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人教版必修第三册 · 读后续写片段式训练
Unit 5 The Value of Money 金钱的价值
片段式阶梯训练(实用版)
本练围绕“The Value of Money 金钱的价值”(百万英镑)单元主题,从课本提取 5 个可用于续写的“困境/机遇”语块,按 “情境感知 → 语块建构 → 模仿操练 → 衔接迁移 → 微写实战 → 评价反思” 六步推进。每语块只点一处最易错的坑,全程提供写作支架与评价量表,避免机械堆砌,可直接用于课堂讲练或自习。
适用对象
建议时长
使用方式
配套
高二/高三学生、备课教师
课堂 1 课时 / 自习 30 min
个人自学 · 小组互评 · 课堂讲练
本单元课文 + 动作/环境描写表达库
Step 1 情境感知:先读进去,再学出来
读下面这个小故事(约 100–120 词)。它把本单元 5 个语块“藏”进了一段真实叙事里——先感受它们在故事里“干什么用”,比直接背例句更有效。
Henry stepped off the ship with empty pockets. That first night he (1) wandered on the pavement outside a grand restaurant, hungry and unsure where to turn. Around him the great city (2) was lost in its own glittering rush, and he felt invisible. He had spent (3) a large amount of effort just to survive the week, yet had nothing to show. Then, almost (4) by accident, two brothers waved him inside and pressed a sealed envelope into his hand. At the door stood a boy (5) in rags who still managed a smile. Holding the note, Henry wondered: what on earth is the true value of money?
◆ 读后引导(不做空泛“找句式”,做有意义的两问)
1. 故事里 5 处加粗语块,各承担什么功能:落魄登场 / 城市疏离 / 代价铺垫 / 巧合转折 / 穷困反差?哪一处最适合做“困境开场”?
2. 哪一处让你最想继续读下去?结合“反差”(衣衫褴褛却微笑)谈人物为什么立得住。
Step 2 语块建构·五金库:一个语块 = 一张“功能卡”
下面 5 个语块,每个都按“含义 → 续写功能 → 搭配锦囊 → 易错提醒 → 即时小练”五栏展开。重点不在“背得多”,而在“用得对”——每个语块只标一处最常见错误。
语块 1 wander on the pavement 在人行道上徘徊/游荡(落魄开场)
课本原句:At this moment, they see a penniless young man wandering on the pavement outside their house.
【续写功能】读后续写“落魄开场”句:用一个“徘徊”的画面瞬间立住人物处境(迷惘、无助、等待),是写陌生人登场、困境开篇的高频好句。
【搭配锦囊】wander on the pavement / in the street;可作谓语或分词起手。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
wander 拼写:wan-der,常误作 wonder(“想知道/奇迹”,意思完全不同);
pavement 拼写:pave-ment;
on the pavement 冠词 the 不可省(不写 in pavement / on pavement)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
1. 填空:A lost child ______________________(在街角的人行道上徘徊)。
语块 2 be lost in 迷失在……;困在(某地/某种情绪)
课本原句:It is Henry Adams, an American businessman, who is lost in London and does not know what he should do.
【续写功能】读后续写“困境+悬念”句:既指 physically lost(迷路),也可指 emotionally lost(迷失自我);强调“不知去向”的悬置状态,极适合开篇设疑。
【搭配锦囊】be lost in + 地点 / 情绪(lost in the city / lost in thought);也可 Lost in ... 分词起手。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
lost 是过去分词作形容词,不写 lose / losing;
in 后接地点或情绪(lost in the unfamiliar city);
分词起手 Lost in ...,逻辑主语须与主句一致,避免垂悬。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
2. 仿写:______________________(迷失在陌生的城市),she had no one to turn to.
语块 3 a large amount of 大量的(后接不可数名词)
课本原句:I'm afraid it'll cost a large amount of money.
