Week 4 报道&家庭亲情类读后续写（教师用书）-【启航英语】2025版高考英语应用文写作＋读后续写

Week 4 报道&家庭亲情类读后续写 Monday 如何写好报道 报道是记叙文的一种，其特点是以事实为依据，对人 导语：集中阐释所报道事件的来龙去脉 的经历或事实给予明确的、实事求是的报道。写作过程 中要保持事件的真实性、准确性，语言要准确、简练，通俗 闻报道 。主体：详细叙述所报道事件的起因、经 过和结束 易懂，不必追求过分花哨的词汇和过于复杂的句型。 ·结语：对该事件进行简要总结或评论 典题示例 (2023·浙江1月卷)上周末你参加了校学生会组织的“认识我们身边的植物”活动。请为校英文报写篇报道。 内容包括：1.活动的过程：2.收获与感想。 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 Getting to Know the Plants Around Us 思路点拨 OStep One 审题谋篇 体裁 记叙文 时态 一般过去时和一般现在时 主题 报道 人称 以第三人称为主 结构 第一段：引出话题 第二段：详细报道陈述事实 第三段：感想评论 OStep Two词汇运用 L.参加：加人某个活动，事件或组织participate in 6.样本sample 2.组织organise 7.不可思议的，难以置信的incredible 3.以…开始：开始于…begin with 8.也：还有a5 s well as 4.特征，特点characteristic 9.保持，维持maintain 5.植物物种plant species 10.生态系统ecosystem Step Three句式表达 1.完成句子 (1)上周末，我参加了一个“了解我们周围的植物“的活动。 Last weekend.I participated in a"Getting to Know the Plants Around Us"activity. (2)这次活动是由我们学生会组织的。 The activity was organised by our Students'Union. (3)这项活动以一位当地植物学家的讲座开始的。 The activity began with a lecture by a local botanist. (4)当地的植物学家教我们各种植物的不同特性和用途。 The local botanist taught us about the different characteristics and uses of various plant species. (5)然后我们去大白然中散步，观察和收集不同植物的样本。 We then went on a nature walk to observe and collect samples of different plants. (6)在整个活动过程中，我被世界上存在的各种各样的植物所震惊。 Throughout the event.I was struck by the incredible variety of plants that exist in our world. (7)我还了解了用于医疗目的的植物，以及那些为动物提供食物和住所的植物。 I also leamed about plants that are used for medical purposes,as well as those that provide food and shelter for animals. 35 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 (8)我对这个作用也有了更深的理解。 I also gained a greater appreciation for the role. (9)植物在维持生态系统平衡方面起着重要作用。 Plants play a significant role in maintaining the balance of our ecosystem. (10)总的来说，这是一次有价值和丰富的经历。 Overall,it was a valuable and enriching experience. 2.句式升级 (1)用过去分词短语作后置定语合并上题中的句子(1)和句子(2)。 Last weekend.I participated in a"Getting to Know the Plants Around Us"activity organised by our Students' Union. (2)用who引导的非限制性定语从句合并上题中的句子(3)和句子(4)。 The activity began with a lecture by a local botanist.who taught us about the different characteristics and uses of various plant species. (3)用not only...but also句式合并上题中的句子(6)和句子(7)。 Throughout the event,not only was I struck by the incredible variety of plants that exist in our world,but also I learned about plants that are used for medical purposes.as well as those that provide food and shelter for animals. (4)用定语从句合并上题中的句子(8)和句子(9)。 I also gained a greater appreciation for the significant role that plants play in maintaining the balance of our ecosystem. Step Four连句成篇 [范文] Getting to Know the Plants Around Us Lost weekend,I participated in a "Getting to Know the Plants Around Us"activity organised by our Students'Union. The activity began with a lecture by a local botanist,who taught us about the different characteristics and uses of various plant species.We then went on a nature walk to observe and collect samples of different plants. Throughout the event,not only was I struck by the incredible variety of plants that exist in our world,but also I learned about plants that are used for medical purposes,as well as those that provide food and shelter for animals.I also gained a greater appreciation for the significant role that plants play in maintaining the balance of our ecosystem. Overall,it was a valuable and enriching experience. Tuesday 满分词汇句式&模板晨诵 晨诵1◆常用词汇及话题句式 常用词汇 benefit受益 build up强壮 arouse引起，激起 awareness认识，意识 take turns轮流 performance表演，演出 applause掌声，喝彩 enrich使充实，使丰富 participate in参加 apart from除了…之外 teenager青少年 be addicted【o沉迷于… suggestion建议 in addition除此之外，另外 pick up重新检起 concentrate on集中精力于 pay more attention to更加关注 mentally and physically精神上和身体上 be highly spoken of受到高度评价 the school administration学校管理处 be divided into被分成：被划分为 assign分派，布置（工作、任务） 36 Week4报道&家庭亲情类读后续写 more with people in reality.