写作高分进阶 第1部分 第3讲 如何润色——文美有技法（Word教参）-【优化指导】2025年高考英语一轮复习高中总复习·第1轮（人教版）

第3讲　如何润色——文美有技法 技法一　标新立异高级词 用标新立异的高级词汇代替基础词汇能使文采倍增。 1．不落俗套 写作时恰当得体地使用别人意想不到的词汇或表达，会给阅卷人耳目一新的感觉。尤其要注意高级词汇的准确运用。 (1)Oceans play a vital role in our world. (vital比key高级) 海洋在我们的世界中发挥着关键作用。 (2)(2023·浙江1月卷)She hovered cheerfully and lowered to stand on my shoulder. (cheerfully比happily高级) 它欢快地悬停在空中，飞下来站在我的肩上。 (3)(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)When feeling depressed，I often choose to appreciate the novel part which includes a lot of imaginative stories. (三个黑体词分别比upset、enjoy及wonderful形象、高级) 当我感到沮丧时，我经常选择欣赏包含许多富有想象力故事的小说部分。 2．避免重复 写作时应尽量避免重复使用相同的词语，要用贴切多样的词语来展示自己的水平。用词不同和表达方式迥异也是高级用法。 Students have different opinions in organizing different after­school activities to enrich their school life. 学生们对组织不同的课外活动来丰富学校生活有不同的看法。 →Students have different opinions in organizing various after­school activities to enrich their school life. 3．短语优先 多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。 For your visit here, we have arranged many activities. 为了您的访问，我们安排了许多活动。 →For your visit here, we have arranged a variety of activities. 对点训练 用高级词汇替换黑体词 1．Please remember (＝keep/bear in mind) that we are part of the big family. 2．In my opinion (＝As far as I'm concerned)，riding bicycles is a good solution to air pollution. 3．She was good at physics although (＝despite the fact that) she found it boring. 4．During (＝In the course of) the mountain­climbing，please help each other and pay special attention to your safety. 5．As planned (＝scheduled)，a volleyball match will take place in the City Park next week. 技法二　活用非谓语动词 1. (2022·全国乙卷)Selected from collections throughout the world，it is the first major exhibition of his work to be held in over forty years. (过去分词短语作状语；不定式作定语) 选自世界各地的藏品，这是四十多年来首次举办的他的作品的大型展览。 2. (2020·浙江7月卷)Making the best of this close encounter (相遇)，I took some pictures of the bear. (现在分词短语作状语) 我充分利用这次近距离相遇，拍了几张熊的照片。 3．I am writing to invite you to attend the Music Festival to be held from 8：00 a．m. to 5：00 p．m. next Sunday in my school. (不定式作目的状语；不定式作定语) 我写信邀请你参加我校于下周日上午8点到下午5点举行的音乐节。 4．We don't know how to make the plot adapted complete and attractive enough. (“特殊疑问词＋不定式”作宾语) 我们不知道如何使情节改编得更完整和足够吸引人。 5. (2023·浙江1月卷)For a long moment，this tiny creature looked into my eyes，turning her head from side to side. (现在分词短语作状语) 在很长一段时间里，这个小生物看着我的眼睛，头来回转动。 对点训练 根据汉语提示及语境补全下列句子 1．Faced with/Facing these difficulties (面对这些困难)，I have to turn to you for help. 2．This is the best chance to realize my dream (这是我实现梦想的最好机会)，so I'm looking forward to it. 3．In order to further improve (为了进一步提升)my English，I plan to read more (更多地阅读)by studying and practicing online (在网上学习和训练) during the vacation. 4．Youth is an excellent window for me to learn what is happening outside (了解外界正在发生什么). 5．Learning online (在线学习) has become an important way to study (学习) these days. 6. (2023·浙江1月卷) It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟)，desperately trying to escape (拼命地想逃跑). 7．It was not long before a perfect breakfast was well done，giving off nice smell (散发着香气). 8．Seeing the breakfast (看到早餐)，the mother felt a little confused，asking (问), “Where did you get this breakfast？” 9．Having lived in China for more than 18 years (在中国生活了超过18年)，I have a good knowledge of Chinese paintings. 10．I am more than delighted to tell you (我十分高兴地告知你) that we have been invited to play against another volleyball team next week. 11．It carries articles written by foreign friends (外国朋友所写的) about the cultures of their home countries. 12．With you helping me (有你帮助我)，my English has greatly improved. 技法三　精彩纷呈句式活用 并列句 (1)(2022·全国甲卷)I took the dogs out four times a day，and I worried that Tilly constantly climbing the stairs could reopen the wound. 我每天带狗出去四次，我担心蒂莉不断地爬楼梯会使伤口重新裂开。 (2)Not only do I feel the pains the peasants take but also I feel the happiness that labor brings me. 我不仅体会到了农民的艰辛，也体会到了劳动带给我的幸福感。 (3)Some students were responsible for picking the watermelons；some students put the watermelons into the baskets while others carried the baskets filled with watermelons to the specified place. (注意：分号表示并列) 一些同学负责摘西瓜，一些同学把西瓜放到筐里，而其他人把装满西瓜的筐搬到指定的地方。 (4)Li recommends the traditional Chinese dress while Su prefers the school uniform. (while意为“而”) 李推荐中国传统服饰而苏更倾向于校服。 对点训练 根据汉语提示及语境补全下列句子 1．Visiting this exhibition，we will not only enjoy the folk art works，but also learn a lot. (不仅……而且……) 2．It is beneficial to some people，while (然而) it puts others in a dilemma over whether to vote or not. 3．I was about to give up (我正打算放弃时) when my father came and encouraged me to keep going. 4．You asked me in your last letter about the physical exercise in our school and (并且) the following information may give you a rough sketch. 定语从句 (1)Furthermore，oceans，which are “the lungs of our planet”，provide most of the oxygen we breathe. 此外，海洋是“地球之肺”，提供了我们呼吸的大部分氧气。 (2)I still remember the wonderful time that/which I spent in your home. 我依然记得在你家度过的欢乐时光。 (3)Now I'll offer you some travel tips，which，I hope，can solve your problems. 现在我将给你提供一些旅行的建议，我希望这能解决你的问题。 (4)(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? 那么，为什么他突然强迫我做一些我肯定会失败的事情呢？ 对点训练 根据汉语提示及语境补全下列句子 1．The house，which I bought three years ago (我三年前买的)，has a very large yard. 2. (2023·全国乙卷)One day I read the last chapter of a book, the title of which (它的题目) I've long since forgotten. (“介词＋关系词”引导的定语从句) 3．I was the only winner whose native language wasn't English (母语不是英语). (限制性定语从句) 名词性从句 (1)It's really important to hear what experts say and that's why we've invited Emma here. (宾语从句；表语从句) 听取专家们的意见很重要，这就是为什么我们邀请艾玛来这里。 (2)What he said encouraged me a lot. (主语从句) 他的话让我深受鼓舞。 (3)There is no denying that so many fantastic characters have been created by ancient Chinese novelists. (同位语从句) 毋庸置疑，中国古代的小说家创造了许多了不起的人物形象。 (4)Firstly，this is precisely what the British visitors are expecting. (表语从句) 首先，这恰恰是英国参观者所期待的。 (5)Whoever is actively involved in it will develop a positive awareness of Chinese and its culture behind. (主语从句) 不论谁积极地参加这项活动都会培养一种对汉语及其背后文化的积极意识。 对点训练 根据汉语提示及语境补全下列句子 1. (2023·全国乙卷)What I'm really looking for (我真正想寻找的) in the competition is to meet someone who can touch me musically. (主语从句) 2. (2022·浙江1月卷)One day I got word that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease (他因一种严重的疾病而住院). (同位语从句) 3．What is equally important (同样重要的是) is that we should keep a balanced diet and have enough sleep (我们应该保持均衡的饮食和充足的睡眠) to keep fit. (主语从句；表语从句) 4．I am very happy that you have made great progress in learning Chinese and that you are interested in Chinese culture (你在汉语学习方面取得了很大进步并对中国文化感兴趣). (宾语从句) 状语从句 (1)The moment I put the dishes on the table, my parents gave me the thumbs­up. (时间状语从句) 我把盘子放在桌子上的那一刻，父母就对我竖起了大拇指。 (2)Tired as we were，we were in high spirits. (让步状语从句) 虽然我们很累，但是我们精神高涨。 (3)If you want a deep experience in the city，shared bikes would be the best choice. (条件状语从句) 如果你想深度体验这座城市，共享单车是最好的选择。 (4)If you are travelling where the customs are foreign to your own，please do as the Romans do. (地点状语从句) 如果你在与你家乡风俗不同的地方旅行，请入乡随俗。 (5)It is such a wonderful activity that we are looking forward to visiting the farm once again. (结果状语从句) 这场活动如此精彩，我们都希望能够再次参观这个农场。 (6)As for the city­to­city tour，the high­speed trains are highly recommended because they have been the most convenient way in recent years. (原因状语从句) 至于城市间的旅行，我极力推荐高铁，因为高铁是近年来最便捷的出行方式。 (7)So the school uniforms are a better choice than the traditional Chinese dress for such an occasion. (比较状语从句) 所以在这种场合，和中国传统服饰相比，校服是一种更好的选择。 (8)Although the traditional Chinese dress may look more beautiful and stylish，it is a little bit strange to walk around in it. (让步状语从句) 尽管中国传统服饰看起来更漂亮时尚，但是穿着它走动有点奇怪。 对点训练 根据汉语提示及语境补全下列句子 1. (2023·浙江1月卷)When I opened my hand (当我张开手)，the bird did not fly away. 2．We will have an opportunity to have all kinds of exercise，even though it's rainy (即使是在雨天). 3．You can write anything relevant as long as (只要) it is interesting and informative. 4．They look so attractive and alive that I think you could be interested in the exhibition. (如此……以至于……) 特殊句式 (1)Without his aid，my skills in English wouldn't have been greatly improved! (虚拟语气) 没有他的帮助，我的英语技能就不会有这么大的提高。 (2)It was at that moment that a warm surge of streams washed through my body. (强调句) (3)If so，please go to sign up at the Student Union office，which is on the second floor of the Teaching Building. (省略句) 如果是这样，请到位于教学楼二楼的学生会办公室报名。 (4)(2023·全国乙卷)They felt stressed while waiting for the sunset. (省略句) 等待日落的时候，他们感到焦虑不安。 (5)Fortunately，minutes later，the horse stopped before a river，out of breath，and so did I. (倒装句) 幸运的是，几分钟之后，马儿气喘吁吁地停在一条小河前，我也停了下来。 对点训练 根据汉语提示及语境补全下列句子 1. (2022·全国甲卷)But it is the harbor that makes the city. (强调句) 2．Never could it fade from my mind (它永远不会从我的脑海中消失) and I expected another activity like this. (倒装句) 3．What a surprise (多么大的惊喜) to hear that you're scheduled to come to Beijing，Tianjin and Shanghai for a visit! (感叹句) 4．For another，students will feel at ease and unembarrassed when wearing school uniforms (穿着校服时) to welcome British students. (省略结构) 技法四　巧用衔接词 使用过渡性词语是使语言连贯性得以实现的最常用手段。在句与句之间、段与段之间恰当地使用一些承上启下的连接(过渡性)词语是非常必要的。高中阶段应该掌握的连接(过渡性)词语归纳如下： 1．表示起始关系的过渡性词语 above all，to begin/start with，today，now，nowadays，at present，currently，recently，generally speaking，according to，with the development of ... To begin with，I'm quite familiar with traditional Chinese paintings. 首先，我非常熟悉中国传统绘画。 2．表示时间顺序的过渡性词语 first，first of all，to begin with，then，later，in the end，finally，at last，after that，afterwards，since then，immediately，suddenly，meanwhile Meanwhile，I competed with my friends to see who picked more. 其间，我和朋友们比赛看谁摘得更多。 3．表示并列关系的过渡性词语 and，or，also，as well as，neither ...nor ...，not only ...but (also) ...，either ...or ...，not ...but ... We should not pay more attention to kids' outcome but recognize their efforts to achieve goals. 我们不应该过多关注孩子们的成绩，而应认可他们为实现目标而付出的努力。 4．表示转折关系的过渡性词语 but，yet，however，while，otherwise，on the contrary，though，although，even if/though，despite，in spite of，regardless of Although it was very hot，everyone had a great time there. 尽管天气非常热，但每个人都在那里玩得非常开心。 5．表示因果关系的过渡性词语 because，as，since，for，thanks to，due to，as a result of，so，therefore，as a result/consequence ①Because this activity will be presented on the English website，I sincerely want you to offer me some advice. 因为这个活动将会发布在英文网站上，所以我真诚地希望你能给我一些建议。 ②It is a fact that rap music not only allows us to have a relax，but also enables us to learn more about culture. Therefore，I wonder if you could tell us something about rap to enrich our knowledge. 说唱音乐不仅可以让我们放松，还能使我们学习更多的文化。因此，我想知道您是否能够告诉我们一些关于说唱音乐的事情来丰富我们的知识。 6．表示递进关系的过渡性词语 what's more，furthermore，moreover，besides，what's worse，still less，to make matters worse，worse still，on the one hand ...on the other hand ...，for one thing ...for another (thing) ... What's more，I'm outgoing and warm­hearted. 另外，我性格外向且热心肠。 7．列举事实的过渡性词语 such as，for example/instance，take ...for example，that is to say，as follows，in other words A suitable gift such as a bunch of flowers is necessary for your visit. 你做客时，一件合适的礼物，比如一束花，是有必要的。 8．表达观点的过渡性词语 in my opinion，in my view，from my point of view，as far as I'm concerned，as for me，personally In my opinion，the activity boosted our confidence. 在我看来，这个活动增加了我们的信心。 9．表示总结的过渡性词语 in short，in brief，in conclusion，in a/one word，to sum up，all in all，on the whole，in general In conclusion，we should have a good understanding of its advantages and disadvantages and find a proper way to make our study more efficient. 总之，我们应该了解它的优点和缺点，并且找到恰当的方式使我们的学习更高效。 对点训练 阅读下面短文，选择适当的过渡性词语填空 above all，besides，meanwhile，for one thing，for another thing，personally，in a word Recently，it has been a great public concern that the students lack self­protection awareness. There is a lack of social experience among students and therefore learning how to protect ourselves is of great significance to us all.1.For one thing，security comes first. Without security，we can achieve nothing and cannot live up to parents' expectations；2.for another thing，protecting ourselves contributes to the healthy development of the students，which is associated with the happiness of every family.3.Meanwhile，it also helps to build a more harmonious society. 4．Personally，in order to protect us students，5.above all，we should strengthen our security awareness.6.Besides，when accidents occur，we should calm down and turn to teachers or parents for help. The government also plays a leading role in protecting students.7.In a word，only by the combined efforts of every side involved can we live and study in harmony. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$