读后续写高频主题突破01 困境与突破（个人成长类）（复习讲义）（全国通用）2027年高考英语一轮复习讲练测

读后续写高频主题突破 专题01 困境与突破（个人成长类）（复习讲义）（原卷版） 内容导航 01 命题透视·考情前瞻 对标素养，研判高考命题趋势 02 思维建模·脉络梳理 搭建知识框架，构建系统思维 03 考点精讲·靶向突破 拆解核心考点，归纳解题范式 04 真题溯源·考向感知 溯源真题逻辑，感知高考考向 Part 01 命题透视·考情前瞻 对标素养，研判高考命题趋势 一、三年考情迭代（2024年-2026年） 1. 格式与命题导向 个人成长类是高考读后续写核心母题。近三年命题彻底摒弃套路化写作，从“堆砌句子、凑足词数”转向逻辑闭环+情感真实+立意深刻，聚焦困境成长叙事的层次感与真实性。 2024年：侧重基础情节完整，考查“遭遇困境—努力尝试—获得成长”基础逻辑，允许情节表达简单化，无严苛情感层次要求。 2025年：强化内心冲突考查，要求体现人物放弃与坚持的心理博弈，杜绝扁平化人设，侧重情感递进的合理性。 2026年（命题趋势）：聚焦细节真实+心理立体+主题升华，严查无挣扎突破、无铺垫成长、空洞抒情等套路化写作，内心描写质量与结尾立意高度成为满分核心标尺。 2. 核心考查维度 本专题满分核心三要素：困境真实可感、内心冲突立体、成长升华落地。区别于亲情、善意、自然类主题，个人成长类续写的核心得分点不在于情节复杂，而在于心理变化的完整闭环，这也是中档作文与满分作文的核心分水岭。 二、题型定位与核心特点 本专题涵盖三大高频子主题：挫折与蜕变、梦想与坚持、勇气与自我超越。 高考命题固定载体：运动挑战（骑行、跑步）、技能学习（手工、乐器、厨艺）、学业瓶颈、比赛失利、自我怯懦突破等生活化场景，完全贴合高中生认知范围。 固定叙事内核：主角遭遇客观挫折→产生负面情绪与放弃念头→内外力干预→主动坚持突破→收获成长感悟，情节逻辑固定、考查维度稳定。 真题精准映射：骑单车摔倒后忍痛完赛、反复练习手工屡屡失败终成功、训练瓶颈想要放弃最终突破、演讲怯场自我救赎、比赛失利重拾初心等经典真题场景。 三、高频扣分重灾区（成长类专属） 高考阅卷数据显示，80%成长类续写低分作文，均栽在心理描写缺失、情节突兀、升华空洞三大问题： 1. 无内心冲突，情节扁平化：只写“努力、坚持、成功”的动作流程，完全没有犹豫、挣扎、自我怀疑的心理过程，人物成长无依据，属于典型流水账。 2. 心理转折突兀：前文极度挫败、绝望，无任何铺垫直接变得积极乐观，情绪瞬间反转，违背成长逻辑。 3. 挫折描写空洞：只用 simple sentence 笼统写 I was sad、I wanted to give up，无细节、无层次，画面感缺失。 4. 结尾升华套路化：千篇一律使用简单金句，未结合本次困境经历，主旨与情节脱节，立意浅薄。 5. 人设前后割裂：原文坚韧自律的主角，无端轻言放弃；原文内向怯懦的人物，突然大胆突破，无人设过渡。 四、本节复习目标 1. 熟记成长类续写五大步万能叙事骨架，构建标准化情节逻辑，杜绝情节跑偏、断层； 2. 攻克核心难点：掌握多层次内心冲突描写技法，摆脱单一情绪表达，写出高分心理层次； 3. 区分三大子主题描写差异，适配挫折、坚持、自我超越各类场景精准写作； 4. 熟记专属成长升华金句，实现结尾立意拔高，杜绝套路化空泛抒情； 5. 适配高考真题场景，实现“读文抓线索、动笔有逻辑、结尾有深度”的满分写作闭环。 Part 02 思维建模·脉络梳理 搭建知识框架，构建系统思维 一、续写底层核心原则 个人成长类续写有固定成长逻辑，所有情节、心理、结尾必须贴合三大黄金原则： 1. 循序渐进原则（核心）：成长无捷径，情绪必须遵循“低落挣扎→犹豫动摇→慢慢坚定→突破蜕变”的递进逻辑，禁止瞬间反转。 2. 困境合理原则：所有挫折、失败、疲惫、自我怀疑贴合高中生真实生活，杜绝夸张、魔幻、离谱剧情。 3.正向升华原则：全文最终落脚坚持、勇气、复盘、自我超越、正视挫折等正向立意，贴合高考立德树人核心导向。 二、成长类专属万能叙事骨架（考场直接套用） 固定满分链条：遭遇困境→内心挣扎→内外力推动→突破自我→成长感悟 阶段1：遭遇困境（客观铺垫·第一段开篇） 聚焦客观挫折：身体疲惫、动作失误、多次失败、外界打击、自我能力不足，用细节交代困境背景，渲染低落、焦虑、挫败的氛围，为心理冲突做铺垫。 阶段2：内心挣扎（高分核心·全文亮点） 构建双向对立心理冲突：放弃、懈怠、自我否定 VS 坚持、初心、不甘、自尊。通过心理博弈体现人物的纠结与成长，是区分中档与满分作文的关键。 阶段3：内外力推动（情节转折·承上启下） 内力：自我觉醒、回想初心、不甘平庸、反思失误；外力：师长鼓励、同伴陪伴、榜样启发、过往经历提醒、细微温暖触动。 阶段4：突破自我（情节高潮·动作落地） 摒弃消极心态，付诸具体行动：调整方法、反复尝试、咬牙坚持、直面恐惧、克服短板，用具象动作体现蜕变过程，拒绝空喊口号。 阶段5：成长感悟（结尾升华·主旨拔高） 跳出单一事件，提炼普适性成长哲理，关联挫折价值、坚持意义、自我超越的内涵，完成全文逻辑闭环与立意升华。 三、三大子主题思维适配要点 1. 挫折与蜕变：侧重“失败—反思—改正—蜕变”，重点描写受挫后的自我调整与心态转变； 2. 梦想与坚持：侧重“疲惫—迷茫—坚守初心—久久为功”，重点刻画长期坚持中的自我博弈； 3. 勇气与自我超越：侧重“怯懦—恐惧—突破舒适区—战胜自我”，重点凸显直面短板的勇气。 Part 03 考点精讲·靶向突破 拆解核心考点，归纳解题范式 考点一 高分核心：多层次内心冲突描写（提分关键） 低分通病：情绪单一、无博弈、无层次，全程只有 I was upset and wanted to give up. 满分思维公式：负面情绪爆发 → 双向心理博弈 → 微光信念觉醒 四大场景高分句型（可直接背诵默写） 1. 失败受挫类（手工/学习/比赛失利） A wave of disappointment washed over me. On one hand, I was utterly exhausted by countless failures; on the other hand, I hated to abandon what I had devoted so much time to. 失望席卷全身，无数次失败让我身心俱疲，但我又不甘心放弃自己付出良久的努力。 2. 疲惫迷茫类（长期坚持遇瓶颈） Tired and confused, I fell into a fierce inner struggle. The thought of giving up crept into my mind, yet my initial determination refused to fade away. 疲惫与迷茫裹挟着我，内心陷入激烈博弈，放弃的念头悄然滋生，可最初的初心始终未曾消散。 3. 恐惧怯懦类（自我突破、直面挑战） I stood rooted to the spot, overwhelmed by fear and nervousness. However, a voice deep in my heart told me that courage meant moving forward despite fear. 我伫立原地，被恐惧与紧张包裹，但心底有个声音告诉我，勇气从来不是无所畏惧，而是直面恐惧、毅然前行。 4. 自我怀疑类（否定自我到重拾信心） I secretly doubted my ability and even wanted to quit. After a bitter inner struggle, I finally chose to stick to it rather than yield to difficulties. 我暗自怀疑自己的能力，甚至萌生退意，经过一番痛苦的内心博弈，我最终选择坚守，而非向困境妥协。 考点二 三类场景情节推进高分范式 1. 挫折反复类（手工、技能学习、刷题训练） Though repeated failures had frustrated me greatly, I refused to lose heart. Instead, I calmed down to find out my mistakes, adjusted my methods and tried again with greater patience. 纵使反复的失败让我备受打击，我从未气馁。我冷静复盘失误、调整方法，以更充足的耐心重新尝试。 2. 运动坚持类（骑行、跑步、体能挑战） Ignoring the throbbing pain and overwhelming tiredness, I gritted my teeth and kept pushing myself forward. No difficulty could shake my determination to stick to the end. 我无视阵阵剧痛与铺天盖地的疲惫，咬紧牙关逼迫自己稳步前行，任何困境都无法撼动我坚持到底的决心。 3. 自我超越类（克服自卑、突破恐惧、走出舒适区） Realizing that escaping could never solve problems, I plucked up all my courage to face the challenge bravely, determined to break through my own limits. 我深知逃避无益，于是鼓足全部勇气直面挑战，决心突破自我局限、完成自我超越。 考点三 结尾升华金句（成长类专属） 适配所有个人成长主题，句式高级、立意深刻，完美适配高考阅卷审美，杜绝大白话收尾。 1. 挫折与蜕变专属 Every setback is a precious gift in disguise. It is through overcoming failures that we gain growth and become tougher than before. 每一次挫折都是别样的馈赠，正是在战胜失败的过程中，我们不断成长、愈发坚韧。 2. 梦想与坚持专属 Success never comes easily. Only persistent efforts and unwavering determination can turn dreams into reality. 从无唾手可得的成功，唯有持之以恒的付出与坚定不移的信念，方能让梦想落地生花。 3. 勇气与自我超越专属 The greatest opponent is always ourselves. Breaking through inner fears means winning the most important victory in life. 人生最大的对手从来都是自己，冲破内心的怯懦，便是人生最珍贵的胜利。 4. 通用万能升华（适配所有场景） Growth lies not in never falling, but in rising bravely every time we fall and moving forward with unremitting efforts. 成长从不是从不跌倒，而是每次跌倒后都能勇敢站起，步履不停、向阳前行。 考点四 五大易错点清零 1. 杜绝无挣扎突破：禁止出现“遇到困难→直接坚持→立刻成功”的无脑情节，必须插入内心博弈过程； 2. 杜绝情绪硬反转：挫败、迷茫的情绪必须有过渡，不能瞬间乐观积极； 3.杜绝动作空洞：坚持、努力必须搭配具体动作（调整方法、复盘失误、咬牙坚持），拒绝空喊口号； 4. 杜绝升华脱节：结尾感悟必须贴合本次挫折经历，不能套用万能空句； 5. 杜绝句式单一：心理描写优先使用分词状语、定语从句、让步状语从句，摆脱简单句堆砌。 Part 04 真题溯源·考向感知 真题母题：骑行摔倒坚持完赛（高考经典改编真题） 一、真题原文片段 I took part in a school cycling race last weekend. The race went smoothly at first, and I kept pace with other competitors confidently. However, halfway through the race, I accidentally fell off my bike. Sharp pain spread through my knee, and my bike was slightly damaged. Seeing the bleeding wound and the fading figures of other runners, I felt totally exhausted and hopeless. I was on the verge of giving up the tough race. 