远离各种社交媒体应用程 话题句式 序，我们不仅可以专注于学习，还可以更多地与现实中 1.In order to inspire students to pay more attention to 的人交流。 physical exercise,an exciting tug of war was held on our 6.Students who had a good command of English and showed school playground last Sunday.为了激励学生们更加关 great interest in this topic took turns to give us a speech. 注体育锻炼，上周日在我们学校的操场上举行了一场 英语水平高，对这个话题很感兴趣的同学们轮流给我 激动人心的拔河比赛。 们做了演讲。 2.To arouse our awareness of protecting the ocean,an 7.They worked tirelessly to complete their tasks with such English speech contest about whether we should explore dedication and enthusiasm that the school administration the ocean was organized in our school library last awarded many of them with certificates of appreciation. Saturday..为了激发我们保护海洋的意识，上周六，我们 们孜孜不倦地以奉献精神和热情完成任务，学校管理 在学校图书馆举办了一场关于我们是否应该探索海洋 部门为他们中的许多人颜发了赞赏证书。 的英语演讲比赛。 8.In addition,it is a good idea to pick up some hobbies, 3.Last week,students of Xinhua High School participated in which helps to spend less time online.此外，培养一些爱 the Campus Labor Week event organized by the school 好也是个好主意，这有助于诚少上网时间 administration.上周，新华中学的学生们参加了学校行9.Through the activity,we benefited a lot mentally and 政部门组织的校园劳动周活动。 physically.Not only did it enrich our school life,but let 4.The activity,organized by Students'Union.attracted all us further realize the importance of building up our body senior students.该活动由学生会组织，吸引了所有的高 and working as a team.通过这次活动，我们在精神上和 年级学生。 身体上都受益了很多。它不仅丰富了我们的学校生 5.By staying away from the various social media apps,we 活，而且让我们进一步认识到强壮我们的身体和作为 can not only concentrate on studies,but also communicate 一个团队工作的重要性。 晨诵2◆背满分模板 An Exciting Tug of War In order to inspire students to pay more attention to physical 模板中黑体字部分是报道描写时 exercise,an exciting tug of war was held on our school playground last 可以通用的部分，其他部分可以根据写 Sunday. 作要求灵活处理。 The activity,organized by Students'Union,attracted all senior 第一，二段往往是一般过去时，第 students.Twenty teams tried their best to win,with the rest cheering all the 三段可以是一般过去时，也可以用其他 way.The activity lasted about two hours and drew to a successful close. 时态。 Through the activity,we benefited a lot mentally and physically. 文章人称以第三人称为主，如果第 Not only did it enrich our school life,but let us further realize the 三段有“我”的感悟，要用第一人称。 importance of building up our body and working as a team. Wednesday 应用文写作跟踪训练 跟踪训练1◆报道 假定你是李华，上周六你校在图书馆举办了一场学生英语演讲比赛，主题为“是否应该进行海洋探索”。现在请 你为校英文报写一篇报道。内容包括：1.参赛对象：2.比赛情况：3，比赛意义。 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 An English Speech Contest on Ocean Exploration 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 [范文] An English Speech Contest on Ocean Exploration To arouse our awareness of protecting the ocean,an English speech contest about whether we should explore the ocean was organized in our school library last Saturday. The competition started at 9:00 a.m.and lasted two hours.Students who had a good command of English and showed great interest in this topic took turns to give us a speech.Their performances on the stage were so wonderful that they were greeted with applause and praise. It was evident that the activity was well organized and was highly spoken of because not only did it enrich our school life but also enabled us to realize the importance of protecting the ocean. 