Unit 1 课时4 Section 3 Writing（教学课件）英语新教材沪教版九年级下册

Sport and sportsmanship Unit 1 Writing 主讲： 日期： 学习目标 掌握新闻报道“导语（Lead）-主体（Body）-结尾（End）”的三段式结构，能准确识别并标注范文各部分功能 学会规划校园运动会报道的核心信息（如赛事亮点、运动员表现等），并能创作出吸引眼球的新闻标题 熟练运用本单元所学词汇、句型完成运动会新闻稿写作，确保语言表达准确、流畅 借助自评清单（Checklist），从结构完整性、信息全面性、语言准确性等维度检查并修改自己的新闻稿 Contents Lead-in Pre-writing While-writing Check and revise Possible version Homework Lead-in Part 1 Lead-in: What can you remember about our school sports meeting? Think about these questions: 1. Have you ever taken part in the sports meeting? 2. What exciting moments can you still remember? 3. What sports events do we usually have? 4. If you were a reporter, how would you tell the story? Today's task: Write a news report about the school sports meeting for Teen Life Magazine. Lead in　 朋友圈 vs 校刊：什么才算「新闻」？ 同一件事，两种写法。差在哪儿？ 朋友圈 / My Moment “今天运动会太爽了！！！我们班超厉害 😆” 只有感受，没有信息；只有我，没有事实。 校刊新闻 / News Report “Class 3 won the 4×100m relay by 0.3 seconds on Friday, breaking the school record set in 2019.” 有人、有事、有时间、有数据。 真实 Fact 及时 Fresh 客观 Objective 有结构 Organized 一句话判断标准 一个没去现场的人读完，能不能准确说出「谁、在什么时候、做了什么、结果怎样」？能，就是新闻；不能，只是心情。 Pre-writing Part 2 Pre-writing : What does a news report look like? P11 A news report has 4 parts. Can you tell what each part does? Headline 标题：简洁吸睛 概括核心事件 吸引读者注意 Lead 导语：回答5W Who / What / When Where / Why Body 主体：细节展开 比赛结果、选手表现 精彩瞬间描述 End 结尾：升华评价 感想、展望未来 体育精神 Lead: Give information readers need to know, for example, who, what, when, where and why. Body: Provide details about the event, such as the results of the matches / competitions and athletes' performances. End: Develop readers' interest by adding thoughtful comments or things that will happen in the future. 1.7.2013 大家看，一篇标准的新闻报道由四个部分组成：标题、导语、主体和结尾。我们对照课本上奥运会的例子来理解每个部分的作用。 ‹#› Read the news report written by a newspaper reporter. Label the parts of the report to see how the ideas are organized. P11 (1) Headline The Olympics—more than just sport (2) On 20 February, the Olympic flame① was put out at the National Stadium in Beijing, bringing the 2022 Winter Olympics to a close. (3) At Beijing 2022, over 2,800 athletes from 91 countries and regions competed for 109 gold medals. During the 17 days of competitions on the ice and snow, 17 Olympic records, including two world records, were broken. The athletes cheered for each other as they tried their best in each competition. Beijing 2022 is definitely a good example of the Olympic motto②: Faster, Higher, Stronger — Together. (4) The 2026 Winter Olympics will take place in the Italian cities of Milan and Cortina d'Ampezzo. Fans of winter sports around the world are definitely looking forward to that! ① flame /fleɪm/ n. 火焰     ② motto /ˈmɒtəʊ/ n. 格言 Lead Body End Pre-writing : Before you write — check 3 things first 1 Genre: News Report （新闻报道） 文体特点：客观、准确、信息量大；结构 = Headline + Lead + Body + End 2 Tense: Simple Past Tense （一般过去时为主） 理由：运动会已经举办，报道的是过去发生的事情 → held / took place / competed / cheered 3 Person: Third Person （第三人称） 理由：新闻报道要客观 → the students / the athletes / our school / they，避免使用 I / we 中考易错点：时态混用时态、第一人称主观化——都是扣分重灾区！ 1.7.2013 写作文之前，第一步永远是审题。体裁、时态、人称这三个要素搞清楚了，你的文章就不会跑题。 ‹#› Pre-writing : How to write a headline and a lead? Headline 标题 特点：简洁、吸睛、概括事件 Examples: · School Sports Meeting Held Successfully · Excitement Fills the Playground · Heroes on the Sports Field · Our Sports Day: Unforgettable Moments Tips: 用名词短语，不用完整句子； 用主动感的词（Excitement Fills...） 比平铺直叙更吸引读者 Lead 导语 （5W) 特点：一段话交代全部关键信息 Our school held the sports meeting on ___ (date) on the playground. Over ___ students took part in different events and brought us lots of surprises. Checklist: · When → last Friday / on October 23 · Where → on the school playground · Who → students and teachers · What → the annual sports meeting · Why → to show sports spirit 1.7.2013 标题要简洁有力，导语要把五个W都交代清楚。大家可以照着模板先写一个自己的版本。 ‹#› Pre-writing : How to write the body and the end? Body 主体：细节展开 写1-2个重点比赛，不要流水账： · The most exciting event was the 4×100m relay race. · As soon as the gun went off, the runners rushed forward. · Though some competitors failed to win, they won warm cheers. End 结尾：升华与展望 模板句： · The sports meeting was more than a competition. · It taught us the true meaning of teamwork. · We are looking forward to the next one. 加分名言： · The most important thing is not to win, but to take part. — Pierre de Coubertin （重在参与，不在取胜） 1.7.2013 主体部分要挑重点比赛写，不要面面俱到。结尾要升华主题，体现体育精神，这样文章才有高度。 ‹#› Pre-writing : Useful words, phrases and sentence patterns Key Phrases 核心短语 · hold a sports meeting 举办校运会 · take part in 参加 · take place 举行 · try one's best 尽最大努力 · break the record 打破纪录 · win first prize 获得一等奖 · cheer for sb. 为某人欢呼 · team spirit 团队精神 · the spirit of sports 体育精神 · compete in 参加比赛 · draw attention 吸引注意 · far more than 远不止 Advanced Sentences 加分句型 · It was one of the most unforgettable moments. · As soon as the gun went off, the runners rushed forward. · Although some didn't win, they won our respect. · Not only did we enjoy the games, but we also learned teamwork. · The cheers filled the whole playground. · It was a day full of energy and passion. Quotes 名言金句 "The most important thing is not to win but to take part." — Pierre de Coubertin "Winning isn't everything, but wanting to win is." — Vince Lombardi 1.7.2013 这些短语和句型大家可以挑几个用在自己的作文里，特别是Not only倒装句，用出来就是满分作文的信号。 ‹#› While-writing Part 3 WHILE-WRITING　当堂写作 WRITING TASK　写作任务 假设你是李华，校英文报 Sunshine Middle School News 的记者。请你为下一期校报写一篇新闻报道，报道上周五学校举行的秋季运动会。 必须写到的四点 ① 时间地点人数 ② 最精彩的比赛 ③ 同学与班级表现 ④ 你的感受评价 硬性要求 · 80–100 词，四段式（标题 + 导语 + 主体 + 结尾） · 一般过去时为主，导语可用现在完成时 · 不得出现真实校名、人名（统一用 Li Hua / Sunshine Middle School） · 标题单独一行居中，正文每段首行缩进两格 TOTAL TIME 18 min 3′ 列提纲 只写关键词，不写句子 14′ 成文 四段写完，不停顿查词 3′ 自查 拼写、时态、第三人称 Check and revise Part 4 Post-writing : Self-check — Did you miss anything? Tick (✓) the boxes, and then revise your report. ✓ Checklist ☐ I wrote a news report with a headline, lead, body and end. (4 parts complete) ☐ I included the key information: who, what, when, where. (5W in the lead) ☐ I used the words and expressions I learnt in this unit. (at least 3 new phrases) ☐ I used the simple past tense correctly. (all verbs in past form) ☐ I used correct spelling, grammar and punctuation. (no obvious mistakes) ☐ The word count is between 80 and 100 words. (not too short, not too long) 1.7.2013 写完作文不要急着交，先自己对照这个检查表检查一遍。很多错误自己就能发现，这是提分的关键步骤。 ‹#› Post-writing : Peer Assessment — Check your partner's work Give stars to three stars and write one suggestion for improvement. Items Score Comments and Suggestions Structure: 4 parts complete three stars Which part is missing? What can be added? Key points: 5W information three stars Is all 5W information in the lead? Tense: Simple past tense three stars Underline any wrong verbs. What should they be? Language: Good words and sentences three stars Circle the best sentence. Suggest one upgrade. Accuracy: Spelling and grammar three stars Mark any mistakes you find. 1.7.2013 现在请同桌交换作文，按照这个互评表来给对方打分。记住，提建议要具体，不要只说写得好或者写得差。 ‹#› Post-writing : Zhongkao Marking Standard (20 points) Level Points Description Excellent 17-20 Complete structure (headline, lead, body, end); all key points covered; natural language, varied sentence patterns; almost no grammar mistakes. Good 13-16 Complete structure; all main points included; a few minor grammar mistakes, but they do not affect understanding. OK 9-12 Missing one part of the structure; some key points omitted; quite a few mistakes, but the report is still understandable. Poor 5-8 Little content, messy structure; many mistakes, hard to follow. Fail 0-4 Only a few words written; off-topic. 1.7.2013 大家看清楚中考评分标准了吗？要拿高分，四个结构必须齐全，时态不能错，还要有几个亮眼的句型。 ‹#› Possible version Part 5 Sample Essay 1 (Basic Level) — About 82 words School Sports Meeting Held Successfully Our school held a sports meeting last Friday on the playground. Lots of students took part in different sports events. The boys' 100-metre race was very exciting. All the runners tried their best. Many students stood and cheered for them. Some students won prizes. The sports meeting brought us great fun. We learned that we should keep trying. We are looking forward to next year's sports meeting. Highlight Analysis Structure: - Headline + Lead + Body + End - 4 parts complete Tense: - held, took, tried, cheered - simple past tense correct Style: - Simple and clear sentences - No complex grammar risk - Safe, reliable choice Score: about 13-15 1.7.2013 这是基础版范文，适合基础比较薄弱的同学。结构完整，时态正确，句子简单稳妥，能拿到良好档的分数。 ‹#› Sample Essay 2 (Advanced Level) — About 96 words Excitement Fills Our Playground Our school sports meeting took place on October 23. Players from every class competed in different events. The 4×100-metre relay race drew the most attention. The runners passed the baton smoothly and rushed to the finish line. Though some competitors failed to win, they still won warm cheers for their courage. This sports meeting was far more than a competition. It showed us the true sports spirit. Not only did we enjoy excitement, but we also understood the power of teamwork. What Makes It High Score? 1. Eye-catching headline "Excitement Fills..." is vivid 2. Advanced phrases take place, compete in, draw attention, far more than 3. Complex sentences Though... (adverbial clause) Not only...but also... (inversion) 4. Theme升华 Ends with sports spirit & teamwork Score: about 17-19 1.7.2013 这是提升版范文，目标是冲满分。大家注意看它用了哪些高分短语和句型，特别是Not only倒装句，用出来就是满分信号。 ‹#› Homework Part 6 Basic Level (All) Copy the basic sample essay, underline the 4 parts, memorize 3 key phrases. Intermediate Level Revise your in-class writing using the peer feedback, add 2 advanced sentence patterns. Advanced Level Write a news report about the school art festival, 80 words, 4 parts complete. Homework Thank you! 主讲： 日期： $