2024-2025学年初升高衔接英语读后续写篇课件

暑假课件-初高中英语衔接 初高中英语衔接之读后续写篇 前言 初中英语写作以应用文为主,针对记叙文的写作训练较少,学生刚刚进入高一,面临新高考改革后的新题型写作,往往对于已给文本的把握没有方向,续写内容较为空洞,语言表达单一,情节不够连贯,故事性不强(故事续写不完整),大部分学生无法达到读后续写的标准。读后续写是我国高考英语写作的一种新题型,它符合语言学习规律,能有效促进英语的学习,体现了学生的综合语言运用能力。在读后续写能力培养中“以读促写”作为重要的英语写作教学方式,同样体现出其作用和影响。从情节推进到情感冲突的文本重点,从Story Mountain“故事山”到思维导图的篇章分析,多角度探讨新题型的有效教学思路。 CONTENTS 题型分析 01 案例分析 02 续写建议 03 01 题型分析 读后续写的题型特点 逻辑性 创造性 读后续写题型:提供一段350词之内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。 丰富性 题型分析 01 题型分析 01 读后续写的能力要求 题型分析 01 01 段落要求:给定的段落开头能引导故事延续,又防止天马行空的想象。 读后续写的命题特点 读后续写文章题材选择以记叙文为主。文章信息完整,既可以提炼出要点,又要给续写留出余地,此类文章故事性强,情节有起伏,内容连贯,逻辑性强,结构清晰,结尾处有结局或者感慨、总结等。 02 案例分析 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Once upon a time, there lived a girl named Walk. She was a good girl, but she never liked her name as all the kids around her made fun of her name. She ran away from everybody who laughed at her name, so Walk never really had friends. She would play alone all the time. One day, Walk went to her favorite place near the river behind her house, where she always spoke to the river in her own way. Today, when talking to the river, she said, “You are so fortunate, as you get to travel to different places and always be with your friends-ducks, turtles, fishes, and plants. I wish I had more friends and wouldn't be alone anymore.” When she was bored talking to the river, she picked up some stones and tried to skip(打水漂) them across the river like her dad did. However, she failed most of the time. Finally, she found a perfect stone. She held it tightly in her fingers, and said to the river, “Oh, dear river, if I could skip this stone all the way across, I would wish for a dear friend just like you.” Saying this, Walk waved her arm back just like her dad had taught her and threw the stone with full strength. 9 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 She watched the stone skip once, twice... and to her amazement, the stone went on skipping and eventually, on the seventh skip, made it across the river onto the shore of the opposite side. Walk was totally amazed. She could not just believe her eyes. Her deep thoughts and happiness were disturbed when she heard footsteps coming towards her. Walk looked around and found a little girl was rolling down towards her. Walk panicked and hurried to get up to help. However, she lost her balance and fell off too. The little girl was crying and holding her knee. Walk pulled herself and went close to the girl, whose knee was bleeding. She said gently to the little girl, “It will be alright. My house is nearby, let me help you. My mother will take care of the wound.” 主要内容: 小女孩Walk因为自己的名字总是被别人嘲笑,一直孤独一人,没有朋友。一天她来到河边打水漂,却遇到一个迷路而且摔伤了的小女孩。 10 读后续写“四步法” Where When What How 4. 续写完整故事 3. 品味原文语言 2. 构思连贯情节 1. 理清文章脉络 案例分析 02 WRITE ANALYSE THINK READ 1. 理清文章脉络 Read 案例分析 02 Basic information(Who, When, Where) Plots (What, Why, How) Feelings Clues 案例分析 Read for basic information 02 Who: Walk, A little girl, Mom; When: One day; Where: Walk’s favorite place near the river behind her house, Walk’s house; watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Read for plots Plots Feelings Para. 1 Walk never liked her name as all the kids around her made fun of her name; She had no friends. embarrassed, sad, lonely Para. 2 Walk spoke to the river behind her house and wished to have friends. sad, lonely Para. 3-4 Walk tried to skip(打水漂) stones across the river and she made it. amazed, happy Para. 5-6 Walk met a girl whose knee was bleeding and tried to help her. amazed, worried Para. 7 Para. 8 14 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 故事情节发展图 Beginning Story Mountain Ending Climax Once they arrived at her house, Walk called out, “Mom, help! Someone is injured.”