二、原文四维线索拆解 1. 人物线索：主角自信、有毅力、热爱运动，遇挫折陷入迷茫，人设核心：坚韧但会疲惫迷茫； 2. 情节线索：顺利参赛→意外摔倒受伤→对手远去→身心俱疲、濒临放弃； 3. 情感线索：自信从容→疼痛慌乱→疲惫绝望→动摇放弃； 4.主题线索：挫折磨砺、坚持不放弃、自我突破、逆风成长。 三、续写范文（贴合骨架+心理突出+升华到位） Paragraph 1（内心挣扎+内力觉醒+重新出发） I sat on the ground, staring at my bleeding knee, consumed by great disappointment. A strong desire to give up crept into my mind, for the pain was almost unbearable and the gap with others was getting wider and wider. Just as I was trapped in fierce inner struggle, I recalled the countless mornings and evenings I spent practicing cycling. It was my persistent efforts and initial dream that drove me to take part in the race. Refusing to waste all my hard work, I took a deep breath, struggled to stand up and continued to move forward slowly. Paragraph 2（坚持突破+收获成长+主旨升华） Though every pedaling brought sharp pain and extreme tiredness, I gritted my teeth and kept going steadily. I ignored the physical discomfort and focused all my attention on the finish line step by step. To my great relief, I finally completed the race successfully. I didn’t win a prize, but I gained far more valuable growth. This experience taught me vividly that growth is accompanied by setbacks and hardships. Only by overcoming difficulties and surpassing ourselves can we embrace a better self in life. 四、范文亮点解析 1. 严格贴合五段成长骨架，情节逻辑完整、层层递进，无断层、无突兀； 2. 重点突出双向内心冲突描写，兼具放弃的念头与坚守的初心，心理层次丰富； 3. 动作细节具象化，避免空泛抒情，画面感极强； 4. 结尾升华贴合事件，不套路、不空洞，精准落地自我超越的成长主题。 五、方法复盘 1、专题核心口诀（考场速记） 成长续写五步走，困境挣扎先铺就； 内心博弈是亮点，内外助力转势头； 实干突破见蜕变，升华扣题立意优； 无波无澜是大忌，真情细节稳满分。 2、一轮必背核心语料（成长类专属） 1. 核心动词（困境与突破） 1　 struggle 挣扎/坚持 2　 persevere 坚持 3　 overcome 克服 4　 surpass 超越 5　 adjust 调整 6　 recover 重拾 7　 endure 承受 2. 核心名词（成长主题） 8　 setback 挫折 9　 perseverance 毅力 10　 determination 决心 11　 breakthrough 突破 12　 growth 蜕变 13　 courage 勇气 3. 高分形容词/副词 14　 overwhelmed 不知所措的 15　 persistent 坚持不懈的 16　 tough 艰难的 17　 steadily 坚定地 18　 bravely 勇敢地 3、写作要求 1. 严格遵循遭遇困境→内心挣扎→内外推动→突破自我→成长感悟核心骨架； 2. 重点刻画双向内心冲突，杜绝情节扁平化； 3. 结尾运用本节课成长升华金句，立意深刻； 4. 词数150左右，句式丰富、衔接自然。 高考真题 （2026·全国二卷） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 As far as I can remember, I’ve always been a night owl. Even in middle school I would stay up very late. I would feel completely at ease doing my homework in bed, with light music on. I found comfort in keeping myself awake when everyone else had gone to bed, and I loved the silence of the night. My parents urged me to get out of this so-called unhealthy habit, but their repeated requests fell on deaf ears. Fast forward to my first year of college. I still loved the night and would stay up until unruly hours for no apparent reason, chatting online and watching videos. When I finally started to study, I would race through the assigned work, often well past midnight. My roommates would tell me to go to bed and get up early the following morning to do it instead. Get up early to do my homework? No way! I would never do that. Then, one day last term, I did exactly that. Bent over my laptop while sitting on the bed in the corner of my room, I suddenly felt a pounding headache, and had to lie down. Unable to keep my eyes open, I decided I had no choice but to finish my homework the next morning. I woke up at 6 am. Hardly had I written half a page when I felt a sharp pain in my chest. At the school clinic, a doctor, with a serious expression on his face, handed me a medical report. “You’re 20, but your heart is 40!” he said. A cold wave went through me. I realized that years of living as a late-night person had turned my heart into an overworked engine. 注意： （1）续写词数应为150左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Struck by the doctor’s warning, I knew I had to make a change. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Slowly but surely, my efforts to adjust to the new routine paid off. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【2026浙江一月卷】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was a regular Saturday morning, just like any other. I was driving my nine-year-old daughter, Emma, to her weekly swimming lesson. Recently, Emma had started seeing me as a true hero who could solve any problem fairly. “You always know what’s right, Dad,” she would say. We were talking about her class when I noticed a crowd up ahead and had to slow down. People were gathered on the street, pointing and laughing. In the middle of it all was a large brown and white cow. It looked completely lost and terrified. Some kids were shouting nearby, which seemed to scare the animal even more. A strong feeling of anger rose inside me. These people were treating the poor creature’s fear as entertainment. “Dad, that cow is scared.” Emma said softly from the back seat. “What would you do?” Her question was serious. She believed I would do the right thing. “Well,” I said, trying to sound confident for her, “I would calm it down and help it find its way home.” I explained that I knew a lot about cows. I spent my childhood on a farm, and now I even worked at a beef processing plant. I was sure my experience would impress Emma. After dropping off a very impressed Emma, I turned my car around. I felt it was my duty to go back and help. When I returned, the scene was worse. I learned from a shop owner that the cow had been wandering for a while, knocking over a fruit stand and causing quite a bit of trouble. I took a slow, careful step towards the animal, speaking in a gentle voice. However, instead of calming down, the cow lowered its head and let out a threatening sound. It stared directly at me, full of hostility. My confidence faded, replaced by a sudden fear. This wasn’t going to be easy at all. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 Just as I was about to turn and run, two police officers arrived on the scene. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ After we managed to secure the cow to a tree, we began to discuss what to do with it. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【2024浙江1月卷】 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. ” It’s just the beginning, “she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure. ” Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word” mile. “Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【2023年新高考全国Ⅰ&II卷】 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did. So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice. What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them. When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【2022年新高考全国Ⅰ 卷】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route（路线）through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide." I bit back my frustration（懊恼）. I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答. We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【2021年新高考全国Ⅰ &Ⅱ 卷】 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $ 读后续写高频主题突破 专题01 困境与突破（个人成长类）（复习讲义）（解析版） 内容导航 01 命题透视·考情前瞻 对标素养，研判高考命题趋势 02 思维建模·脉络梳理 搭建知识框架，构建系统思维 03 考点精讲·靶向突破 拆解核心考点，归纳解题范式 04 真题溯源·考向感知 溯源真题逻辑，感知高考考向 Part 01 命题透视·考情前瞻 对标素养，研判高考命题趋势 一、三年考情迭代（2024年-2026年） 1. 格式与命题导向 个人成长类是高考读后续写核心母题。近三年命题彻底摒弃套路化写作，从“堆砌句子、凑足词数”转向逻辑闭环+情感真实+立意深刻，聚焦困境成长叙事的层次感与真实性。 2024年：侧重基础情节完整，考查“遭遇困境—努力尝试—获得成长”基础逻辑，允许情节表达简单化，无严苛情感层次要求。 2025年：强化内心冲突考查，要求体现人物放弃与坚持的心理博弈，杜绝扁平化人设，侧重情感递进的合理性。 2026年（命题趋势）：聚焦细节真实+心理立体+主题升华，严查无挣扎突破、无铺垫成长、空洞抒情等套路化写作，内心描写质量与结尾立意高度成为满分核心标尺。 2. 核心考查维度 本专题满分核心三要素：困境真实可感、内心冲突立体、成长升华落地。区别于亲情、善意、自然类主题，个人成长类续写的核心得分点不在于情节复杂，而在于心理变化的完整闭环，这也是中档作文与满分作文的核心分水岭。 二、题型定位与核心特点 本专题涵盖三大高频子主题：挫折与蜕变、梦想与坚持、勇气与自我超越。 高考命题固定载体：运动挑战（骑行、跑步）、技能学习（手工、乐器、厨艺）、学业瓶颈、比赛失利、自我怯懦突破等生活化场景，完全贴合高中生认知范围。 固定叙事内核：主角遭遇客观挫折→产生负面情绪与放弃念头→内外力干预→主动坚持突破→收获成长感悟，情节逻辑固定、考查维度稳定。 真题精准映射：骑单车摔倒后忍痛完赛、反复练习手工屡屡失败终成功、训练瓶颈想要放弃最终突破、演讲怯场自我救赎、比赛失利重拾初心等经典真题场景。 三、高频扣分重灾区（成长类专属） 高考阅卷数据显示，80%成长类续写低分作文，均栽在心理描写缺失、情节突兀、升华空洞三大问题： 1. 无内心冲突，情节扁平化：只写“努力、坚持、成功”的动作流程，完全没有犹豫、挣扎、自我怀疑的心理过程，人物成长无依据，属于典型流水账。 2. 心理转折突兀：前文极度挫败、绝望，无任何铺垫直接变得积极乐观，情绪瞬间反转，违背成长逻辑。 3. 挫折描写空洞：只用 simple sentence 笼统写 I was sad、I wanted to give up，无细节、无层次，画面感缺失。 4. 结尾升华套路化：千篇一律使用简单金句，未结合本次困境经历，主旨与情节脱节，立意浅薄。 5. 人设前后割裂：原文坚韧自律的主角，无端轻言放弃；原文内向怯懦的人物，突然大胆突破，无人设过渡。 四、本节复习目标 1. 熟记成长类续写五大步万能叙事骨架，构建标准化情节逻辑，杜绝情节跑偏、断层； 2. 攻克核心难点：掌握多层次内心冲突描写技法，摆脱单一情绪表达，写出高分心理层次； 3. 区分三大子主题描写差异，适配挫折、坚持、自我超越各类场景精准写作； 4. 熟记专属成长升华金句，实现结尾立意拔高，杜绝套路化空泛抒情； 5. 适配高考真题场景，实现“读文抓线索、动笔有逻辑、结尾有深度”的满分写作闭环。 Part 02 思维建模·脉络梳理 搭建知识框架，构建系统思维 一、续写底层核心原则 个人成长类续写有固定成长逻辑，所有情节、心理、结尾必须贴合三大黄金原则： 1. 循序渐进原则（核心）：成长无捷径，情绪必须遵循“低落挣扎→犹豫动摇→慢慢坚定→突破蜕变”的递进逻辑，禁止瞬间反转。 2. 困境合理原则：所有挫折、失败、疲惫、自我怀疑贴合高中生真实生活，杜绝夸张、魔幻、离谱剧情。 3.正向升华原则：全文最终落脚坚持、勇气、复盘、自我超越、正视挫折等正向立意，贴合高考立德树人核心导向。 二、成长类专属万能叙事骨架（考场直接套用） 固定满分链条：遭遇困境→内心挣扎→内外力推动→突破自我→成长感悟 阶段1：遭遇困境（客观铺垫·第一段开篇） 聚焦客观挫折：身体疲惫、动作失误、多次失败、外界打击、自我能力不足，用细节交代困境背景，渲染低落、焦虑、挫败的氛围，为心理冲突做铺垫。 阶段2：内心挣扎（高分核心·全文亮点） 构建双向对立心理冲突：放弃、懈怠、自我否定 VS 坚持、初心、不甘、自尊。通过心理博弈体现人物的纠结与成长，是区分中档与满分作文的关键。 阶段3：内外力推动（情节转折·承上启下） 内力：自我觉醒、回想初心、不甘平庸、反思失误；外力：师长鼓励、同伴陪伴、榜样启发、过往经历提醒、细微温暖触动。 阶段4：突破自我（情节高潮·动作落地） 摒弃消极心态，付诸具体行动：调整方法、反复尝试、咬牙坚持、直面恐惧、克服短板，用具象动作体现蜕变过程，拒绝空喊口号。 阶段5：成长感悟（结尾升华·主旨拔高） 跳出单一事件，提炼普适性成长哲理，关联挫折价值、坚持意义、自我超越的内涵，完成全文逻辑闭环与立意升华。 三、三大子主题思维适配要点 1. 挫折与蜕变：侧重“失败—反思—改正—蜕变”，重点描写受挫后的自我调整与心态转变； 2. 梦想与坚持：侧重“疲惫—迷茫—坚守初心—久久为功”，重点刻画长期坚持中的自我博弈； 3. 勇气与自我超越：侧重“怯懦—恐惧—突破舒适区—战胜自我”，重点凸显直面短板的勇气。 Part 03 考点精讲·靶向突破 拆解核心考点，归纳解题范式 考点一 高分核心：多层次内心冲突描写（提分关键） 低分通病：情绪单一、无博弈、无层次，全程只有 I was upset and wanted to give up. 满分思维公式：负面情绪爆发 → 双向心理博弈 → 微光信念觉醒 四大场景高分句型（可直接背诵默写） 1. 失败受挫类（手工/学习/比赛失利） A wave of disappointment washed over me. On one hand, I was utterly exhausted by countless failures; on the other hand, I hated to abandon what I had devoted so much time to. 失望席卷全身，无数次失败让我身心俱疲，但我又不甘心放弃自己付出良久的努力。 2. 疲惫迷茫类（长期坚持遇瓶颈） Tired and confused, I fell into a fierce inner struggle. The thought of giving up crept into my mind, yet my initial determination refused to fade away. 疲惫与迷茫裹挟着我，内心陷入激烈博弈，放弃的念头悄然滋生，可最初的初心始终未曾消散。 3. 恐惧怯懦类（自我突破、直面挑战） I stood rooted to the spot, overwhelmed by fear and nervousness. However, a voice deep in my heart told me that courage meant moving forward despite fear. 我伫立原地，被恐惧与紧张包裹，但心底有个声音告诉我，勇气从来不是无所畏惧，而是直面恐惧、毅然前行。 4. 自我怀疑类（否定自我到重拾信心） I secretly doubted my ability and even wanted to quit. After a bitter inner struggle, I finally chose to stick to it rather than yield to difficulties. 我暗自怀疑自己的能力，甚至萌生退意，经过一番痛苦的内心博弈，我最终选择坚守，而非向困境妥协。 考点二 三类场景情节推进高分范式 1. 挫折反复类（手工、技能学习、刷题训练） Though repeated failures had frustrated me greatly, I refused to lose heart. Instead, I calmed down to find out my mistakes, adjusted my methods and tried again with greater patience. 纵使反复的失败让我备受打击，我从未气馁。我冷静复盘失误、调整方法，以更充足的耐心重新尝试。 2. 运动坚持类（骑行、跑步、体能挑战） Ignoring the throbbing pain and overwhelming tiredness, I gritted my teeth and kept pushing myself forward. No difficulty could shake my determination to stick to the end. 我无视阵阵剧痛与铺天盖地的疲惫，咬紧牙关逼迫自己稳步前行，任何困境都无法撼动我坚持到底的决心。 3. 自我超越类（克服自卑、突破恐惧、走出舒适区） Realizing that escaping could never solve problems, I plucked up all my courage to face the challenge bravely, determined to break through my own limits. 我深知逃避无益，于是鼓足全部勇气直面挑战，决心突破自我局限、完成自我超越。 考点三 结尾升华金句（成长类专属） 适配所有个人成长主题，句式高级、立意深刻，完美适配高考阅卷审美，杜绝大白话收尾。 1. 挫折与蜕变专属 Every setback is a precious gift in disguise. It is through overcoming failures that we gain growth and become tougher than before. 每一次挫折都是别样的馈赠，正是在战胜失败的过程中，我们不断成长、愈发坚韧。 2. 梦想与坚持专属 Success never comes easily. Only persistent efforts and unwavering determination can turn dreams into reality. 从无唾手可得的成功，唯有持之以恒的付出与坚定不移的信念，方能让梦想落地生花。 3. 勇气与自我超越专属 The greatest opponent is always ourselves. Breaking through inner fears means winning the most important victory in life. 人生最大的对手从来都是自己，冲破内心的怯懦，便是人生最珍贵的胜利。 4. 通用万能升华（适配所有场景） Growth lies not in never falling, but in rising bravely every time we fall and moving forward with unremitting efforts. 成长从不是从不跌倒，而是每次跌倒后都能勇敢站起，步履不停、向阳前行。 考点四 五大易错点清零 1. 杜绝无挣扎突破：禁止出现“遇到困难→直接坚持→立刻成功”的无脑情节，必须插入内心博弈过程； 2. 杜绝情绪硬反转：挫败、迷茫的情绪必须有过渡，不能瞬间乐观积极； 3.杜绝动作空洞：坚持、努力必须搭配具体动作（调整方法、复盘失误、咬牙坚持），拒绝空喊口号； 4. 杜绝升华脱节：结尾感悟必须贴合本次挫折经历，不能套用万能空句； 5. 杜绝句式单一：心理描写优先使用分词状语、定语从句、让步状语从句，摆脱简单句堆砌。 Part 04 真题溯源·考向感知 真题母题：骑行摔倒坚持完赛（高考经典改编真题） 一、真题原文片段 I took part in a school cycling race last weekend. The race went smoothly at first, and I kept pace with other competitors confidently. However, halfway through the race, I accidentally fell off my bike. Sharp pain spread through my knee, and my bike was slightly damaged. Seeing the bleeding wound and the fading figures of other runners, I felt totally exhausted and hopeless. I was on the verge of giving up the tough race. 二、原文四维线索拆解 1. 人物线索：主角自信、有毅力、热爱运动，遇挫折陷入迷茫，人设核心：坚韧但会疲惫迷茫； 2. 情节线索：顺利参赛→意外摔倒受伤→对手远去→身心俱疲、濒临放弃； 3. 情感线索：自信从容→疼痛慌乱→疲惫绝望→动摇放弃； 4.主题线索：挫折磨砺、坚持不放弃、自我突破、逆风成长。 三、续写范文（贴合骨架+心理突出+升华到位） Paragraph 1（内心挣扎+内力觉醒+重新出发） I sat on the ground, staring at my bleeding knee, consumed by great disappointment. A strong desire to give up crept into my mind, for the pain was almost unbearable and the gap with others was getting wider and wider. Just as I was trapped in fierce inner struggle, I recalled the countless mornings and evenings I spent practicing cycling. It was my persistent efforts and initial dream that drove me to take part in the race. Refusing to waste all my hard work, I took a deep breath, struggled to stand up and continued to move forward slowly. Paragraph 2（坚持突破+收获成长+主旨升华） Though every pedaling brought sharp pain and extreme tiredness, I gritted my teeth and kept going steadily. I ignored the physical discomfort and focused all my attention on the finish line step by step. To my great relief, I finally completed the race successfully. I didn’t win a prize, but I gained far more valuable growth. This experience taught me vividly that growth is accompanied by setbacks and hardships. Only by overcoming difficulties and surpassing ourselves can we embrace a better self in life. 四、范文亮点解析 1. 严格贴合五段成长骨架，情节逻辑完整、层层递进，无断层、无突兀； 2. 重点突出双向内心冲突描写，兼具放弃的念头与坚守的初心，心理层次丰富； 3. 动作细节具象化，避免空泛抒情，画面感极强； 4. 结尾升华贴合事件，不套路、不空洞，精准落地自我超越的成长主题。 五、方法复盘 1、专题核心口诀（考场速记） 成长续写五步走，困境挣扎先铺就； 内心博弈是亮点，内外助力转势头； 实干突破见蜕变，升华扣题立意优； 无波无澜是大忌，真情细节稳满分。 2、一轮必背核心语料（成长类专属） 1. 核心动词（困境与突破） 1　 struggle 挣扎/坚持 2　 persevere 坚持 3　 overcome 克服 4　 surpass 超越 5　 adjust 调整 6　 recover 重拾 7　 endure 承受 2. 核心名词（成长主题） 8　 setback 挫折 9　 perseverance 毅力 10　 determination 决心 11　 breakthrough 突破 12　 growth 蜕变 13　 courage 勇气 3. 高分形容词/副词 14　 overwhelmed 不知所措的 15　 persistent 坚持不懈的 16　 tough 艰难的 17　 steadily 坚定地 18　 bravely 勇敢地 3、写作要求 1. 严格遵循遭遇困境→内心挣扎→内外推动→突破自我→成长感悟核心骨架； 2. 重点刻画双向内心冲突，杜绝情节扁平化； 3. 结尾运用本节课成长升华金句，立意深刻； 4. 词数150左右，句式丰富、衔接自然。 高考真题 （2026·全国二卷） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 As far as I can remember, I’ve always been a night owl. Even in middle school I would stay up very late. I would feel completely at ease doing my homework in bed, with light music on. I found comfort in keeping myself awake when everyone else had gone to bed, and I loved the silence of the night. My parents urged me to get out of this so-called unhealthy habit, but their repeated requests fell on deaf ears. Fast forward to my first year of college. I still loved the night and would stay up until unruly hours for no apparent reason, chatting online and watching videos. When I finally started to study, I would race through the assigned work, often well past midnight. My roommates would tell me to go to bed and get up early the following morning to do it instead. Get up early to do my homework? No way! I would never do that. Then, one day last term, I did exactly that. Bent over my laptop while sitting on the bed in the corner of my room, I suddenly felt a pounding headache, and had to lie down. Unable to keep my eyes open, I decided I had no choice but to finish my homework the next morning. I woke up at 6 am. Hardly had I written half a page when I felt a sharp pain in my chest. At the school clinic, a doctor, with a serious expression on his face, handed me a medical report. “You’re 20, but your heart is 40!” he said. A cold wave went through me. I realized that years of living as a late-night person had turned my heart into an overworked engine. 注意： （1）续写词数应为150左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Struck by the doctor’s warning, I knew I had to make a change. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Slowly but surely, my efforts to adjust to the new routine paid off. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Struck by the doctor's warning, I knew I had to make a change. I set a strict bedtime of ten-thirty and placed my phone on the desk, far from my bed. The first week was incredibly tough. Accustomed to staying up late for Queen’s English years, I tossed and turned long into the night. But every time I wanted to give up, the cold wave that had washed over me in the clinic flooded me again. To better adapt to the new schedule, I developed a nightly routine of drinking warm milk and reading physical books. Seeing my determination,one of my roommates gladly became my strict "supervisor", ensuring I stuck to the plan. Slowly but surely, my efforts to adjust to the new routine paid off. After two months came a morning when I woke up naturally at six, my mind as clear as the morning light streaming through the curtains. I managed to finish all my schoolwork in the quiet morning hours. Remarkable changes took place in me: the unbearable headache and chest discomfort never returned, and I was full of vitality all day long. My "supervisor" praised me warmly for my great transformation. A genuine smile spread across my face.The quiet night had once brought me superficial comfort, but I finally realized that true freedom lies in self-discipline and self-care. 【导语】 本文是典型的成长感悟类记叙文读后续写，以作者长期熬夜的不良作息、身体发出预警、听从医嘱改正习惯的亲身经历为核心展开续写。全文紧密衔接原文熬夜成瘾、身体不适、医生警示的核心情节，两段续写逻辑递进、闭环完整，从下定决心改变、艰难坚持调整作息，到习惯养成、收获蜕变与人生感悟，情节真实接地气。文章心理描写细腻生动，句式长短结合、高级多样，主题积极励志，词数精准合规，是高考成长类续写的高分模范范文。 【审题要点】 文体：记叙文续写，第一人称叙事，语言朴实真挚、细腻走心，兼具叙事性与感悟性，贴合个人成长类作文写作风格。 写作目的：承接前文作者常年熬夜、突发身体不适、被医生严厉警示的剧情，续写作者改正熬夜陋习、调整作息、实现自我蜕变的全过程，诠释自律与健康的成长主题。 核心内容： 1. 第一段续写：承接医生的警示，描写自己下定决心改变，制定严格作息计划，克服熬夜惯性、坚持自律的艰难过程，借助室友监督助力自己坚持下去； 2. 第二段续写：描写长期坚持后的正向改变，身体状态、学习状态全面好转，彻底摆脱病痛，最终领悟自律方能自愈、自律成就自由的人生道理； 3. 整体串联陋习—警示—改变—坚持—蜕变—感悟的完整成长叙事线，主题鲜明、立意深刻。 字数：150词左右，两段篇幅均衡，情节饱满、无冗余语句，叙事紧凑流畅。 时态：一般过去时（全文统一叙事时态，符合记叙文写作规范）。 【思路结构】 第一段（决心改变+艰难坚持）：紧扣段首句，以医生的警示为契机，写自己制定严格作息、远离手机、培养睡前好习惯；描写初期熬夜惯性带来的煎熬，凭借医生的告诫自我激励，加上室友监督，坚定改正陋习的决心，完成从懈怠到自律的转变铺垫。 第二段（收获蜕变+主旨升华）：承接段首句，聚焦作息调整后的正向成果，自然早起、头脑清醒、高效完成学业，身体不适彻底消失、整日精力充沛；最后通过自我反思，对比过往虚假的夜间舒适与真正的自律自由，升华文章成长主旨。 【亮点表达】 ① Struck by the doctor’s warning 被医生的警示深深触动（高分分词作状语开篇） ② tossed and turned 辗转反侧（精准描摹失眠煎熬的状态） ③ stick to the plan 坚守计划（地道自律类主题高频短语） ④ paid off 取得成效、得到回报（励志类续写万能短语） ⑤ full of vitality 精力充沛（高级替换普通词汇energetic） ⑥ superficial comfort 肤浅的舒适（精准对比凸显深刻感悟） 【词汇积累】 ① 下定决心：make a change → make up one’s mind → resolve to do ② 坚持不懈：stick to → persist in → keep to ③ 精力充沛：full of vitality → energetic → vigorous ④ 改变、转变：transformation → change → shift ⑤ 自律：self-discipline → self-regulation → self-control 【句式拓展】 原简单句：The first week was very hard. I was used to staying up late. 高分拓展句：As I was thoroughly accustomed to staying up late for years, the first week of adjusting my routine turned out to be extremely challenging. 原简单句：I changed a lot and realized self-discipline is important. 高分拓展句：I underwent remarkable physical and mental changes, eventually coming to understand that true freedom stems from persistent self-discipline and self-care. 【高分句型】 1. 决心改变万能句型：Struck by the doctor’s warning, I knew I had to make a change.（分词作状语开篇，简洁高级，适配所有改过自新类续写） 2. 成果展示高分句型：Slowly but surely, my efforts to adjust to the new routine paid off.（经典励志过渡句型，适配努力终有回报类主题） 3. 主旨升华万能句型：The quiet night had once brought me superficial comfort, but I finally realized that true freedom lies in self-discipline and self-care.（对比式感悟，立意深刻，适配成长自律类作文） 【2026浙江一月卷】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was a regular Saturday morning, just like any other. I was driving my nine-year-old daughter, Emma, to her weekly swimming lesson. Recently, Emma had started seeing me as a true hero who could solve any problem fairly. “You always know what’s right, Dad,” she would say. We were talking about her class when I noticed a crowd up ahead and had to slow down. People were gathered on the street, pointing and laughing. In the middle of it all was a large brown and white cow. It looked completely lost and terrified. Some kids were shouting nearby, which seemed to scare the animal even more. A strong feeling of anger rose inside me. These people were treating the poor creature’s fear as entertainment. “Dad, that cow is scared.” Emma said softly from the back seat. “What would you do?” Her question was serious. She believed I would do the right thing. “Well,” I said, trying to sound confident for her, “I would calm it down and help it find its way home.” I explained that I knew a lot about cows. I spent my childhood on a farm, and now I even worked at a beef processing plant. I was sure my experience would impress Emma. After dropping off a very impressed Emma, I turned my car around. I felt it was my duty to go back and help. When I returned, the scene was worse. I learned from a shop owner that the cow had been wandering for a while, knocking over a fruit stand and causing quite a bit of trouble. I took a slow, careful step towards the animal, speaking in a gentle voice. However, instead of calming down, the cow lowered its head and let out a threatening sound. It stared directly at me, full of hostility. My confidence faded, replaced by a sudden fear. This wasn’t going to be easy at all. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 Just as I was about to turn and run, two police officers arrived on the scene. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ After we managed to secure the cow to a tree, we began to discuss what to do with it. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Just as I was about to turn and run, two police officers arrived on the scene. They stepped out of their patrol car calmly, holding a thick rope in hand. I hurried to share my childhood farm experience with them, and we made a quick plan to cooperate. One officer slowly circled the cow to distract it, keeping his movements gentle to avoid scaring it again. I seized the chance to approach from the side, whispering soft words like I used to do to calm the cows on my old farm. Little by little, the cow’s tense body relaxed, its threatening lowing faded, and it even blinked at me gently. After we managed to secure the cow to a tree, we began to discuss what to do with it. Luckily, a farmer passing by recognized the cow immediately — it was his. He thanked us profusely, explaining that the cow had broken free from the fence early that morning and gone missing. When I picked up Emma after her lesson, I told her every detail of the rescue. Her face lit up with admiration: “Dad, you’re really my hero!” That day, I understood that heroism isn’t about being fearless, but about summoning courage to do what’s right even when scared. 【导语】 本文是自我成长、英雄主义认知类记叙文读后续写，讲述主人公为守护女儿心中自己的英雄形象，主动救助受惊流浪奶牛，从心生畏惧、临阵退缩到配合警察勇敢施救，最终领悟英雄真谛的暖心成长故事。续写内容精准承接原文奶牛充满敌意、主人公信心崩塌、心生怯意的紧张剧情，情节张弛有度、转折自然，从警民协作安抚奶牛、成功稳住局面，到寻得失主、向女儿复盘经历、升华英雄主义内涵，叙事完整闭环。全文情节生动、立意深刻，动作与心理描写细腻，句式高级流畅，词数精准合规，是高考成长感悟类续写优质高分范文。 【审题要点】 文体：记叙文续写，第一人称叙事，节奏张弛有度，兼具场景冲突、动作叙事与哲理感悟，文风真实自然、立意正向深刻，贴合成长认知类写作风格。 写作目的：承接前文路人围观戏弄受惊奶牛、主人公为坚守在女儿心中的英雄形象主动施救、却遭遇奶牛敌意、心生恐惧的紧张剧情，续写主人公配合警察合力救助奶牛、寻回牛主人、最终领悟英雄真正含义的完整故事，诠释英雄并非无畏，而是心怀畏惧仍选择向善的核心主旨。 核心内容： 1. 第一段续写：承接主人公临阵退缩的时刻，警察及时赶到，主人公结合农场经验与警察分工协作，温柔安抚、稳步靠近，成功平复奶牛的躁动与敌意，化解紧张危机； 2. 第二段续写：众人将奶牛妥善拴好，偶遇路过的牛主人，顺利物归原主；主人公课后向女儿讲述全程经历，收获女儿崇拜，最终领悟英雄主义的真正内涵，完成思想成长； 3. 整体串联挺身而出—遭遇困境—心生畏惧—协作破局—圆满解决—认知升华的完整成长叙事线。 字数：150词左右，两段篇幅均衡，情节饱满紧凑、无冗余语句，完全契合高考词数规范。 时态：一般过去时，全文时态统一稳定，严格贴合记叙文叙事规范。 【思路结构】 第一段（危机化解·协作施救）：紧扣段首句，以主人公临阵退缩的紧张局面为切入点，描写警察及时到场支援；主人公凭借儿时农场经验与警察分工配合，一人分散奶牛注意力、一人温柔靠近安抚，逐步消解奶牛的戒备与敌意，成功化解危机，推动剧情平稳过渡。 第二段（圆满收尾·主旨升华）：围绕段首句展开，众人妥善固定奶牛后偶遇失主，顺利解决后续问题；主人公接女儿下课并讲述救援全过程，收获女儿的认可与崇拜；最后通过自我反思，推翻固有认知，领悟英雄主义的真谛，升华全文核心主旨。 【亮点表达】 ① make a quick plan to cooperate 快速制定协作方案（应急场景高分短语） ② distract it 分散注意力（动作叙事精准表达） ③ tense body relaxed 紧绷的身体放松下来（神态动作细节描写） ④ secure the cow to a tree 将奶牛拴在树上（场景专属地道表达） ⑤ thanked us profusely 连连道谢（高级替换thank sb. very much） ⑥ summon courage 鼓起勇气（主旨升华核心高级短语） 【词汇积累】 ① 协作、配合：cooperate → collaborate → work together ② 安抚、平息：calm → soothe → comfort ③ 紧张的、戒备的：tense → nervous → alert ④ 感激的：grateful → thankful → appreciative ⑤ 英雄气概、勇气：heroism → bravery → courage 【句式拓展】 原简单句：We worked together and calmed the cow down successfully. 高分拓展句：With careful division of labor and gentle movements, we cooperated seamlessly and gradually eased the cow’s intense hostility and tension. 原简单句：Heroes are not fearless but brave to do right things. 高分拓展句：True heroism lies not in being free from fear, but in mustering up courage to stick to kindness and righteousness despite fear. 【高分句型】 1. 场景递进万能句型：Little by little, the cow’s tense body relaxed, its threatening lowing faded, and it even blinked at me gently.（细节层层递进，画面感极强，适配动物安抚类场景） 2. 情节收尾高分句型：He thanked us profusely, explaining that the cow had broken free from the fence early that morning and gone missing.（分词作伴随状语，简洁串联背景情节） 3. 哲理升华万能句型：That day, I understood that heroism isn’t about being fearless, but about summoning courage to do what’s right even when scared.（对比哲理金句，适配成长、勇气、英雄主题，适配各类励志续写收尾） 【2024浙江1月卷】 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. ” It’s just the beginning, “she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure. ” Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word” mile. “Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. In the vast expanse of her school, a girl with poor directional skills struggled to navigate and often got lost. One day, during gym class, she observed a unique way to find her way - following the shadows of trees. As the sun cast its rays, the girl noticed how the shadows created patterns on the ground, guiding her path. She took a leap of faith and followed the shadows, surprising herself with each turn and stretch. Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. She used the shadows to navigate the school hallways, find her classes, and even locate the school's various facilities. This newfound skill not only helped the girl navigate her school but also instilled in her a sense of confidence and adventure. She learned excitedly that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome. And with each step she took, she left behind a legacy of inspiration for those who followed in her footsteps, knowing that even without a clear sense of direction, there's always a way to find one's way. 【导语】 本文是困境突破、方法成长类记叙文读后续写，讲述新生Eva因方向感差，难以适应庞大复杂的高中校园，同时极度畏惧长跑测试，却通过拆分目标的心理技巧成功完成一英里长跑，最终将同款方法迁移运用、攻克认路难题的励志故事。续写内容完美承接原文拆分目标、分步突破长跑困境的核心铺垫，情节衔接自然、逻辑闭环完整，从意外收获老师认可、建立自信，到迁移方法攻克校园认路难题、领悟成长真谛，层层递进、立意正向。全文语言流畅地道、细节贴合人设，主题鲜明励志，词数精准合规，是高考成长励志、方法突破类续写的优质高分范文。 【审题要点】 文体：记叙文续写，第三人称叙事，文风清新励志、平实真挚，侧重人物心理转变、方法运用与成长蜕变描写，贴合校园成长类续写核心风格。 写作目的：承接前文Eva方向感薄弱、畏惧长跑，通过拆分目标、聚焦短途小目标的心理技巧，咬牙坚持完成全程长跑的剧情，续写Eva收获老师肯定、突破自我认知，将同款拆分方法运用在校园认路上，最终攻克难题、收获自信与成长的完整故事，诠释拆分困境、分步前行即可突破一切难题的核心主旨。 核心内容： 1. 第一段续写：承接Eva跑完长跑、收获老师夸奖的意外心境，描写她摆脱垫底的自我预判，依靠分步攻坚的方法成功突破自我，内心萌生强烈的成就感与自信心； 2. 第二段续写：Eva举一反三，将拆分目标的技巧迁移到校园认路难题上，摒弃畏惧心理，逐个熟悉走廊、教室、校园设施，最终轻松适应校园环境，领悟拆分困难、循序渐进的成长道理； 3. 整体串联畏惧困境—巧用方法—突破自我—迁移运用—彻底蜕变—感悟成长的完整励志叙事线。 字数：150词左右，两段篇幅均衡，情节饱满无冗余，叙事紧凑流畅，完全符合高考词数标准。 时态：一般过去时，全文时态统一稳定，严格遵循记叙文叙事规范。 【思路结构】 第一段（突破自我·收获认可）：紧扣段首句，围绕Eva被老师表扬的意外心理展开，打破自己必定垫底的消极预判，回望全程依靠拆分目标、专注当下小路段的方法完成长跑，真切感受到方法的力量，彻底摆脱自卑心态，收获满满的成就感与自我认同。 第二段（迁移方法·主旨升华）：围绕段首句展开，精准呼应前文困境，将长跑的拆分技巧运用到校园认路难题中，循序渐进熟悉校园布局、各类场馆位置，成功攻克自身短板；最终通过内心感悟升华主题，点明再大的困境，只要分步拆解、稳步前行就能顺利突破的成长哲理。 【亮点表达】 ① navigate the school hallways 穿梭校园走廊、熟悉校园路线（场景精准高级表达） ② take a leap of faith 勇敢尝试、大胆突破（励志类高分短语） ③ innovative thinking 创新思维（褒义高级词汇，贴合人物做法） ④ newfound skill 新习得的能力（地道生活化高级表达） ⑤ instill confidence 注入自信（成长类核心高分搭配） ⑥ overcome challenges 克服困境（励志主题万能金句短语） 【词汇积累】 ① 克服、战胜：overcome → conquer → surmount ② 自信的：confident → assured → self-reliant ③ 适应、熟悉：adapt to → get familiar with → be accustomed to ④ 困境、难题：challenge → difficulty → dilemma ⑤ 循序渐进的：step-by-step → gradual → progressive 【句式拓展】 原简单句：She didn’t expect to be praised and felt proud of herself. 高分拓展句：Unexpectedly praised by her coach, Eva was overwhelmed with joy and pride, realizing that proper methods could help her beat seemingly impossible challenges. 原简单句：She used the same method and finally got familiar with the school. 高分拓展句：Drawing on the experience of splitting big goals into small ones, she gradually familiarized herself with the complex campus layout and walked out of the confusion of getting lost. 【高分句型】 1. 心理转折万能句型：Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking.（定语从句收尾，简洁高级，适配努力被认可类场景） 2. 方法迁移高分句型：This newfound skill not only helped the girl navigate her school but also instilled in her a sense of confidence and adventure.（not only...but also...递进句式，凸显成长蜕变） 3. 主旨升华万能句型：She learned excitedly that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome.（哲理总结句型，适配方法制胜、突破自我类所有励志续写收尾） 【2023年新高考全国Ⅰ&II卷】 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did. So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try. I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice. What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them. When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150个左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 One possible version: A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.I won first place! My heart skipped a beat and disbelief washed over me. At the award ceremony hosted in the school hall, the headmaster kindly presented me with a certificate of achievement. My face lit up with joy as I accepted the award, my smile filled with pride. A round of applause rang through the hall. I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. "Congratulations again! I knew you had it in you," he said warmly, signaling me to take a seat."Thank you." I replied, with a mixture of gratitude and excitement. I reflected on my initial doubts and hesitations. Sometimes, all it takes is someone who believes in us, someone who sees our potential even when we don't see it ourselves. Leaving his office that day, I felt a renewed sense of purpose and determination. I knew that this was just the beginning. I was inspired to keep writing and exploring my creativity. 【导语】 本文是典型的师生鼓励、自我突破类成长励志记叙文读后续写，讲述母语非英语的作者原本畏惧写作，在老师的认可与鼓励下参赛、反复打磨文章，最终突破自我、收获成长的暖心故事。续写内容完美承接原文作者摒弃功利心、享受写作过程的铺垫，情节过渡自然流畅，从意外获奖、登台领奖，到课后致谢老师、感悟成长真谛，叙事完整闭环。全文情感真挚、立意积极向上，句式简洁高级、细节饱满，精准贴合高考成长励志类续写高分标准。 【审题要点】 文体：记叙文续写，第一人称叙事，文风真诚质朴、励志温暖，侧重心理变化、场景叙事与成长感悟描写。 写作目的：承接前文作者惧怕英语写作、被老师鼓励参赛、反复修改文稿、享受写作过程、看淡输赢的剧情，续写作者意外获奖、感恩师长、领悟自我成长真谛的完整故事，凸显他人鼓励、自我坚持成就成长的核心主题。 核心内容： 1. 第一段续写：承接淡忘比赛的铺垫，写作者意外得知自己斩获一等奖，内心满是难以置信与喜悦，描写校园颁奖仪式的场景，定格高光时刻； 2. 第二段续写：续写作者课后前往办公室致谢老师，回顾自身的胆怯与蜕变，深刻感悟到他人的信任与认可对成长的重要意义，立志坚持写作、突破自我； 3. 整体串联畏惧退缩—师长鼓励—坚持付出—淡然沉淀—收获惊喜—感悟成长的完整励志叙事线。 字数：150词左右，两段篇幅均衡，情节紧凑、无冗余语句，词数精准合规。 时态：一般过去时，全文时态统一，贴合记叙文叙事规范。 【思路结构】 第一段（意外获奖·收获惊喜）：紧扣段首句，以淡忘比赛为铺垫，突出获奖的意外感；通过心理、神态、场景细节描写，刻画作者从难以置信、满心惊喜到自豪领奖的过程，辅以现场掌声烘托氛围，完成剧情的正向转折。 第二段（致谢感恩·主旨升华）：围绕段首句展开，描写师生暖心对话，承接过往自我怀疑、畏惧写作的经历；通过内心反思升华主题，领悟他人的信任能唤醒自身潜能，最终立下坚持写作、突破自我的决心，圆满收尾全文。 【亮点表达】 ① My heart skipped a beat 心头一颤（惊喜类心理描写高分短语） ② disbelief washed over me 满心难以置信（情绪渲染绝美表达） ③ a certificate of achievement 荣誉证书（正式场景精准词汇） ④ face lit up with joy 面露喜色（神态描写万能短语） ⑤ had it in you 你本就有这份潜力（地道口语化暖心表达） ⑥ renewed sense of purpose 全新的目标与动力（成长升华高级表达） 【词汇积累】 ① 难以置信的：disbelieving → incredible → unbelievable ② 自豪的：proud → honored → dignified ③ 感激的：grateful → thankful → appreciative ④ 潜力：potential → capability → talent ⑤ 坚定的：determined → resolute → firm 【句式拓展】 原简单句：I was surprised and happy when I knew I won the prize. 高分拓展句：Upon hearing the surprising news of my first prize, I was overwhelmed with a mixture of astonishment and delight. 原简单句：The teacher’s encouragement helped me grow a lot. 高分拓展句：It was my teacher’s sincere belief and constant encouragement that unlocked my potential and drove me to break through my limits. 【高分句型】 1. 惊喜场景万能句型：My heart skipped a beat and disbelief washed over me.（经典情绪开篇句型，适配意外收获、惊喜类续写） 2. 师生温情高分句型：Sometimes, all it takes is someone who believes in us, someone who sees our potential even when we don't see it ourselves.（哲理金句，适配鼓励、赏识、成长主题） 3. 成长收尾万能句型：Leaving his office that day, I felt a renewed sense of purpose and determination.（分词作状语收尾，简洁高级，升华成长蜕变主题） 【2022年新高考全国Ⅰ 卷】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route（路线）through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide." I bit back my frustration（懊恼）. I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答. We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. It was a tricky moment.calling for a good choice of words. Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won people's praise for his determination and perseverance.His face began to lighten. He added that even the judges thumbed up at him.The whistle went off and the competitors began to take their places. To my joy, David slowly rose to his feet. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.David stood firmly in his position, ignoring anything around. Pushing forward without balance, he was left behind. However, when he came into sight, the spectators burst into thunderous cheers and applause. Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits.It turned out that he achieved his best record ever. Seeing his confident smiles, I sighed in relief. With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future. 【导语】 本文是励志成长、自强不息类记叙文读后续写，围绕身患脑部疾病、行动不便的男孩David，因担心被嘲笑想要放弃越野跑，在老师的鼓励下勇敢参赛、突破自我的暖心故事展开。续写内容精准承接原文David刻苦训练、意志坚定却心生退缩的核心铺垫，两段情节衔接自然、层层递进，从老师暖心开导、重拾信心，到勇敢参赛、坚持完赛、收获掌声与成长，人物形象鲜活立体。全文情感真挚、立意正向，细节描写细腻，句式规范高级，词数精准合规，完美契合高考励志温情类续写高分要求。 【审题要点】 文体：记叙文续写，第一人称教师视角叙事，文风温暖真挚、积极励志，侧重人物心理、动作与场景氛围描写，贴合校园成长类写作风格。 写作目的：承接前文身患疾病的David坚持训练、却因害怕他人嘲笑打算放弃越野跑、教练贴心退让的剧情，续写老师耐心鼓励、David重拾勇气参赛、全力拼搏突破自我的故事，凸显坚持、勇敢、突破自我的核心主题。 核心内容： 1. 第一段续写：承接David低头沉默、情绪低落的状态，老师耐心暖心开导，细数David过往坚持拼搏、收获认可的经历，帮助David重拾自信，主动起身准备参赛； 2. 第二段续写：描写David站上起跑线、奋力奔跑的过程，虽落后于他人，但始终坚持不放弃，收获观众热烈掌声，创下个人最佳成绩，绽放自信笑容； 3. 整体串联心生退缩、温情鼓励、重拾勇气、奋力拼搏、突破自我的完整成长叙事线，主旨深刻温暖。 字数：150词左右，两段篇幅均衡，情节饱满无冗余，叙事紧凑流畅，完全适配高考词数要求。 时态：一般过去时，全文时态统一稳定，符合记叙文叙事规范。 【思路结构】 第一段（暖心开导·重拾信心）：紧扣段首句，刻画David低落怯懦、回避对视的状态，老师斟酌言辞、暖心劝慰，回顾他过往坚持不懈、收获他人称赞的经历，慢慢化解David的自卑与退缩心理，最终让他重拾勇气，主动起身准备参赛，完成剧情转折。 第二段（奋力拼搏·主旨升华）：围绕段首句展开，描写David坚定站上起跑线、奋力奔跑的模样，即便身体失衡、落后众人也绝不放弃；借助观众雷鸣般的掌声烘托氛围，凸显他的拼搏力量，最终突破自我创下最佳成绩，文末升华战胜自我便是胜利的核心主旨。 【亮点表达】 ① hung his head 低下头（低落情绪精准神态描写） ② avoid eye contact 回避对视（细腻心理外化动作描写） ③ lighten 面露喜色（情绪转变生动表达） ④ burst into thunderous cheers and applause 爆发出雷鸣般的掌声（场景氛围高分短语） ⑤ quicken one’s pace 加快步伐（动作描写地道表达） ⑥ conquer oneself 战胜自我（全文核心励志主旨短语） 【词汇积累】 ① 坚定的：firm → determined → resolute ② 毅力、坚持：perseverance → determination → insistence ③ 鼓舞、激励：inspire → encourage → motivate ④ 放松、释然：relieved → relaxed → at ease ⑤ 卓越的、出色的：promising → outstanding → excellent 【句式拓展】 原简单句：I comforted David and told him his efforts were great. 高分拓展句：I gently comforted David and reminded him that his persistent efforts and strong perseverance had won wide recognition from others. 原简单句：David kept running and finally got his best score. 高分拓展句：Despite his physical inconvenience, David stuck to the whole race and eventually achieved a personal best, shining brightly with his persistent spirit. 【高分句型】 1. 情绪转变万能句型：His face began to lighten after hearing my encouraging words.（适配低落转振作的人物情绪描写，自然细腻） 2. 场景烘托高分句型：However, when he came into sight, the spectators burst into thunderous cheers and applause.（反差烘托氛围，凸显人物精神力量） 3. 励志结尾万能句型：With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future.（哲理升华句式，适配坚持、自强、突破自我类所有续写主题） 【2021年新高考全国Ⅰ &Ⅱ 卷】 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Paragraph 1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Knowing what they were preparing for, he was greatly surprised. So immediately, he offered to get involved in the kids’ job. Firstly, he put the pot of porridge on a gentle heat, asking Jeff to watch out for it going for fifteen minutes. And then, he asked Jenna to break another two eggs and mix them with milk. With all preparations done, they started to fry bread together. In a flash, sweet smell filled the air in the kitchen. To their delight, the breakfast was a success in the end. Paragraph 2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Eyes opened, the woman heard a harmonious “Happy Mother’s Day” from her twin kids with hot, sweet breakfast before her. Behind the children stood their father. To shed light on the game of the gift, he told the mother the whole story. After learning about what happened, she rose quickly to gaze at the boy’s hand with moved tears rolling down her cheeks. “Thank you, my honey!” said the mother. 【导语】 本文是家庭亲情、暖心治愈类记叙文读后续写，围绕双胞胎姐弟为母亲节准备晨间惊喜早餐，过程接连翻车、陷入慌乱，最终在父亲帮助下顺利完成、收获母亲感动的温馨故事展开。续写内容精准承接原文做饭失败、锅溢火灭、面包烤焦、弟弟烫伤的窘迫剧情，情节转折自然、过渡丝滑，从父亲暖心协助、携手补救，到送上惊喜、母子温情互动，全程贴合生活化场景。全文氛围温暖治愈、情感真挚，句式流畅规范、细节饱满，词数精准合规，是高考家庭温情类续写的典型高分范文。 【审题要点】 文体：记叙文续写，第三人称叙事，文风清新温暖、生活化极强，侧重场景叙事、动作配合与温情氛围描写，贴合家庭日常亲情主题写作风格。 写作目的：承接前文双胞胎自信筹备母亲节早餐、实操频频失误、厨房一片狼藉、满心失落的剧情，续写父亲及时出现出手相助、一家人合力完成早餐，最终给母亲送上暖心惊喜、收获双向感动的完整故事，诠释平凡日常里的亲情与爱意。 核心内容： 1. 第一段续写：承接双胞胎失落沮丧的状态，父亲出现了解原委、主动帮忙，指导二人把控火候、重新备料、协作烹饪，成功做出美味早餐，化解厨房危机； 2. 第二段续写：双胞胎端着早餐上楼唤醒母亲，齐声送上节日祝福，父亲讲述全过程，母亲知晓孩子们的努力与意外，眼含热泪、满心感动，圆满收尾温情故事； 3. 整体串联满怀期待—操作失误—失落无助—家人相助—惊喜圆满—温情治愈的完整叙事闭环，主题温暖正向。 字数：150词左右，两段篇幅均衡，情节紧凑饱满、无冗余语句，完全符合高考词数规范。 时态：一般过去时，全文时态统一稳定，贴合记叙文叙事要求。 【思路结构】 第一段（困境转机·协力补救）：紧扣段首句，刻画双胞胎失败后的失落心境，以父亲的出现作为剧情转折点；父亲没有责备，而是耐心指导清理灶台、把控火候、重新制作早餐，一家人默契配合，最终厨房飘出香甜气息，成功完成早餐制作，扭转窘迫局面。 第二段（送上惊喜·温情升华）：围绕段首句展开，描写双胞胎端着精心制作的早餐唤醒母亲，齐声送上母亲节祝福；父亲娓娓道出烹饪过程中的意外与孩子们的努力，母亲得知真相后热泪盈眶，被孩子的心意深深打动，用温情的感谢收尾，凸显平凡亲情的珍贵。 【亮点表达】 ① get involved in 参与、投身于（温情协作场景高级短语） ② watch out for 留意、小心（实操场景精准表达） ③ fill the air 弥漫在空气中（氛围感绝美场景描写） ④ to their delight 令他们欣喜的是（情绪转折万能过渡短语） ⑤ shed light on 阐明、讲述（高级替换tell，句式更地道） ⑥ moved tears rolling down cheeks 感动落泪（神态情感满分描写） 【词汇积累】 ① 失落的：disappointed → frustrated → discouraged ② 协助、帮助：assist → help → aid ③ 香气、气味：smell → fragrance → aroma ④ 感动的：moved → touched → affected ⑤ 珍惜、感激：cherish → appreciate → treasure 【句式拓展】 原简单句：Dad came to help them and they made tasty breakfast finally. 高分拓展句：Fortunately, their father showed up in time, guiding them to fix the messy kitchen and redo the breakfast with patience, which eventually paid off. 原简单句：Mom was moved and thanked the kids. 高分拓展句：Deeply touched by their sincere love and efforts, Mother wore a warm smile on her face and expressed her heartfelt gratitude to the twins. 【高分句型】 1. 场景烘托万能句型：In a flash, sweet smell filled the air in the kitchen.（瞬间营造温馨画面，适配美食、协作类场景） 2. 叙事衔接高分句型：To their delight, the breakfast was a success in the end.（情绪+结果双结合，完美收束第一段剧情） 3. 温情结尾万能句型：After learning about what happened, she rose quickly to gaze at the boy’s hand with moved tears rolling down her cheeks.（细节刻画真情实感，适配亲情、感恩类续写收尾） 1 / 19 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $