to say,"It's just yoghurt. What's the big deal?" 长难句 分析：本句是复合句。主句为I felt guilty as a parent:when those big eyes looked at me with 分析 confusion为时何状语从句：as if to say为方式状语从句的省略。 翻译：作为一个母亲我感到愧疚，尤其是当那双大眼睛困惑地看着我，好像在说：“这只是酸奶，有什 么大不了的？” 175 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 (续表) 1.Of course hours of absence of digital devices would never be no good for thinking sharply (sharp）. 2.In this program,kids direct their own play,climbing tall trees or testing ice on the frozen (freeze) 跟踪练习 lake. 3.During the demonstration,as if to offer final proof of the mind inside his bird's brain.Alex spoke u即.在演示过程中，亚历克斯说话了，似乎是为了最后证明他的鸟大脑里有思想。 写作步骤 Q第一步语篇解读 通读短文可知，由于物价以及自己工作的原因，在经济上本周对于作者来说是艰难的一周。作者和儿子在杂货 店里购物，为了让儿子能买到他想买的酸奶，作者不得不放回去一些已经选购的商品。从杂货店开车回来的路上，作 者注意到一个无家可归的人在路边举着一个牌子，尽管作者经济闲难，但还是给了这个无家可归的人5美元，短文续 写由此展开。 Q第二步段落续写 ①第一段开头：看到这些，作者的儿子感到困惑和惊讶。所以短文要续写儿子与作者之间的对话，以此介绍作者 为什么要续慨地给这个无家可归的人5美元，而对于儿子买酸奶时却如此勉强。②第二段开头：那天，儿子做了一件 大多数成年人不会做的事。所以短文要续写，儿子将自己心爱的酸奶递给窗外的无家可归的人，以及作者的感悟。 Q第三步本文续写中丢分原因梳理与反思 @逻辑反常 ,勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→质问妈妈原因一→反问妈妈为什么不多给流浪汉一点钱。 b.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5关元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→孩子内心受到触动→儿子说不买酸奶了，把准备买酸奶 的三美元捐给那位无家可归的人。 ℃.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→表扬流浪汉精神可嘉。 d.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”问流浪汉为什么离家出走，到底经历了什么。 。时间线错位 .勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→我们咯入经济困境→无家可归的人归还5美元纸币，解释说他已找到工作·一切终将重归美好。 b.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币一孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→流浪汉答谢“我”，“我”鼓励流浪汉→儿子埋怨没钱，“我”劝儿子要有爱心一→儿子将酸奶给了那位无家 可归的人一→母子收到流浪汉的一箱答谢酸奶。 .勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教有孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神一→后来收到了流浪汉的感谢信。 ,勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→儿子把酸奶给了无家可归的人一→“我”生气与孩子吵嘴→孩子比大人更能让世界变得温暖。 ,勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊呀与不解+“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神+我刻苦工作→终于给儿子买了酸奶。 。故事人物的误增/误减 .勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解一“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神一→那天后，儿子不再要酸奶了，时常帮助我照顾小店，好好 学习。（流浪汉消失） 6 Week16现象评论&优秀品行类读后续写 b.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我“看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→那天后，儿子不再跟我去杂货店购物，把时间省下来清 理社区卫生，将社区建设得更加美好。（流浪汉消失） ℃.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解一→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→孩子内心受到触动一→从此以后儿子不再要酸奶。（流浪 汉消失) 山.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我“教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→孩子内心受到触动→儿子跳到河里拯救湖水儿童。（流 浪汉消失，误增溺水儿童) ,勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神，“我”的坏心情消失→路上遇见孤儿，“我”下定决心要 帮助更多的人。（误增孤儿） ￡勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→回家找爸爸评理。（误增爸爸） 。叙事空洞 .勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶，“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→“我们”母子一起回家→如果懂得施舍，世界将更加 美好。 b.勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币一孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→那天后，儿子长大了，当遇见需要帮助的人就会伸出援 助之手。 ℃，勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶一“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→孩子内心受到触动一→当天下午没回家而是去检塑料瓶 →儿子立志做个乐于助人、贡献社会的人。 d勉强地给孩子买了一份昂贵的酸奶→“我”看到一位无家可归的流浪汉递给他5美元纸币→孩子看见后感到 惊讶与不解→“我”教育孩子要有同情心和助人为乐的精神→孩子内心受到触动，“我”诉说人生大道理。 Q理解错误 a.第二段开头句是这样的，“On that day,my son performed an act that most adults wouldn't have done..”不少考生 对第二段开头这句话不理解或曲解，或对这句话避而不谈，执着地按照自己的想法去写，因而导致续写偏题。 b.对故事关键物品识别不清晰，把故事中的“酸奶”与“汽油及杂货”混淆。 c.将perform an act解读为“表演节目”。 d.对动词过去时使用不敏感： I run to him.and help him. So my son ask me. Then I tell to my son that we need to help others. e.动词时态前后不一致 My face got red,because I don't know how to answer his question. ￡.中式表达 I noticed my son changed. Why do you do the behavior? Why I wanted a special kind of yoghurt,but you didn't buy it for me? If you don't give him,I can get two cups of yoghurt. He don't understand,and I was don't said. He like understand something. So I took my son left. 