读后续写：细节描写训练 导学案+课件-2024届高考英语作文复习专项

Continuation writing skill: description Teaching goal: Learn how to describe a scene W.X.2020.11 Page  ‹#› 前情提要： 感恩节到了，“我”和妻子想向贫民区捐赠物资，因此我们需要一辆货车来购买和运送货物。 Para A. But the vans didn’t stop. With time going by, my wife felt disappointed because I still didn’t make a plan stop. I felt very anxious. Suddenly a van stopped. I tried to explain what we were doing to him, but he didn’t agree. I told him how meaningful the things we did were. Because there are descriptions of what we see/ hear/say/do/feel. Para B. However, they came, and sped up, only to leave ash and dirt dancing in the air. Fingers numbed by the chilly wind, throat choked by dusty air, we felt ever so frustrated on the crowded streets. “Who can we turn to?” my wife murmured with a fierce frown. Staring into my wife’s red eyes, we found ourselves on the edge of giving up, until it suddenly dawned on me – Hope always fell at the last minute. Page  ‹#› Description is painting a picture in words of a person, place, object, or scene. A description essay is generally developed through sensory details, or the impressions of one’s senses---sight, hearing, taste, smell and touch. 描写：通过对各个感官的细节描述和刻画人、事与物。 描写≠叙述 叙述：陈述事情的来龙去脉和前因后果。 写作中，叙述与描写并行，描写必不可少，不能用叙述代替描写。 Para C. But none of them stopped to let us fulfill my goal. We stood at the street helplessly in the wind. I looked at the sign at the street corner occasionally and an idea burst in my mind. I asked my wife to give me a paper and wrote down our ideas to help people in need with our food during thanksgiving and blessings about the festival, then we expected the generous people to help us fulfill the goal happily. (马玎) narration description description narration + description Page  ‹#› 北极熊洗过被辣椒水喷过的眼睛后，从湖边朝我们跑来 → （所见）巨大的身躯，晃动着栏杆 （所说）~ （所听）愤怒的咆哮声回荡在营地 （所做）逃命，一边找食物拖延住北极熊，一边打电话求救 （所想）非常害怕，思考还有什么东西能够拖延住它 不愿整理房间的亚瑟将玩具堆了一地，还刺痛了他的光脚→ （所见）玩具散落在房间各处 （所说）妈妈，帮我收一下玩具吧。妈妈，我的袜子在哪里？ （所听）可这次妈妈没有回应 （所做）自己收拾了地上的玩具 （所想）整洁的地面果然更舒适，也不怕伤到脚了，原来收拾房间也没有那么困难