内容正文:
应用文之邀请信练习写作讲评讲义
题目
假定你是李华。你所在的校乒乓球队正在招收新队员。请给你的留学生朋友Eric写封邮件邀请他加入,内容包括:
1. 球队活动;
2. 报名方式及截止日期。
全文呈现(173字)
I would like to invite you to join our table tennis team, in which approximately ten members are responsible for organizing some fun and exciting activities. I can hardly wait to share them with you!
To begin with, the most expected activity is the annual table tennis competition that involves a large number of talented players from different grades. What’s more, the team will build a training club. What attracts us most is that they offer some free training to fans of table tennis. Last but not least, the plan that they gather to teach the senior citizens in the nursing house will be carried out on a voluntary basis. Not only is the team formed to sharpen people’s skills, but the team is also established to promote the common good in harmonious society.
Taking all the activities into account, I wish you could consider my invitation. If you agree, please send us your application form to 123@gmail.com by the end of this week. Hopefully, we can see you soon in the team.
题目简析
在这篇文章里,你要邀请对方加入球队,就必然要通过内容设计不断传递“这个团队有多好”的相关信息。各位在阅读范文的时候,可以注意观察一下,这方面的信息是如何渗透到每个写作要点中的。
逐句解析及修改
开头仍然是邀请类应用文的标准功能句。
I would like to invite you to join our table tennis team, in which approximately ten members are responsible for organizing some fun and exciting activities. I can hardly wait to share them with you!我想邀请你加入我们的乒乓球队,在这个团队里大概有10名成员负责组织一些有趣和令人兴奋的活动。我迫不及待地想和你分享这些活动!
第一段中唯一复杂的地方就是“in which”引导的定语从句,用于对前面的“table tennis team”进行补充。考虑到全文字数较多,这部分可以进行删减,让开头更加符合其它同类主题应用文的需要。
I would like to invite you to join our table tennis team, and I can hardly wait to share those fun and exciting activities with you!我想邀请你加入我们的乒乓球队,而且我迫不及待地想和你分享那些有趣的激动人心的活动!
第二段是对球队活动的介绍。范文中共列举了三项主要活动,分别是年度乒乓球赛、训练俱乐部和在养老院为老人开课。此外,第二段的末尾还有一句话介绍组建团队的意义和作用。考虑到高考应用文写作字数的限制,这部分涉及四个要点,篇幅明显略长了,控制在二至三个要点比较合适,所以我们可以提取重点,适当进行修改。
活动一:To begin with, the most expected activity is the annual table tennis competition that involve