高中英语读后续写写作思路梳理课件-2024届高三英语三轮冲刺

高中英语读后续写 写作思路梳理 目录 评分规则 写作注意 写作指导 真题分析 一、续写作文历年真题分析 二、我的读后续写主题分类: 第一类:与自我 主题 01:坚持不懈/勇敢追梦主题 02:获得自信主题 03:克服恐惧主题 04:学到美德 (诚实、分享合作) 第二类:与他人主题 05:传递善意主题 06:爱的表达主题 07:爱的和解主题 08:见义勇为主题 09:认知改观主题 10:分享趣事 第三类:与自然主题 11:环境保护主题 12:动物救人主题 13:人救动物主题 14:兽口逃生主题 15:可爱动物全题 16:险境求生 三、评分原则 (一)评分原则 1.本题总分为25分,按5个档次给分。 2.评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。 3.词数少于130,从总分中减去2分。 4.评分时,应主要从以下四个方面考虑: (1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度; (2)内容的丰富性; (3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性; (4)上下文的连贯性。 5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面,评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。 6.如书写较差以致影响交际,可将分数降低一个档次。一 档次 描述 第五档 (21-25分) ①与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富。 ②所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达。 ③有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。 第四档 (16-20分) ①与所给短文融洽度较高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富。 ②所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但不影响意义表达。 ③比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。 第三档 (11-15分) ①与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容。 ②应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义表达。 ③应用简单的语句间连接成分,使全文内容连贯。 第二档 (6-10分) ①与所给短文有一定的关系,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了一些有关内容。 ②语法结构单调,词汇项目有限,有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误,影响了意义的表达。 ③较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少连贯性。 第一档 (1-5分) ①与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容太少。 ②语法结构单调,词汇项目很有限,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达。 ③缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容不连贯。 0分 白卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。 各档次 评分描述 读后 续写 the 6 basic elements the main idea vocabulary sentence structure linking words, details the given two sentences the plot and feeling the tense the main character the style vivid writing 四、 读后续写的基本步骤 写 who; when; where; what; why; how To solve the problems be full and attactive 读 续 logical plotting thorough reading 7 五、 写作注意事项 1. 人称及人物: 人称一般以一、三人称为主, 人物只能是故事当中涉及的人物,不虚构出第三人物。 2. 时态: 在读后续写中,一般以一般过去式为主。 避免出现时态混乱导致失分的情况。 3. 情节构建: 不了解所给两段开头的句子,导致文章衔接不当。 类似于应用文,解决原文所提出的问题即可。 4. 文章主旨 通过原文阅读,把控文章主旨。 一般来说, 一篇文章只有一个主旨,且都是积极乐观向上正能量的。 范文阅读1: Jenny was the only child in her home. She had a quarrel (争吵) with her mother that afternoon and ran out of the house angrily. She couldn't help crying when she thought of the scolding(责骂) from her mother. Getting around aimlessly in the street for hours,she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat. She stood beside a stand(货摊) for a while, watching the middle-aged man busy doing his business. However, with no money in hand, she had to leave. The man behind the stand noticed Jenny and asked, “Hey, do you want to have the noodles?” “Oh, yes, but I don’t have money.” she replied. “I'll treat you today,” said the man. He brought her a bowl of noodles, the smell so attractive. As she was eating, Jenny cried silently. “What is it?” asked the man kindly. “Actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears. “Even a stranger will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother drove me out of the house.” Hearing the words, the man smiled, “I only gave you a bowl of noodles. But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby. Can you number the times she cooked for you? Have you expressed your thankfulness to her?” Jenny sat there, speechless;she remembered her mother's familiar face. “A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel grateful(感激的). Why haven’t I thanked my mum for what she has done for me?” On the way home, Jenny made up her mind to make an apology(道歉) to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home. Jenny ran out of home after a quarrel with her mother. angry A seller offered her a bowl of noodles when she felt hungry. To seller: thankful To mother: mean Through reading : Try to find the main idea, the emotion and the 6 elements She realized her mistakes and decided to go home and made an apology to her mother. To mother: regretful & thankful Who Jenny, mother, stranger When one afternoon Where home - noodle stand - doorway what quarrel with her mother- a stranger gave her a bowl of noodles when she was hungry- realized her mistake why the stranger's word reminded Jenny of what her mother had done. how Jenny felt regretful and decided to make an apology. 