高分亮点 高分词汇：①arouse,.引起，激起2 awareness n.认识，意识3 take turns轮流④performance n.表演，演出 ⑤applause n.掌声，喝彩⑥be highly spoken of受到高度评价⑦enrich以.使充实，使丰富 高分句型：（句型I)To arouse our awareness of protecting the ocean,an English speech contest about whether we should explore the ocean was organized in our school library last Saturday,.(运用了不定式短语作目的状语和whether引导的 宾语从句) 2)Students who had a good command of English and showed great interest in this topic took turns to give us a speech.(运用了who引导的定语从句) (3)It was evident that the activity was well organized and was highly spoken of because not only did it enrich our school life but also enabled us to realize the importance of protecting the ocean,.(运用了that引导的主语从句，because 引导的原因状语从句以及部分例装) 跟踪训练2◆报道 新华中学最近组织了校园劳动周(Campus Labor Week)活动，假定你是学校英语报记者，请写一篇简短的英文报 道。内容包括：L.活动的时间：2，活动的过程：3.对活动的评价。 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 [范文] Last week,students of Xinhua High School participated in the Campus Labor Week event organized by the school administration. During the week,students were divided into different groups and assigned various tasks such as cleaning classrooms,organizing the library books,and maintaining the school garden.They worked tirelessly to complete their tasks with such dedication and enthusiasm that the school administration awarded many of them with certificates of appreciation. The event was a great success because it has encouraged students to take ownership of their school campus and keep it clean and tidy.What's more,apart from promoting a sense of responsibility among students,it has also helped in developing teamwork and leadership skills. 高分亮点一 高分词汇：①participate in参加②the school administration学校管理处③be divided into被分成：被划分为 ④assign.分派，布置（工作，任务）⑤dedicationn.献身，奉献⑥certificate n.证明，证书⑦apart from除了 之外 高分句型：（句型I)They worked tirelessly to complete their tasks with such dedication and enthusiasm that the school administration awarded many of them with certificates of appreciation.(运用了such.,,that.,引导的结果状语从句) (2)The event was a great success because it has encouraged students to take ownership of their school campus and keep it clean and tidy.(运用了because引导的原因状语从句) 38 Week4报道&家庭亲情类读后续写 Thursday 读后续写写作技巧4 精准解读文本续写高考真题 读后续写的选材主要是故事类记叙文，是以叙事为主要内容的一种文体。要续写好这类文章，理解文本是 第一步。对于故事类记叙文何读，要注意以下几个方面。 1.抓住记叙文的6要素 即人物、时间、地点，事件的起因、经过和结果，读后续写所提供的文本除了结果这一要素之外，把其余五个 要素叙述得清清楚楚。因此间读文本时要紧扣这五个要素。 2.掌握记叙文的3大线索 即时间线、情节线和感情线。阅读文本时要抓住这三条主线。必要时可以列出这些线索，以更好地理解文 章，为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉路线索和段落结构有正确和深刻的理解，续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相 连，契合紧密。 3.把握文章主旨和故事的发展方向 这点至关重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意图，才能很好地完成续写。确保续写的内容和原文要有逻辑上的 一致性，并能回应原文的信息。 4.分析文章的用词特点和行文风格 考生要仔细阅读给定的前文，在充分理解文章内容的基础上，认真体会前文的用词特点和行文风格，只有这 样才能使续写的内容在语言色彩上和行文风格上与所给文章保持高度一致。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE (202l·新高考I卷）The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 am.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意1.续写词数应为150个左右：2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 亮点再练 词汇积累 ①excitement m.兴奋，刺激②mixture m.混合：混合物③turn down关小 ④thankfully ad业.（用以表示高兴或宽慰）幸亏：高兴地，感激地⑤as well也：还 The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day 长难句 分析：本句是复合句。主句为The twins were filled with excitement;as they thought of the surprise 分析 为时间状语_从句：they were planning for Mother''sDay为定语_从句，省略了关系代词。 翻译：这对双胞胎想到了为母亲节计刻的惊喜，心里充满了兴奋 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 (续表) 1.I can't contain my excitement (excite)after learning you are coming to study in Beijing and I also know it's a must for you to pass the HSK(汉语水平考试). 