续写复习：2021年 母亲节惊喜 课件-2027届高考英语一轮复习专项

zh 审题 谋篇 布局 遣词造句 润色修改 教学步骤 撰写成文 1 读原文 找主演 立人设 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. 试题再现 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. 试题再现 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 试题再现 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 2 读P1P2首句 定大小思路 Para1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ______________________________________________________________ Para 2The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ______________________________________________________________ 2 审题 谋篇 布局 遣词造句 润色修改 教学步骤 撰写成文 大思路？ Para1 在father的帮助下做成早餐 Para2 mother看到早餐的感受+过节+升华 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 润色修改 撰写成文 谋篇 Para1 在father的帮助下做成早餐 小思路： 1.father看见杂乱的厨房 2.the twins 说出给mother惊喜的计划 3.father决定帮助孩子们做早餐 4.father指导孩子们做早餐 5.the twins做好早餐， 迫不及待地想要给mother惊喜 思考一下：the twins 的情绪变化 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 润色修改 撰写成文 谋篇 Para2 mother看到早餐的感受+过节+升华 小思路： the twins叫醒mother 跟mother 说节日快乐 2. mother看见早餐惊呆了 3. mother 吃早餐 4.father入场，一起庆祝母亲节 5.升华 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 1.father看见杂乱的厨房 增加细节 Scanning the whole kitchen , he was surprised to notice the black bread , the spilled/spilt porridge and even the nervousness in the twins’ eyes. 润色修改 1.看着厨房他惊讶地发现厨房里黑了的面包以及溢出来的粥甚至是孩子们眼中的紧张 非谓语动词 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 2.the twins 说出给mother惊喜的计划 增加细节描写 With his face flushing, Jeff stammered out their plan. 润色修改 2.满脸通红，Jeff 结结巴巴地说出来他们的计划 with复合结构 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 3.father决定帮助孩子们做早餐 增加细节描写 Instead of criticizing them, the father beamed with satisfaction, saying softly, "I'll help you." Jenna and Jeff exchanged glances and nodded in relief. 润色修改 3.没有指责他们，father满意地笑了，温柔地说“我会帮助你们”Jenna和Jeff互看了一眼并点了点头 短语法 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 4.father指导孩子们做早餐 增加细节描写 It didn't take long before the kitchen was tidy again. Guided by their father, they adjusted the stove heat properly, and soon an inviting aroma filled the whole kitchen. 润色修改 4.很快厨房就收拾干净了，在爸爸的指导下，他们调整了炉灶火候，很快整个厨房就飘满了诱人的香气。 从句+非谓语动词 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 5.the twins做好早餐， 迫不及待地想要给mother惊喜 增加细节描写 The twins leapt up and down as they saw the well-prepared breakfast, eager to give mom a surprise and see her reaction. 润色修改 5.当他们看到做好的早餐，the twins 高兴地上蹿下跳，想要给妈妈惊喜，并且想要看看妈妈的反应 形容词作状语 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 润色修改 撰写成文 谋篇 Para2 mother看到早餐的感受+过节+升华 小思路： the twins叫醒mother 跟mother 说节日快乐 2. mother看见早餐惊呆了 3. mother 吃早餐 4.father入场 5.一起庆祝母亲节+升华 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 the twins叫醒mother, 跟mother 说节日快乐 增加细节 Gently tapping her shoulder, they yelled out ,”Happy Mother’s Day!” 润色修改 1.轻轻地拍了妈妈的肩膀，他们大声喊“母亲节快乐！” 副词用法 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 2. mother看见早餐惊呆了 增加细节 Mother straightened up, opened her eyes and froze in astonishment. 润色修改 2.mother直直地坐了起来，打开眼睛，惊讶地僵住了 动作链 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 3.Mother吃早餐 增加动作描写+心理描写+ 动作链 As she took a bite of the toast and the porridge, she couldn‘t help weeping ,unable to hold back tears. Moved by their thoughtful gesture, she stroked their kids affectionately, gave them a grateful hug and said in an excited voice,“ Thank you ! This is the best gift I’ve received!” 润色修改 3.当她吃面包和粥的时候，她忍不住哭泣，眼泪抑制不住。被他们的体贴所打动，她抚摸他们的脸庞，给了他们一个拥抱，并期望用激动的声音说“谢谢你们，这是我收到过的最好的礼物” 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 4. 父亲入场 增加细节 At the time , in came the father , who pretended to be astonished and winked at the twins. 润色修改 4.就在那时，father进来了，他假装很惊讶并向the twins 眨了眨眼睛 全部倒装 教学步骤 审题 布局 遣词造句 撰写成文 谋篇 5. 一起庆祝母亲节+升华 增加细节 Bathed in the sunlight through the window, they enjoyed the breakfast together, feeling a flood of warmth surging through them. It was the love from the twins that enabled the mother to have such an unforgettable Mother’s Day. 润色修改 5.沐浴着窗外的阳光，他们一起享受早餐，一股暖流涌上心头。正是双胞胎的爱，才让这位母亲度过了如此难忘的母亲节。 形容词作状语+心理描写通用表达+强调句 撰写成文 Para1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Scanning the whole kitchen , he was surprised to notice the black bread , the spilled/spilt porridge and even the nervousness in the twins’ eyes. With the face flushing, Jeff stammered out their plan. Instead of criticizing them, the father beamed with satisfaction, saying softly, "I'll help you." Jenna and Jeff exchanged glances and nodded in relief.It didn't take long before the kitchen was tidy again. Guided by their father, they adjusted the stove heat properly, and soon an inviting aroma filled the whole kitchen.The twins leapt up and down as they saw the well-prepared breakfast, eager to give mom a surprise and see her reaction. Para 2 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Gently tapping her shoulder, they yelled out ,”Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother straightened up, opened her eyes and froze in astonishment. As she took a bite of the toast and the porridge,she couldn‘t help weeping ,unable to hold back tears. Moved by their thoughtful gesture, she stroked their kids affectionately, gave them a grateful hug and said in an excited voice,“ Thank you ! This is the best gift I’ve received!” At the time , in came the father , who pretended to be astonished and winked at the twins. Bathed in the sunlight through the window, they enjoyed the breakfast together, feeling a flood of warmth surging through them. It was the love from the twins that enabled the mother to have such an unforgettable Mother’s Day. $