读后续写（动作链等微技能）导学案-2024届高三英语一轮复习

动作链写出画面感 在描写动作时，很多同学只会使用一个动词概括整个动作，读起来枯燥无味，我们可以从新概念中学习动作描写。在写作中我们首先要置身情境中，想象自己某个日常的画面，细化动作，即把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作（2-3个动作）形成动作链，写出动作的连贯性，这样描写就有了画面感，人物也更加立体。（不仅表现“在做什么”， 而要表现 “在怎样做”。） 新概念三第15课给我们提供了很好的示例。 (Lesson 15) On his way to the sweet shop, he dropped his six pence and it rolled along the pavement and then disappeared down a drain（下水道）. George took off his jacket, rolled up his sleeves and pushed his right arm through the drain cover. He could not find his sixpence anywhere, and what is more, he could not get his arm out. 这段文字中，took off his jacket -rolled up his sleeves -pushed his arm through the drain cover生活化十足，很多同学也有过类似的生活体验。只要有一双善于发现的眼睛也能写出鲜活的语言。 其它范例①：汤姆把小女孩从着火的房子里救了出来。 普通版：Tom rescued the little girl from the burning house. 升级版：Without delay, Tom kicked the door open with great force, only to find the little girl lying on the floor. Immediately, he picked her up, shielded （挡住）her nose from the choking smoke and rushed downstairs. 这段文字中一系列动作画面感扑面而来，就好像在观看电影。 ②听到河里有呼救的声音，跳河救人。Hearing the crying for help, he ran to the river and jumped into it to rescue the drowning boy. 升级版：Hearing the screams, Henry ran to the riverside, threw off his clothes and jumped into the water without hesitation. He reached Robert just as he was sinking the last time. By great effort, and with much danger to himself, he brought Robert to the shore. 平时写作训练时我们可以将一个画面细化成多个并列动词，动作依次发生。比如他一抬头看到我的车，便走到路中央，扬手示意我停车。可以写成He looked up at my car, stepped into the road, and raised a hand to stop me. 仿写1：上车=拦车+上车+告诉目的地 He________ the taxi, ________in with the suitcase and________ the driver, “Go to the police station, please.” （tell, jump,stop) 仿写2：抱住儿子=冲向前+蹲下+一把抱住 She ________ forward, ____________ and________ her son into her arms.( kneel down下跪, gather, dash冲) 仿写3：歌手唱歌=扫视观众+深吸一口气+开始演唱（glance at; take a deep breath;begin to sing）_______________________________________________________________ 仿写4：孩子跳进湖里嬉戏=孩子们兴奋地冲到湖边，脱下衣服，跳进水里。(rush;take off; jump )________________________________________________