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第五讲 如何设计衔接与结尾
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第五讲 如何设计衔接与结尾
“自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯”是读后续写最高档水平的评分细则之一。根据此标准,考生在备考时必须注意从以下几处设计续写语言:首句接续、情节叙述、细节描写、段落过渡和故事结尾。本讲主要从首句接续、段落过渡和故事结尾三个方面讲解。
一、首句接续
续写部分所给的两段首句控制着故事的基本情节和发展方向,因此,接续好段落首句特别重要。接续首句时,注意从首句中人物的动作和情感入手,可以利用语法手段或者细节描写进行接续。
1.利用语法手段接续
①(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷续写第一段) We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Depressed and low-spirited, David sat silently with his head dropping.(形容词短语)
②(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷续写第二段) I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.With a whistle, everyone rushed up.(介词短语)
③(2021·浙江1月高考续写第一段)I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Growing more panic, I began to cry. (分词短语)
④(2022·浙江1月高考续写第一段)We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. The more we met, the more I knew his ability. (固定句型)
⑤(2022·浙江1月高考续写第二段)One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. Apparently, the stress of getting the best grade had taken its toll on him.(副词)
⑥(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷续写第一段)We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Depression hung over him like a heavy dark cloud and tears welled up in his eyes. (修辞)
2.利用细节描写接续
①(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷续写第一段)We sat domn next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He buried his head into his arms and couldn't help sobbing. (动作描写)
②(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷续写第一段)We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. A flood of sympathy and sadness emerged in my heart.(情感描写)
③(2017·浙江11月高考续写第二段) We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. I looked out of the car window,winding rivers, lofty mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys holding me entirely in their fascination.(环境描写)
④(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷续写第一段)We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.“David, you are an ambitious young man full of enthusiasm and vitality.” I held his hands tightly, “Just look at my eyes. Trust me!” (对话描写)
二、段落过渡
续写部分的两个段落在情节上是自然顺承、连贯一致的故事片段。因此,两个段落之间的衔接过渡十分重要。续写过渡句时,要从时间、地点、人物心理变化和事件推进等角度