文章6要素分析: Para 1 Approaching the door way, Jenny took a deep breath. Para 2 A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. Q1 What would Jenny do, enter the room immediately or not? Q2 Was Jenny’s mother in or out? Q3 Would Jenny recall the scene of quarrel with her mother? Q4 How would Jenny feel when she recalled the past? Q1 Who would touch Jenny at the monent? Q2 Did Jenny make up with her mother? Q3 What would Jenny do after her mother’s forgiveness? 范文参考: Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath.When she knocked at the door. she found the door was locked and her mother was not in.Tired and sad she sat down in front of the house."Where could my mother be?"she wondered"Was she still angry with me?" Again, the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind.She remembered her rudeness to her mother.Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her .She felt rather ashamed and tears began to roll down her cheeks. A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw the familiar face of her mother."Here you come! I’ve been looking for you,"she said tired and relieved. Jenny couldn't help throwing herself into her mother's arms."Mum,I'm so sorry and thank you for all you have done for me."She expressed her sincere apology and great gratitude. Hearing this, her mother smiled patting her back gently 范文阅读2(2024年全1-2卷): I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm,my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully,there was a long queue (队列)still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus,tured around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,"he said. Just then I realized that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard.He tried it several times,but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station.There,at the entrance,was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car,made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order.Sorry.” Para 1 I ran back to Gunter and told himthe bad news. Para 2 Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. 故事梗概: 第一段:飞机在维也纳着陆以后,我需要乘坐公交车前往布拉格参加会议,但还有30分钟最后一趟公交车就要出发了。 第二段:与出租车司机Gunter的初次见面,他不知道我说的那个公交站,于是打电话问朋友。 第三段:最终我们到了公交站,还有两分钟公交车就要出发。 第四段:我发现身上没现金,没法乘车,Gunter尝试用刷卡机刷我的银行卡,但未成功。 第五段:公交站等候大厅的取款机也是坏的。 续写第一段:I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. 续写第二段:Four days later; when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. 值得注意的是:原文题目中提到了card machine和cash machine,个人认为第一个应该是类似可以刷卡的pos机,第二个则是取款机。不过这不会影响学生阅读,学生可以知道作者设法想要获取现金,但失败了。 写作思路: 1. 续写第一段:根据续写第一段“the bad news”和第二段 “I called Gunter as promised”,推测应该是Gunter 帮我支付了车费。 情节基本可设置为:我告诉Gunter取不了钱+我不知所措+Gunter未收取出租车费还为我支付公交车费+我感激不已,承诺会还钱。 2. 续写第二段:主要情节应该是回维也纳还钱给Gunter。 情节基本可设置为:Gunter接到电话的反应+约见Gunter,彼此成为朋友+升华主题 3. 主题升华:很多人会写“陌生人的善意”,但个人更倾向于写“因为这件事彼此成为了朋友”。在原文第二段作者写到“That was when I met Gunter.”,读到这句话的时候就自然产生了一种“还会有无数次见面”的感觉。 One possible version: I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.Not knowing what to do, I muttered(嘟囔着说)to Gunter, “I'm doomed to being absent from the conference because of the two irritating machines.”Seeing that I was about to weep, Gunter quickly stepped out of the taxi, sprinted to the bus, and exchanged a few words with the bus driver before handing him some cash. In no time, the driver asked me to get on the bus. Not only did he not charge me for taking the taxi, but he also paid the bus fare for me. Overwhelmed by his trust and kindness,I stood there, stammering(结结巴巴地说)several " thank you" at a time. With the driver urging beside the bus,I grabbed my backpack and dashed towards the bus, followed by a promise of visiting him after four days. Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.“Hey, it was beyond my expectation that you call me again.” said Gunter on the phone. In response, I extended my thanks to him, expressing that how lucky I was to encounter a warm-hearted person like him. Meanwhile, I suggested we meet at a local cafe, where I presented him with the fare and a delicate souvenir from Prague as a gift. Not surprisingly,he didn't accept the money. While having coffee, we shared stories and mutual interests,from music to travel, laughter lingering around the room all the time. Our unexpected meeting turned into a newfound friendship, and I made sure to call Gunter every time I was in Vienna.His initial act of kindness had bridged a gap between two strangers and created a bond of friendship. THANKS 20 $$