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Writing——如何写建议信[对应学生用书第44页]
建议信是应用文的一种,是写信人就某一问题或事件提出看法、建议或忠告的一类书信。建议信要写明写信的原因、建议的内容以及提出建议的理由。提出建议的理由要合情合理,语气一定要和缓;行文简明扼要,目的明确,具有说服力;人称为第一人称,时态以一般现在时为主。
写好一封建议信应注意以下几点:
1.信文要素要齐全。建议信的信文通常有六个部分:信头(发信人的地址和发信日期);信内地址(收信人姓名、职位、地址等);称呼;正文;结束语;签名。有时信头和信内地址可省略。
2.建议要简明扼要,具有合理性和说服力。建议信要写出写信的原因,建议的内容,提出建议的理由。在阐述自己的建议时要目的明确,切中要害。对某一个或某些建议可适当发表自己的看法,但要适可而止,不可漫无边际,喧宾夺主。另外要注意给出的建议要有一定的价值,能够引起读者的兴趣和注意力,这样才能达到进一步交流并解决问题的目的。
3.语气要中肯、礼貌。应该首先肯定对方的优点,然后再写需要改进的地方或针对具体情况提出具体建议或忠告。要考虑到收信人的感受,千万注意不要用说教的口气,也不能把你的想法强加于对方,应该用坦诚的态度提出建议,以理服人,要让对方时刻感受到这是一种交流。
4.论述要逻辑分明、合情合理。要让对方考虑并接受自己的建议,就要在说理的过程中尽量站在对方的角度客观地谈问题,努力做到逻辑分明、理由充分、合情合理,只有这样才能让对方接受你的建议。
[基本框架]
建议信通常采用“三段式”结构:
第一段:表明写作意图,陈述事由;
第二段:围绕建议,展开说明,阐述理由和根据,以及所提出的建议会给对方带来的好处;
第三段:简单予以希望,希望收信人一定采纳自己的建议,并相信该建议会对对方有所帮助。
[常用词语]
1.deal with处理
2.share sth.with sb.和某人分享某物
3.in some aspects在某些方面
4.Internet互联网,因特网
5.network网络,网状系统
6.convenient便利的,方便的
7.with the popularity of the Internet随着互联网的普及
8.distract one's attention分散某人的注意力
9.have a negative effect有负面影响
10.text message手机短信
11.keep a balanced diet保持均衡的饮食
12.unhealthy eating habit不健康的饮食习惯
13.unhealthy不健康的,不卫生的
14.unfit不健康的
15.put on weight增加体重
16.suffer from遭受,患上
17.rather than而不是
18.learn from sb.向某人学习
19.harmful有害的
20.pressure压迫,压力
[常用语句]
1.建议信开头常用句式
I am writing to express my views about…
我写信是要表达我对……的看法。
You have asked for my advice on…and I will try to make some suggestions.
你问我有关……的事情,我会尽力提出一些建议。
2.表达建议常用句式
If I were you, I would… 如果我是你,我会……
I would like to suggest that…我想建议……
It would seem to me that you could…
我认为你可以……
I think it would be more beneficial if you could…
我想如果你能……,可能会更好
In my opinion, you should…在我看来,你应该……
In my experience, it seems that…
根据我的经验,似乎……
I will be more than happy to see improvements in this regard.
如果这方面有所改善我会非常开心的。
3.建议信结尾常用句式
Please let me know if I can help further.
如果我能对你有进一步的帮助,请告知。
I would be ready to discuss this matter to further details.
我时刻准备着就此事进行更详尽的讨论。
I believe you will take my advice into account.
我相信你会认真考虑我的建议的。
I hope you will find these proposals/suggestions/recommendations practical/useful/helpful.
我希望这些建议/意见/看法对你来说实用/有用/有帮助。
假定你是李华,你的笔友王强最近沉迷于玩电脑游戏,这给他带来很多危害。请你给他写一封书信,劝说他戒掉这个不良习惯,并提出建议。内容包括:
1.浪费了学习的时间;
2.对身心健康造成危害;
3.你的建议。
注意:1.词数80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
[审题谋篇]
明确体裁话题:建议信,电脑游戏的危害。
确定人称时态:
以第一、三人称及一般现在时为主。
布局文章架构:
首段:点出写信的目的;
中段:说明电脑游戏的危害及建议;
尾段:呼应首段。
列出核心要点:
1.电脑游戏浪费学习的时间;
2.电脑游戏对身心健康造成危害;
3.建议。
[词汇推敲]
1.be addicted to对……很入迷
2.play computer games玩电脑游戏
3.to begin with首先
4.in addition另外
5.do harm to/be harmful to对……有害
6.violence暴力
7.mental health心理健康
8.break away from挣脱;脱离
9.take part in/participate in参加,参与
10.broaden one's horizons开阔某人视野
[遣词造句]
①Hearing that you are addicted to playing computer games, I felt very worried.
听说你沉溺于电脑游戏,我很担心。
②To begin with, it will make you waste too much valuable time.
首先,它会使你浪费太多宝贵的时间。
③The valuable time should be spent on your study.
这些宝贵的时间应该花在学习上。
④In addition, playing games for a long time will do harm to your health, especially to your eyes.
此外,长时间玩游戏会损害你的健康,尤其是对你的眼睛。
⑤Some games are full of violence.
有些游戏充满了暴力。
⑥This will be harmful to your mental health.
这对你的心理健康有害。
⑦I strongly hope that you can break away from it.
我非常希望你能摆脱它。
⑧You can read more good books, take more exercise or participate in some social activities to broaden your horizons.
你可以多读好书、多锻炼身体或参加一些社会活动来开阔视野。
[句式升级]
1.用限制性定语从句合并句②与句③
To begin with, it will make you waste too much valuable time which should be spent on your study.
2.用非限制性定语从句合并句⑤与句⑥
Some games are full of violence, which will be harmful to your mental health.
[妙笔成篇]
[参考范文]
Dear Wang Qiang,
Hearing that you are addicted to playing computer games, I felt very worried.
To begin with, it will make you waste too much valuable time which should be spent on your study. In addition, playing games for a long time will do harm to your health, especially to your eyes. Worse still, some games are full of violence, which will be harmful to your mental health.
Therefore, I strongly hope that you can break away from it.The earlier, the better.You can read more good books, take more exercise or participate in some social activities to broaden your horizons.
I hope the advice above will be helpful to you. Looking forward to your good news.
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是李华,最近收到了你的美国朋友Jenny的来信。她在信中说,由于刚进入高中还不能适应新环境,她不知道如何去结交新朋友,因而情绪低落。请你回信,内容如下:
1.向Jenny表示问候和安慰;
2.针对她的问题提出以下建议:
(1)放学后邀请同学一起参加活动;
(2)遇到困难时,互相帮助;
3.你对友谊的理解。
注意:词数80左右,可适当增加细节。
[参考范文]
Dear Jenny,
I am really sorry to hear that you feel bad after entering the high school. Your classmates are also facing the same problem, so you don't have to worry too much about it.
There is something that you can do to change this situation. First, try to invite some of your classmates to take part in some activities together after school. This will help you understand each other better by communicating with others. Then, help others when they are in trouble, and ask them to help you when you have difficulty.
As far as I am concerned, life in senior high school is stressful. I believe you will make many new friends in the new school!
Yours,
Li Hua
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