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12.22 作文讲评 www.515ppt.com 1 题干分析 素材积累 高分句型 范文欣赏 目录 www.515ppt.com 2 题干分析 第一部分 www.515ppt.com 3 应用文写作 （15分） 66.假定你是某中学英文报的编辑Allen，收到一封署名为Worried的求助信。信中该同学向你诉说因为身材肥胖，遭到同学们的嘲笑，不能集中注意力学习。请根据以下要点给他写一封回信，内容包括： 1.给予安慰。 2.提供建议（至少两条）。 注意:1. 词数80左右；2.信中不能出现与本人相关的信息；3. 信的开头与结尾已为你拟好，不计入总词数。 4分 4+4分 语言流畅度2分 书写整洁1分 www.515ppt.com 4 框架设计（三段式） 第一段： 描述问题，表达安慰、理解 +给你一些建议 第二段： 建议1+原因/影响 建议2+原因/影响 （建议3+原因/影响） 第三段： 希望这些建议对你有用、美好祝愿等 www.515ppt.com 5 素材积累 第二部分 www.515ppt.com 6 词汇积累 提建议词汇：正常的：建议：重要的： 此外： 题干信息： 嘲笑： 集中注意力： natural→normal advice→suggestion significant→important besides→additionally laugh at sb make fun of sb concentrate on sth/doing sth www.515ppt.com 7 可行性建议： 和嘲笑你的同学好好沟通表达你的真实想法，告诉他们不要以貌取人。 积极参与各种活动，展现自己的优点，让同学愿意和你交朋友。 如果你真的超重，健康地减肥很重要，你可以规律作息、均衡饮食、多锻炼等。 www.515ppt.com 8 句子翻译 1 2 3 To begin with have a full and frank talk with your classmates about how you feel and tell them not to judge a book by its cover, which is a wise way to let your dark thoughts out. Additionally, take part in more activities in class and show yourself bravely, and your classmates will find you a good person to make friends with. Most importantly, if you are dangerously overweight, it is very important that you should try to lose weight properly. www.515ppt.com 9 高分句型 第三部分 www.515ppt.com 10 美化句子 例：你应该均衡饮食以及多锻炼。 You should have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise. 亮点句型1：It is of great importance / significance that you should have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise. 亮点句型2：Personally, it would be wise of you to have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise. 亮点句型3：I strongly suggest/advise/recommend that you have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise. 亮点句型4：Why don't you have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise? = Why not have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise? www.515ppt.com 11 范文欣赏 第四部分 www.515ppt.com 12 范文赏析 Hi, Worried, I’m sorry to know that you’re having such a bad time at the moment. I definitely understand how you feel. Such problems are quite normal