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 根据以上提示整理出答案： 高效临摹衡水体争抢满分作文 Seeing this,my son became confused and surprised."Mum,why are you so generous to this stranger while so mean to me when l asked for a yoghurt?"I explained that if we were blind to the poor man's situation he would freeze to death. He didn't have a home to live or food to eat after all.we could spare five dollars even if we were financially stressed Finally my son nodded and fixed his eues on his yoghurt. On that day,my son performed an act that most adults wouldn't have done.He took his yoghurt and handed it to the man outside the car window.Even if it was a matter of a few spoonfuls of yoghurt,it was all he had,and he gave it to someone who needed it more than he wanted it.He showed me that l am doing well as a mother. There are alwaus blessings to count if we open our eues.and we alwaus have the opportunity to be a blessing to someone else Friday 读后续写话题跟踪训练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Tim had high respect for his father,Mike,who was also his teacher.With a burning sense of responsibility.Mike loved his job so much that he always went the extra mile. In the very early morning,Tim could always see Mike busy with breakfast for him.Later on,they went to school together to accompany the students to greet a new day of learning.At the table,Mike exchanged what he knew in school with Tim.Typically,Mike would always wear a shiny smile for the funny moments and frown for his students'problems or challenges.At that moment,Tim did feel his father's passion for the class. Having finished the housework and said goodnight to Tim.Mike,eventually,sat at his desk peacefully and buried himself in what he enjoyed.In the delicate light of a lamp,he made preparations for the next day,trying to make what students found boring in the textbook come to life. Sometimes,Mike worried Tim might be envious of the attention he gave to other children.However,Tim didn't complain about it.Instead,he admired his dedication and love.It was one of the qualities that made Mike such a fantastic father. Tim liked making videos of activities in daily life,and kept his camera handy in case there was any opportunity to capture footage(捕捉片段).Also,he captured some of Mike's. One weekend,Tim approached Mike's room,hoping to get advice on making videos for the next class meeting themed Love,only to find Mike staring at the photos of his students on the wall,a little upset. "What happened?"Tim asked as he stepped into Mike's room. "You know.some of your classmates recently have been rebellious ()Despite discipline and heartfelt communication,they're still breaking rules,skipping classes and complaining about my strictness.Though I could be demanding sometimes.I'm concerned about them."Mike sighed. Thinking of his upsetting classmates who couldn't sense Mike's efforts,Tim decided to try to do his part in helping Mike out in secret.With an idea flashing into his mind.he knew what the video was about. 注意1.续写词数应为150个左右：2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 78 Week16现象评论&优秀品行类读后续写 Tim started working on the video. The students,along with Mike got surprised when the video came to an end. 亮点再练 ①responsibility,责任，负责②accompany,陪伴，陪同③typically adv,典型地：代 词汇积累 表性地④eventually ad.最终，结果⑤complain about对…抱怨 One weekend,Tim approached Mike's room,hoping to get advice on making videos for the next class meeting themed Love,only to find Mike staring at the photos of his students on the wall,a little upset. 分析：本句是简单_句。主千为Tim approached Mike's room;hoping to get advice on making videos 长难句 for the next class meeting themed Love为现在分词作伴随状语，其中themed Love为过去分词作 分析 后置定语；only to find Mike staring at the photos of his students on the wall,a little upset为不定式 作结果状语。 翻译：一个周末，Tim来到Mke的房间，希望得到关于为下一次以“爱”为主题的班会制作视频的建 议，却发现Mike町着墙上学生的照片，有点沮丧。 