内容正文:
读后续写---编情节
读
续
写
读什么
PART ONE
5W1H
主旨
确定主角
明确问题
解决问题
人与社会
人与自我
人与自然
读什么
续什么
PART TWO
情节设计原则
听评卷员说:
“语法、时态、拼写、标点、大小写、叙述连贯性等方面的错误率都与学生读后续写的成绩存在不同程度的正相关性。”(张春青)
“普遍存在情节不严密,词汇较低级,句式变化少等情况”(屠勤琴)
“...续写内容才能与原文融洽,连贯...”
情节设计原则
最后附上阅卷实际操作评分标准,主要依据为是否有正确的句子,原则上就高不就低。
20分:内容顺,细节比较多,允许些许错误。
18分:内容顺,细节少些,语言有些错误。
15分:内容可读,语言错误多。
10分:内容基本完整,基本没什么完整的句子
写大纲:十句五定法(5句有固定依据)
就地取材,文字接龙
就地取材,反向推导
交代结局(紧贴原文、需求解决)
点睛升华
心理和情绪/动作描写
实战演练—就地取材,文字接龙
怎么不看我?
他低着头/眼睛往下看
He lowered his head, (obviously in a low spirit)
He looked down with his eyes, (obviously in a low spirit)
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We sat down next down to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
动作:走向起跑线后干嘛?
David和其他选手各就各位,一声令下,开跑!
Then the race began. All the runners shot out like arrows(箭).
The moment the starting gun rang, all the students rushed out.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
什么消息?
我获奖了!
I won the first prize in the writing contest!
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A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
去办公室干嘛?
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
拿着奖杯、奖状分享喜悦
I presented the award certificate to my teacher.
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实战演练—就地取材,反向推导
前面衔接:我去参加颁奖典礼
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I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
前面衔接:他起身,从我身边站起来,准备上场
Then he stood up, giving me a determined look.
He was no longer hesitant and got up to the starting line.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
实战演练—交代结局+点睛升华
人与社会&人与自我
凭借个人努力和自信、坚毅等美好品质突破困境、取得成绩
因身边人的肯定、帮助而备受鼓舞进而发生改变、超越自我
弘扬真善美
结局:我见证了David超越自我,取得打破了自己记录的成绩
It turned out that he achieved his best record ever.
点睛升华:我相信他这次的经历足以让他去面对未来一切困难。
With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future.
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结局:从那以后,我爱上了写作/我成为一名优秀的作家。
That was when I fell in love with writing.
点睛升华:这一切都归功于我的老师给我的自信和鼓励/每次遇到困难我都会想起曾经相信我、鼓舞我的恩师。
I was grateful to him for his inspiration and encouragement.
给我夸!
给我