Unit 4 Journey across a Vast Land Using Language Writing Assessing & polishing 课件-2023-2024学年高中英语人教版（2019）选择性必修第二册

Using language (II) : Assessing and polishing Ma Wenting Hubei Experimental High School Journey Across A vast Land 1 Li Daiyu How was your journey? It was awesome!!! Thank you so much for your students’ compositions!! I’ve sent you guys a parcel of souvenirs. You may expect it TODAY! Yesterday 20:17 Anyway, I still think the e-mail is better to be done by myself I’m sending you my draft. Could you help me assess and polish it? 2 Work out a checklist An appropriate greeting A natural ending To greet Be well-organized Be coherent To inform To amaze Work out a checklist The “Emerald Isle” is a very beautiful country. The peaceful landscape of the “Emerald Isle” and its many green counties is a true feast for the eyes, with its rolling green hill dotted with sheep and cattle. To amaze Work out a checklist An appropriate greeting A natural ending To greet Be well-organized Be coherent To inform Detailed descriptions Vivid language To amaze A letter about a railway journey To greet Dear mom and dad, Thank you for allowing me to go on this journey! Learning that you are concerned about my safety and curious about my trip, I’m writing to share some of my wonderful experience! We started in Vancouver. However, it rained a little for the first day. We visited an island with many shops . The next day was fine. Therefore, we got to see the beautiful mountains and later take a hike. On the train to Lake Louise, we could see the mountains and forests through the window. The blue water is so beautiful! Then, we took a coach to Jasper and saw huge mountain peaks and forests. In addition to that, we were even able to see many creatures! On the train to Toronto, we stopped at Edmonton. which is very cold. The daily temperature can be -10℃. From there we went southeast across the Canadian Prairie, where we saw many large farms. After another day on the train, we were finally back in the city. As the train moved forward, we can see the maple trees