… The little girl looked at Walk and asked, “What is your name?”… Walk never liked her name as all the kids around her made fun of her name; She had no friends. Walk spoke to the river behind her house and wished to have friends. Process Walk met a girl whose knee was bleeding and tried to help her. Walk tried to skip(打水漂) stones across the river and she made it. 15 watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Read for feelings Joyful(Amazed) Sad(Lonely) Walk心理变化图 16 embarrassed, sad, lonely sad, lonely amazed, happy amazed, worried watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Para. 7 Once they arrived at her house, Walk called out, “Mom, help! Someone is injured.” _ Para. 8 The little girl looked at Walk and asked, “What is your name?” _ 研读两段给出句,想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索? Read for clues 17 Para. 7: Once they arrived at her house, Walk called out, “Mom, help! Someone is injured.” Where When How Q1. What would Mom do? Q2. What would Walk and Mom ask? Q3. What did the girl say? 案例分析 02 Para. 8: The little girl looked at Walk and asked, “What is your name?” Where When How Q4. What’s Walk’s response to the girl’s question? How would Walk feel? Q5. How would the girl learn Walk’s name? What’s her response? Q6. Would Walk become friends with the girl? What would Walk learn? 案例分析 02 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 研读文章,寻找续写线索? Read for clues Para. 1: She was a good girl, but she never liked her name as all the kids around her made fun of her name. She ran away from everybody who laughed at her name, so Walk never really had friends. Walk讨厌自己的名字,所以可以 推测,当女孩问起她的名字的时候,她一定羞于启齿,感到尴尬。 Para. 2: “I wish I had more friends and wouldn't be alone anymore.” 通过Walk的话,可以预测在文章结尾时Walk与女孩会成为好朋友。 20 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Read for clues Para. 3: “Oh, dear river, if I could skip this stone all the way across, I would wish for a dear friend just like you.” Para. 4: She watched the stone skip once, twice... and to her amazement, the stone went on skipping and eventually, on the seventh skip, made it across the river onto the shore of the opposite side. Walk was totally amazed. She could not just believe her eyes. 通过对Walk心愿以及打水漂的描述,暗示了 Walk会找到一位好朋友。 研读文章,寻找续写线索? 21 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Read for clues Para. 5: Walk looked around and found a little girl was rolling down towards her. 对女孩摔倒的描写,引发对女孩出现及摔 倒原因的思考。 Para. 6: She said gently to the little girl, “It will be alright. My house is nearby, let me help you. My mother will take care of the wound.” 对Walk善良的描写,暗示了女孩会被Walk的善良打动,与 Walk成为好朋友。 研读文章,寻找续写线索? 22 01 02 03 04 妈妈帮助女孩清洗伤口。 05 Walk询问女孩出现及摔倒的原因。 06 女孩解释自己因为迷路来了这里。 2. 构思连贯情节 Think 案例分析 02 Para. 7: Once they arrived at her house, Walk called out, “Mom, help! Someone is injured.” 01 02 03 04 Walk害怕女孩会笑话她,不愿意回答女孩的问题。 05 妈妈告诉女孩Walk的名字,并解释原因。 06 女孩表示名字不重要,重要的是善良的品质。并与Walk成为朋友。 2. 构思连贯情节 Think 案例分析 02 Para. 8: The little girl looked at Walk and asked, “What is your name?” 01 02 03 04 05 06 3. 