Unit 5 Into the Unknown 单元写作作业设计-2026-2027学年高中英语外研版（2019）选择性必修第四册

外研版选择性必修四 Unit 5　Into the Unknown 单元写作作业 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报正在开展以 "Into the Unknown" 为主题的征稿活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，记叙一次你走出舒适区的经历（如第一次独自远行、第一次登台、转学等），内容包括： 1. 交代经历的时间与背景； 2. 描述你的不安、尝试与解决办法； 3. 说明这次经历带给你的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Into the Unknown 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　____________________________________________________________________ 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这六件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙文（英文报征稿）：标题—背景—波折—收获，叙事为线、心理为魂。 人称 第一人称叙述，心理描写是得分关键；可写一两个陌生人或亲友的话作点缀。 时态 叙事用一般过去时，心理与场景可用过去进行时；收获用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：背景（为何独自出发）；Para 2：不安（具体心理与处境）；Para 3：尝试与转机（求助、犯错、 overcome 的过程）；Para 4：收获。 要点 "不安—尝试—收获"三层缺一不可；不安要具体（心跳、手心出汗），收获要具体（一句感悟+一个变化）。 语气 真实、有少年气；可以自嘲，可以后怕，但结尾要亮。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（根据提示补全单词或词义） 话题词汇 1. unknown n./adj. ____________ 2. ____________ n. 冒险；奇遇 3. explore vt. ____________ 4. ____________ n. 探险；远征 5. courage n. ____________ 6. ____________ n. 地平线；眼界 7. destination n. ____________ 8. ____________ n. 旅程 9. frontier n. ____________ 10. ____________ n. 边界；界限 11. unfamiliar adj. ____________ 12. ____________ vi. 犹豫；迟疑 13. leap n./vi. ____________ 14. ____________ n./vt. 挑战 15. discover vt. ____________ 16. ____________ n. 独立 17. confidence n. ____________ 18. ____________ n. 障碍；阻碍 19. overcome vt. ____________ 20. ____________ n. 好奇心 21. reward n. ____________ 22. ____________ adj. 极端的；极度的 23. surface n./vi. ____________ 24. ____________ n. 边缘 Ⅱ. 话题词块（根据汉语补全短语，或根据短语写出汉语） 话题词块 1. step out of one's comfort zone ____________ 2. ____________ 进入未知世界 3. take the first step ____________ 4. ____________ 出发；动身 5. set out to do ____________ 6. ____________ 独自；靠自己 7. lose one's way ____________ 8. ____________ 找到路；找到办法 9. head for ____________ 10. ____________ 超出自己能力范围 11. take a deep breath ____________ 12. ____________ 鼓起勇气 13. face one's fear ____________ 14. ____________ 挑战极限 15. beyond one's imagination ____________ 16. ____________ 信仰之跃；大胆一搏 17. look back on ____________ 18. ____________ 开阔眼界 19. open a new door ____________ 20. ____________ 获得信心 21. stand on one's own feet ____________ 22. ____________ 面对；不顾 23. venture into ____________ 24. ____________ 前方的路 25. turn out to be ____________ 26. ____________ 非常值得 27. swallow one's shyness ____________ 28. ____________ 心里七上八下 29. no pain, no gain ____________ 30. ____________ 千里之行，始于足下 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. I traveled alone for the first time. ____________________ 2. I was very nervous. ____________________ 3. I asked strangers for help. ____________________ 4. It was a difficult trip. ____________________ 5. I learned a lot. ____________________ 6. The city was new to me. ____________________ 7. I felt proud at the station. ____________________ 8. I overcame my fear. ____________________ 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 未知的事物既令人恐惧，又令人着迷。 　　The unknown is both ________ and fascinating. 2. 第一次独自旅行，我的心里七上八下。 　　On my first solo trip, ________ danced in my stomach. 3. 我深吸一口气，走向检票口。 　　I ________ ________ ________ ________ and walked to the gate. 4. 