2023-2024学年高二名校协作体续写解析之一个女孩的蜕变讲义

读后续写原题目： 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完 整的短文。 首段抛却“升华主旨”，是简单的背景介绍和引入： For years,my wife Teresa taught physical education at the elementary school level..Travelling on(这里的travel很地道。再拓展一个词travel on business)a regular schedule to the six schools in her district,she had a chance to get to know most of the kids in the area and see them at their best and their worst,.(协同点：下文可写我的妻子看到了女孩 多年来，我的妻子特蕾莎在小学教体育课。她定期去她所在地区的六所学 校，有机会了解这个地区的大多数孩子，看到他们最好和最差的一面。 第二段交代了小女孩的情况：简单来说，就是矮，胖，衰，孤独。协同点： 下文可写她有了小狗后的改变（注意：这里的改变不能超出原来的人物 设定，比如：她后来成了人见人爱的社牛。这种改变是随时间流逝缓缓抚 平的，如，她开始和小狗分享学校的事物，新新开心起来，慢慢长高了， 显得与之前瘦了不少…) One day,in her class,Teresa noticed a third-grade girl,Meagan,who was short and grossly(严重地)overweight,.with a closed and hopeless look on her face.Meagan always sat alone in class,played alone at break,and ate alone from a recycled paper sack at lunch.The teachers and staff were kind to Meagan,but the students were not. 有一天，在她的课堂上，特蕾莎注意到一个叫梅根的三年级女孩，她身材 矮小，体重严重超标，脸上带着一种封闭而绝望的表情。梅根在课堂上总 是一个人坐着，休息时一个人玩，午餐时一个人从回收纸袋里拿东西吃。 老师和工作人员对梅根很好，但学生们却不是。 具体的举例：她如何受其它孩子欺负（甚至校园霸凌buly)以及她的家庭 情况（在后文当然可以有照应） The stories made your shoulders drop.Teresa heard that when the playground supervisors((管理员)turned their backs,.kids would run up to Meagan,calling her "Meagan the Fat Pig."They did far worse than isolate )her;they filled her school days and walks home with physical and emotional torment(折磨)， 关于折磨这一词，还想请大家背下这一句话，来日续写可能用上： With that weather-beaten figure staggering to very clearness in his mind,he felt deep soul constantly tortured by an invisible hammer of morality, simultaneously choking out,"We must help him!" Also,Meagan's single mother,a hard-working woman,was trying her best to make ends meet(完形填空可以出哦)but she had never made it before. 那些故事让你垂头丧气。特蕾莎听说，当操场管理者转过身去的时候，孩 子们就会跑到梅根跟前，叫她“胖猪梅根”。他们所做的远比孤立她更糟 糕；他们让她上学的日子和回家的路上充满了身体和精神上的折磨。此外， 梅根的单身母亲，一个勤劳的女人，尽她最大的努力使收支平衡，但她从 来没有做到过。 我妻子的想法：养小狗，引出部分主题(inject high-powered love去取代 low-spirit的Meagan) Meagan's situation disturbed my wife deeply.After talking