【续写功能】读后续写“数量/程度”句:修饰不可数名词(钱、时间、精力、水、爱),比 many / much 更书面;写“花费、付出、拥有”时常配,注意只接不可数。
【搭配锦囊】a large amount of + 不可数名词;复数用 a large number of + 可数复数。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
只接不可数名词(money / time / effort),不接可数复数;
与 a large number of(接可数)严格区分;
amount 用 large / small 修饰,不写 many / few;of 不可省。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
3. 填空:Rebuilding their home requires ______________________(大量的时间与精力)。
语块 4 by accident 偶然地;意外地(机缘/转折)
课本原句:As a matter of fact, I landed in Britain by accident.
【续写功能】读后续写“机缘/转折”句:写人物“阴差阳错”到达某地、遇见某人、发现某物;是制造巧合、推动情节的万能副词短语,比 suddenly 更显“命运感”。
【搭配锦囊】by accident,位置灵活(句首/句中/句末);反义 on purpose。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
固定短语,中间无 the(× by the accident 会变成“那场事故”);
accident 拼写:ac-ci-dent;
不接 of(× by accident of)。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
4. 仿写:I ______________________(偶然在旧书店发现了这本绝版书)。
语块 5 in rags 衣衫褴褛的;穿着破烂的
课本原句:HOSTESS: But he's in rags!
【续写功能】读后续写“外貌/处境”描写词:用介词短语 in rags 一句点出人物穷困潦倒,常作表语或后置定语,与后文“被轻视→被善待”的反差形成张力。
【搭配锦囊】a boy in rags(后置定语);作表语 be in rags。
⚠ 直击易错(本语块最常踩的坑)
rags 必须用复数(不写 in rag / a rag);
作表语或后置定语,不写 with rags / on rags;
可与“内在高贵”形成反差写人。
◆ 即时小练(1 题,题型轮换,不刷量)
5. 填空:A ______________________(衣衫褴褛的男孩)was shivering in the cold wind.
🔎 直击重难点:a large amount of 与 a large number of
a large amount of + 不可数名词:a large amount of money / time / effort(钱、时间、精力)
a large number of + 可数复数:a large number of books / friends(书、朋友)
记混后果:× a large amount of books(books 可数,应用 number);× a large number of money(money 不可数,应用 amount)。
Step 3 衔接迁移·语块串烧:把 5 个语块“缝”进一段续写
孤立造句容易,放进连贯段落才见真功夫。读下面这段微续写,用本单元语块补全 5 处空缺——注意前后逻辑与语法形式。
亨利下船时口袋空空。第一晚他(1)______________(在一家大饭店外的人行道上徘徊),又饿又不知该往哪走。身边的大城(2)______________(迷失在)自己的浮华喧嚣里,他觉得自己像个透明人。这一周他耗费了(3)______________(大量的精力)才勉强活下来,却一无所有。接着,几乎(4)______________(偶然地),两位兄弟招手叫他进屋,塞给他一个封好的信封。门口站着一个(5)______________(衣衫褴褛的)男孩,却仍挤出一个微笑。握着那张纸条,亨利想:金钱真正的价值究竟是什么?
提示:① wander on the pavement(wander≠wonder;the 冠词) ② was lost in(lost 非 lose) ③ a large amount of + 不可数(effort) ④ by accident(无 the) ⑤ in rags(复数 rags)
Step 4 微续写实战(支架式):从“会用语块”到“写出好片段”
顺着 Step 1 的故事情境,完成约 80–100 词的微片段(可另设人物/场景,但须用上本单元 5 个语块)。
不要提笔就写。先借下面的“提纲支架 + 词汇银行”搭好脚手架,再动笔;写完用“评价量表”自评。
◆ ① 提纲支架(每段该干什么、用哪个语块)
段落
写作任务
建议调用的语块
开头 Begin
落魄登场,交代困境
wander on the pavement(徘徊开场)/ in rags(穷困反差)
发展 Develop
城市疏离 + 代价铺垫
be lost in(迷失)/ a large amount of(代价)
结尾 End
巧合转折 + 价值反思
by accident(机缘)/ 点明“金钱价值 / 人性尊严”
◆ ② 词汇银行(从动作 / 环境描写库精选,提升文采)
📚 可直接化用的地道表达
【落魄外貌】His coat was threadbare, yet his eyes held a quiet pride. / A thin boy shivered at the corner, clutching an empty paper cup.