出发前，妈妈反复叮嘱我。 　　Before I ________ ________, Mom reminded me again and again. 5. 车窗外，熟悉的街道渐渐远去。 　　Outside the window, the familiar streets ________ ________. 6. 一开始，我连问路都不敢。 　　________ ________, I didn't even dare to ask the way. 7. 我鼓起勇气向一位面善的阿姨求助。 　　I ________ ________ ________ to ask a kind-looking lady for help. 8. 她不只给我指了路，还把我送到了车站。 　　She didn't just ________ ________ ________ ________; she walked me to the station. 9. 站在外婆家门前，我几乎不敢相信自己的眼睛。 　　Standing in front of Grandma's house, I could ________ ________ my eyes. 10. 正是这次旅行让我相信了自己。 　　It was this trip that made me ________ ________ myself. 11. 只有走出舒适区，我们才能遇见更好的自己。（倒装） 　　Only by ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ zone can we meet a better self. 12. 回程的车票，是我挣来的勋章。 　　The return ticket felt like a ________ I had ________ myself. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. I was afraid. I still got on the train. 要求：用 although 引导让步状语从句合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 2. The trip was hard. It was rewarding. 要求：用 not only...but also 合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 3. I asked a stranger for help. She was very kind. 要求：用定语从句改写 → ____________________________________________________________ 4. I will never forget that journey. 要求：用 never 开头的倒装句 → ____________________________________________________________ 5. When I saw the sea, all my tiredness disappeared. 要求：用 the moment 合并 → ____________________________________________________________ 6. The journey taught me independence. 要求：用 what 引导主语从句 → ____________________________________________________________ 7. The unknown world is waiting for us. 要求：用 there be 句型 + 现在分词 → ____________________________________________________________ 8. I sat and watched the scenery go by. 要求：用 with 复合结构 → ____________________________________________________________ 9. If you step out of your comfort zone, you will find how strong you are. 要求：改为祈使句 + and 结构 → ____________________________________________________________ 10. This experience gave me confidence. 要求：用 It is...that 强调句 → ____________________________________________________________ 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Into the unknown we go, and out of it we grow. 走向未知，从中成长。　（倒装对称句） The comfort zone is a beautiful place, but nothing ever grows there. 舒适区很美好，但那里长不出任何东西。　（but 转折） What lies beyond fear is usually a better version of yourself. 恐惧的另一边，往往是更好的你。　（what 主语从句） Only those who wander into the unknown find new worlds. 只有走进未知的人，才能发现新世界。　（only 修饰主语 + 定语从句） Every great story begins with one trembling step. 每一个伟大的故事，都始于颤抖着迈出的第一步。　（比喻） Not until the train left did I realize how far from home I was. 直到火车开动，我才意识到自己离家有多远。　（not until 的倒装） So unfamiliar were the streets that even the map seemed to speak a foreign language. 街道如此陌生，连地图都像说着外语。　（so...that 的倒装） The horizon is not the edge of the world, but the beginning of the journey. 地平线不是世界的边缘，而是旅程的起点。　（not...but... 对称句） A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step. 千里之行，始于足下。　（谚语） Courage is not the absence of fear, but the decision to move with it. 勇气不是没有恐惧，而是带着恐惧前行。　（not...but... 对称句） It is in unfamiliar places that we meet our true selves. 恰恰是在陌生的地方，我们遇见真实的自己。　（强调句） The further I travelled, the smaller my fear became. 