内容正文:
续写:帮助Brendan回家
微情节设计:
Para1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn-off(希思罗机场岔道), I had an idea.
1)解释idea内容,告诉B
2)B反应
3)送他去机场
Para2: Before he left to buy his air ticket,he gave me a huge hug.
1)B表示会还钱,我拒绝,表达希望
2)B的回应(会将善良传递下去)
3)告别,我的感受
(1)某人突然想到……
(2)赶快做某事
(3)倒出(想法)
(4)脸上满是…感情
(5)忍住眼泪
(6)哽咽着说
(6)驶入……
(7)让某人下车
(8)还某人钱
(9)重新燃起了
他对生活的信心
(10)继续我的善良之链
(11)融入人群中
(1)某人突然想到……It dawned on me that
(2)赶快做某事 hasten to do sth
(3)倒出(想法) pour out sth
(4)脸上满是…感情 be written on his face.
(5)忍住眼泪 hold back tears
(6)哽咽着说 in a choked voice
(6)驶入…… pull out into + 街道
(7)让某人下车 drop sb off
(8)还某人钱 repay sb
(9)重新燃起了 reignite his faith for life
他对生活的信心
(10)继续我的善良之链 continue my chain of kindness
(11)融入人群中 blend into the crowd
明线:帮助身无分文的B回家
暗线:帮助遭遇不幸的B恢复对人性的信任,并将他感受到的善良传递下去
Para1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea.
(1)我突然想到我可以给他钱买一张去爱尔兰的机票。(心理,承接上句idea)
(2)想到这里,我赶紧把这个绝佳的想法说出来。(动作)
(3)我的话让布兰登猝不及防,他目瞪口呆。(动作+心理)
(4)脸上满是难以置信和感激之情,他咬着嘴唇,试图眨回泪水。(动作+心理)
(5)“谢谢你。”他哽咽着说。(动作+语言)
(6)我把车开到机场高速公路上,很快就把他送到候机楼外。(动作+结果,承接下一段buy the ticket)
Para2: Before he left to buy his air ticket, he gave me a huge hug.
(1)与此同时,他向我保证,一旦他攒够了钱就会还给我。(动作)
(2)我也拥抱了他,表达了我对他的期望,那就是把善意传递出去,而不是还给我钱。(动作)
(3)Brendan坚定地点了点头,说,我的慷慨重新燃起了他对生活的信心,他肯定会继续我的善良之链。(动作+语言)
(4)和我告别后,他融入了人群,这是一个让我充满了满足感的画面。(动作+结果)
(5)金色的阳光透过车窗照进来,我又重新踏上去伦敦的路途。(结尾+感悟)
Para1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea.
(1)我突然想到我可以给他钱买一张去爱尔兰的机票。(心理,承接上句idea)
(2)想到这里,我赶紧把这个绝佳的想法说出来。(动作)
(3)我的话让布兰登猝不及防,他目瞪口呆。(动作+心理)
It dawned on me that I could afford him money to purchase a ticket to Ireland.
My words caught Brendan off guard, who was dumbfounded.
At the thought of this, I hastened to pour out the fantastic idea.
Para1: As we were approaching the Heathrow turn off, I had an idea.
(4)脸上满是难以置信和感激之情,他咬着嘴唇,试图眨回泪水。(动作+心理)
(5)“谢谢你。”他哽咽着说。(动作+语言)
(6)我把车开到机场高速公路上,很快到了候机楼外,放他下车。(动作+结果,承接下一段buy the ticket)
With disbelief and gratitude written on his face, he bit his lips, tr