读后续写专题第11章如何进行修改润色讲义-2024届高三英语作文写作复习

读后续写之修改润色 修改润色“三三原则” 改错: 时态语态 主谓一致 人称和拼写 润色: 不重复 高中词汇 加形容词副词 (叠词叠动宾) 自检清单 内容 理解原文 衔接原文 把握主题 逻辑性 完整性 丰富性 抓住“首尾段+P1P2给定句+中间段首尾句”了吗? P1P2给定句续写衔接好了吗? P1尾句狠狠接住P2给定句没? 狠抓“首尾段+中文注释”，结尾呼应第1-2段,升华结合主旨没? 每一个情节的设计，都在原文找到依据没?符合角色特点没? 结合P1P2给定句, 是否有该写的内容没写到?如有疑惑解开没? 各个角色该有的戏份都给到没?各类描写用没? (按照原文占比) 语言 准确性 恰当性 多样性 复杂度 描写式语言 自助改错三重点:动词时态语态，主谓一致，人称和拼写 重点实词的用法对不对?符合情感基调? (可模仿原文关键词句) 词汇:润色三要点做到没?II语法: 10大语法句式用几个了? 有没有用复杂句式? 10大句式的杂糅 动作和心理描写结合没?(无灵/独主/非谓/with);有特定小词? 连贯 // 连接词用没?(时间/程度副词，逻辑词);前后句子名词相关没? 呈现 // 书写美观吗?词数符合要求不? 一些须知: (我应该写什么?怎么写?) 1、读后续写评分要点: (1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度 (2)内容、语法结构、词汇的丰富性和准确性 (3)上下文的连贯性 考查:阅读(读懂原文)、逻辑思维(情节设计)、写作能力(词汇句式) 2、读后续写目的: 一是清楚原文关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。. 二是语言运用的准确性和丰富性。能根据需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。 三是对语篇结构的把控能力。对上下文逻辑关系的掌握，续写的短文语句连贯、有序。 四是创造性思维能力...要求学生详细和生动地描述情景、态度和感情 提示：适当仿写原文关键句式的理论支撑 真题再现 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away. With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. Tо her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. Tom! "she cried. "Help!" No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great j