我走得越远，恐惧就越小。　（the + 比较级，the + 比较级） Every map was once an unknown land. 每张地图都曾是未知的土地。　（判断句） May you always have the courage to buy the ticket before you feel ready. 愿你永远有勇气，在准备好之前就买好那张车票。　（May 祝愿句 + before 从句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·记叙+感悟类短文，情境已替换】 你校英文报 "Youth Voices" 栏目以 "My First Time" 为题征稿。请写一篇短文，记叙你的一次"第一次"经历，内容包括： 1. 经历是什么； 2. 当时的困难与你的应对； 3. 你的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自高考应用文真题（记叙+感悟类投稿），情境已替换为本单元话题。 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Into the Unknown 　　Last summer, at fourteen, I took my first solo train ride—six hours, one backpack, and a grandmother waiting at the other end. 　　The moment the platform left my sight, butterflies danced in my stomach. At the transfer station I got lost, and the station hall swam with strangers. At first I didn't even dare to speak. Then I swallowed my shyness, plucked up courage and asked a kind-looking lady for help. She didn't just point out the way; she walked me to the right platform. 　　Standing in front of Grandma's house that evening, I could hardly believe my eyes—or myself. I had read maps, changed trains and fed myself, all on my own. 　　The return ticket felt like a medal I had earned myself. Now, whenever life hands me an unfamiliar door, I remember: the unknown is both frightening and fascinating—and it always, always leads somewhere. 【学生习作】 Into the Unknown 　　Last year I traveled to Beijing alone for the first time. I was very nervous because it was my first trip. 　　On the train I didn't know what to do. When I arrived, I couldn't find the station exit. I asked a policeman and he told me the way. Then I took a bus to my uncle's home. 　　This trip taught me a lesson. If we try, we can do many things. I think it was a good trip and I learned to be independent. 【自我修改清单】（写完对照检查） □ 是否交代了"第一次"的时间、地点与缘由？ □ "不安"是否用具体动作或感受写出（手心出汗、心跳加速），而不是只写 nervous？ □ "尝试"是否写出了从退缩到行动的转折点（如鼓起勇气求助）？ □ 时态是否正确：叙事用过去时，收获用现在时？ □ 是否用上本单元词块（set off, pluck up courage, step out of one's comfort zone 等）至少 3 个？ □ 结尾是否有一句有分量的感悟或"金句"？ 九、参考答案 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇 1. unknown n./adj. 未知的事物；未知的 2. adventure n. 冒险；奇遇 3. explore vt. 探索；探究 4. expedition n. 探险；远征 5. courage n. 勇气；胆量 6. horizon n. 地平线；眼界 7. destination n. 目的地 8. journey n. 旅程 9. frontier n. 边疆；前沿 10. boundary n. 边界；界限 11. unfamiliar adj. 不熟悉的；陌生的 12. hesitate vi. 犹豫；迟疑 13. leap n./vi. 跳跃；飞跃 14. challenge n./vt. 挑战 15. discover vt. 发现；找到 16. independence n. 独立 17. confidence n. 自信；信心 18. obstacle n. 障碍；阻碍 19. overcome vt. 克服；战胜 20. curiosity n. 好奇心 21. reward n. 回报；奖赏 22. extreme adj. 极端的；极度的 23. surface n./vi. 表面；浮出水面 24. edge n. 边缘 Ⅱ. 话题词块 1. step out of one's comfort zone 走出舒适区 2. into the unknown 进入未知世界 3. take the first step 迈出第一步 4. set off 出发；动身 5. set out to do 着手做某事 6. on one's own 独自；靠自己 7. lose one's way 迷路 8. find one's way 找到路；找到办法 9. head for 朝……进发 10. out of one's depth 超出自己能力范围 11. take a deep breath 深吸一口气 12. pluck up courage 鼓起勇气 13. face one's fear 直面恐惧 14. push one's limits 挑战极限 15. beyond one's imagination 超乎想象 16. a leap of faith 信仰之跃；大胆一搏 17. look back on 回顾 18. broaden one's horizons 开阔眼界 19. open a new door 打开一扇新的门 20. gain confidence 获得信心 21. stand on one's own feet 自立 22. in the face of 面对；不顾 23. venture into 冒险进入 24. what lies ahead 前方的路 25. turn out to be 结果是；原来是 26. worth every minute 非常值得 27. swallow one's shyness 克服羞怯 28. have butterflies in one's stomach 心里七上八下 29. no pain, no gain 一分耕耘，一分收获 30. a journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step 千里之行，始于足下 Ⅲ. 