三、如何长短句结合（教师用书）-【启航英语】2025版高考英语读后续写高分策略(读思写)

第五章读后续写的写作策略 牛7刀小试 一、根据提示，用比喻的手法翻译以下句子。 1.他喜欢健身，所以他体壮如牛。(song,ox) He loves working out.so his body is as strong as an ox. 2.我的心甜如蜂蜜。(sweet,honey) My heart is as sweet as honey. 3.这辆公交车走得慢如蜗牛。(slowly,snail) The bus went as slowly as a snail. 4.我们眼前的风景美如画。(pretty,picture) The scenery in front of us is as pretty as a picture. 5.他一动不动地站着，就像一块石头。(stand still,stone) He stood still like a stone. 6.她脸上的笑容就像钻石一样闪闪发光。(shine,diamond) The smile on her face shone like a diamond. 7.他焦急得像热锅上的蚂蚁。(anxious,an ant on a hot pan)》 He was anxious like an ant on a hot pan. &.这本日记像老朋友一样陪伴我很久了。(accompany,old friend) The diary has accompanied me for quite a long time like an old friend. 二、根据提示，用拟人的手法翻译以下句子。 l.他自由地奔跑者，仿佛他是一只快乐的小鸟。(run freely,happy bird) He was running freely as if he were a happy bird. 2.那只小狗无亭地看者我，仿佛不知道发生了什么。(innocently) The puppy looked at me innocently,as if he didn't know what had happened. 3.他感觉心脏被捅了一刀。(stab) He felt as if his heart had been stabbed by a knife. 4.夏天的微风轻拂我的脸。(breeze) The summer breeze gently touched my face. 5,这座桥见证了这座城市过去十年的巨变。(witness)》 The bridge has witnessed the city's great changes in the past decade. 6.到处都有鸟儿在歌明。(everywhere) Birds are singing everywhere. 7.我非常兴奋。(take hold of) Excitement took hold of me. 三、根据提示，用夸张的手法翻译下列句子。 I.我被吓死了。(be scared to death) I was scared to death. 2.我的心成了碎片。(break into pieces)》 My heart broke into about a million pieces. 3.听到这个消息的时候，我的心几乎要蹦出来。(burst) When I heard the news,my heart burst. 4.听到这个消息的时候，我高兴极了。(on the top of the world) Hearing the news,I was on the top of the world. ※三，如何长短句结合 长句容量大，可以承载复杂的信息和思想，适用于传递有轻重之别的信息，能进行细致的描述和论证。短句结构 简单，意义清楚，生动活泼，干跪利落，节奏明快，便于表达具有相同重要性的概念。但若一篇记叙文全部使用长句， 那么读起来就费力，故事也不吸引人；而全部使用短句，则表达缺乏连贯性，显得简单松散、平铺直叙。长短句结合， 使写作兼有长句和短句的优点，做到简繁有度、层次分明，这样，文章就是优秀的。 【段落1】 It was daybreak when Jane woke up and it was at that moment that she heard a helicopter come by.Jane screamed and waved her yellow blouse with every bit of her strength,happy to find that the helicopter noticed her and landed,after which 135 启航英语高考英语读后续写高分策略·读思写 Jane was rescued.She burst into tears and threw herself into Tom's arms the moment she saw him.believing their reunion after along separation brought great delight to them both. 【段落2】 Daybreak came.Jane woke up.She heard a helicopter come by.Jane screamed and waved her yellow blouse strongly. The helicopter noticed her and landed.She was happy.She was rescued.She saw Tom.She burst into tears.She threw herself into Tom's arms.They had been separated for a long time.They both were delighted to be reunited. 【段落3】 It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Just then.she heard a helicopter come by.Jane screamed and waved her yellow blouse with every bit of her strength.To her great joy.the helicopter noticed her and landed.Jane was rescued.Bursting into tears,she threw herself into Tom's arms the moment she saw him.Their reunion after a long separation brought great delight to them-both. 分析【段落1】只有3句话，平均每句约为25词，全是长句，包含定语从句、并列句、强调句、状语从句等，结 构复杂，显得冗长而难懂。而【段落2】则是另一个极端，全由短句组成，每句平均约6词，尽管每句话含义清晰，但 是缺乏连贯性，表达的意恩筒单，不能突出重点，语言显得果板而缺乏特色。【段落3】大意与以上两段一致，是长短 句相结合的结构。长句以各种状语结构对人物的动作心理进行细致描写，短句测简洁明快，干脆利落，突出了情节 的转折点。综上所述，长短句相结合使得段落富有层次感和连贯性。 牛7刀小试 以长短句结合的结构改写以下段落。 One night in summer a few years ago,my parents and I.who were very happy after supper because of a cool night, went to have a walk by the river.Walking along the bank,I suddenly looked up and saw,for the first time at night,a great structure something like a large pole standing ahead in the moonlight-the TV tower.which is the highest building in the city.In the soft moonlight,it was very beautiful. One summer night a few years ago,my parents and I,very happy after supper with a cold breeze,went to have a walk by the river.Suddenly,I saw a great structure standing beautifully in the moonlight.It was the TV tower,the highest building in the city. ※四、如何进行篇章的衔接 段落间的衔接主要有词汇衔接，语法衔接和逻辑衔接。根据读后续写“评分标准”的相关内容可知衔接在读后续 写中的重要性。使用连接（过渡）性词语是使文章语言具备连贯性的最常用方法。在句与句之间、段与段之间恰当地 使用一些承上启下的连接性词语是非常有必要的。它们犹如桥梁使文章结构紧凑，过渡自然，融会贯通，连成一体。 常见的应该掌据的连接性词语归纳如下。 含义 常用词汇或短语 L.表示并列 and,also,as well,as well as,or,too,not only...but (also),both...and,either...or, neither..nor等 besides,in addition/additionally(),moreover,what's more,more importantly,furthermore, 2.表示递进 what's worse等 3.表示转折 but,however,yet,instead,on the other hand,on the contrary,although,despite,in spite of, nevertheless,while,nonetheless 4.表示原因 because,because of,since,as,for,now that,thanks to,due to,as a result of,owing to 5.表示结果 so,as a result,consequently(因此，结果)，therefore,hence,thus,so.,that.,,asa consequence,accordingly when,while.after,before,until,as soon as,later.soon,recently,since,from...on,at present, 6.表示时间 the moment/instant.immediately,after a while,early this morning,on one's arrival,before long 7.表示条件 if,unless,once,as long as first,second,above all,first of all,then,next,finally,in the end,at last,eventually,finally. 8.表示特定顺序 meanwhile,last but not least,firstly,secondly,thirdly 36