2023年9月苏州四市期初考读后续写 个人成长类 讲义-2024届高三英语作文复习专项

 2023年9月苏州四市期初考读后续写 个人成长类 （照顾出车祸的母亲）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

It was a chilly Friday night, and I had just returned from climbing one of the red rocks of Sedona. My father telephoned me as I walked through the arches to my dorm room and told me that my mother had been in a terrible car crash and had been taken to the intensive care unit (重症监护病房) of a nearby hospital.

When I got to the hospital, my father led me down a wide hallway with machines all around. A strong smell of medicine brought a sick feeling to my already turning stomach. As I turned into my mother’s ward, the cadaverous (形容枯槁的) condition of her body shocked me. Her face had swollen, her eyes had huge dark bruise, and she had tubes down her throat and in her arms. Gently holding her cold swollen hands, I said “hi” in a calm voice, controlling my urge to cry out.

She kept looking at me as she pounded her hand against the bed, looking painful. I turned my face away from her, trying to hide the tears that were rolling down my face. That was when it struck me that I really might lose my mother.

From that night on, my life completely changed. Up to that point, I’d had the luxury of just being a kid, having to deal with only the exaggerated melodramas of teenage life. As my mother struggled first to stay alive and then to relearn to walk, my sense of priorities changed sharply. My mother needed me. The trials and trouble of my daily life at school, which had seemed so important before, now appeared insignificant. My mother and I had faced death together, and life took on a new meaning for both of us.

After a week of treatment in intensive care, my mother’s condition improved enough to be moved to a regular hospital ward. She was finally out of danger but, because her legs had been crushed, there was doubt whether she would be able to walk again. I was just grateful that she was alive. Two months later, a sort of hospital suite was set up in our family room, and she was allowed to come home.

注意：

1. 续写词数应为150左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Para 1:  My mother’s return home was a blessing for us all, but it meant some unaccustomed responsibilities for me.

Para 2:  My mother’s reliance on me changed our relationship.

 

一 读懂原文

1 叙事视角：第  一   人称

2 故事梗概

我的母亲发生了一场可怕的车祸，从那天晚上起，我的生活彻底改变了。在那之前，我只是个孩子，只需要应对青少年生活中一些夸张的戏剧化问题。当我母亲努力活下来，然后重新学习行走时，我的优先事项意识发生了巨大的变化。我和母亲一起面对死亡，生活对我们俩都有了新的意义。 经过一周的重症监护治疗，母亲终于脱离了危险，可以转到普通病房，之后，我们家的客厅里安装了一个类似于医院套房的设施，母亲出院回家康复。

二 本文主题 亲情带给人们爱的滋养和力量，促成我的成长。

三 构建续写情节

1 解读首句，构思情节

Para1: My mother’s return home was a blessing for us all, but it meant some unaccustomed responsibilities for me.

      “unaccustomed responsibilities”是第一段续写首句的关键词。其中“ responsibilities ”，可以写对母亲的照顾，如给母亲准备一日三餐、帮母亲洗漱等 ；“ unaccustomed  ”，可以写自己不适应角色的转变，以致身心俱疲到逐渐适应的过程。在此过程中，学会共情、安慰并照顾好母亲。

      第一段尾句: 要与第二段的“My mother’s reliance on me”衔接，因此可以写“我”对母亲的照顾得到了母亲的认可。

Para 2: My mother’s reliance on me changed our relationship.

 “changed”是第二段续写首句的关键词。“我”与母亲在事件发生前后彼此关系的变化。

这段续写与通过人物动作、语言、心理、情绪描写等推动情节发展的段落不同，主要通过概述对比，最后点出文章的主题。

四：官方范文

My mother's return home was a blessing for us all, but it meant some unaccustomed responsibilities for me. I would feed her, bathe her and help her to the bathroom. It struck me that I was pretty much playing the role of mother to my own mother. The difficult part for me was trying to be always upbeat（乐观的，积极向上的）, and to keep my mother's spirits up when she became frustrated with the pain and her inability to do simple things by herself. Looking after my mother wasn't much fun, but it felt good to be there when my mother really needed me.

My mother’s reliance on me changed our relationship. In the past, we had more than our share of the strains （紧张）of mother-daughter relationships. The accident threw us into a relationship of interdependence. To get my mother back, I had to help regain her strength and ability to resume（恢复） an independent life. She had to accept my help as well as the fact that I was no longer a child. Since then, we have become the closest friends, genuinely listening to one another and truly enjoying each other’s company.

五：补充素材

 1我承担起的家庭责任：

①I brought meals to her bedside, fed her and cleaned up afterwards. Also, I showered her, supported her to and from the toilet and washed her dirtied clothes. 

②I took on the responsibilities of looking after my mother and coped with what my mother used to take up. I almost devoted all my time to attending to her. I cooked dishes, washed clothes, prepared medicine and so on.

③As I took on the role of her primary caregiver, our dynamic（相互作用的方式） shifted from the traditional mother-daughter relationship to one of mutual dependence and support.

④I embraced these responsibilities with open arms, knowing that I had the opportunity to