词块升级 1. For the first time, the train carried me into the unknown. 2. My heart hammered like a drum against my ribs. 3. I swallowed my shyness and asked a stranger for directions. 4. The trip tested every bit of courage I had. 5. I came back with more than luggage—I came back changed. 6. Every street of that city was an unwritten page. 7. Standing on the platform, I felt taller than I had ever been. 8. I looked my fear in the eye and walked straight through it. 四、教材好句精选 1. The unknown is both frightening and fascinating. 2. On my first solo trip, butterflies danced in my stomach. 3. I took a deep breath and walked to the gate. 4. Before I set off, Mom reminded me again and again. 5. Outside the window, the familiar streets faded away. 6. At first, I didn't even dare to ask the way. 7. I plucked up courage to ask a kind-looking lady for help. 8. She didn't just point out the way; she walked me to the station. 9. Standing in front of Grandma's house, I could hardly believe my eyes. 10. It was this trip that made me believe in myself. 11. Only by stepping out of our comfort zone can we meet a better self. 12. The return ticket felt like a medal I had earned myself. 五、句式升级与仿写 1. Although fear held my arm, I lifted my ticket and boarded the train. 2. The trip was not only hard but also richly rewarding. 3. The stranger I turned to turned out to be a guardian angel. 4. Never will I forget the journey that changed me. 5. The moment I saw the sea, every hour of tiredness melted away. 6. What the journey taught me was an independence no book could offer. 7. There is an unknown world waiting for us. 8. With my head against the window, I watched the world flow backwards. 9. Step out of your comfort zone, and you will meet a stronger you. 10. It was this solo journey that handed me my first real confidence. 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·记叙+感悟类短文，情境已替换】 审体裁：英文报投稿记叙文，标题已给出，重在心理变化。 审人称：第一人称；紧张心理要用具体动作与感受呈现。 审时态：叙事用一般过去时；收获用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 交代这次经历是什么、背景如何（不限于上台表演，独自远行、第一次住校、第一次做某件难事等均可）；Para 2 当时的困难与你的应对；Para 3 收获与感悟。 审语气：真实不夸张；写"手心出汗"胜过写"我很紧张"。 【参考范文】 My First Time 　　The first time I stood on the stage of our school singing competition, my hands were sweating so badly that the microphone nearly slipped. 　　The music started, and for two seconds my mind went completely blank. Then I saw my English teacher in the front row, mouthing the first line. I took a deep breath and followed her lips. My voice came out thin, then steadier, and by the last chorus the audience was clapping along. 　　I won no prize that day. But I learned that courage is not the absence of fear—it is singing on with shaking hands. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 外研版选择性必修四 Unit 5　Into the Unknown 单元写作作业（教师版） 一、单元写作任务 你校英文报正在开展以 "Into the Unknown" 为主题的征稿活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，记叙一次你走出舒适区的经历（如第一次独自远行、第一次登台、转学等），内容包括： 1. 交代经历的时间与背景； 2. 描述你的不安、尝试与解决办法； 3. 说明这次经历带给你的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 标题已给出，不计入总词数。 