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爱国是我们的责任，然而其方式有所不同。某英文报纸就此主题向中学生征稿，要求同学们谈谈自己平时是怎样做的，还有什么打算以及对爱国的认识。 It’s our duty to love our country. However, there are different ways to show our love. …… Model How to write the beginning? _______________________________________ feature Simple Clear Main idea 英语习作展示 七三四法则 七个“不” 三个原则 正能量原则 原文一致原则 七不违背逻辑常理 六不偏离原文主题 五不在文末设置悬念 四不用负能量结局 三不用过多对话 一不增加人物 二不增加旁支情节 曲折性原则 : 前后衔接、连贯、语言风格一致 : 弘扬社会主义核心价值观 : 人物会遇到困难，但最终能解决 目 录 通读全文，理清脉络 增加细节，开始写作 细读首句，构思框架 检查优化，整洁誊写 4 When Where Who Plot ( What、 Why、 How ) About noon On the side of the road “I” and a Mexican family (father, mother and their daughter) There was something wrong with my Jeep (para.1) A Mexican family helped me successfully (para.2-3) “I”paid the money, but he refused. I gave it to his wife quietly (para.4) They would go home (end of the story) 通读全文，理清脉络 1 1. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.( ) 2. I start taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. ( ) 3. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn't bothered to help. ( ) 4. He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. ( ) 5.原文没有对话，续写中也要__________对话。 语言特色 并列句 非谓语作宾语 主从复合句--状语从句 主从复合句--非限制性定语从句 尽量少用 两段首句定一框 二框二首正能量 由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架 第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定 When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I'd had lunch.________________ _____________________________________________________________________ ... After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.____________________ ______________________________________________________________________ ... 由 “the girl asked if I'd had lunch” 可知，续写段首句可写作者的回答；接着叙述是否一起吃午饭。由第二段“opened the paper bag”可逆推出，该段应提及墨西哥家庭给了作者一个纸袋子。 根据“opened the paper bag”, 第一段首句中的 “lunch” 和原文中的 “a $20 bill” 可知：纸袋里是吃的和20美元；续写结尾应呼应原文主题，体现正能量 “pass love o