【动作神态】He bowed slightly, dignity intact despite the rags. / She met their gaze without flinching, a smile warming her tired face.
【反差烘托】Behind the glass, the rich laughed; outside, the cold bit harder. / The envelope was plain, but it would rewrite a life.
【金句】Wealth is what you hold; worth is what you are. / A person's value is never written on their clothes.
◆ ③ 学生写作区
在此完成 80–100 词的微片段,尽量用上提纲里的 4–5 个语块,并至少借用“词汇银行”中 1 处描写:
◆ ④ 评价量表(自评 / 互评通用)
维度
优秀 4
达标 3
待改进 2
得分
内容完整
三段清晰,困境—偶遇—反思完整
基本完整
缺环节
语块运用
准确使用 ≥4 个本单元语块
用对 2–3 个
误用 / 少用
描写生动
有外貌 / 动作 / 反差细节,画面感强
略有描写
平铺直叙
衔接自然
逻辑连词 / 过渡自然
基本连贯
跳跃
主题升华
点明“金钱价值 / 人性尊严”立意
略有点题
未升华
🔍 自评 / 互评指引
圈出你用到的本单元语块,核对形式:wander≠wonder、the pavement 带冠词、lost 非 lose、a large amount of 接不可数、by accident 无 the、rags 复数;
用“△”标一处最生动的反差描写,用“○”标一句点题句;
同伴互评:朗读片段,看是否“读得顺、画面清、立意明”。
参考答案与解析
◆ Step 1 读后引导(开放式,参考要点)
1. 功能对应:(1) wandered on the pavement —— 落魄登场;(2) was lost in —— 城市/自我疏离;(3) a large amount of —— 代价铺垫;(4) by accident —— 巧合转折;(5) in rags —— 穷困反差。最适合困境开场的是 (1)。
2. 开放作答,能结合“衣衫褴褛却微笑”的反差谈人物立得住(外穷内贵)即可。
◆ Step 2 即时小练答案 + 易错提醒
1. A lost child was wandering on the pavement at the street corner.(wander 拼写;on the pavement 带 the)
2. Lost in the unfamiliar city, she had no one to turn to.(lost 非 lose;分词起手逻辑主语 she 一致)
3. Rebuilding their home requires a large amount of time and energy.(只接不可数;amount 用 large)
4. I found this out-of-print book by accident in an old bookstore.(无 the;不接 of)
5. A boy in rags was shivering in the cold wind.(rags 复数;后置定语)
◆ Step 3 语块串烧补全
(1) wandered on the pavement outside a grand restaurant (2) was lost in
(3) a large amount of effort (4) by accident
(5) boy in rags
◆ Step 4 微续写范文(≈95 词)+ 亮点标注
Henry stepped off the ship with empty pockets. That first night he wandered on the pavement outside a grand restaurant, hungry and lost (wander on the pavement · 徘徊开场). The city around him was lost in its own glittering rush, and so was he (be lost in · 疏离). He had spent a large amount of effort just to survive, yet had nothing to show (a large amount of · 代价). Then, by accident, two brothers called him in and pressed a sealed envelope into his hand (by accident · 巧合). At the door stood a boy in rags who still managed a smile (in rags · 反差). Holding the note, Henry realised: a person's worth is never written on their clothes (点题).
亮点:① 五语块串成“登场—疏离—代价—巧合—反差”闭环;② 反差描写(in rags ... still managed a smile)以穷困衬尊严;③ 末句金句点题“价值不在衣衫”;④ 衔接词 and / then / yet 自然。
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