Into the Unknown 　　____________________________________________________________________ 　　____________________________________________________________________ 二、审题建模（动笔前先想清楚这六件事） 项目 写作要点 体裁 记叙文（英文报征稿）：标题—背景—波折—收获，叙事为线、心理为魂。 人称 第一人称叙述，心理描写是得分关键；可写一两个陌生人或亲友的话作点缀。 时态 叙事用一般过去时，心理与场景可用过去进行时；收获用一般现在时。 结构 四段式。Para 1：背景（为何独自出发）；Para 2：不安（具体心理与处境）；Para 3：尝试与转机（求助、犯错、 overcome 的过程）；Para 4：收获。 要点 "不安—尝试—收获"三层缺一不可；不安要具体（心跳、手心出汗），收获要具体（一句感悟+一个变化）。 语气 真实、有少年气；可以自嘲，可以后怕，但结尾要亮。 三、话题词块梳理 Ⅰ. 话题词汇（中英对照，答案已填入） 话题词汇 1. unknown n./adj. 未知的事物；未知的 2. adventure n. 冒险；奇遇 3. explore vt. 探索；探究 4. expedition n. 探险；远征 5. courage n. 勇气；胆量 6. horizon n. 地平线；眼界 7. destination n. 目的地 8. journey n. 旅程 9. frontier n. 边疆；前沿 10. boundary n. 边界；界限 11. unfamiliar adj. 不熟悉的；陌生的 12. hesitate vi. 犹豫；迟疑 13. leap n./vi. 跳跃；飞跃 14. challenge n./vt. 挑战 15. discover vt. 发现；找到 16. independence n. 独立 17. confidence n. 自信；信心 18. obstacle n. 障碍；阻碍 19. overcome vt. 克服；战胜 20. curiosity n. 好奇心 21. reward n. 回报；奖赏 22. extreme adj. 极端的；极度的 23. surface n./vi. 表面；浮出水面 24. edge n. 边缘 Ⅱ. 话题词块（答案已填入） 话题词块 1. step out of one's comfort zone 走出舒适区 2. into the unknown 进入未知世界 3. take the first step 迈出第一步 4. set off 出发；动身 5. set out to do 着手做某事 6. on one's own 独自；靠自己 7. lose one's way 迷路 8. find one's way 找到路；找到办法 9. head for 朝……进发 10. out of one's depth 超出自己能力范围 11. take a deep breath 深吸一口气 12. pluck up courage 鼓起勇气 13. face one's fear 直面恐惧 14. push one's limits 挑战极限 15. beyond one's imagination 超乎想象 16. a leap of faith 信仰之跃；大胆一搏 17. look back on 回顾 18. broaden one's horizons 开阔眼界 19. open a new door 打开一扇新的门 20. gain confidence 获得信心 21. stand on one's own feet 自立 22. in the face of 面对；不顾 23. venture into 冒险进入 24. what lies ahead 前方的路 25. turn out to be 结果是；原来是 26. worth every minute 非常值得 27. swallow one's shyness 克服羞怯 28. have butterflies in one's stomach 心里七上八下 29. no pain, no gain 一分耕耘，一分收获 30. a journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step 千里之行，始于足下 Ⅲ. 词块升级（把左边的“基础表达”换成右边更高级的说法） 基础表达 升级表达 1. I traveled alone for the first time. For the first time, the train carried me into the unknown. 2. I was very nervous. My heart hammered like a drum against my ribs. 3. I asked strangers for help. I swallowed my shyness and asked a stranger for directions. 4. It was a difficult trip. The trip tested every bit of courage I had. 5. I learned a lot. I came back with more than luggage—I came back changed. 6. The city was new to me. Every street of that city was an unwritten page. 7. I felt proud at the station. Standing on the platform, I felt taller than I had ever been. 8. I overcame my fear. I looked my fear in the eye and walked straight through it. 四、教材好句精选（根据汉语补全句子，注意课文句式与词块的用法） 1. 未知的事物既令人恐惧，又令人着迷。 　　The unknown is both frightening and fascinating. 2. 第一次独自旅行，我的心里七上八下。 　　On my first solo trip, butterflies danced in my stomach. 3. 我深吸一口气，走向检票口。 　　I took a deep breath and walked to the gate. 4. 出发前，妈妈反复叮嘱我。 　　Before I set off, Mom reminded me again and again. 5. 车窗外，熟悉的街道渐渐远去。 　　Outside the window, the familiar streets faded away. 6. 一开始，我连问路都不敢。 　　At first, I didn't even dare to ask the way. 7. 我鼓起勇气向一位面善的阿姨求助。 　　I plucked up courage to ask a kind-looking lady for help. 8. 她不只给我指了路，还把我送到了车站。 　　She didn't just point out the way; she walked me to the station. 