读后续写之巧用动作链导学案-2024届高三下学期英语作文复习专项

读后续写——— 巧用动作链 动作描写是情节推进的重要工具，好比故事的“跳动的心脏”。将一个动作分解 成一步步的过程，就形成了连贯的“慢镜头描写”，这就是动作链。动作链有以下功 能：1. 调整节奏，烘托氛围。2. 凸显焦点，衬托性格。动作链常用的有两种形式：1. 动作一, 动作二 and 动作三。例如：“Then she straightened up the kitchen, lit the lamp and mended the fire.”。2. 动作一, 动作二, and/then 动作三, 分词。例如：“The woman dropped the clothes, looked at Mr Morel, then went on with her work, saying nothing.”。 一、写作公式 动作链的实现途径可分为以下几种： 1. 庖丁解牛，按时间顺序分解大动作。 场景：Max和Charley终于追赶上了冰激凌车。 动作描写手段：“追赶上”这个大动作按时间顺序分解为“摆动双臂+拖着身躯+看 到车子”。 动作链句型：Max and Charley flailed their arms, dragged their feet towards the next stop, and finally spotted the ice cream truck again. 2. 动静结合，按中心动作创建动作面。 场景：Max和Charley终于追赶上了冰激凌车。 动作描写手段：肢体—头部/面部 动作链句型：Flailing their arms/Clutching their fists into white knots/Teeth clenched, Max and Charley strode forward and finally caught sight of the ice cream truck. 3. 和情感、环境、心理、语言等结合，形成动作面。 场景：Max和Charley 终于追赶上了冰激凌车。 动作描写手段：添加心理活动描写 动作链句型：Burning with excitement, Max and Charley kept running for a long time and finally saw the ice cream truck again. 语篇微演练 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 The spot of red was what first caught Randy Heiss's attention on December 16, 2018. He was hiking the remote land behind his farm in a small town near the US-Mexico border, and there was a balloon lying on the grass. He walked towards it with his dog, thinking he should pick it up and throw it away. That's when he noticed the balloon's string was attached to a piece of paper. “Dayami,” it read on one side, in a child's writing. Heiss flipped the paper over. On the back, he saw a numbered list, all in Spanish. His Spanish wasn't very good, but he could see it was a gift list before New Year! Heiss was charmed. He suspected that a child had tried to send a wish list by balloon, something he used to do himself when he was a kid. Nobody had ever returned the letters Heiss had sent, but he wondered whether he could find the child who had sent this one. It would be difficult, but Heiss had a few clues. About 20 miles to the southwest, just across the border, was the city of Nogales, Mexico, with a population of about a quarter million. Based on the wind direction, he was almost sure that was where it came from. Heiss brought the note home to his wife, who is fluent in Spanish and helped him translate the list. They determined that Dayami, probably a girl, had asked for a doll, a dollhouse, doll clothes and art supplies. Heiss then posted his search about finding Dayami on the Internet, attaching photos, hoping some of his friends in Nogales might know the girl's family. A few days passed with no results. Heiss worried that time was running out before New Year. On December 19, 2018, he decided to send a private message to Radio Xeny, an AM radio station based in Nogales. To his surprise, someone from the station called him back right away and promised him to post his search on the station's website page immediately. Paragraph 1: The next morning, Heiss awoke to a message from Radio Xeny. Paragraph 2: Dayami's eyes were wide open with wonder. 读后续写之巧用动作链 Paragraph 1: The next morning, Heiss awoke to a message from Radio Xeny. The staff who had located Dayami that indeed lived in Nogales, would be willing to inform her and arrange a get-together at the radio station. Knowing this, Heiss and his wife were more than delighted, saying “thank you” several times. They rushed to buy everything on Dayami's list and drove for 45 minutes, crossing the border into Nogales. Excitedly, they finally arrived there and met the very surprised girl. Paragraph 2: Dayami's eyes were wide open with wonder. “It was a beautiful experience,” Heiss said. Heiss, 61, has lived in Bisbee, Arizona for more than three decades. Ten years ago, he and his wife drove home,then they came through an accident and lost their only child. They have no grandchildren, so being around a child over New Year has been absent in their lives. Heiss said,“It's been kind of a gaping hole in our New Year experience.”He has since reflected on the miracle that how he spotted the balloon, located Dayami and her family and finally met them. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$