1.I'm glad to tell you our school is to hold a speech contest themed Saving Food Is Everyone's Responsibility (responsible). 跟踪练习 2.I am taking a risk in writing to complain about the air pollution in our school area caused by some nearby printing and dyeing mills. 3.It must have been very upsetting for you to make all the efforts to get to my office on time,only to have me fail to arrive.你费了那么大劲想准时到我的办公室，结果我却没到，你一定很难过吧。 [语篇解读]本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Tm的爸爸Mike是一位负责和有爱心的老师。他对学生们充满着深 深的爱，可是有一些孩子总是抱怨他过于严格和苛刻。并且明白了爱的真谛的故事。 [段落续写]①由第一段首句内容“Tm开始制作视频。”可知，第一段可描写Tm帮助爸爸制作视频的具体过程。 ②由第二段首句内容“当视频结束时，学生们和Mke都很惊讶。”可知，第二段可描写孩子们和Mk心的反应，以及最 后他们明白的道理。 [范文] Tim started working on the video.He started looking for footage for the video,capturing every piece of footage he could use.These clips record Mike's daily tasks for the children.With them,Tim searched for the rebellious children on the photo wall and quietly filmed Mike's dedication and care for the children.These clips contain Mike's heart communications,hard work,and most importantly.love.When the day came for the class meeting.Tim volunteered to play a video for the class. The students,along with Mike got surprised when the video came to an end.To Mike's surprise,the rebellious students,those who broke school rules,often played truant and always complained about his strictness,were full of tears.They stood up slowly.bowed deeply to Mike,and sincerely said,"Mike,thank you for all your efforts for us."Mike was so moved that he gave each of them a big hug.At that moment,Tim believed what had just happened was etched into each of their hearts.Because he was sure that Mike was not just a responsible teacher but a perfect father. 79 启航英语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 高分亮点 高分词汇：①capture.俘获，捕获②rebellious adj.反叛的；造反的 ③dedication m.泰献：献辞④ruant n.旷课的 小学生⑤etch蚀刻：铭刻⑥responsible adj.有责任的：可靠的 高分句型：（句型I)When the day came for the class meeting,Tim volunteered to play a video for the class.(运用了 when引导的时间状语从句)】 (句型2)At that moment,Tim believed what had just happened was etched into each of their hearts.(运用了what引导 的主语从句，以及被动语态结构)》 Saturday 写作基本功讲练结合 无灵主语句描写讲练结合 无灵主语句，是指用无生命的事物作主语，用人或社！ DThe sight of the scene filled me with horror. 会团体的行为或动作作谓语，因此这类句子常带有拟人 看到这个情景，我心中充满了恐惧。 化的修辞色彩。 2A terrible thought suddenly struck me. 1.情感状态的抽象名词+谓语 我突然产生一个可怕的想法。 常见的情绪名词：happiness,joy,delight开心，快乐： 3A ten minutes'walk brought us to the hotel. surprise,astonishment惊奇、惊讶；shame羞耻、羞愧： 我们步行十分钟就到了旅馆。 anger愤怒；despair绝望；regret遗憾、后悔：sorrow悲 The thought of seeing her son very soon filled her heart 伤：horror惊恐；anxiety焦虑：disappointment失望、沮 with great happiness. 想到不久就要见到她的儿子，她心中感到十分快乐。 丧；satisfaction满意，满足；puzzlement困惑、不解；等等。 这些句子皆是将人的动作和思考行为拟人化，而不是 常见的谓语动词：sei7e侵袭：choke壹住，堵住：flood充 简单的sb.fee/do.·.句型，让续写的表达更多样，更 满：creep不知不觉产生：grip紧抓：give way to被 生动。 代替：wash over洗涤、侵袭：desert丢弃，遗弃；等等。 3.身体部位/音容类名词+谓语 在续写中写到人物的情绪或心理时，别总用sb.fel.· 常见的身体部位/音容的名词：face脸：laughter笑声： 句型，不如试试无灵主语句，来个高级的情绪描写。 smile微笑；tear眼泪：wors说的话：等等。 “情感状态的抽象名词+谓语动词”的描写有： 常见的谓语动词：light up,brighten照亮：:linger继续存 DFear gripped the village. 留；weup涌出：flash闪烁；crumple弄皱；等等。 整个村庄笼罩在恐怖之中。 在续写中描写人的外貌和性格时，不要一直用sb.s.· 2Courage deserted him. 这一简单句，写一个无灵主语句更显高级！ 他失去了勇气。 “身体部位/音容类名词+谓语动词”的描写有： ③Anger choked my words. DSmile crumpled his face. 我气得说不出话。 他笑得满脸皱纹。 4A wave of nervousness washed over him. 2Her face brightened when I gave her the present. 一阵紧张的情绪涌上他的心头。 我给她礼物时，她的脸上焕发出了光彩。 2.思考/动作行为的名词+谓语 3His words sent me a quiver through my body. 他的话让我不寒而栗。 常见的人物行为词汇：sight看到，thought想法，glance 4Laughter lingered around the room. 一臂，look看，idea想法，feeling感受，walk走路：等等。 笑声在房间里萦绕。 常见的谓语动词：overwhelm压倒：strike打击侵袭； 这些句子简直完胜sb,is crying/laughing/smiling！简 arouse唤起；remind想起：fll..with..充满…： 单句快把它们记下来，用在续写中去夺分！ change改变；bring带来；等等。 4.时间/地点/场景类名词+谓语 在续写中描写人物动作或思考行为时，也可以写一个 常见的时间/地点/场景类名词：slience,.hush安静，沉 无灵主语句，更不错！ 默：dusk黄昏；dawn黎明，破晓；morning早上：afternoon “思考/动作行为的名词+谓语动词”的描写有： 下午；night晚上：等等。