9. 站在外婆家门前，我几乎不敢相信自己的眼睛。 　　Standing in front of Grandma's house, I could hardly believe my eyes. 10. 正是这次旅行让我相信了自己。 　　It was this trip that made me believe in myself. 11. 只有走出舒适区，我们才能遇见更好的自己。（倒装） 　　Only by stepping out of our comfort zone can we meet a better self. 12. 回程的车票，是我挣来的勋章。 　　The return ticket felt like a medal I had earned myself. 五、句式升级与仿写（按要求改写下列句子，体会“高级感”从何而来） 1. I was afraid. I still got on the train. 要求：用 although 引导让步状语从句合并 → Although fear held my arm, I lifted my ticket and boarded the train. 2. The trip was hard. It was rewarding. 要求：用 not only...but also 合并 → The trip was not only hard but also richly rewarding. 3. I asked a stranger for help. She was very kind. 要求：用定语从句改写 → The stranger I turned to turned out to be a guardian angel. 4. I will never forget that journey. 要求：用 never 开头的倒装句 → Never will I forget the journey that changed me. 5. When I saw the sea, all my tiredness disappeared. 要求：用 the moment 合并 → The moment I saw the sea, every hour of tiredness melted away. 6. The journey taught me independence. 要求：用 what 引导主语从句 → What the journey taught me was an independence no book could offer. 7. The unknown world is waiting for us. 要求：用 there be 句型 + 现在分词 → There is an unknown world waiting for us. 8. I sat and watched the scenery go by. 要求：用 with 复合结构 → With my head against the window, I watched the world flow backwards. 9. If you step out of your comfort zone, you will find how strong you are. 要求：改为祈使句 + and 结构 → Step out of your comfort zone, and you will meet a stronger you. 10. This experience gave me confidence. 要求：用 It is...that 强调句 → It was this solo journey that handed me my first real confidence. 六、课外材料精编（读一读，背一背，用一用） Into the unknown we go, and out of it we grow. 走向未知，从中成长。　（倒装对称句） The comfort zone is a beautiful place, but nothing ever grows there. 舒适区很美好，但那里长不出任何东西。　（but 转折） What lies beyond fear is usually a better version of yourself. 恐惧的另一边，往往是更好的你。　（what 主语从句） Only those who wander into the unknown find new worlds. 只有走进未知的人，才能发现新世界。　（only 修饰主语 + 定语从句） Every great story begins with one trembling step. 每一个伟大的故事，都始于颤抖着迈出的第一步。　（比喻） Not until the train left did I realize how far from home I was. 直到火车开动，我才意识到自己离家有多远。　（not until 的倒装） So unfamiliar were the streets that even the map seemed to speak a foreign language. 街道如此陌生，连地图都像说着外语。　（so...that 的倒装） The horizon is not the edge of the world, but the beginning of the journey. 地平线不是世界的边缘，而是旅程的起点。　（not...but... 对称句） A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step. 千里之行，始于足下。　（谚语） Courage is not the absence of fear, but the decision to move with it. 勇气不是没有恐惧，而是带着恐惧前行。　（not...but... 对称句） It is in unfamiliar places that we meet our true selves. 恰恰是在陌生的地方，我们遇见真实的自己。　（强调句） The further I travelled, the smaller my fear became. 我走得越远，恐惧就越小。　（the + 比较级，the + 比较级） Every map was once an unknown land. 每张地图都曾是未知的土地。　（判断句） May you always have the courage to buy the ticket before you feel ready. 愿你永远有勇气，在准备好之前就买好那张车票。　（May 祝愿句 + before 从句） 七、同话题高考真题【改编自高考应用文真题·记叙+感悟类短文，情境已替换】 你校英文报 "Youth Voices" 栏目以 "My First Time" 为题征稿。请写一篇短文，记叙你的一次"第一次"经历，内容包括： 1. 经历是什么； 2. 当时的困难与你的应对； 3. 你的收获。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 本题改编自高考应用文真题（记叙+感悟类投稿），情境已替换为本单元话题。 【审题建模】 审体裁：英文报投稿记叙文，标题已给出，重在心理变化。 审人称：第一人称；紧张心理要用具体动作与感受呈现。 