内容正文:
范文与重点积累
假定你是李华,你的加拿大朋友Peter打算来你校做交换生,发来信件询问有关情况。请给他回一封邮件,内容包括:
1. 师生情况;
2. 校园情况;
3. 课余活动。
注意:
1. 词数80左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
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参考答案1
Dear Chris,
I am so glad to hear from you. The coming-of-age ceremony was held in our school on June 8th this month. During the coming-of-age ceremony, the headmaster congratulated us on stepping into the adult, reviewing the growth period that we had experienced. After that, we all watched the video of alumnus fighting against the epidemic.
Through the activity, what I felt is that I am able to shoulder the responsibility and make us stronger and more determined. When faced with the difficulties and failures, I must overcome them. In the future, I will be a good doctor to heal the wounded and rescue the dying, devoting myself to my work.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jin
【分析】
这是一篇应用文,要求写一封信。
【详解】
第一步:审题。
审题的目的是获取重要信息。通过审题我们可以确定几个方面的信息。
第一,假如你是晨光中学的李津。你校于6月8号举办了成人礼活动,你的英国朋友Chris 很想了解该活动。你于当晚给Chris 回一封电子邮件,介绍相关情况,内容包括:
1. 成人礼活动内容(成长点滴回顾,观看校友抗疫事迹录像等)
2. 对活动的感受。
3. 对自己未来的展望。
第二,人称为第一人称。第三,时态为一般现在时,一般过去时和一般将来时。
第二步:布局段落,确定主要段落,次要段落,段落数量。这篇写作段落数量为三段。
第一段:成人礼活动内容(成长点滴回顾,观看校友抗疫事迹录像等)。第二段:对活动的感受;对自己未来的展望。
第三段,表达期望。
第三步:确定关键词汇和短语:
congratulate sb on sth., be faced with, heal the wounded and rescue the dying, devote oneself to doing sth.;
第四步:确定较为高级的句子:
that引导的定语从句和现在分词作状语
During the coming-of-age ceremony, the headmaster congratulated us on stepping into the adult, reviewing the growth period that we had experienced.
that引导的表语从句
Through the activity, what I feltis that I am able to shoulder the responsibility and make us stronger and more determined.
时间状语从句的省略句
When faced with the difficulties and failures, I must overcome them.
第五步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接:
After that, besides, however.
第六步:注意书写,保持卷面整洁,避免划线,乱擦。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰,语言规范,段落整齐,语篇连贯,层次清晰。
使用了较为高级的句式:that引导的定语