跟踪练习 2.They came out of the tunnel and thankfully (thankful)breathed the fresh air. 3.I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about the Oxford Dictionary I bought from your online store wo weeks ago..我写信是为了表达我对两周前从你们网上商店买的《牛津词典》的不满。 写作步骤 。第一步找出本文的6要素 本文是记叙文，讲述了一对双胞胎在母亲节那天为妈妈做早餐的故事。 人物 the twins Jenna and Jeff,their father.their mother 时间 on the morning of Mother's Day 地点 kitchen,bedroom 起因、经过 The twins Jenna and Jeff prepared a surprise on Mother's Day for their mother,but failed at the 和结果 beginning... 。第二步 找出本文的3大线索 l.时间线：on the morning of Mother's Day 2.情节线：The twins Jenna and Jeff wanted to prepare a surprise on Mother's Day for their mother..(双胞胎计划在母亲节 那天给妈妈一个惊喜。) On the morning of Mother's Day.the twins Jenna and Jeff boiled the porridge first and then made the French toast. 亲节这一天，双胞胎来到厨房，煮粥，做吐司。) The porridge boiled over,Jeff's hand was injured by the hot burner and the piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well..(粥煮沸溢了出来，Jeff的手烫伤了，面包片烤糊了。) 3.感t情线：Harmonious relationship between their family members. Q第三步找出本文的主旨及故事的发展方向 l.本文主旨：The twins were preparing a surprise on Mother's Day for their mother to show their love, 2.故事的发展方向：How to prepare the surprise breakfast successfully? Q第四步找出本文的用词特点和行文风格 本文语言平实、行文流畅、叙事娓娓道来。 l.精准的心理描写：The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. 2.细腻的动作和神态描写：The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire,.Jenna panicked.Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now. 根据以上提示整理出答案： 高效临摹衡水体争抢满分作文 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.Seeing the mess in the kitchen,he immediately understood what had happened but he wasn't upset.Instead,he applied some medicine to leff's hand and then set out to help them clean up the mess,throwing awau the burnt toast.Next.they began to make breakfast. and until then the twins looked cheerful Before long,the porridge was ready.Their father instructed them to fru the rest of the bread.Soon,the breakfast was ready.too. The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.Opening her eues,she couldn't believe what she had seen Before she could ask any question,their father turned up and told his wife about how the twins had made preparations to give her the surprise breakfast,and what trouble they had gone through when making the porridge and toast.Disbelief gave wau to excitement and pride Hugging them in her arms,she said,"Thank you,children.It's such an unforgettable Mother's Day for me" 40 Week4报道&家庭亲情类读后续写 Friday 读后续写话题跟踪训练 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The first time we set eyes on"Big Red",Father,Mother and I were on our way home.As we passed the Eaton's department store's window.we stopped as usual to have a look and do a bit of dreaming. The beautifully decorated window display held the best toys ever.There were dolls much too pretty to play with.And they all lay beneath a surprisingly fantastic dress.Mother's eyes were glued to its shining red satin () "My goodness."she whispered."Look at that!"Then,Mother looked down at her own coat-she had worn the heavy grey wool coat every winter for as long as I could remember.Mom was forever doing chores-washing laundry,tending the pigs and working in the garden-so she always wore housedresses and an apron (to protect the front.She did have one or two"special"dresses saved for church on Sundays.Also,she managed to make almost all of our clothes.They