审时态：叙事用一般过去时；收获用一般现在时。 审内容：Para 1 交代这次经历是什么、背景如何（不限于上台表演，独自远行、第一次住校、第一次做某件难事等均可）；Para 2 当时的困难与你的应对；Para 3 收获与感悟。 审语气：真实不夸张；写"手心出汗"胜过写"我很紧张"。 【参考范文】 My First Time 　　The first time I stood on the stage of our school singing competition, my hands were sweating so badly that the microphone nearly slipped. 　　The music started, and for two seconds my mind went completely blank. Then I saw my English teacher in the front row, mouthing the first line. I took a deep breath and followed her lips. My voice came out thin, then steadier, and by the last chorus the audience was clapping along. 　　I won no prize that day. But I learned that courage is not the absence of fear—it is singing on with shaking hands. 【亮点句式】 ① ...my hands were sweating so badly that the microphone nearly slipped（用动作写紧张，画面感强） ② ...mouthing the first line（现在分词细节，无声的帮助更动人） ③ My voice came out thin, then steadier（比较级递进，唱出成长过程） ④ courage is not the absence of fear—it is singing on with shaking hands（化用名句，点题有力） 八、范文赏析 【参考范文】 Into the Unknown 　　Last summer, at fourteen, I took my first solo train ride—six hours, one backpack, and a grandmother waiting at the other end. 　　The moment the platform left my sight, butterflies danced in my stomach. At the transfer station I got lost, and the station hall swam with strangers. At first I didn't even dare to speak. Then I swallowed my shyness, plucked up courage and asked a kind-looking lady for help. She didn't just point out the way; she walked me to the right platform. 　　Standing in front of Grandma's house that evening, I could hardly believe my eyes—or myself. I had read maps, changed trains and fed myself, all on my own. 　　The return ticket felt like a medal I had earned myself. Now, whenever life hands me an unfamiliar door, I remember: the unknown is both frightening and fascinating—and it always, always leads somewhere. 【学生习作】 Into the Unknown 　　Last year I traveled to Beijing alone for the first time. I was very nervous because it was my first trip. 　　On the train I didn't know what to do. When I arrived, I couldn't find the station exit. I asked a policeman and he told me the way. Then I took a bus to my uncle's home. 　　This trip taught me a lesson. If we try, we can do many things. I think it was a good trip and I learned to be independent. 【习作点评】 优点：结构完整，有"不安—求助—收获"的层次，能点出独立，语句基本通顺。 问题一：心理描写太直白。两次"very nervous"是标签式表达，应改为具体感受，如"手里攥着车票，掌心全是汗"。 问题二：细节不足。迷路的场景一笔带过，可写清在哪迷路、问了谁、对方如何回答。 问题三：句式平淡，全是简单句；应加入强调句、倒装句或 with 复合结构等本单元句式。 问题四：结尾"I think it was a good trip"收得无力；应给一句有分量的感悟，如"回程车票是我挣来的勋章"。 【评分标准】（满分15分，按高考应用文评分细则） 档次 分数 评分描述 第五档 13—15分 覆盖全部要点，应用了较多语法结构和词汇，句式有变化，衔接自然，语法和拼写错误极少，完全达到交际目的。 第四档 10—12分 覆盖全部要点，语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，衔接基本连贯，有少量错误但不影响理解。 第三档 7—9分 基本覆盖要点，语法结构单调，词汇有限，有一些错误，部分内容表达不清。 第二档 4—6分 遗漏较多要点，语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响理解。 第一档 1—3分 只能写出个别单词，内容太少，无法传达信息。 【写作指导：本单元写作的三个得分点】 得分点一：把"不安"写进身体。不要写 I was very nervous，而要写 butterflies danced in my stomach、hands sweating 等身体反应，画面立刻就有了。 得分点二：抓住转折的那一下。走出舒适区的故事重点在"迈出去"的一瞬：深吸一口气、开口求助、抬脚上车——把这个瞬间放慢写细，文章就活了。 得分点三：用本单元高级句式收尾。Only by stepping out of our comfort zone can we meet a better self. 或 It was this trip that made me believe in myself. 一句倒装或强调句收束，胜过三句总结。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $