内容正文:
应用文精批精改:求职信
题目展示:
假如你是李华,从报纸上看到中老年英语培训机构Mid.Senior ESCH面向高中毕业生招聘暑期兼职辅导员,负责学员课间服务事项。请根据下面的广告内容用英语写一份求职信。
ASSISITANTS WANTED
Valuable chances are open for high school graduates who are good at English.Their work is to tend the senior students during the break
Requirements attached: 1. Good at English.2.Experienced priority.
Contact us bye-mail:Englishtec@163.com
注意:1.短文词数100字左右:2.不能使用直实姓名和学校名称;
审“三步走”
一审文体:求职信
二数要点:1.英语好2.有经验3增加要点:性格外向
三.思时态与人称:
1.时态:一般现在时
2人称:第一人称
学生作品展示
To my respectful members in ESCH,
I’ m LiHua, a high school student. Informed that you are recruiting for assistants responsible for services in class breaks, I’m writing to apply to be one of them.
With a good command of English, I am competent for the role which requires fluent communication in the language. Besides, I’ve done the similar volunteer work before so I ‘ ve got a clear understanding of my job.Additionally, my outgoing personality enable me to get on well with elderly people in the institution, as well as betterly learning students’ needs during the break.
I sincerely hope that my application will meet with your approval. Anticipating your early reply.
1注下中老英语培训机构招聘期兼职辅员所以最好要用Dear Director
2. I’ m Li Hua,a high school graduate.Informed that you”re recruiting for assistants responsible for services in class breaks,I’ m writing to apply to be one of them.其本修改--My name is LiHua a high school graduate.I understand that you are currently seeking/recruiting assistants for services during class breaks, and I am writing to apply to join your team.
可以使用更加具体的词汇来描述作者的背景,明确了作者的申请意向。同时,加入了一句简短的自我介绍,强调作者的可贵之处。
修改提升:As a recent high school graduate,I would like to apply for the position of class break assistant that I learned you were currently seeking I believe that my skills and enthusiasm would make me a valuable addition to your team
第二段
3.With a good command of English I'm competent for the role which requires fluent Communication in the language
这句话的语法上没有错误,但是可以通过修改来使其更加流畅和表达更加恰当清晰。