品味原文语言 Analyse 案例分析 02 文章风格: 人称:_; 时态:_; 何种细节描写为主:心理( );动作( );语言( ); 表情( );环境( );外貌( ) 第三人称 过去式 √ √ √ √ 品味原文语言 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Once upon a time, there lived a girl named Walk. She was a good girl, but she never liked her name as all the kids around her made fun of her name. She ran away from everybody who laughed at her name, so Walk never really had friends. She would play alone all the time. One day, Walk went to her favorite place near the river behind her house, where she always spoke to the river in her own way. Today, when talking to the river, she said, “You are so fortunate, as you get to travel to different places and always be with your friends-ducks, turtles, fishes, and plants. I wish I had more friends and wouldn't be alone anymore.” 朴实的语言描写,流露出Walk的孤独与对友谊的渴望。 26 品味原文语言 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 When she was bored talking to the river, she picked up some stones and tried to skip(打水漂) them across the river like her dad did. However, she failed most of the time. Finally, she found a perfect stone. She held it tightly in her fingers, and said to the river, “Oh, dear river, if I could skip this stone all the way across, I would wish for a dear friend just like you.” Saying this, Walk waved her arm back just like her dad had taught her and threw the stone with full strength. She watched the stone skip once, twice... and to her amazement, the stone went on skipping and eventually, on the seventh skip, made it across the river onto the shore of the opposite side. Walk was totally amazed. She could not just believe her eyes. 细致的动作描写,生动地刻画了打水漂的过程,为下文提供续写线索。 27 品味原文语言 watch TV watch TV practice the violin 案例分析 02 Her deep thoughts and happiness were disturbed when she heard footsteps coming towards her. Walk looked around and found a little girl was rolling down towards her. Walk panicked and hurried to get up to help. However, she lost her balance and fell off too. The little girl was crying and holding her knee. Walk pulled herself and went close to the girl, whose knee was bleeding. She said gently to the little girl, “It will be alright. My house is nearby, let me help you. My mother will take care of the wound.” 简洁的语言描写,体现了Walk的心地善良。 整体而言,本篇文章的语言精炼、朴实,没有太多高级、华丽的表达。但是对动作的刻画却十分细致、详尽,用了大量的动词将整个故事串联起来,使故事显得充实、丰满。同时,本文通过细腻的语言描写,刻画了人物的心理与品质。 28 01 02 03 04 05 06 4. 续写完整故事 Write 案例分析 02 Once they arrived at her house, Walk called out “Mom, help! Someone is injured.” On hearing this, Walk's mother came quickly with the first-aid box. She made the little girl sit on the sofa and started cleaning the wound. She cleaned her knee, applied medicine to the wound, and wrapped it with bandages, which made the girl relaxed. She then asked the girl where she lived. The girl replied that she had just moved here. All the houses looked so similar that she mixed them up. Walk was surprised and felt a bit of joy thinking about her wish. The girl looked at Walk and asked, “What is your name? Walk froze and was scared to tell her name. However, Walk's mother replied. “Her name is Walk and I am glad she could help you.” On hearing this, the little girl began to laugh. Walk felt sad and was near to tears. Just then, the little girl stopped laughing and sincerely apologized, “I am sorry, but it is so funny as my name happens to be Run”. Walk was surprised and almost broke into laughter herself. Her wish for the river had come true, and now she had a very good friend named Run. 总评 该篇习作,在内容、情节上与前文保持了高度的连贯与一致,尤其是结尾部分更是新颖独特、颇具创意(一个女孩的名字是Walk,另一个女孩名字是Run),给人意外之感的同时,又会觉得这样的结尾顺理成章。 案例分析 04 就语言而言,这篇写作也与前文保持较高程度的协同。语言表达整体较为朴实、简单,从句、非谓语的使用也恰到好处,对动作的描述则细致入微,与前文贴合度较好。 03 续写建议 读后续写的核心是以读续写,先要有一定的阅读量,再促进写作,进而共同提高。在平时的学习中,要多借助思维导图等工具培养辩证思维,从多方面思考问题以实现在读后续写的创作中思想更开阔,能够抓住文章的中心思想,创设更加合理的情节。 续写建议 03 同时,要注意培养对词汇的敏感程度,比如哪些形容词是褒义的,哪些是中性词,哪些是带有明显的讽刺意味的。最后,所有优化的情节都离不开单词和语法的支撑,一定要紧抓单词和语法的积累,不断丰富词汇和语法,为读后续写增加一定的文学色彩。 Thank you $$