weren't fancy,but they were comfortable. "What a silly dress!"She shook her head."Who on earth would want such a big dress?"As we continued down the street,Mother turned her head for one more look."My goodness!You'd think they'd display something a person could use！" Mother's Day was nearing.and the red dress was soon forgotten.Mother.of all people,was not one to spend money on items that were not practical."There are things we need more than this,"she'd always say.Choosing a gift for Mother's Day for her was quite hard.When Dad and I asked.she thought carefully then asked for some tea towels,face cloths or a new basin. On our last trip to town before Mother's birthday,we were driving up Main Street when Mother suddenly shouted in surprise:"Look!"she pointed excitedly as Dad drove past Eaton's."That big red dress is gone,"she said in disbelief. "Who'd be fool enough to buy such a dress?"Mother questioned,shaking her head.I was almost certain that I noticed a trace of longing(一丝渴望)in her voice. 注意1.续写词数应为150个左右：2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。 On the morning of Mother's birthday,Mother got a large box that read"Eaton's Finest Basin"on its wrapping paper. "Oh Frank..."she choked up and couldn't say a word,tears welling up in her eyes. 亮点再练 词汇积累 ①beautifully_ad,美丽地；漂亮地②decorate.装饰；装潢③as long_as只要 ④practical ad.实际的：务实的⑤in surprise惊奇地 The first time we set eyes on "Big Red".Father.Mother and I were on our way home 长难句 分析：本句是复合句。主句为Father,.Mother and I were on our way home:The first time we set 分析 eyes on“Big Red”为时间状语从句。 翻译：我们第一次看到“大红裙子”时，爸爸、妈妈和我在回家的路上。 1.His beautifully (beautiful)illustrated book well attested his love of the university. 跟踪练习 2.It wouldn't be practical (practice)for us to go all that way just for the weekend. 3.The first time I watched an NBA game I became crazy about basketball because the stars looked s0 cool on TV.当我第一次看NBA比赛时，我对篮球着迷了，因为明星们在电视上看起来很酷。 [语篇解读]本文以“大红裙子“为线索展开，讲述了作者的母亲勤俭持家，每天忙着家务，穿着也不讲究，母亲生日 的时侯也没有买过像样的衣服，她从不会把钱花在不实用的东西上。一天回家的路上，母亲在商店的橱窗看到一件 启航演语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 “大红裙子”，她目不转晴地看着，但嘴里却说着各种不喜欢的话。在母亲生日的前天去镇上，母亲发现“大红裙子”不 见了，母亲有些失落。 [段落续写]①由第一段首句内容“在母亲生日的早晨，母亲得到了一个大盒子，盒子的包装纸上写着·Eton's最好 的盘子'。”可知，第一段可描写母亲打开大盒子礼物前后的反应。②由第二段首句内容“·哦，Fk…'她哽咽者说 不出一句话，泪水在眼眶里酒出。”可知，第二段可描写母亲见到“大红裙子”的惊喜，以及接下来做了些什么。 [范文] On the morning of Mother's birthday,Mother got a large box that read"Eaton's Finest Basin"on its wrapping paper. "Oh Frank,"she praised."just what I wanted!"Dad was sitting in his rocker,a huge grin on his face."Only a fool wouldn't give a priceless wife like mine exactly what she wants for her birthday,"he laughed."Go ahead. open it up and make sure there are no chips."Mother quietly opened the box to find a big white dishpan- overflowing with deep red satin that spilled out across her lap.With her hands trembling.she touched the elegant material of Big Red. "Oh Frank..."she choked up and couldn't say a word,tears welling up in her eyes.Her face was as bright as the star that twinkled on our tree in the corner of the small room."You shouldn't have."came her faint attempt at scolding."Oh now,never mind that!"Dad said."Let's see if it fits,"he laughed,helping her slip the marvelous dress over her shoulders.I watched in surprise.attracted by the beauty of my mother I had never noticed before."You look beautiful."my dad whispered to my mom-and she surely did! 高分亮点 高分词汇：①priceless ad山.无价的：极贵重的②exactly ad,精确地，确切地③make sure确保：设法保证 ④marvelous adj,引起惊异的：不可思议的⑤in surprise惊奇地 高分句型：（句型I)With her hands trembling,she touched the elegant material of Big Red.(运用了with的复合结构） (句型2)I watched in surprise,attracted by the beauty of my mother I had never noticed before.(运用了省略了关系代 词的定语从句) Saturday 写作基本功讲练结合 如何丰富细节描写 读后续写试题都是要求考生续写人物经历，补充故 ②with+身体部位 事情节。我们应该用展示而非讲述的描写方式。通过其 The ferocious wolf stared at Mac with its hungry red 体细节描写，生动形象地刻画人物和事件。 eyes.凶猛的狼用它那饥饿的红眼睛盯着Mac。 1.精选动词，刻画具体的动作 此处用with its hungry red eyes来修饰动作stare,使狼 例：看到直升机，简非常高兴。 凶狠的形象更加丰满。 概括表达：Seeing the helicopter,Jane became very ③in+情感名词 happy. 例：He gazed at me in surprise.他吃惊地注视着我。 细节描写：①At the sight of the helicopter,Jane became ④副词 happy with wild joy.一看到直升机，简欣喜若狂。 例：Carefully,he jumped over the broken glasses..小心翼 2The moment she caught sight of the helicopter.Jane's 翼地，他跳过了碎玻璃碴儿。 cyes/face lit up with delight.她一看到直升机，简的眼 (2)运用合适的修辞手法 睛/脸就充满了喜悦。 在动作描写中也可以运用明喻、暗喻、拟人、夸张等写 3Instantly she caught sight of the helicopter.a bright 作手法，让你的写作更加生动传神。 smile lit up Jane's face/.eyes.她一看到直升机，简的脸/ She howled long and loud like a ferocious wolf and 眼睛里就闪现出灿烂的笑容。 then jumped at Buck..她像一只凶猛的狼一样长声嚎叫， 2.添加修饰成分，做到生动描写 然后扑向Buck (1)可以添加介词短语或者副词来修饰动词。 此句把她比作凶残的恶狼，用到了明喻的写作手法，使 ①with+情感名词 整句的动作描写更有力度，更有画面感 例：Her eyes shone with excitement..她的眼睛中闪烁着 例2：She went home in a flood of tears.她泪流满面地 兴奋的光芒。 回家了。 Week4报道&家庭亲情类读后续写 此处在动作描写中添加了in a flood of tears夸张描写， 跟踪练习 生动传神地体现了她当时的情感状态。 I,根据提示用英语写出动作链 3.分解细化动作，构建动作链 1.情节前提：看到失散的儿子，一把抱住。 学生要学会分解动作，形成一个完整的动作链，让描写 以“抱住”为关键词写出动作链。 更加丰富生动。 (1)设计动作链：冲上前→蹲下来一一把抱住 (1)如何构建动作链。 (2)用并列谓语：She dashed forward,knelt down and 写记叙文就像是拍电形，所有场景都像画面一样，一顿 gathered her son into her arms. 一帧地呈现出来。 2.情节前提：做饭。 如：“上车”这一动作。很多同学不知道该如何刻画细 节，只能把动作写得非常单一，比如就是：get into the car (1)设计动作链：打开冰箱→拿出食物→做饭 或者是get on the car。但是实际上，我们可以把这个动 (2)用并列谓语：She opened the fridge,took out the 作按时间轴的顺序设计出，“拦车→上车→告诉司机目 food she needed and started to cook. 的地”三个步骤来写。 3.情节前提：看者母亲，要道歉。 She stopped a taxi.got into it and told the driver her 以“发言”为关键词写出动作链。 destination.她拦下了一辆出租车，上了车，告诉了司机 (1)设计动作链：看到了→深吸一口气→小声说到… 她的目的地。 (2)用并列谓语：She looked at her mother,took a (2)动作链的表达可用并列谓语动词来体现，即Aand deep breath and spoke softly."..." B或者A,B and C。 (3)用非谓语动词：She looked at her mother,taking a 例：He reached deep into his pocket,pulled out a deep breath and speaking softly "... handful of change,and held it up to the farmer. Ⅱ.运用细节描写，完成下列句子 手仲进口袋深处，拿出一把零钱，然后递给农夫。 1.The smile on her face shone like a diamond. (3)动作链的表达可用非谓语来体现。 Looking up at the farmer,the boy said,"Thank 她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。 you.”男孩抬头看着农夫说：“谢谢你。” 2.She slipped out of bed and tiptoed to the window. 2:The dog awkwardly wobbled towards the others. 她溜下床，踮起脚尖走向窗户。 doing its best to catch up.那只小狗笨拙地摇晃着走向 3.She froze with shock,as if rooted to the spot. 其他人，用尽全力追赶。 她吃惊得呆住了，就像在原地生了根似的。 (4)动作链的表达可用when,while.as,before,after:4.Her eyes_widened further and her mouth opened, 等引导的时间状语从句来体现。 她的眼睛睁得更大了，她的嘴张开了。 I:When I arrived there.I walked to the door and 5.It was beginning to snow,and snowflakes were knocked..我到那里后，走到门前，敲了微门。 blinding my eyes 例2：As I waited at the stop,I heard a big noise.在车站 天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。 等车时，我听到了巨大的噪声。 6.A dense earthly sweet smell rose from the ground. (5)动作链可以和情感、环境、心理、语言等结合，形成 enveloping everything within its soft embrace 动作面。 一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起，把一切都包裹 Burning with happiness,she glanced at the trophy, 在它柔软的怀抱里 took a deep breath and said,“Thank TUNTUN!"幸福 满满地，她警了一眼奖杯，深吸了一口气，说：“谢谢 :7.After he knew what the problem was.his mind began 吞吞！” to race,trying to think of a good solution 本句的动作按时间拆分为：先看一眼奖杯，深吸一口 得知问题所在之后，他的大脑开始急速运转，想要想出 气，说道：“谢谢吞吞！”。 一个好的解决方案。 用A,B and C这个结构。此处的Burning with8.Taking a deep breath,I managed to calm myself down happiness是情感描写，glanced,took a deep breath和said and walked up to the platform confidently. 是动作链，同时将动作和语言描写结合在了一起，形成 深吸一口气，我成功地让自己镇定，然后自信地走上了 了饱满的动作面，属于高分表达 讲台。 言航英语高考英语应用文写作+读后续写 Sunday 周末跟踪提分训练 第一节◆应用文写作 假定你是李华，上周一你校举行了高三成人礼仪式。请你为校英文报写一篇报道，内容包括：1.活动时间、地点： 2.活动内容：走龙门、成人宣誓等：3.个人感悟。 注意1.写作词数应为80个左右：2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。 参考词汇龙门Longmen宣誓make an oath The Coming-of-Age Ceremony [范文] The Coming-of-Age Ceremony Lost Monday witnessed an exciting Coming-of-Age Ceremony. All the Senior Three students gathered on the playground at 7 00 sharp in the morning.There were various activities to celebrate the coming 18-year-old birthday.One of them was walking across Longmen, which means a brilliant future waiting for us diligent students.What impressed me most was the moment when all of us made an oath about what should be done as civilized youths. Thanks to the ceremony,I realize I have grown up and I should be self-disciplined and responsible for my behavior. 高分亮点 高分词汇：①witness v.目睹：见证②brilliant adj.辉煌的③diligent adj.勤奋的，勤勉的④civilize.教化，熏陶 ⑤thanks to由于；因为⑥self-disciplined adj.自律的 高分句型：（句型I)One of them was walking across Longmen,which means a brilliant future waiting for us diligent students.(运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句) (2)What impressed me most was the moment when all of us made an oath about what should be done as civilized youths,.(运用了wha引导的主语从句：when引导的定语从句：what引导的宾语从句) 第二节◆读后续写 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Tim's heart raced as he drove to the lawyer's office.He was bequeathed (a mysterious box his dad had never allowed him and his sister to even go near.He signed papers,but was shocked to learn he didn't get the key to open it and nothing about the key was mentioned in the will."You'll have to figure that out!"the lawyer said.Tim left the office, puzzled about what his late dad had left him. Just then.he remembered his childhood home where he and his twin sister Karen grew up.They had lost their mother just two months after they were born.They were raised by their dad Jonathan.and the two were the best friends!As they grew older,they were drawn to the mysterious box,but their dad warned them never to touch it,and even hung the key on a nail high above the fireplace so that they would never get their hands on its contents.Whatever he was hiding from his kids,he was on guard at all times. As the years fleeted by.Tim and Karen moved on with their respective lives.And their brother-sister bond went downhill.The twins fought over who would inherit()their dad's house.Jonathan was heartbroken and whatever trick he tried to reconcile (them.nothing worked.Meanwhile,Jonathan's health began to decline,and even on his deathbed,he wished his kids would put aside their differences and get back together. What would Tim do with the inherited box now?He went to his childhood home to find the key.The house no longer appeared like that loving home Tim remembered growing up in.When he reached to grab the key above the fireplace,he sensed someone behind him."What are you doing here?"screamed Karen,casting the cell phone flashlight on Tim's face "Dad bequeathed me his old chest,and I came here looking for the key.But what are you doing here?" "Dad bequeathed me the key!So I came here to find the chest,"said Karen,puzzled about his father's decision. 44